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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Star*This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

*Exclaim* I'll have to say that I didn't know what to expect when I clicked on this story. It was a pleasant surprise to read a well-written and entertaining story which was so outside the box! Writing a 'parenting' story about the parenting of a Basset Hound is certainly creative writing.

I was cracking up through your whole amusing story...Especially because I had a Basset Hound years ago. I think your Boo is much smarter than my Aggie had been!

I loved all the cute poo words! LOL

I could picture her bolting while you were trying to hold the leash and clean up the poo in the middle of the street! ...So funny!



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*Star*This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

*Exclaim* This is a great tribute to your wonderful mom. Parenting isn't always easy, but your family seemed to have lots of love through good times and bad. All of that helps to make the parenting a very rewarding experience. You turned out okay, so your mother's hard work paid off.

I never heard of Asperger's Syndrome, so your entry actually taught me something about it. Now you have a story written, which will be a keepsake. Your mother will be honored, and your readers will learn about the syndrome.

It must have been tough for your mother to raise you and your brothers alone. You all sound as though you've been through a lot. Through it all, you've all stayed strong and bonded.

I enjoyed the inspirational and upbeat tone of your story. I hope many WDC members will get to read it for the Mother's Day season.


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Review of our miracle  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*Star*This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

*Exclaim* I agree with your brief introduction -- It shouldn't have happened that way. I often wonder why an event which should have a normal outcome, takes an unexpected turn. I guess no one can figure that out...

One sign of a story which was written so well, is that it can bring tears to a person's eyes. I don't think a person can keep their eyes so dry when they read your story.

The loss of little Caleb was so awful for Rachel and Ed, and for you, too! I can't imagine even little Danny and Hayley not thinking about their brother, even when they grow to adults. Thanks for sharing this tender story.


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Review of Dear Fear  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Star*This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

*Exclaim*. You wrote a dynamic story. I could clearly imagine the fearful little boy who hides under the blankets at night.
I'm so glad the story had a happy ending.

Writing a letter to 'Fear', was a creative way to express a painful childhood and the bad parenting of a father.

I think all children have a movie or two which added a bit of fear to their lives. Many have experienced the teasing of an older brother who becomes skilled at scaring his siblings.
You brought back those memories.

It's great that you learned from these experiences, so that you can now be a good parent in your adult life. It's also fantastic that you and your brother found peace with each other. Thanks for sharing.


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*Star*This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

*Exclaim*. Thanks for sharing your nice article about grammar and grammar apps for children. There is such a wealth of learning tools available today. My youngest child has entered her twenties. I had to work with her and her three older siblings without the use of electronics. Now, there is a wide variety of ways to teach and learn.

You made a good point that there are games in which children can learn grammar. As you mentioned, children benefit in many ways when they learn grammar at an early age. It makes sense that parents take advantage of all the fun and modern ways that children can be taught. I hope your article will bring these great ideas to light for other caring parents. *Smile*


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*Exclaim* Hi Aunt Dottie! *Smile* I don't stop by your port often enough. I'll have to change that. *Bigsmile*

Gosh, I gave this image to you a few years back. I remember that you love images of cats so much. This one reminded me of you - majestic and elegant. You are an amazing woman, and this cat certainly is perrrrrrrrrfect for you. *Laugh*

Happy Mother's Day, Aunt Dottie! I'm proud to be your niece, and I love you lots! *Heart*


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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your cNote shop.

*Exclaim* ...Put them all together and they spell mother! You have a great cNote collection here, indeed. *Smile*

I love all of the wonderful Mother's Day cNotes you put together. I hope these get a lot of use this weekend.

I like how you have a big variety of them...Ten in all. The frog hopping over the turtle is my absolute favorite!! I think I'm going to send that one out right now...

