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Review of Life in a Box™  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*Note4*I AM REVIEWING YOUR STORY AS A JUDGE FOR "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" . THANKS FOR ENTERING!

*Star*This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

*Exclaim*I thought your entertaining poem told a very wise story. In these days of technology, many people grow comfortable and dependent upon their computers. Internet connects them to the outside world, just enough so that they never need to actually leave their safe havens. Your characters, Jenny and Johnny, were two such people.

Your poem gave the term, 'thinking outside the box', a whole new meaning. In this case, we thought about what it's like, 'inside the box'. I liked the way you offered a question in your last stanza. It allows your reader to leave your poem in continuing thought.

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Review of Vicarious Living  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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*Star*This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

*Exclaim*Hi Snow! I was impressed with the unique style of your poem. I' m sure you put quite the effort into designing this. I read it over a few times, and I noticed something different each time. It seemed like a work of art!

I like how you alternated the consistent last line of each stanza, and then you pulled it all together at the end. The alternating rhyme scheme was done nicely as well.

I've watched many episodes of Billy the Exterminator and Steve Erwin's show, so I could understand the subject matter of your poem. You presented great ideas and a great theme of vicarious living.

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Review of Praise the Writer  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Note4*I AM REVIEWING YOUR STORY AS A JUDGE FOR "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest" . THANKS FOR ENTERING!

*Star*This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

*Exclaim* Hi Blue Witch! I thought it was very creative of you to write a conversation in the form of a satire poem. Breaking up the conversation with black and red color was also a creative touch.

The subject matter was a brilliant choice, since WDC members are all familiar with writing and reviewing.

I think the point could have been made in less stanzas, but I truly enjoyed the fun theme and gentle humor. The flow was slightly forced in places, but the rhyme worked well. Your readers will have a pleasant and entertaining experience reading this poem. I certainly enjoyed it. *Smile*

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Review of E-Mail  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Exclaim*Joy, you really wrote a poem that most people can relate to. We check our email, and a good deal of it is simply junk that we didn't ask for and we don't need. Far and few between are the emails from friends and family. You expressed all of the frustration in a very creative satirical poem.

I loved your gentle humor! I could understand how a person could feel as popular as royalty to find 467 notes in their email box...And then to realize it's all junk mail! I loved the funny examples you gave! LOL

You did a nice job with the structure of this poem. You took your readers through the experiences of being popular, confused, ticked-off, and finally, worn out. I also felt the feelings of being entertained and amused! *Smile*

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Review of On the Boulevard  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

*Exclaim* Your dramatic poem allowed us to see a day in the life of a homeless person. We've all seen them before. Some people see them often. I'm not too sure many have wondered just what their day might be like. You gave us that opportunity.

Your poem seemed simple, yet we could feel the beauty of it through each word.

My favorite part was also hinted about in your brief introduction. The woman hardly found enough scraps of food for herself. Even though, she gladly shared those scraps with the birds in exchange to have them as her temporary friends. So touching!

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Review of Cats!!  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your photo album.

*Exclaim* Oh my gosh! This is so impressive! I had a friend who lives in New Jersey who made something like this for their cats once, but yours is so much better.

I can see that you put so much love and attention into the details for your sweet little cats. You're an angel to save them all and give them great homes. *Heart*

Harley is adorable, and must also love them a lot. *Smile*

I like the captions that you put under the pictures. One of them, though, has a small typo...The first condo.

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Review of Animals  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your crossword puzzle.

*Exclaim* Oh that was so much fun! Thanks for putting this crossword puzzle together.

There were just a few that I didn't get. I would suggest that you make an answer key so that we might find out the ones we missed after we did all we could with it.

For example, I didn't guess what an eight letter word was for 'something living and the color of gold'. It didn't help that the 'down' which connected to it was 'what a five year old girl wants'. Nothing I could think of fit there because 'saddle' went across it.

Anyway, I did enjoy all of the animal related questions. *Smile*

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your animal quiz.

*Exclaim* Gosh! I really did badly on this one! Your questions were very tricky! *Bigsmile*

I did have lots of fun taking the quiz. *Smile*

Did you ever consider making a small item to write a little bit about the correct answers? You really have little, if anything in the heading before the quiz. If you wrote another item about your correct answers, you could include the link in this heading. You might then say something like, "If you want to learn some amazing facts about the answers, check this link when you finish the quiz."

