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Hi, what a delightful way to describe an awful process (no, not getting older, but having to take all those pills); visually very descriptive (i.e., that my lips help to leave on my hips) ~ I an relate.

I see free verse or a story poem here, the pictures descriptive and imaginative, easy to relate*Thumbsup*

I note a few places I was slowed, i.e., "keep my brain alert, but also quite" (do you wish to say quiet or did a word go missing quite _____ ??

"so it all" and "any at all" = using the same word to end the line??

and a bit of mixing of tenses, i.e., "there's the ones I take to cool me down..."

I'm glad I saw your post in the Noticing Newbies Newsletter and look forward to reading more of your work. You have a droll, wry humor that I personally enjoy.

Keep Writing!
Kate
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This is truly a beautiful work of art. The images rendered with loving tenderness. Each reading elicits a tear. A love story in poetic form.

I can find no error in pacing or flow in this tribute.


Thank you for offering this beautiful description of true pure love!
Keep Writing!
Kate
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From the opening paragraph, I too knew they would not be having pizza. Very well portrayed, disturbing and realistic story. I was immediately drawn into the moment and each image as Suze remembered the other instances pulled me further into their story. The realization at the end that though both were damaged, at least Suze realized it and by so doing, was stronger than her mother.*Thumbsup*

The plotting is excellent, and I note very little telling, with very natural and realistic conversation to move the story along. All believable.


Thank you for offering this moving and heartrending story!
Keep Writing!
Kate
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I really enjoyed the vivid imagery; engaged all my senses, vision taste touch; very descriptive, taking me into the moment.

Reading aloud, I note the rhythm is fairly even and carries the image forward, one line and picture to the next. Right near the end, a couple of the adjectives slow the pace a bit, i.e., consider something like "It will shine on slow moving rivers." (I eliminated "For") and "I love the warmth and beauty it delivers." (again see how it sounds to you, how it flows, with "and" removed)

Thank you for offering this beautiful poem!
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Kate
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Review of Horror Story  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (3.5)
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I like the premise of your story, the innocent shower and the twist at the end. Great flash fiction, with all the elements of a story well met, plot conflict, kept in the theme. I did not suspect the perpetrator at all, so you kept his identity well hidden

I do note some telling rather than showing, i.e., where she thinks then reaches for the phone to call Ted, a bit more immediate would be something like "Karmen's first thought was to call Ted, her boyfriend. The sound of glass breaking in the kitchen, however, told her she had to act now." I also note a few download errors of spelling, i.e., scolding in place of scalding, shreeked in place of shrieked.

Karmen also didn't know he was unconscious, but presumed it.

I like this story, and believe it has much potential as a mystery with a good twist.


Thank you for offering this delightful thriller!
Keep Writing!
Kate
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Review of The Lure  Open in new Window.
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I like the use of personification, and each stanza can stand on its own as well as be part of the whole poem. They are somewhat like invocations, something to go back to when the muse is hiding *Smile*

Reading aloud, the words flow rather smoothly, the beat fairly even.

Thank you for offering this thought enjoyable poem!
Keep Writing!
Kate
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Review of Jealousy  Open in new Window.
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Intense images in each stanza; the use of rhyme and beginning the first and third lines of the first and second stanzas with the same pronoun add impact to the visual imagery. Then comparing his feelings with hers right at the end adds extra poignancy*Thumbsup*

Reading aloud, the first line appears just a bit off balance by trying to conform to the pronoun usage, in place of 'gazes' consider a one syllable word perhaps 'peers' or something like that, see how you think the rhythm then feels. Also the last stanza, switching to plural an then back to immediate singular is a bit jarring, consider perhaps "affection ... is" for balance???

Thank you for offering this poignant, heartrending work!
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Kate
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Such an entertaining yet reflective piece on (gulp) middle age - as easy to relate to for someone in their mid to late 30s as well as mid to late 50s (in other words, any time after we are no longer carded for liquor at the supermarket). Good opening, and pleasing conversational story telling style. The examples are well posed, and the conclusion arrived at in logical progression. Switching tenses is mainly smooth as well.

Thank you for offering this enjoyable story!
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Kate
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Review of Untitled  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Beautiful imagery, reminiscent of a senryu, the moon's light personified.

Reading aloud, I can picture the light as strands and dreams both.

I note a bit of conflict for me in "soft light" and "starlight" and "their vast sea." would it be more accurate an image with "its vast sea" ???


Thank you for offering this !
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Kate
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I enjoyed this story ~ creative idea of a challenge, as well as a great idea for family time outside the perennial box*Star*

The story itself is well plotted, and flows rather smoothly into the challenge. and there are some vivid images "muttering mutinously" conveys such a realistic image of a teen not getting her way. Satisfactory ending, as well, with the winning 'appliance.'

There is a bit of telling in place of showing, i.e., first line of third paragraph; consider reversing the two images for more immediate visual impact?

Thank you for offering this delightul story!
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Kate
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Writing as if this were occurring in the present is very visual, immediate. Interspersed with visions of the future, "butterflies will start..." and, of course, the final ingredient, remembrance.

Reading aloud, rhyming pulled the images together, although the rhythm of the stanzas seemed a bit uneven at times.

Thank you for offering this powerful, thought provoking 'recipe' for remembrance!
Keep Writing!
Kate
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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This made me feel almost a battle of words, or colors. The back and forth point and counterpoint very creative, and use of the colors described also added emphasis to the images/colors introduced; made me think of 'dueling banjos.' Like the droll ending*Smile*

Thank you for offering this delightul piece!
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Kate
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I like the story of Reginald. I could sense the satire, and knew somehow Reginald would mess up, but you made the journey there very enjoyable*Smile* Giving him back his original form and then his ultimate resting place was actually realistic, rather than a 'happy' ending. Again very satisfying.