I also enjoyed seeing the list at the top. Gosh, you have a lot of shops! I'll have to remember that! *Bigsmile*


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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* Hi Sherri! I enjoyed reading your touching poem. It's a great tribute to your beloved mother. I too, lost my mother. I lost mine over 20 years ago, so it almost seems like a dream. I lost my dad at this past holiday time, so I know how hard the holidays can be when we face them without our loved ones.

I think you did a fine job with this tribute to your mom. The tender way you expressed the pain of the loss, and the joy of how she lives on in your heart is really sweet. *Smile*


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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* What a sweet poem! Your son leaned that you will always be there for him, and you'll always love him no matter what. Sometimes our children make mistakes and they learn from those mistakes. It's good that they know they have mother's who will be there for them. ...Who will have patience and love them, as your son's beautiful poetry expressed, unconditionally.

That's so pretty...And you displayed it well with pleasant colors. Thanks for sharing. Happy Mother's Day to you! *Smile*


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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your cNote collection.

*Exclaim* Oh my gosh! This is the collection I've been looking for! Great Mother's Day cNotes, Kiya! I'm going to send one to my Aunt Dottie. *Bigsmile*

I think the one about the flower garden is the one I'll send..."If I had a flower for each time I thought of you, I'd be walking in a flower garden..." That's just beautiful!

All of your cNotes are beautiful, too. I don't know anyone who is graduating right now, but your graduation cNotes are nice. I hope they get lots of use. *Smile*

Oh...The poems at the top are a great opening to this collection. When you do something, you do it right! *Bigsmile*


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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your book.

*Exclaim* Hi Misty! As I told you, I printed it out, and I was finally able to read it. Great job in creating the interesting and exciting plot in the chapter entries you have so far. *Smile*

The first entry seemed very suspenseful. I especially enjoyed the chase scene. The second entry told a different tale. It seemed to be a detective/mystery story.

I'm curious as to how the two entries tie together. You didn't offer your readers any clues. The first entry could have been a science fiction story, with talk of beasts and alpha-sires. The next entry almost seemed as though the setting took place in a totally different place or time.

Your readers will guess that one of the babies grew into a man in the second part, but there seems to be something missing. Will you explain more as the story goes on? If not, it might be a good area somewhere in the talk about Ryan's childhood in foster care to say which baby it was...Your readers know that one was hidden in a hallow log, and the other had been turned in by the hunter. You might explain which was which...

Is it your plan to keep jumping back and forth between the two time-lines?If not, perhaps you might add more closure to the first entry. Your readers are left wondering if Daniella's husband ever found any of his children, or what became of that. It was hinted in the second entry that Ryan had special abilities, but after that much of the story, your readers still aren't sure where the story is going. I think that more of a tease or hint about what's going on will encourage your reader's to read the future entries from that point. Right now, all they know is that he's a cop in an anger management class.
I realize that you don't want to give away too early on, but it's also great to spark a promise of the thrilling excitement yet to come...

I'm thinking that a short introduction before the story begins in the first entry would clear some things up... A man is determined to be a good cop, despite the fact that he has werewolf abilities. Little does he know that twenty-five years earlier he had been brought to a fire-house, rescued by a kind hunter...Then, you would begin the story.

You have an amazing story, I could picture this turning into a big hit, so I'd really like to see you polish it up.

Here are some other points to fix...Little things, such as typos...

I noticed that you already fixed some things and left some space between your paragraphs since I last printed out your story. This is great! It looks good, but I would still go back and break some of the longer paragraphs a bit more. Each new idea might be a different paragraph.

Also, Some of your sentences are still a bit long, while others could be combined. Here is an example of one which could be combined:

"They weren’t her business. Until she met Maggie."

