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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I was angered and saddened by your story, well told with honesty and passion. You interspersed facts with personal details very well, so it is one that many who have lost children in a similar manner can realte to*Star*

A few places slowed me just a bit technically, using "that" to describe people instead of "who" in several places, i.e. suggest something like "...in a home with parents who could take better care of them than us."

Also, "...someday they will want to see Howard and me again."


Thank you for offering this thought-provoking and heart rending work!

Keep Writing!
Kate
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Review of Dexter  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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This is such a beautiful tribute to an obviously wonderful child; a love story pure and simple. The images you share add insight into both the condition and how you and Dexter have overcome it in your own way. The feelings they evoke stay with me after I have finished reading.

Reading aloud, the beat and flow are rather even; and each stanza gives me pause to reflect before sending me forward to seek the next image.

Thank you for sharing these beautiful images of pure love!

Keep Writing!
Kate
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Review of The Loner  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Tour words speak truth with such vivid imagery*Star* The lone poet or writer, whose spoken words go unheard, until the muse finally gives up.

Reading aloud, I am drawn into the images, the rhyming of key images is powerful. The image of the chair in the corner ~ there but invisible.

Reading aloud, I am slowed only a bit by the long first line, consider perhaps separating into two? for symmetry if you don't think it would detract from your image. Also, using "so" twice in a line "So he hates the world that is so cruel" ~ ??? just a couple thoughts from my muse to yours.

Thank you for sharing this powerfully written, provocative work. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Keep Writing!
Kate
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Thank you for sharing this joyous reflection of love. Each stanza depicts an image I pause momentary with before being lead to the next image. Beautiful wish as well ~ to be able to love the thought of growing old with someone, with passion daily renewed.

Reading aloud, the phrasing and beat is fairly even and flows well in the conversational style you adopt.

Thank you for sharing this beautiful reflection!
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Kate
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Review of Cloud Watching  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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So beautifully written, with such realism from the butterfly's point of view. I couldn't stop reading each time ~ and the images stay with me after i have finished.

One tiny thing, I suggest not giving it away ~ "...she began what might be the last flight she would take." ??? instead of being omniscient

Absolutely beautiful. Thank you for sharing.


Thank you for offering this great read!
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Kate
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Review of Crickets  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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This is such a vivid image ~ going through the night with the chorus of crickets, to end in a mellow psalm as morning draws nigh *Star*

I'm left with a feeling of quiet joy after reading aloud.

Thank you for sharing your beautiful image in words.

Keep Writing!
Kate
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Review of Sigh of Spring  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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I enjoyed not only the word images, but the colors also setting the mood of spring ~ life itself wakening in colorful array*Smile*

The flow of the images, the beat of the stanzas is smooth,

some really wonderful images leave me smiling a moment after having finished my reading aloud*Star* bringing it all full circle with the butterfly ~ good touch...

Thank you for offering this great read!
Keep Writing!
Kate
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Great idea ~ a wonderful sidebar to the contest forum for commiseration and fellowship after taking the daily plunge ^_^

Thanks for offering this challenge*Thumbsup*

Keep Writing!
Kate
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Review of Dad  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Obviously written with love ~ holding on to the last vestiges of who he is...

Reading aloud, much pathos, the disease is described all too well. Accurate use of the palindrome form; and the beat of the lines flows fairly smoothly.

Thank you for sharing this poignant work.
Keep Writing,
Kate
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for this opportunity to express my gratitide for the encouragement and fellowship I've received since the day I first joined writing.com.

My Muse, long dormant, is awake and growing stronger and braver every day. My skin is no thicker, but I know that criticism is not personal here, but a guide. Also, the constant encouragement to review the work of others is a wonderful learning tool, not only to improve my own writing skills, but to read and appreciate different styles and forms of writing.

Thank you,
Kate
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Your story moved me to tears. Such a beautiful message of pure love. I like the way you described the common ordinary worry in a conversational style, and surface concerns, then how they disappeared with the heartfelt and tender words so simply spoken. An uplifting message for the heart*Heart*

A minor technical nit, check the apostrophes in possessive words for singular and plurals. Also, some of the fragmented sentences could perhaps be combined into sentences, linked with commas or re-formed for ease in reading.

