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Review of Hands  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: A picture and some thoughtful words are 'sent' to a soldier by way of this touching poem.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Wow! I could imagine being a soldier who received a picture of his child's hands, with such sweet words written on them! I don't think there would be a dry eye between him and his fellow soldiers! The child seemed very proud, but the dad could be just as proud to have such a brave youngster. *Smile*

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I loved the way the child wrote, "My hands I lay them open", toward the beginning and then echoed similar thoughts at the end. It's chilling to get into the mind of such a tiny person, and to feel the emotion they might feel through your very tender poem.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: I didn't feel that the very first line read well. The first line gives the first impression of your poem, so it should probably be among the very best. You wrote, "These are a picture of my hands..." I think it might sound better written as, "This is a picture of my hands...", since it is referring to only one picture. Or you can change it to something like, "These are my hands...", because then it would be referring to more than one hand.

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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is the first chapter of a fantasy story, dealing with magic, fairies, etc.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Thanks for posting your story on "Invalid Item.

I felt that you wrote a pleasant and entertaining story! I particularly liked your character names. Maribelle is pretty, and I liked how your narrator called the one who enjoyed music, Melody.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: Great job on putting this story together. I liked your introduction. The first and second paragraphs provided a great hook, which made me want to read more. The story of how the narrator met his new friends was really intriguing.

The events that the narrator told about were really interesting, especially the one about the tiny demonic fairies. You displayed your creative ideas well.

"Our hearts pounded like my school's marching band's percussion section..." Your descriptions added to the excitement of the adventures well. Nice work there. *Smile*



*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: I would suggest going back through your story and changing some of the tenses. Decide which tense you want and stick with it. For example, in your first paragraph, You wrote, "Melody breaks down..." and "...closed their eyes." That's two different tenses. Later in the story you wrote, "Life was fine...we all enjoy our time together." ...And, "... I went to sleep, and then I dream." Your tenses have been consistently different throughout the entire story. Now that you have the draft written, the tenses should be easy to change. *Smile*

I was wondering why Rhogar's name wasn't mentioned in the first introductory paragraph, since he's one of the main characters. You named several characters, but of them all, this should be one that would be listed.

In one part of your story, you wrote, "...chasing us and on our tails, literally in Melody's case." I really didn't get this. I thought Rhogar would have a tail because he was half dragon, not Melody.

In the paragraph about the nose bleed, you wrote, "...natural for her ask me..." Typo...I'm sure you meant to write, "natural for her to ask me.."

This sentence doesn't read well: "I can will, but it might take a little while..." Is this implying that the narrator's name is, Will, or is this just a typo?

I felt that the dream part of the story was very rushed. You have really great descriptions. I would break those three large paragraphs up into a few more, to add more drama and adventure to that dream episode. To make it seem less 'out of place', perhaps you might consider making a paragraph in between which goes back to 'real time' to keep your readers in the room during the narrator's dream. I did like the ending, which eluded to the fact that your readers will find out what that was all about when they read chapter two. Keep it going! *Smile*

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Review of Undead Comedy  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
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Hello spidey !

Oh my gosh! Who dared to give you so many stars for this bad poem? Off with their heads!! *Shock*

This part was delicious:
LOL I love the thoughts of zombies pretending that crunching popcorn is brains! ...And the crunching sound masks the screaming noise!! *Bigsmile*

I'd *Ax* this part:
I won't be chopping into this one. *Ax* ax

Overall:
Ah, the perfect poem to read on a Saturday - Zombies movie night. I wonder what will be playing...Oh I know!! ...Night of the Living Dead!! *Bigsmile*

~~Maryann

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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a story written for Power's writing mini challenge about names.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Wow! What an awesome story! I was really impressed! You're name is very meaningful. It shows how special names are to your family. You must feel very proud. Thanks for sharing. *Smile*

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't find any errors in this story.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I always thought of cicada's as being very exotic and mysterious. I can see why they were admired by your grandmother. *Smile*

It's interesting how you became the 'last'. That was destiny at it's best! *Delight*

Great job in keeping this story entertaining, and it was a nice touch to highlight that cicada word...Just to be sure everyone knows what it is.

