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You know it's Sci Fi when...

Themes, Elements, and Tropes. Some things that Science Fiction is best known for.

BY ONLINE AUTHORS

Imagination Crossing, Chapter 1

Theresa imagines herself as a scientist, trying to stop the Invisible Criminal.

Transporation

A new technology poses a unique glitch

L'aura del Campo

Online journal capturing the moment and the memory of moments. A meadow meditation.

My World Of Hopes, Dreams, Fantasies

Entries for various Blog Challenges.I will be expressing my hopes, dreams and fantasies.

READ A NEWBIE

Run

Auria finds herself figuring out her new powers while escaping from danger.

The Woman at the Gate

Young expatriate moves into new home and encounters someone else's past

Somewhere

A poem about somewhere, but you can't find it, without doing something.

Snow

I miss the snow. I wish it‘d would visit more often. A poem.

BY ONLINE AUTHORS

An Open House is no Prison

- slightly unhinged -

anime / cartoon / video game potion problems

Powerful potions enter the worlds of anime, cartoons, and video games.

The Promise

In the Beginning there was The Word

This Broken Earth

Chapter 4: Not Just Surviving

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#4355908

Review of Rising Star

Review by Maryann

In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos

Rated: E

| (4.5)

FIRST IMPRESSION:

THOUGHTS: This is another of your folders which I have read and reviewed just about everything inside of. You needed some stars and recognition for your work, and I'm excited to be the very first to give it to you.

FAVORITE PART: I really enjoyed reading the items inside of this item. My favorite was the list of your favorite music songs and groups...I spent SO MUCH time listening to those songs!! Please don't tell my Martell Princess! LOL

I liked that you posted about two songs from one of my favorite groups, Cold Play. You'd probably enjoy Savage Garden songs, too. I used to love that group before the singers broke up. Around that time, I moved more toward Cold Play.

I liked reading your historical article. I remembered reading Johnny Tremaine and other Boston Tea Party type books as a young girl, and your story brought back memories. Yes, later in life, I spend more of my time in sci-fi's and cookbooks, but back then I read a few scholastic books.

It was fun to read some of the Rising Stars stuff. I know Gabriella here for years and years. She's one amazing lady.

SUGGESTIONS: I would suggest adding an image and maybe some creative writing to the body of this item. I can understand that sometimes we quickly sweep items inside of a folder to clean up. Well, now that those items have a 'home', maybe you might think about decorating this home. Think of it as pretty and decorative landscaping, like one might have outside their place of residence.

Game of Thrones

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#4355890

Review of Signatures, Images and Others

Review by Maryann

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a collection of various random item, such as contest entries and images.

THOUGHTS:I figured that since I already reviewed (almost) everything in this folder, and thoroughly read, looked at enjoyed everything in it, I might as well give the folder some pretty stars as well. I hate when folders are ignored and never have any stars on them, so I thought maybe you might feel the same.

FAVORITE PART: I enjoyed everything inside this wonderful folder. Whenever I open a folder, I always feel like it's a box of surprise goodies. This one was no exception. I really, really love that snow globe!! It's so pretty. What a great find!

I was delighted to read all about the actors and actresses of the Game of Thrones show which we are having fun with on WDC. Of course, our version of it, I'm sure, is much, much different than the TV show, but we are still having fun with it none the less. It was great to come across that gem of an item so that I could get to read about it. I hate to look things up on google because I get so distracted there! LOL Having this item to read was easier for me.

Your Hope story was a tear jerker, and showed your interesting creativity.

SUGGESTIONS: Oh! Nothing is standing out to decorate this folder! I like the image that ~ Aqua ~

made for you...The longer, blue, cloud banner with your name. Maybe you might consider putting that in the body of this folder, along with a longer introduction as to what we will find inside. After reviewing many things in your port today, I can see that you have a very creative way of writing. You might think of a very witty, and attention-catching paragraph to write here.

I would suggest changing the genres which you picked. ...Other, other, other! How would one find this in their searches? Do people normally search, 'other'? Maybe it would be fun for Gaby to make that one of the daily genre searches for our reviewing!