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* LOL This was so funny! I always wondered what a fish thinks about. You nailed it with Vladimir's thoughts! *Laugh*

I thought the punch line was the best of all! Don't they just seem to do the same thing over, and over, and over again! *Bigsmile*

You could probably create a folder of the continuing thoughts of Vladimir! What does he see outside? Does he get moved elsewhere while his dwelling gets cleaned? What happens when things change or get moved around?

Thanks for writing this entertaining piece. *Smile*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your story.

*Exclaim* Hi Rusty! I really loved reading your story. It certainly can't always be easy to tote around your service dog with you, but you did it with a friendly and impressive attitude. You are a great role model for your children.

I absolutely loved the humor you added to your story. The silly responses that the uneducated public came up with are just ridiculous! One would think common sense would prevail in most cases. I hope people with weird thinking have been in low numbers!

I was also impressed with how you handled the embarrassing moments with skill and confidence. I have two dogs myself and they're forever embarrassing me. I think people view service dogs as perfect beings, incapable of any mistakes. They're only human after all...Eh, only 'doggie'! *Bigsmile*

Thanks for sharing your fun story. I hope you'll write more about your experiences! *Delight*

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Review of Absent-Mindedness  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* Ah, dogs are so cute! I have two of my own. Your poem about the senior pooch made me smile...I especially loved the part about how the dog tilted his head in question when you laughed at his funny expression! I really love when dogs tilt their heads like that. It's like he was thinking, "What's so funny?" LOL

It was a great idea to center this poem. It gave it a graceful and delicate look. I think everyone (like me) will be curious to know what type of dog you have. You mentioned a 'hound' in the poem, but I think a line or two under the poem about your doggie would be a nice touch. ...Or an image if you can do pictures.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your item.

*Exclaim* Oh my gosh! What a very impressive book cover! It has the enchanting 'Harry Potter' type look to it!

I was browsing through your items and then I became captivated by this book series. I started doing some research about it on Amazon to see what it's all about. I couldn't really find out too much because there aren't any reviews there yet for the series.

It might be nice to add a small bit of information along with the book cover image. I realize that you wrote a brief bit about it, but I wanted to learn more. ...A link to an item of yours which tells about it? ...Maybe a few more lines about it?

I would have liked to read which age group might enjoy the book series. ...And maybe just a hint of what it's about.

I really loved the way the yellow font pops out of the mostly blue background. The whole look seems very mysterious and it's very clear that this is a fantasy book. It's really beautiful. Congratulations on this exciting experience, and good luck with it. *Delight*

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Review of White Balloons  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* Hi WW. You just gave me chills!! You're poem is so entrancing. I could picture the image of loved ones holding white balloons to honor a deceased child.

Your poem actually brought back memories of when my mom died. I had gone back again to see the stone and all. Now, I had time to check out her 'neighbors', and to get more familiar with the cemetery. When I looked at a very nearby stone, I cringed to see that there weren't flowers around it...There were Barbie dolls and little toys! I scanned for the date, and saw that the grave belonged to a seven year old girl! It's heartbreaking, as was your story.

You did an amazing job with the imagery, and in choosing just the right poetic words to make an impact in the expression. It would really be such a sweet (bittersweet) tribute to have all the loved ones hold white balloons. It was fitting to have it rain. It added to the sad feeling.

I keep thinking of 'My Chemical Romance' 'Black Parade'. I think they were holding black balloons. Well, this made just as much as an impact.

My favorite part of your poem was when you wrote that some people didn't open their umbrella. It added to the feeling that the mourners didn't care if they were getting wet...They needed to do this - They needed to hold those balloons up high to show their love. So beautiful. *Delight*

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*Exclaim* You're picture and the little story that went with it brought back such great memories for me. I remember when my daughters used to make gingerbread houses.

Wow! Your family had lots of gingerbread houses! I thought they did a great job with them, too. It's so nice that you thought of snapping the picture to capture the memory forever.

I really enjoyed reading about how all of your relatives got together. You have a big family. It must be awesome to have so many young ones growing up together and gathering on holidays. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Favorite music  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your item.

*Exclaim* Oh! That was such a difficult choice! *Bigsmile*

I loved this poll! I enjoy so many types of music, so I picked 'all types'. I see that's in the lead, with 'rock' right behind.

I really thought you did a great job with this poll. I loved the poetic heading..."What music do you feed your soul"?
By the way, I would phrase it like that. You have it as, What music do you feed your soul with. I would leave out the 'with'.

I liked all of those choices. I thought of choosing 'rock', but I do like all types. It's great that you also left an 'email me for other' choice. I'd be curious to see what other types people might have emailed you. Maybe you might think about making a list of them.