The following seems very confusing, because it seems to be repeated, and very similar sentences. I think you can redo this part, by combining and eliminating lots of it...
"She marched on. It was still dark but still breaking dawn when she heard a russling sound. She tried to ignore it. Thinking it was just a childish imagination getting to her. She continued to mark until it had gotten louder but she ignored it; until it turned into a growling rumble. She thought it might have been just her stomache; since it was almost sun up and she or her babies had not eaten since dinner last night. She was surprised that they had been so quiet; she assumed that they were nuzzled asleep.
The sky was twilight gray, the dawn near breaking when she heard a rustling sound in the trees. She tried to ignore it, telling herself that this was the woods after all and was likely just an animal looking for nuts or berries or something in the snow to eat. The sound only got louder, still she ignored until she heard a low, growl rumbling in the bushes. She thought it might have been her stomach as she nor her children had eaten in hours. She was surprised at how quiet they had been, assuming they had fallen asleep."


Change:
"The hustle toward him and stretched her arm in the air." ('She hustled', rather than, 'the hustle'.)

And:
"He raised his gu as she ran..." (gun)

Also:
"...pushing her out of the ward hard." (way)

Might sound better another way...
"She was soaked with blood and by the way her neck was turned, and the fact that she wasn’t breathing that she was dead."

I came across similar little things you might fix in the next chapter.
Here, I would change 'notice' to 'noticed'...
"He notice a small crease in the middle of her crystal light brown eyes..."

This line, "Mr. Savage to telephone calls during sessions.”, would read better as something like, "Mr. Savage, no calls are allowed during sessions."

"...this had only agitated him more than he already."...Could instead be, "...this had only agitated him more than he already was."

Here you wrote: "Surprisingly, Ryan found a close parking space and went toward the police tape the scrolled the crowd for Aaron, his partner." Maybe you might change that to, '...then scrolled the crowd for Aaron...'.

Here:
"I let you know when you get here! Where are you?” Might be, 'I'll let you know...'.

This is another example of a sentence which could be combined:
"The chief had a small quaint office with wall the color of pea soup. Something new the chief was trying out." Maybe you might write, 'The chief, who was always working on new ways to improve his small, quaint office, recently had it painted the color of pea soup'.

Here:
"Funny I thought you would be more hysterical about this. You are taking it will” ('well', rather than 'will')

This is an example of a sentence which is way too long:
" Angela was the icing on the cake, because as long as Lawrence had Angela, he could control Ryan, now Angela was obviously not playing by the rules, and although she was oblivious to Ryan’s double life, and since he could not get to her, she was in grave danger and there was nothing that he could do from a jail cell." I would break that up into two or three different sentences.

Typo:
"He had nowhere to run to ad nowhere to hide." ('...nowhere to run, and nowhere to hide.')

I hope you'll fix these few tiny little things, so that your awesome story will flow smoothly without distractions. It's a great story, and it deserves the little attention to polish it up. *Delight*


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*Exclaim* LOL *Laugh* I was just flipping through the channels of all your amazing campfires here, Hooves! Gosh, did these bring back memories! I guess I'm getting sentimental, after being here for ten years now! *Bigsmile*

This folder is a WDC hidden gem! What a great collection of humorous campfires! I am honored to have had so many 'turns' at many of them. *Blush*

I found this entry which I wrote a zillion years ago at the 'Walmart on Mars' campfire...
The southern steer tapped his com badge, “Captain, it’s MooCoy. This is a medical emergency. Send someone to ten backward right away.”

A voice responded, asking what the problem is. The southern accent became thicker as MooCoy answered. “I have a mad cow here. Apparently, she found out that we have high carb food items at our snack bar, and she is demanding something else”

MooCoy stopped to listen to the reply, but it seemed to upset him. “Dammit Captain! I’m a doctor, not a chef!”


Gosh, you really dug deep to help 'newbie Maryann' learn something about comedy!

...But wait! That's not all! I wrote my very, very, first haiku at one of your poetry campfires!

I enjoyed the revisit to your campfire collection! Thanks for the memories! *Heart*


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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your quiz.