The presentation of this work is outstanding. I like how you included an image, and made the font of the story in the same color. *Smile*

...And the title of your story is just right! *Wink*

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Review of Choosing My Name  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: ...An entry in Power's mini writing challenge.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: I can see that you put lots of thought into your handle. I enjoyed the story of how it came about. *Smile*

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't find any errors in this story.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I liked that you chose a handle that brought back memories to you of fun times. You started WDC with that same fun optimism. What better inspiration to writing would there be than good memories! I always have fun on WDC, and I hope you are, too!

I sort of really liked, 'Lucy Bell'! LOL Maybe you'll write it in as a character sometime! In the meantime, it's so very nice to know you as Annie! *Delight*

*Star*SUGGESTIONS: I would leave space between your paragraphs, so that your nice item will present better.

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Review of A Girl of 5 faces  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a writing entry in Power's mini challenge.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Wow! I really enjoyed reading your name story. It reminded me of fun times that I experienced with my family and all their nicknames. I understand how sometimes one might not even recall how a nickname came about. My nephew had the nickname, Bug, for the longest time. Of course, now that he's a popular teen, he never goes by that anymore! LOL

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't see any errors in this story.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I liked following along with the story of all your nicknames. I especially liked how one stuck during Soccer. It always seems to bond the group a bit more when they have special names for each other.

I liked the last one you ended up with the best, and I'm glad you use it on WDC. Thanks for sharing your great story. *Smile*

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Review of How I Became Sum1  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: ...A writing challenge entry written for Power's mini challenge.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: I love your humor! Yes, you are sum1 special indeed. You are a great Power captain - 'You review, improve your skills, and love to help others.'

*Check2*ERRORS: No errors in this well written piece.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: LOL I like how 2005 can seem like ice ages ago! I know that feeling! *Laugh*

Good for you to keep your persona and work with it. Sum1swriting is a perfect username, and sum1 is fantastic as well. You really made me smile when I read all those other 'family' names...Like Evry1 and No1. Thanks for sharing the fun! *Smile*

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This item is an entry for Power's mini writing challenge.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS:Wow! Is this a career that you do research for or is this volunteer work? Either way, I applaud you for all the good you do. This is caring at it's best.

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't see any errors here.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: Yuck! Your vivid descriptions...Like the worm that grows three feet inside the body...seem mind-boggling! I'm a 'bottled water' gal. I don't even drink our 'non-itchy' water. I admire your thoughtful handle. Let's hope a solution is someday found. *Smile*

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: These are very great thoughts to ponder while we trek our way through WDC.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: I truly enjoyed reading this piece, Michael. I, too, have a bunch of sticky notes...Although now I graduated to a notebook!

*Star*FAVORITE PART: It makes sense to act from the heart, and forget about trying to 'get to things'. How many times do we not act on the moment, and then it passes us by.

I think your article can be a fine inspiration to anyone who ever felt bad that they forgot something. This could all be made up, when the person acts from the heart. Nice work! *Smile*

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: In your brief introduction, you wrote, 'memmory'. I would change that to 'memory'.

Here you wrote, "Your purpose many only be..." I think you meant, 'Your purpose may only...'.

Thanks for sharing this great essay. It's upbeat tone will put anyone in a wonderful mood. *Smile*

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Review by Maryann
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Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
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Hello ReadingReindeerProximaCentauri !

Wow! You must have eaten lots of brains to think up this one! VERY impressive! I loved all of those movies...Well, some of them scared me to pieces! *Shock*
The use of them in quatrains is amzing! *Thumbsup*

This part was delicious:
This very modern zombie speaks of Craniums rather than brains! So cool! *Cool*

I'd *Ax* this part:
Nothing to chop here. *drags *Ax* away...*

Overall:
Hmmm, I think it's time for this zombie to see, "I am Legend" once again! *Bigsmile*


~~Maryann

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Review by Maryann
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Rated: 18+ | (1.0)
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Hello Ducttape Knight !

You didn't have to hold back on this one! *Sick*Barf!!*Sick*

This part was delicious:
Hmmm, difficult decision of which I enjoyed to most...I think the worms crawling through the nostrils won over the patches of clumped hair...

I'd *Ax* this part:
Nothing to *Ax* ax here...Except for the hungry flesh eating zombies! *Worry*

Overall:
Now I have an image of hands erupting from the earth...I better keep my *Ax* near my bed tonight! *Shock*

~~Maryann

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Review of wasted beauty  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
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Hello spidey !