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#4355681

Review of My City of Dreams

Review by Maryann

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a bitter sweet tribute to a city where the narrator lives.

THOUGHTS: I was trying to figure out which city you were talking about in this beautiful poem. I was never really quite sure, and I thought you'd mention it as the 'punch line' near the end. You did say, 'City of Lights', but

that didn't really help me. I looked up, 'City of Lights' in a Google search, and actually a few came up. Paris, was the one which came up the most. Did I guess it correctly? Was it Paris?

FAVORITE PART: Great work in putting this one together. I loved how each delicate stanza was only two lines, and the rhyme pattern added pleasant entertainment to your poem. My favorite lines were, 'For their leaders are just like them, and their promises are all a big sham'. This did add a 'political' sense to your poem. One of the genres you piked was 'other', but maybe you might change that to 'political' so you could get the extra views.

I liked the closure you gave at the end. The contrast of the City of Lights and the darkness which is there now, will leave your readers in thoughts about this meaningful poem. Nice work.

SUGGESTIONS: I really love poems which rhyme. I guess I've read so many Dr. Seuss books to my four kids while they were growing up. I spent way too much time enjoying your great poem! LOL A few of the words, though, I thought didn't really rhyme as smoothly as the rest. Here are a couple of examples: money and irony and religion and Justification. I'm not sure what you could put in their places, but maybe end those lines with different words instead...Like, They think and dream about hoarding money they make,
and never about using it, for Heaven's sake! It would have the same impact, in my opinion, yet it would rhyme more smoothly.

If this is about Paris, a small image at the bottom of the Eiffel Tower would be amazing. Or, maybe a short factual bio of the city, which sparked your thoughts for this poem.

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#4354866

Review of Jane Austen Newsletter July 2017

Review by Maryann

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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)

FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a newsletter all about Jane Austen related material.

THOUGHTS: Hi Megan. I'm really glad that I somehow came across this very entertaining newsletter. I didn't realize that you wrote these. I learned a lot about Jane Austen which I did't already know, and I also enjoyed the other tid bits of information which you included as well. Gosh, I don't think I have any of your pretty Jane Austen merit badges. I hope to be able to get one someday. I'll have to learn how I might win one perhaps sometime.

FAVORITE PART: Oh my gosh! I always loved anything Barnabas Collins, so I'm, of course, impressed that you have an autograph of him...Well, Jonathan Frid. ...And Bat Man, too. How proud you must be of your collection! Where did you get them?

I liked how well written and informative this newsletter was. You even told about a Danielle Steel book (Dutchess). The last Danielle Steel book I've read was one that was different from what she normally writes...About a robot man, but I can't remember the name of it.

Not too long ago, I watched...Wait for it...Pride and Prejudiced and Zombies. Have you ever seen it? You'd probably like it, if nothing else, for the style. I really enjoyed it. Gosh, those gals were strong, and that reminded me of what you wrote in your newsletter. I liked that you said Jane Austen wrote her books about women heroines --Their inner lives, feelings, and points of view.

I'll have to see if my daughter ever heard of that Jane Austen beer called Tible which you mentioned. Thanks for sharing your very special newsletter. I learned so much from you today.

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#4354824

Review of Signatures

Review by Maryann

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a very impressive collection of a variety of images all in one place.

THOUGHTS: I couldn't pass by this collection without saying a few words about it during your WDC anniversary. Seeing all of these brought back my great memories of you through the years you've been a member here. Isn't it funny how images can seem like a 'journal' in itself? You have several "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"

images, and well deserved nano images, too, included in this nice grouping.

FAVORITE PART: Again, I felt like I was walking down memory lane. Gosh, we know each other a very long time here. I actually remember making the Power one with the flowers for you way back in 2012. Gee the years fly by sometimes it seems. It was among the first batch of images I ever attempted.