*Exclaim* Yay! My score makes me a misfit! ..I guess that's a good thing! *Laugh*

I really had lots of fun taking this quiz. *Hmmm, I meant to get some reviews done today, and instead I'm playing with these fun WDC challenges...* *Bigsmile*

First of all, I'd like to say that I love the images you added to the quiz! They're all so cute!

You did a fantastic job in setting this quiz up. It was set up well, so I wasn't distracted from the fun at all.
No thoughts were interrupted here! We misfits require all of our concentration power to go on the questions at hand. *Wink*

I enjoyed reading, and reminiscing, about the cute names from the show. Gosh, I watched that show so many times!

I'm really glad that you took advantage of all the possibilities in setting up this quiz, such as the viewing of the scoreboard. It was nice to see that, although I was in the middle half, there were others who didn't guess many of the (easy) questions correctly. I was able to easily see my score, and I could also view the correct answers. Nice work...And now, I suddenly feel like having a hot chocolate! *Coffeeo*


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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your item.

*Exclaim* I loved your fun poll! In this age of Hunger Games, Twilight, Tru-blood and Vampire Diaries, it's great to have a poll about vampires, werewolves, and other monsters. Great creativity in putting this one together.

Why limit the heading to monsters which, 'tear people to pieces'? The brief introduction simply asks, "What monster we prefer". I think Bella prefers to have Edward and Jacob as boyfriends. Caroline makes a great friend for Bonnie and Elena. We all love ET and the kids from witch mountain. *Bigsmile*

I wasn't surprised to see that 'vampires' was the number one pick so far. Many people have been reading lots of vampire books these days. Even back in the popular times of Anne Rice, vampires have been top choices.

Congratulations on having 177 votes already! That's proof that your poll is terrific! *Smile*


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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your crossword puzzle.

*Exclaim* Gosh I spent way too much time on that! LOL
I enjoyed the fun, though, and that's the point. *Bigsmile*

I like most of the rock bands that you featured in your puzzle. I actually finished the whole thing, but I gave up after submitting my answers three times. I think it's entirely because I couldn't spell all of the group names correctly. I think if I had taken extra time to look up the correct spellings, it would have been fine. *Delight*

I noticed that you created this item in 2010. I'd love to see a more current puzzle, with some of the newer rock groups, like James Durbin and Daughtry. There are lots of older groups to also add to the mix.

Your brief introduction says, "Many of the rock bands that ma be old and may be new." It will, of course, look better as, "Many of the rock bands that may be old and may be new."

Great job in putting this puzzle together. *Smile*


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*Star*This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

*Exclaim*Great ideas for expressing the types of encounters that moderators find in their everyday fun at our site.

You really succeeded in adding to your poem some of the good feelings which all of the mods have. We encourage newbies and other members to be the best that they can be.

I like that you used words such as, 'motivating' and 'encouraging', which is what we all strive to do.

Terrific work with applying the word, 'moderator', to your acrostic poem. *Smile*


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Review of On Being Blue  
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your contest entry.

*Exclaim* Hi, Fyn! Thanks for entering the "The Mod Squad Mission! contest. *Smile*

I enjoyed your poem because you seemed to express similar thoughts of how all mods felt at one time. You recalled the intimidation newbies sometimes feel when they have to converse with mods and above.

You also took us down memory lane a bit. Mods were all once black cases, then they entered a whole new world! They were suddenly able to share their talents in activities such as site newsletters and judging, yet they are still the same person...More experienced and knowledgeable, I think. *Smile*

Mods always have that good feeling when they help other members, especially if they know the members learned from their help. Thanks for sharing these joys and challenges. *Delight*


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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim*HAPPY ST. PATRICK'S DAY!

This is a perfect poem to read on this St. Patrick's Day weekend! What a very sweet poem it is. Any lady would be very flattered to have a poem like this written for her.

I love the lovely and poetic words you chose...'skin a hue of cream'! It's so beautiful!

I felt that the rhyme was really terrific and pleasant to read. The melodic flow was really nice.