Very little telling instead of showing, i.e., consider the 4th paragraph, inverting the first sentence for more immediacy, i.e., "A loud knocking on the front door interrupted his reverie over his miserable existence." (reverie isn't right, but I'm trying to show a bit more active and visual).

The converations are all very natural and easy to follow.

I really enjoyed the story, Reginald as a sympathetic and flawed protagonist works well for me.

Thank you for offering this very enjoyable story!
Keep Writing!
Kate
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I really like the imagery you convey, both haste and peace in one image. It works well visually*Smile*

I note that you use a comma in the third line, consider perhaps also after the first, as it seems to me reading aloud to be a separate thoughtlet?

Reading aloud, the rhythm and flow are fairly smooth, and easy to follow, the peaceful image lingering after I have finished reading.

Thank you for offering this evocative work!
Keep Writing!
Kate
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Review of Trees in Spring  Open in new Window.
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Beautiful imagery, very picturesque and it makes me feel peaceful somehow, similar to a chain Haiku with two images.*Smile*

I note in "Birth of newborns burst forth" ~ "burst" relates to "birth" as written, so would be more logical as "bursting" or "bursts" (bursts sounds off, I think) ??? what think you?

Thank you for offering this evocative poem!
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Kate
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Great idea to survey after the contest. Good questions covered the various facets of the contest, multiple choices for responses. The opportunity to comment, and offering the opportunity to voice a more detailed response via email also a bonus!

Thank you for a great experience!
Kate
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Review of Dust Bunny  Open in new Window.
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A thoroughly delightful poem, personifying the little dust bunny. The rhyming is sing-song and the images are fun and playful. I can picture each character, even the vile vacuum*Star*

I note but one line where, reading aloud, it seemed the words were forced to fit the rhyme,
the third line fourth stanza
"Since he left dust footprints"
and the last line
"He'd always outrun"
sound like the words are being pushed to fit the rhyme.

I can easily see this in a children's poetry book or perhaps Highlights?

I thank you for sharing and wish you luck with the "Dust Bunny"

Keep Writing!
Kate
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Review of Letter Home  Open in new Window.
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I enjoyed reading your 'letter' poem. It did read like a letter would in rhyme*Smile* Making mention of the kitchen sink, cute*Smile*

The rhyming words held the images in each paragraph together well, but reading aloud they sometimes sounded a bit forced. i would suggest you try deleting a few of the pronouns and see how you think it sounds as far as the beat and rhythm of the stanzas.
i.e., something like -
"I admit I was pleasantly confounded
Discoering your warnings completely unfounded"

This would be a fun children's poem, I think, and wish you luck with it*Thumbsup*

Keep Writing!
Kate
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Review of A Moment in Time  Open in new Window.
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So true, and reading your images evoked some poignant recollections of my childhood ~ does that signal approaching senility, when the images are so vivid ~ no, just your provocative piece, even to the thought that rise more frequently about what the ultimate future holds*Heart*

I like the opening sentence introducing the paragraphs, leading into the images therein. Engaging all my senses, well written in an easygoing reflective style.

I note but a few technical glitches i.e., "My newborn son's pulse against my lips as I kiss their hair." ~ note conflict in singular and plural?

Thank you for sharing this beautiful work!

Keep Writing!
Kate
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Very picturesque and vivid images. The lighthouse seems to be more than just an edifice ~ something evoking a more eternal light*Star* Lead me well to the final line "Us"

Reading aloud, "Shines it blazing light" ~ "its" ??? or "in" ??? the image for me a bit confusing?

Reading aloud, the beat and flow were even in general, moved with ease from one image to the next.

Thank you for offering this beautiful work!
Keep Writing!
Kate
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Review of Love Come Back  Open in new Window.
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This is a beautiful prayer, images so vivid and uplifting. Reading aloud, I felt a lightness in my voice as I read from one stanza through to the next.

A few questions, switching from personal "me" in the first stanza, to "us" with respect to "my redemption" in the second, then back to "me" in the third had me go back to look for a reference to others??? would it work better all personal???

also, the first line, possessive for angels (angel's or angels') or just use "angel wings" ???

Thank you for offering this uplifting, joyous message!
Keep Writing!
Kate
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Beautiful imagery with your words ~ the progression from the destructive aspects of fire to the healing tht occurs after the cleansing *thumsup* The use of colors to depict each image (red fire - burning; gray, smoke; green, healing, i.e.) makes me think it could be a good read for a youth audience. Show them how the words reflect such imagery*Star*

Reading aloud, each stanza held it's own image well and the flow and beat were fairy even throughout. Thank you for offering this beautiful work.

Keep Writing!
Kate
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Good idea for a story, left the characters open to interpretation. Basic information, allowing contributors to build the characters as well as the storyline!

Thank you for offering this entry. I enjoyed participating and look forward to returning for more.

Keep Writing!
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Good idea for a poll. Good variety of selection.

I'm uncertain about the disclaimer that it's mainly for Christians ~ since you state there's another option for those who don't accept Christian teachings, is that the "other" request for email?

A couple of points I noted ~ "downright" one word, as is "another" ~ also Christian should be capitalized throughout as a proper term, I believe.

Thank you for offering this thought-provoking poll

Keep Writing!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a delightful tribute*Smile*

Reading aloud, the rhyming in alternate lines of each stanza holds focus on the image in the stanza. The poem also tells an engaging story, with a logical progression to the tribute=conclusion.*Thumbsup*

The rhythm when reading aloud I notice a bit of unevenness, i.e., third stanza, for the stress/beat on key words, if you delete the word "And" in the fourth stanza see if you think it balances better with the rhythm of the second (rhyming) line???

Thank you for sharing this really great tribute!

Keep Writing!
Kate




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