Yay! Sounds like a disco song..."Do the shuffle..." Zombies love to dance! *Delight*

This part was delicious:
Oooh! What a yummy thought!! ..."Crunching brains oozing from the zombie mouths!" That added yet another great color to the earthy tones of the Autumn season. *Bigsmile*

I'd *Ax* this part:
I'll just be dragging my *Ax* away from these woods...

Overall:
Ah, a true mix of nature and zombies in the Autumn...I'll be listening for that shuffling from now on! *Shock*


~~Maryann

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Review of Zombie Tim's Bio  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
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Hello ReadingReindeerProximaCentauri !

Oh, and you even included a link to this fine movie. Well, you made it sound so good, but I might just pass. I actually enjoyed your zombie version better. We'll have to talk with Hollywood. *Smirk*

This part was delicious:
Yes, the thought of teens drinking something and then turning green at the fast food place was good food for zombie thought. *Sick*

I'd *Ax* this part:
I love this movie already! I wouldn't *Ax* any of it. I might even start a Zombie Tim fan club. *Bigsmile*

Overall:
This was the zombie American Dream for sure. It was so great to give it a happy ending.

~~Maryann

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Review of Name Challenge  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a story about one member's user name and how she came to get it.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Bravo! I loved your inspirational story. It promotes the thought that we can't love others until we first learn to be happy with ourselves. Thanks for taking the time to enter "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group's writing mini challenge.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I loved the whole thing. Gaer Tuilinn means Copper Colored Sparrow!! That's so pretty!! I think it's hard to find many people who don't like 'Elvish'! *Bigsmile*

Many have been in that dorm room environment. How scary and exciting it must all seem for the first time. Many questions would go through their minds about what's to come. You took your reader's through all those thoughts, ideas, and stages in just a small story.

The narrator understands that her story is constantly continuing, yet she shows such growth by the last paragraph. Your touch of humor about holding the crochet needle made me smile. Very nice work. *Smile*

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: Uh oh, there's a very tiny typo in your first sentence. "On quiet and stormy night..." should probably mean...One quiet...Or, On a quiet...

'Just one idea you might use or not...I would move the last sentence over to your humorous afterthought about learning to crochet. ...And put all of that inside of so that it looks like this:

The Lesson:
This is who I am. I know the road ahead will not always be easy, but it is exciting to be on this journey still learning new lessons every day.

Also: I was able to learn how to crochet.


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Review of Natural Zombies  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: 18+ | (1.0)
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Hello Angelica- May days of warmth !

Eek!! Natural zombies lurking around. It only feels quite natural for me to keep my *Ax* ax at the ready. *Smirk*

This part was delicious:
It was great to see those trees wilting as the zombies walked by! *Bigsmile*

I'd *Ax* this part:
Quick, get your *Ax*! The zombies are eating the syllables! *Worry*

Overall:

Hmmm you gave us food for thought...Brains! *Sick*
Seriously, I thought roaches were going to be left when the people were gone but now I see the light...Or, maybe that's the dark? Anyway now we know the the zombies will be left to rule the world.

Maryann

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Rated: 18+ | (1.0)
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Hello Ducttape Knight !

You hit the nail right on the head there. (Hehhehheh!!)
All Zombies love brains...Especially the acrostic sort. *Bigsmile*

This part was delicious:
Those ambling corpses will be on my mind all week! Forever, actually!! Eyk!!
Quick, think about bluebirds. I think this zombie can smell intense fear!

I'd *Ax* this part:
This bad poem is too good to *Ax*. We'll leave the bloody mess just the way it is.

Overall:
I'll be dreaming tonight of rotting flesh and thoughts of succulent flesh...Thank J for me!! *Worry*

~~Maryann

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Review of Trip to Amigos  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: 18+ | (1.0)
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Hello Angelica- May days of warmth !

Okay. Just when I thought you couldn't outdo your last bad poem, you came up with this one! Muy perfecto, mi amigo! *Bigsmile*

This part was delicious:
I love how you awakened (the dead) the senses with the aroma of Amigos. I'll never think of Mexican food quite the same way ever again!