I enjoyed the feeling of love which was expressed in your poem. ...A man dreams of a fantastic lady, and wakes to the reality that the lady of his dreams is his wife. That's a sweet thought. *Smile*

Hey, if you ever decide to explore fonts and colors, this might look very pretty in green, to match the emerald eyes in his dream. *Wink*


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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* Happy St. Patrick's Day!

I really enjoyed reading your poem, which was written in both English and Irish. It's a very unusual find. *Smile*

The Irish words sound so pretty, and the translation seemed like advice worth taking.

It's certainly very thought provoking.

I would suggest to keep the English line closer to it's 'partner' Irish line, so that there's no doubt as to which line it is translating. Double spacing can be between the different lines. ...Or, why not write the poem first in Irish, and then followed by the English translation...

Is there a deep meaning to this poem? If there is, then maybe a short note of explanation at the end would be a great touch. I was a tiny bit confused as to how the ending, "That's it, that's correct", fit in with the rest...


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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* HAPPY ST. PATRICK'S DAY!!

I found your limerick to be so very funny! *Laugh* LOL

I started reading it, not knowing where it was going, and then realized the punchline! That's so perfect for a limerick...To make a fun joke in a small space. You really succeeded in doing that. *Smile*

The flow of the limerick style was really smooth and pleasant to read.
...And I love the festive green.

So, that's what happens to beer that doesn't ferment!
I'll be thinking of your poem the next time I see O'Douls in the grocery store!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hello Power Unit! Thanks for joining in the fun of our
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by Lornda
for Lornda. She will love your poem, I'm sure. *Smile*

Your poem reminded me of the club from the Flintstones. Didn't they use pet names, like Grand Pooh-Bah? ...Or, maybe you were going for Lord-High-Everything-Else...Like from, 'The Mikado.'
Power has always encouraged a fun, friendly, and family atmosphere, and you expressed this same type of fun in your creative poem.

I love that acrostic style. You really had fun with the letters of LORNDA in your playful poem.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* Hi Sunnystar! *Smile* Thanks for your participation in the mini challenge for Lornda. I'm sure you helped to put a big smile *Bigsmile* on her face.

I enjoyed the simplicity of your sweet poem.

The first letters of the acrostic style, were really easy to find with the red coloring.

The poetic wording you used was very complementary, thoughtful, and flattering.

Wow! That animated 'deadline' character at the top is so cute! Nice work! *Smile*


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Review of LORNDA  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* Nice work, T. J.! Thanks for joining in the celebration of this mini challenge for Lornda. *Smile*

I particularly liked the structure of your poem. The story became simpler as it unfolded. It was almost like a countdown of memories, until we're here with today's celebration.

Your poem had a thoughtful and caring attitude in abundance!
It was very nice to say a 'thank you' and to add an anniversary wish for Lornda at the very end. Great work. *Smile*


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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* Hi Sum1! Thanks for being one of the first to enter the mini challenge by writing a poem for Lornda! *Smile*

I'm sure Lornda will be very happy to read your poem. You said several really nice things about her.

I liked that you chose to use both of the acrostic prompts...'Lornda' and 'Memories'. That was creative and thoughtful.

It was a nice touch that you kept to the space theme that we all do for fun. You added both humor and flattery. The title was cute, too. Nice work. *Smile*


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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is an informative poem about a river horse.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Oh my gosh, Harry, I'm going to look this horse up on my computer today! I never heard of it before. It's amazing to hear about horses in the wild. I've only ever seen them on ranches and at people's homes! *Bigsmile*

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't find any errors.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: Your poem had a gentle structure, while giving lots of interesting facts. I actually learned a lot from reading it, about this river horse.

I could picture a horse grazing in the grasses and wading in the water, from your nicely chosen words. He sounds really large, if he gets up to sixteen feet long...And, gosh, 8000 pounds! Thanks for sharing this information. *Smile*

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: I'd really love to see a picture of one. Did you ever consider adding an image along with this poem?

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