I'll have to tell you, I spent way too much time in this collection enjoying your images. I love the Dolly Parton one, and the saying inside of it. I see that you have several pretty Power Group images, and you were gifted a few truly beautiful ones. Congratulations on the nano winner images -- to me, it means that you've participated in nano in some way, which is impressive. Other than sponsoring people, I've never touched upon that myself.

SUGGESTIONS: Just a small suggestion, but someday when you get a moment, why not add a pretty image to the body of this collection heading. Right now, you have, "All my signatures and other bits and bobs.", but I see that you created this item back in 2001, and you haven't modified it since 2014. You could probably go back and make the font larger, center it, and perhaps add some color. ...And, maybe one of your pretty images. I actually like the Dolly one for it.

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#4354471

Review of words of wisdom and inspirations

Review by Maryann

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Rated: E

| (2.5)

FIRST IMPRESSION: I felt that this was a dreamy love poem to enjoy.

THOUGHTS: Hi Mary. I'm so glad I decided to read and review your beautiful poem. I think that, with a bit of work, this can turn into something really very special. I really think there's potential in it, and I hope to give you some feedback of my ideas in how you can fix this up.

FAVORITE PART: : Wow, these sound, in my opinion, a lot like song lyrics. Did you ever consider adding more to them to make this into a song? I could imagine many brides and grooms getting married, and dancing at their wedding reception to these 'lyrics'. It would truly make a very perfect 'first dance' song.

You succeeded in expressing love and emotion in your well chosen words. I particularly enjoyed reading how they would take each others hands and be 'there' for each other. The descriptive words you picked seemed, to me, so sweet and beautiful.

SUGGESTIONS: Mary, what does this have to do with 'short stories'? I was pretty confused upon reading your brief introduction. As I said, if you add more and polish this up, you have something here for sure! You might change 'short stories' to 'a wedding song of dedicated love'.

I would also change the genre. I think you might find something else other than, educational to put this in. I thought it read more like a love poem. Romance, maybe?

Until the time you decide to add more, I would suggest to at least separate the poetic lines, break up the sentences, and center them. This way, it will give a more reader friendly appearance. It's really a pretty item, and deserves a little tender loving care.

Game of Thrones

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#4354454

Review of Daily Haiku 28jul09

Review by Maryann

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a haiku about small animals and nature.

THOUGHTS: Hi Peach! I recently wrote a poem about squirrels, and that's what drew me to yours. I had also been looking for something in the 'education' genre. I'm not sure I would have listed your poem in that genre, though perhaps it's fine there. After all, people do need to occasionally be educated about animals and nature. This shows your creative mind thinking of great genres to show off your poetry in.

FAVORITE PART: As I already mentioned, I do like poems (and stories) about squirrels, and yours was all about them in their natural environment. The form you chose, Haiku, is one of my very favorites.

I also enjoyed the part about the clouds. Gosh, I have my head in the clouds a lot of the time, especially when the child in me tries to finds images up there of rabbits, and, yes, squirrels. I can certainly relate to the squirrel as he watches up at the clouds! LOL

I loved the twist you put into your cute poem. While the other squirrels were playing, one of them prefers to have his head up in the clouds. So lovely and adorable.

I checked the form, and I found that the syllable count was done very well. Nice work in putting this one together.

You had the perfect brief introduction with, 'One day at a time'. What a smart little squirrel! That's how we should all be!

SUGGESTIONS: I'm not sure I would have picked the word, 'lightly' playing. Squirrels, in my opinion, buzz around quicker than bees. The high spirited creatures tumble and twirl, and zip all over the place. Maybe I would have replaced it with 'freely'. There are better words, but we are limited with the syllable count.

Other than that, maybe center the poem and make the font bigger, but of course that's up to you.

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#4354145

Review of Acquiesce

Review by Maryann

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a story about the culture of China, and one's experiences with it.

THOUGHTS: I felt that you wrote this story very well. It held my attention because you wrote it in an entertaining way.