A beautiful message, conveyed with simple honesty.
Thank you for sharing,
Keep Writing!
Kate
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
You tell the story so matter-of-factly from the third person view, as if it is one of the children speaking, remembering the past. Some really vivid images and beautiful prose ("angel's shoes").

I am glad you stated the futures of all the children, as it told me they survived the fire, at least.

A suggestion for your consideration ~ using "the woman" repeatedly ~ consider "she" or "her" occasionally where appropriate to refer to her actions??? Also, the little girl not realizing about the matches would not be omniscient if noted when they are wakened by the smoke and told to open the windows, perhaps?

Thank you for sharing this heart rending story,
Keep Writing!
Kate
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I like the easy conversational style of this piece and the way you weave your love of the coffee aisle {check your aisle (coffee) v isle (Bermuda), however). Your reflection on the tender memory of childhood and how it is carried forward to adulthood is really beautiful. Comparing your father's morning routine to "a peaceful stirring" ~ very visual ~ I can see it*Star*

Reading aloud, I am slowed upon occasion where you switch present and past, so do recheck that for consistency, along with a bit of telling instead of showing.

thank you for sharing this beautiful memory!
Keep Writing, fellow Clevelander
Kate
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Review of untitled  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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This is so disturbing, written with such detail as to engage all my senses ~ almost feel the gagging reflex ~ Sad study of how people come to accept what is abnormal as customary, and each finds his or her own way to deal with it (avoidace, phantom illness??)

I was slowed a bit "She screamed, I guess; like she did every night." suggest something ike this for consistency in the voice, expecially in the opening line to draw me in and pull me forward.

I also see two stories kind of occurring ~ the storyteller and her illness, her method of coping, and the mother's madness, calling the rescue squad while being able to dash down the stairs to greet them? Was her mother always mad, to have the vivid heart racing dreams, or it it a symbol or symptom to show how she was dealing with her mother's illness?

Very provocative, I thank you for sharing.

Keep Writing!
Kate
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Review of Sojourner  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Both reflective and a challenge or wake-up call! I found myself reflecting on your words after having finished my reading*Star* Very visual and powerfully written*Thumbsup*

I note, in reading aloud, a bit of discord in changing voices, the third paragraph, "us" and "you" ~ consider perhaps either putting the statements of the universe in quotes, i.e., The universe shoults, "Your time is short here; ...from quiet and stillness." ? or if not quoted, consider a bit of re-wording to eliminate 'you' ?

In the first paragraph, "in the microscopic mitochondrea to the vastness..." perhaps "from the microscopic..." for consistency in the comparison?

The final paragraph, something like "The paths we take and those we choose not to follow..." ??? might sound more cohesive???

Also, check the punctuation, some of which apparently was misplaced in your upload.

Thank you for offering this thought-provoking work!
Keep Writing!
Kate
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Review of Smiles  
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This is such a beautiful, uplifting prayer, written with sincerity and obvious joy*Star*

Reading aloud, the flow of the words is fairly even and I like the use of the individual images, i.e., "As I try" "As I live" etc... each gives me a moment of brief pause to reflect.

Thank you for offering this provocative work!
Keep Writing!
Kate
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Review of Masquerade  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Such provocative and vividly intense images*Star* It's all so true...

Reading aloud, each stanza makes me pause momentarily to reflect on the image, then compels me forward. The ending image "Dreams shattered like crystalline paths." so vivid ~ visual and tactile image.

Reading aloud, the beat of some of the lines seems a little bit uneven in order to maintain rhyming.

Thank you for offering this thought provoking work!
Keep Writing!
Kate
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Review of Karamu, You  
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Beautiful imagery throughout, I am compelled to read from one stanza to the next the wonderful visual images of this wonderful love story. The ending is five star = so very honest and forthright*Star*

Reading aloud, I savor the images in each stanza, and the flow and beat is pretty even, moving me forward one stanza to the next.