I hope you'll make more polls! *Smile*

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Review of Quark  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4*I AM REVIEWING YOUR STORY AS A JUDGE FOR "Star Trek Poetry CONTEST " . THANKS FOR ENTERING!

*Star*This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

*Exclaim* I thought it was unique to choose a Deep Space Nine character to use in your Clerihew Poem. We don't see too many Ferangi characters in the Star Trek entries. *Smile*

You used the Clerihew style well.
I liked how you compared Quark to a 'dubious shark'! ...Great thinking there! Also, I thought the little tale flowed smoothly inside of the aabb form.

You told a lot in a small space. You made me think about Quark's obsession with money and schemes to get it. Nice work!

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Review of Mudd's Spud  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim*Hi Snow! I found your poem to be very funny!

The mentioning of Harry Mudd set the stage for the humor.

You also filled your little poem up with lots of Star Trek memorabilia, by talking about things like, 'Alpha Quadrant' and 'Federation Space'.

I thought the aabb Clerihaw form was nicely done in your poem.

I would love to watch that comical potato race in the next Trek movie! Wouldn't that be awesome! LOL

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Review of Lasha Thornhook.  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION:This is a dark fantasy story about a noble family of gnomes.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: I was impressed with your style of writing, Blue, and I really hope you'll continue this interesting story. Have you ever read, The Interview With a Vampire by Anne Rice? Somehow this reminded me of how it started. The vampire was telling the story. Here, you have the character, Lasha Reille Thornhook, telling the story.

I found your story interesting, and I liked how this entire first chapter concentrated on introducing the characters. Later on, you might add more here and there...Such as what each one looked like, and what their town looked like. You might mention what type of house they live in. Was it a castle, for example?

I honestly think your story has a lot of potential. Keep up the great writing! *Smile*

*Star*FAVORITE PART: You have a terrific hook to your story with your first and second paragraphs. As soon as I read, "I am the first born of the Thornhook nobles," I wanted to read more. The whole idea of a noble gnome from a very dysfunctional family seemed very unique and intriguing to me. *Smile*

I think you gave the narrator a perfect personality. We can hear the spark and frustration in her voice, and we get the feeling that this character is believable.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: I think your story is amazing! It deserves just a little bit of polish because it's certainly worth it! *Bigsmile*

The brief introduction is the first thing your viewers will see.
You have: "The oldest child of A noble..." I would change the capital A to a lower case letter.

In the first paragraph, you have: "... and it's happened to most of my..." I would leave out the 'it's' altogether.

Also in the first paragraph you wrote: " I wouldn't have to be telling you why my family makes everyone else seem functional." I think that might sound better as, "I wouldn't have to be telling you why my family makes everyone else's family..."

You mentioned, 'Morato', when you wrote about the narrator's youngest brother. I think you could mention this town near the beginning of the story, when the narrator mentioned her name and title. She could say a line about where they live.

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Review of Tap the Muse  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your In and Out.

*Exclaim* I love this In and Out! Gosh, what a really fantastic idea! Not only do we get to advertise an item, but then we get to play with words, too. *Smile*

I couldn't resist making a post of my own. The word of the day was 'novel', so I imagined a little girl seeing novels on a library shelf for the first time. This was lots of fun. *Delight*

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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

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*Exclaim* *Laugh* LOL Oh this poem is so funny!! I'm glad I happened to click on it to read! I needed a terrific comedy read this afternoon, and this was perfect!

This reminds me of when I go shopping with my husband. He'll say something like, "Are you done yet? Pick something and let's go." I guess you nailed it when you said that men are hunters and not gatherers! ......Shoot something and drag it home!! So funny!!*Laugh*

I really enjoyed the gentle rhyme in your poem. It made the pleasant 'good reading' feeling even that much more enjoyable.

You cracked me up when I read about how there were so many brands and they all seemed the same!! You know, honestly I feel that way when I go down the toothpaste isle. That is so confusing! It took me a long time to figure that all out. *Bigsmile*

I thoroughly enjoyed this fun poem!

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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your story poem.

*Exclaim* I really enjoyed this great tale about the retired sailor. I found it to be very touching and captivating, too.

I thought you chose great names for the characters. 'Salty' does make me imagine an old sea captain, and 'Sally' sounds like such a sweet little girl's name. I loved how they became friends, and how the little girl caused everyone in the town to come to love the man and to look forward to hearing his stories.

You did an awesome job of casually showing time advance in the story. We followed Sally's life with her family, and the town's dramatic changes over the span of 90 years.

The ending was dynamic! Poor Sally didn't know that those pretty little stones were priceless! I'm glad she got to find out while she was still alive!