FAVORITE PART: I really loved your descriptions. I could imagine the sun drying corn cobs on the little roof tops, and the donkey carts moving along. As a person who lives in the United States, this all sounded really exotic to me. Yes, I agree with your statement that those types of things show how truly hard the Chinese people work for a living. They are like, I would think, the rustic pioneers of U.S. yesteryear.

LOL I loved the humor you added here and there throughout your story, even though it's one of those 'sad but sweet' circumstances. The idea that street lights are only around for decorative purposes had me cracking up, although I could understand how scary it must be to cross the streets. I recalled my first visit to France, and seeing how the motor scooters felt free to drive on the sidewalks whenever they pleased. If a person is not used to it, it seems surreal.

I envy you and your husband for actually being right there at the Great Wall of China! Gosh, I would have had a few asthma attacks if I tried to hike up. I would have taken the skylift for sure, but good for you to do the hike. I thought it was nice of you to think of the high touristy postcard prices as a donation to the hard-working people who were selling them. I could relate to that, because I always seem to buy things that I really don't want, just because I understand that people depend on tourist money for income.

SUGGESTIONS: Thank you for sharing your cultural experience of China. Maybe sometime you might think about adding a picture or two of the Great Wall, or something from the bus ride.

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#4338310

Review of Summer Sun on Greening Field

Review by Maryann

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Reviewed by Maryann

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Hello Jay. I loved the feel of this very upbeat poem. It's pleasant spirit makes for a great way to face the day. We all experience challenges, and you succeeded in expressing hope in this inspirational poem.

I like special forms of poetry, and the idea of 'Villanelle' was intriguing to me. I'll have to say that I wasn't so familiar with it, so I looked up it's definition as: 'A villanelle (also known as villanesque) is a nineteen-line poetic form consisting of five tercets followed by a quatrain. There are two refrains and two repeating rhymes, with the first and third line of the first tercet repeated alternately until the last stanza, which includes both repeated lines' I would suggest to add a bit about the form after your lovely poem, for people (like me) who might not be so aware of it.

This is a very lively and summery poem, filled with lots of fun. The wording which you used, such as 'neath and fin'lly, made me think of the romance of old fashioned poetry.
Your talents shined through the poem.

I 'saw' all of the sights and sounds of a summer day throughout your stanzas. You allowed your readers to experience things like a green field and the blasting heat of summer. Your creative use of words like 'storm o'ercast' and 'show'ring flood' adds to the beauty of your work.

Inside of the summer references, we also find strong inspiration of hope in which challenging days will be healed. Nicely done. Nice centering in your presantation, and I like both your cover image and the colorful one at the bottom, too.

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#4331217

Review of Last Flight

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

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This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your suspenseful poem.

Awesome poem, Kerri! I love poems about dragons, and I was glad I came across this very exciting one.

I felt the power of this poem. You chose terrific poetic words, which aided in that effect. You succeeded in awaking your readers senses, while we imagined winds blowing, bells chiming, and all in all the dragons battling through the stench and strength of seawater. You really did a creative job with this one.

I'm not very familiar with the Interlocking Rubyait form of poetry, so it was enjoyable to see one in action.

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#4322409

Review of Writings for 2017

for entry "Protecting the environment"

Review by Maryann

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Reviewed by Maryann

This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

Oh wow, Lisa, I never heard of this form of poetry, Bop! I love it! Gosh, you did a great job in this amazing example. I like the problem, argument, and solution in this structured poem. You kept to the line sequence well, all the while making this 'story poem' make sense.

You drew me in with the first stanza, where you helped me understand the dilemma of the coal mines and it's effect on the environment. I loved the poetic descriptions you used. I could really envision the cliffs and the waters, and I could imagine the dust, too.

The repeated sentence was a perfect break, and I believe it gave more impact to the thoughts you suggested.

Your readers will read more about the consequences of the stated problem in your next stanza, where you covered so much about the town's people.

In your last stanza, I would capitalize the 'i' in It'll at the beginning of the first sentence.

I liked the solutions you presented. Training and replanting are great ideas.

Hey, also the green font is perfect for an environmental poem.

Great job, Lisa.