Thank you for offering this great read!
Keep Writing!
Kate
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Review of Rescue Me  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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This is such a beautiful, visually provocative prayer. The images take me from despair to show the eyes opening to hope of salvation.

Technically, each stanza flows pretty smoothly when reading aloud and the images move me forward from one stanza to the next, to the beautiful invocation at the end.

Thank you for sharing this reflective and thought provoking work!
Keep Writing!
Kate
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Review of The Empty House  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed reading this ~ you pull me into an ominous mood, detailing all the 'missing' items, very visual*Thumbsup*. Then the unexpected finale! Really great!

I was slowed for just a bit with a couple of shifts in tense from present to past, singular to plural, which did not however, detract from enjoyment of the story itself ~ i.e., the finale, for your consideration ~ "The previous owners removed the rest of their belongings this morning."

Thank you for sharing this fun and really enjoyable story^_^
Keep Writing!
Kate
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I think this is a great forum, with lots of variety and challenging prompts*Thumbsup* Each Judge brings a different style, fostering a variety of creative muses ^_^ I've only recently discovered this group of challenges, and it definitely belongs in 'favorites'*Star*

The forum itself is like flash fiction, short and to the point, the prompt, the winners, the posts, all clear and well defined. New prompts are posted timely, allowing a full day to post entries*Smile*

Thank you for offering this site!
Keep Writing!
Kate
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This contest is really a great showcase for poetry that's a pleasure to read. The forum itself is organized in a very readable and understandable format, with rules clearly defined, the prompt easy to find and defined timelines.

I particularly like the responses posted for some of the poems in the forum, courteous and speedy feedback; and an opportunity for revising and having the work reviewed once again, thus offering a valuable learning tool as well as contest.*Thumbsup*

A great idea*Star*
Keep Writing!
Kate
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Review of Roy's Beginnings  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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I am enjoying the development of each character ~ they seem to mesh, and are very realistic. The imagery in the Birth of Roy is very vivid and natural. A story well told. The conversational style and descriptions are well shown, drawing me into the images, as if I were there*Star*

a couple of places I was slowed in reading, and offer these comments or suggestions for your consideration ~

"The possume had left their prize...edges of the park as thenight grew older." ???

also, using "jerked" twice in a sentence a few paragraphs down, consider something like, "Bill was roused from his musings by the screen door...as it was jerked open."

The next paragraph, first sentence, seems a bit off somehow to me? hiding from her? why?

the following paragraph, "She was quite different from Nancy."

Thank you for offering another great read! I look forward to the next 'installment.' ^_^

Keep Writing!
Kate
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Thanks for sharing the delightful rendition of a working day ~ I can relate to the autopilot somnambulistic approach to the start of the day; the images throughout, actually, are so vivid and realistic. I can empathize*Star*

I find but a couple of places where I am slowed a bit ~ in the first paragraph, there's some mixing of present and past tense, and since you maintain present tense for the active scenes later on, suggest you keep the same in the first, i.e., "I realize that I have to go to work and that I haven't eaten yet."

I read this for sheer enjoyment several times, and can relate to so much of it ~ I wish you sucess with publishing, can see it pinned from a magazine to a bunch of cubicle walls *Smile*

Thank you for offering this great read!
Keep Writing!
Kate
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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This is such a delightul, entertaining piece. I think if I were one of Sammy's prospective customers, I would buy from him just to get him off my case ~ he's so persistent*Thumbsup* I was laughing when I finished reading. I can only imagine a potential employer getting this letter, he or she would be a fool not to invite Sammy at least for an interview*Thumbsup*

I have a few technical comments or suggestions to note for your consideration ~ I think you want to direct the letter to "Prospective Employer"??

"Please don't confuse me..." that whole paragraph is just so delightful, have to make note of it*Star*

the next paragraph, "sell in large quantities primarily to ..."

next paragraph "So don't worry about body odor..." (I think, but a word got dropped in your upload, I believe)

as a title, remember to capitalize the "W" in "Sammy the Wanderer" throughout...

Thank you for offering this great read!
Keep Writing!
Kate
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