I can hardly believe that this poem doesn't have an awardicon on it yet! I'm honored to be the person to put one there. I think I'll give it a red one to match the rubies in the poem.

This poem is perfect in every way, so I won't dare suggest any changes.

Thanks for sharing with us that this poem won a big money prize. ...And thanks for sharing the poem with us on WDC! *Bigsmile*

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*Star* Hi Zelda! This is part of your *Nuclear* Nuclear Package *Nuclear* from "Invalid Item" .

*Exclaim* This item had the appearance of being a cNote shop. I was surprised to find out that it was a listing of several of your cNote shops.

The brief introduction seems to imply that this is a flare button cNote shop. It is even called, 'The cNotes Shop'. I would change that to 'The cNotes Shops', and then you might change the brief intro to something like, New flare button shops added to the collection. If you make changes, you will unfortunately also need to change the pretty image inside to reflect the title.

The look of this item is very pretty. I love the colors of the title images. The heart dividers between the various shops is delicate and adds to the eye catching look.

Since you are showcasing the links to several shops, why not write a bit about each one so that the viewer won't need to click on each and everyone to find the note they need. I wouldn't make it too wordy and involved, just a line or two will do.

For example, you could list the price range of each shop. I noticed that the button shops are priced slightly higher than the other shops.

You might also list the cNotes which are inside of each one. The Congratulations collection has more than is led to believe in it's brief introduction. What if someone was interested in a generic congratulations? ...Or a note to congratulation new parents? ...Or a new grad? A quick listing of them along with the link would be very helpful.

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Review of The Chosen Ones  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Fire* This is part of your Electric Package package from "Invalid Item" . Enjoy! *Fire*

*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: I felt that this was a spiritual fantasy story.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Great work with this one. It read really smoothly, and had a terrific ending. I didn't feel confused at all about any part of it. You're talent for casually adding in tidbits of explanation made this a captivating read. *Smile*

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I thought you wrote a good opening. The hint about a package will have your readers wondering what will come next. The story seemed to flow smoothly after the hook, with the light introduction of the characters.

I really liked the way you added small details into your story to smooth out any bumps, like here: "Mary settled down before them, relieved that they didn't pay her any attention."

I think that by the time your readers finished the second scene, they would start to realize that Mary is an angel, indeed. First, she detained the old lady so her daughter could find her, and then it seemed that Mary made a call to help a couple's dying daughter.

By the middle of the story, your readers will have no doubt that both of the characters are angels. Then, by the end, your readers will be thinking...Yes, I was right!

I was happy to see that you confirmed that the two were angels at the end, because it cleaned up any loose edges nicely. Great job! You're smooth-flowing story had a profession feel.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: Here you wrote, “So did boss call you yesterday?” - By the end of the story, I realized that the boss was God, but at this point in the story, I wondered why you weren't writing, the boss. I think that if Boss is being used as a proper name, then it might be capitalized. ...Or, just write, the boss.

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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a bittersweet poem about the sadness of death.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: I was touched by the delicate words you used in this tender poem. Death is often difficult to bear, and I could imagine how difficult it would be to bear the death of a young child.

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't notice any errors. Great proofreading!

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I really loved the rhyme sequence in this poem. You succeeded in rhyming well, and in the proper order.

You also succeeded in expressing the sorrow and helplessness felt by the parents in their death experience of the child. I would bet that some of your readers eyes will become a bit watery when they read about the moisture in the mom's eyes...

The bold, first line about the auction gavel was my favorite! I thought it gave your great poem a dramatic entrance! *Smile*

I especially liked how this poem told a whole story in an easy to follow way. Nice work! *Smile*

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: I gave your poem a perfect score. I wouldn't change a thing, but if it were my poem, I'd polish up it's presentation a bit. I'd center the poem...Rhyming poems especially look great when centered. I'd then add some color to the font. I'd also be tempted to add a fine landscape-type picture which might mimic the painting told about in the poem. 'Just a thought...

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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your book item.

*Exclaim* Congratulations, once again, on being our winner in this month's review raid. *Balloon2*

Lornda and I were both very impressed with this item of yours, and that's why it was chosen for the awardicon.

I think it's a very unique item, which we don't see too much on our site.

I hear so much these days about finding information about family histories. You took the bold step forward to pursue the gathering of this information.

I like how the 'outline' and the start of your book is coming together. The memory of the two men, and whatever you find on all of the family names, will surly be appreciated by all those loved ones of yours. I hope you get this in book form for each of them. What a fantastic gift it will be! ...And it will be cherished and passed down forever! *Smile*

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