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#4302173

Review of Baby Animals

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Rated: E

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Reviewed by Maryann

This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your baby animal poem.

Oh Lisa, I love, love, love this poem! My first reaction was to put an awardicon on it, but I see that Elle already gave you one. Bravo! Well done!

The presentation is very beautiful. I like the pink color and the emoicons, too, as well as the centering. With that said, I couldn't help but imagine this as a children's story book. Did you ever consider trying to get it published that way? I don't know much about that, but I do know that I would love to read it to my granddaughter! I could picture this with colorful animal pictures, and each stanza would be on each page. If you ever read a book to a toddler, then you know what I'm talking about...

Well, your first stanza is a fun hook. I liked reading about the cute little duck.
Waddle, waddle, waddle So cute!

The flow of your poem was wonderful, and the rhyme was very pleasant and easy to read.

I liked how you ended the adorable poem, with talk about learning of more animals by going to the zoo. What a nice introduction this would be for a child about to go to the zoo!

Very well put together.

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#4302108

Review of My African Gray

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Rated: E

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Reviewed by Maryann

This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your pet poem.

Hi Lisa! What a really cute pet poem. I loved the way it rhymed and told the story about your lovely African Grey Parrot, Katie. I'm assuming it's a pet that you have. She sounds really sweet.

My favorite line was the heart warming lines at the end of the last stanza. Our pets are so very dear to our heart, and I believe you expressed that well in your last stanza...As well as all of the other stanzas.

You gave a nice idea about the fun-loving bird, and the relationship between the owner and the pet. My friend's African Grey can whistle, too! I could imagine how yours whistles.

Maybe you might be able to post a picture in the item of her someday.

Nice work in putting this poem together.

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#4302008

Review of Penguins Make the World Go Round

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Rated: E

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Reviewed by Maryann

This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your cNote shop.

Penguins!! These penguin cNotes are so cute!

I enjoyed browsing through all of them. I chuckled, and had a very nice visit here.

My favorite is the 'port raid'! So funny!! It's perfect, because I could imagine all of those many penguins storming through.

The friendship one, and the 'hugs' one are also a couple of my favorites. ...And, gosh, the baby 'fuzzy' penguins are adorable!

I liked that your prices are decent, and that you offer many cNotes in this shop. Each one of them has just the right saying along with it. They are great for every occasion, as you mentioned in your brief introduction. Nicely put together.

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#4297061

Review of Sprocket

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Rated: E

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This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your story.

I really enjoyed reading your steampunk story, Schnujo. I found it to be very entertaining, and it held my attention throughout.

I felt that you touched on the personalities well, in the limited space. Mr. Alexander, though a brilliant airship racer, tended to be absentminded and lacked confidence at times. The determined Sprocket kept him on track and filled him with the confidence which he badly needed. You made that clear, as the motherly character calmed the racer's fear, told about other ways in which she helped him with his daily tasks, and assisted him with keeping his appointments.

The smooth flow of your story made it easy and fun to read.

Great story line. I liked that you wrote about the prompt, or I would have wondered what the bold words were all about. Well done.

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#4292813

Review of The Carousel : 2016 Quills nominee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your item.

Hi Lady Elf . You're touching poem brought tears to my eyes...Only such well written writing could do that!
I also lost my dad, though in recent years, rather than you did as a kid. My dad and I were really close, and I guess I thought I'd have him forever. Here's a picture of us together: "Words of Comfort for Maryann"
Your poem brought back sweet memories of him, as any child close to their dad would relate to all of the things you mentioned.

Great start to your beautiful poem, with a Carousel of thoughts! Truly a poetic way to begin, and made me eager to read on.

You gave us a 'vision' of your dad in the next stanza, where all of our sights and sounds were opened up...hint of your dad's cologne...jingling of coins in his pocket...tobacco essence...fur collared coat...Nice descriptive poetry there.

The next stanza gave me chills. I remembered my dad teaching me how to ride my bike when I was little. You described your experience well, and did it with perfect rhyme, which I loved so much. (My dad taught me how to fish, too!)