I'd *Ax* this part:
This poem is very good (bad) on it's own. No amount of hot sauce could make improve the zombie quality of this one. *Shock*

Overall:
We all have our favorite foods...Even Zombies!! I'm glad to see your zombies smile and strut to Amigos. *Bigsmile*

~~Maryann

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Rated: 18+ | (1.0)
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Hello Angelica- May days of warmth !
I knew there was something not quite right about that Snow White girl...Poor Walt is turning in his grave, I bet! *Shock*

This part was delicious:
You explained the whole 'true' tale. So, it was those seven dwarf guys whole infected Snow White. Doesn't matter...She had a happy ending, right...Good ol' Prince (Zombie) Charming lived (Is that politically correct?) right along side of her happily forever. *Bigsmile*

I'd *Ax* this part:
No, no, no. Don't ask me to *Ax* any of this poem, because I wouldn't have been able to make it any badder. LOL

Overall:
This really bad poem deserves a really bad review...Ooops, I just gave one! My bad! *Smirk*

~~Maryann
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Review of fast food  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
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Hello Rhyssa !

Oh!! I thought there was something off about those Sonic places!! Now I know what it is! LOL

This part was delicious:
I'll be visualizing them dancing the Thriller dance (badly) and getting chased after...The 'food', that is...After those mushy kisses. *Smirk*

I'd *Ax* this part:
Well, now that I won't be going to that Sonic restaurant anymore...There's nothing in this bad poem that I would discard.

Overall:

Fine brains and fine dining...Or is that fine brain dining...Well, either way, you set the scene here of the Zombie hot spot.

~~Maryann

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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a perfect tribute to the honor of one's wise grandfather.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: This is a perfect poem/story, to celebrate the Autumn Solstice.

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't find any errors.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: Your tender story/poem touched my heart, because you wrote it in such a tender way.

I could feel nature all around your poem, with words and ideas surrounding water nymphs, swamp fairies, and all else involving Mother Nature, in tribute to this great Cypress tree. It all sounded so very beautiful. Nicely done! *Smile*

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Review of TRAIL OF TEARS  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a poem about the Cherokee American Indians.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Sherri, I'm impressed that you know so much about the Native American Indians. This is history done in a truly pleasant way to read. *Delight*

*Check2*ERRORS: No errors. This is perfect!

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I loved your whole poem from the beginning to the end. I especially enjoyed the way each line's first letter added to spelling out the title, 'Trail of Tears'.

This is a heartwrenching tale indeed. I could feel the emotion, and feel for Aniyunwiya, as the search for peace began.

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Rated: 18+ | (1.0)
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Hello Ducttape Knight !
Ooooh, a deadly haiku! Such a pleasure to feast on. The queen would be delighted for sure. *Bigsmile*

This part was delicious:
Off with their dead heads! LOL That's the best, with just the right touch of syllables.

I'd *Ax* this part:
I won't be chopping into this one. It's bad all on it's own. *Smirk*

Overall:

Heressssssssssss Johnny!! Dead Alice and bloodshed in style. There are some awesome zombies lurking around in the horde.

~~Maryann
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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*Note4*I AM REVIEWING YOUR STORY AS A JUDGE FOR "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest. THANKS FOR ENTERING!

*Star*This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

*Exclaim* You said it all in your great lines of wisdom, "Life is strange...It gives us everything when we feel hopeless on losing it all."

I loved the way your story ended with the prompt the way it began. You had an amazing story in between. Wow! What an adventure! ...And an underlining story throughout! I loved the ending. The ladies really taught that Ben a lesson! *Wink*

I hope you will continue to enter WDC contests because it's clear that you have lots of creative ideas. In the future, it might be a good idea for you to find a grammar check program to help you polish up your stories. Keep on writing!


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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Note4*I AM REVIEWING YOUR STORY AS A JUDGE FOR "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest. THANKS FOR ENTERING!

*Star*This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

*Exclaim* You did a great job with the clear introduction of the characters at the beginning of your story. As your story progressed, the closeness of the girls was understood.

What fun the two girls had! You wrote in lots of good times and adventures for them. I could picture the girls going on a train trip to New York City at sixteen, though I wondered where they were traveling from...Brooklyn? D.C.?

The girls shared their friendship into womanhood when, I'll assume, one moved away. Which brings us the the prompt. I could picture the two reunited at a coffee shop. Creative ideas!


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Review by Maryann
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Note4*I AM REVIEWING YOUR STORY AS A JUDGE FOR "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest. THANKS FOR ENTERING!

*Star*This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

*Exclaim* My goodness, you had so much going on in your story, that it was almost hard to find the prompt. Great idea to say that the two women were twin sisters.

You created lives for them which contained lots of heartache. Through thick and thin, they've always been there for each other, with the exception, perhaps, of one paragraph that told a different story. What a lovely ending your story had! Nice work.


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