The humor of your next stanza was delightful, and probably had my favorite line in your poem - "The faster he drove, the more it shook/ We had more laughs than a comic book." Very nicely done, and showed the great times you enjoyed with your beloved dad.

Toast and tea...Breakfast is, I think, a great 'quality time' to be shared with family. My dad used to make us muffins every Saturday. You went on with more stanzas in your long 'story poem', which made it pleasant to get lost in. Toward the end, you brought us back to how it began, with the Carousel of thoughts coming to an end. It was a great way to add closure to your poem.

So sorry to hear that your dad passed on Christmas Eve. We had my mom's funeral on Christmas Eve, so I can relate to what you went through. Nice work with this piece. You're a very talented writer. Good luck with the Quills on it!

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#4292538

Review of Those Crazy Mountain Boyz

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Rated: 13+

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Reviewed by Maryann

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What an awesome story! You added a really creative twist. In fact, it gave me the creeps! LOL
I normally don't read horror stories, but I neglected to look at the genre before I read it, so you could imagine how much the ending twist was a surprise to me!

I felt that your story was very well written, and I could understand how well deserved the award placed on it was. Nice work. Did you win the contest? I hope you did.

You gave a good idea of the character's personalities, especially Rick's...He had too much pride to admit that he didn't know how to get out of the woods.

I loved the light humor with Kevin thinking the back woods brothers reminded him of Tweedle Dee and Tweedle Dum! So funny! LOL
Who would have expected them to be so nuts!
I liked the way you added the way which they spoke to their voice.

Nice work with putting together this very entertaining story.

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#4273416

Review of My Community Notes Collection

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Rated: E

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Hello again, SciFi!

Even though I commented though email, I wanted to send you a few comments in review form as well.

So far, I showed this to a few friends. They really love this item as much as I do!

You certainly did a great job with this, and I can hardly wait to show it to more members. I plan to add a link to it when I send out review raid notes this week, and I already added it inside the heading of the "November Power Raid" .

I truly like each of the colors in these planet images. You chose well, with the word colors.
The variety of cNotes is really nice so far. You have so much covered...Birthdays...Anniversaries...Welcomes...Etc.

I like the messages, too! What a nice message to get...That the sender might be back to visit and review their port! Very thoughtful. Great work, and thanks again for making this very impressive collection.

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#4268095

Review of My College Application

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Rated: E

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This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your college appication.

Britt, congratulations on your decision to continue onto college. After reading your inspirational story, I can see that you are strong and confident. I wish you all the best!

I found a few things which might improve your story. First, I would leave lines between the paragraphs to give it a more reader friendly appearance. You want to make them want to read it, and also to make sure people will give this awesome story a chance.

I noticed that you switched tenses a few times. I also have trouble with this, but you want to make sure your application is as good as you can make it.
Here is an example:
You wrote: "I quickly realized that..."
And here, you wrote: "My brother and I are upstairs..."

I'm not sure I like that first sentence. I would make a different 'hook' sentence, such as:

The first time my Dad decided to confide in me about the disturbing problems which my mother was having, didn't come as a shock to me. I sensed something was wrong my whole life. One ordinary day while my brother and I were playing a board game together, my Dad and Stepmom called us downstairs....

Watch out for 'run-on' sentences, such as what you have here:
"I know what separates her from other “normal” parents: drug use, stealing, and living without caring whether or not you have responsibilities; but the question of why she acts like this is a mystery I haven’t been able to solve, but always wanted to."

I would break that up a bit, and add in a few more words in order to make it flow smoothly.

Here is an example of what you could do:
My mom's issues with drug use, stealing, and living without caring about her responsibilities certainly separates her from 'normal' parents. The question of why she acts like this is a mystery I haven’t been able to solve, but I always wanted to.

I'm not a fan of beginning a sentence with the word, because, as in this one:
"Because of her I have an innate curiosity of why people do what they do."

Perhaps you might tweak it up to something like this:
My lifelong experiences left me with a passion to find out why people do what they do.

Good luck with your college experience. I hope you find great adventures in your bright future.

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#4226087

Review of The Land Of Ons

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Rated: E

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Hi Sum1 , and happy 6th WDC Anniversary to you!

I'll have to be honest...I'm going to be telling lots of my friends about your terrific fantasy story!

My husband and I watched the movie, Idiocracy, again this week, so your story couldn't have come at a better time. In the movie, an average guy, who could have been a less-on from your story, accidentally wakes up in the far off future. I won't tell you any more in case you ever wish to see it...

I didn't know what to expect from your story when I first started reading it. It should be listed as comedy, but the 'surprise' of it adds to the fun experience.

You're a very talented writer. Your writings are always clear and reader friendly. This one is no exception. Nice work.

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#4218192

Review of Friendship

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Rated: E

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Hi Sunny, I'm stopping by on your Angel Day to visit your port again.

I had to express a few words about this wonderful cNote! It was a marvel to look at, because it's very pretty and different.

What a nice quote from C. Pulsifer about friendship! The idea that the colors of a rainbow reflect the colors of friendship is a very beautiful concept.

I love the beauty of nature which explodes out. The rainbow softly splashes across the rock cliff and it's greenery, while the water splashes below. Very nice.

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Review of The John Darbe Family

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Oh my gosh! What an amazing picture! How lucky you are to have one like that. Someone in your family kept photos really well.

I absolutely loved the 'old' look of it, and the triangular edges, which make me feel as though I were looking right into an old and cherished photo album.

The picture tells a lot of history! I love the wagon with the big wheels, the horse, and what the people were wearing. Gosh, that was your dad on the horse! How amazing!

If I could suggest anything at all to add here, it would be to add a tiny bit more about the experience. What area was this taken in? What time period? Do you know where they were traveling? Are the others here your relatives as well?

Thanks for sharing this item. I've been trying to track my relatives on some ancestry places, and it can really be frustrating sometimes. I am always impressed when someone has such really fine pictures.

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#4197796

Review of Caught Up

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Rated: E

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I enjoyed reading your great little story. I love stories which show good values, and yours did, indeed. I thought the guy was in the police station because he did something bad again, but he was there for his son. The ending was especially nice, and I felt that you tied it all together neatly.

The conversations felt entertaining and believable. Nice work.

I would suggest leaving space between the dialog. It will make your story more reader friendly. Right now, the words look like one block. You might, for example, make it look like this:

“Well,” He laughs, “I guess the apple doesn’t fall far from the tree.”

“No, he’s not anything like me. He’s a good kid.”

“So were you. You just got caught up in bad situations.”

Also, this seems like just one part of a larger story. If you posted what the contest prompt was about, it would help the reader to understand what you were trying to accomplish. ...Flash fiction about a person sitting in a police station..., for example..

Great work with the dialog in this well written story.

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#4195663

Review of Leah's Goat Image

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Rated: E

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Oh my gosh, Jeannie, you have goats!! What a lucky granddaughter you have, to grow up around so many wonderful animals. My kids (and myself ) always loved to go to petting zoos in order to see and play with the goats. You have your own! Very impressive!

I loved all of the names which your granddaughter thought of for the goats. She is very creative. I think mine would have all sounded like 'Snowy'.
Again, I'm glad that you write things along with your images. Sometimes it's said that a picture is worth a thousand words, but you told so much more by writing along with it.

Your granddaughter is beautiful, and the goats are so cute. I bet she had a lot to do with how friendly they became.

You should add a link to Leah's goat stories in this item, too.

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#4195649

Review of Jeannie's "Life is Short" sig

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This is a very pretty image, Jeannie. I like the contrast of the orange against the black.

The flowers really give this a delicate look, and the font with your name is pretty, too.

I like the quote. I felt that it's perfect for friendship, and it's so true!

I really think it's nice that you wrote something along with the image. So many people simply put an image into an item with little or no words. You explained a lot along with this one, and I agree that the flowers are eye-catching. Very nice.

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