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Review of My Conniption Fit  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Exclaim* I was intrigued by your story because of the idea that certain words could not be used anywhere in it. The cover image added to the wonder of what your story would be about.

I thought the first paragraph was a perfect way to set the stage with the girl's stewing anger before she entered the place.

I loved this line: I needed to calm down before I went inside to get Jimmie. If I didn’t, I might be the one in handcuffs.
So funny, but it seemed so true! It added to make your character very believable and real.

This sentence didn't read right to me: The phone rang and he quickly picked it up to assist to next wronged woman needing help. I think, 'to', should be changed to, 'the'.

I would have liked to hear more from Jimmie about his explanation, but all in all, I think you succeeded in focusing on the girl's anger, which was what the task of the story was about.

I loved the names, by the way. Kimmie and Jimmie are so cute! *Smile*


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your fictional poem.

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Wow! I could imagine a good old fashioned, home style Christmas for sure in this poem.
I especially enjoyed the sights and scents of your descriptions. You successfully wrote in a way that can awaken the senses. My favorite was the aroma of cinnamon, mixed with the other scents in the home...Pine, roasting foods, etc.

I normally hold a hot mug of coffee to warm my hands in the winter. I liked that you wrote that in, as a mug of mulled wine. We really get the feeling of cold and warmth of the home.

We also had a sense of a loving environment, although you didn't come right out and say it, which was nice. People enjoyed getting and receiving thoughtfully wrapped gifts while listing to the popping of the fireplace and awaiting the cooking food.

The ending was a sort of twist, as we realize the narrator never experienced these things herself.

Wow, again! After reading the author's note which you added nicely in a dropnote, I learned that you wrote this without using several words...Forbidden in this challenge. One of the words was, 'the'! Your writing in this poem flowed so smoothly. I can imagine how difficult it might have been not to use the word, 'the', even once. Excellent work. *Smile*


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Review of Summer Storm  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: I felt this is a pleasently descriptive poem about a summer's rain.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: I was happy that I came across this really pretty poem. For me, it was enjoyable to read. Each and every stanza boasted it's own expressive descriptions.

I always find that summer's storms are the strongest. Those are the ones with thunderous noises, bright flashes of light, and lots of visual effects! I thought you successfully captured all of that, and more, in your summer storm poem.


*Check2*ERRORS: Once again, I can't help you in this area. You wrote this one well, with no errors at all that I can see.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I really liked your poetic words and stunning descriptions. You sparked many of the senses here, as we hear the rumbles of the storm, see the blazing colors, feel the drenching rain, and all else.

Good job thinking of all of those 'ing' words for the second and third line of each stanza! That played a very important part in adding uniqueness to this nice poem.

I liked how you opened with what was about to happen, and ended with the sun shining through.

In my mind, I can see everything which is going on, and I can imagine being one of those people inside watching the fierce stormy scene. Well done.


*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: The first and third line of each stanza doesn't rhyme throughout all of your stanzas, except for in the second stanza, with past and fast. It's really no big deal, but in a near first impression, since it's near the beginning, it almost looked like you meant for those lines to rhyme, and ended up not rhyming the rest. I would change the third line to something like, 'The summer storm rolls in now...'. This would give the beautiful poem a more uniform look.

Other than that...How about a storm image to compliment your poem? ...Centering the poem...Blue font...


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Review of Politics  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: I found this to be a well written, neutral opinion-poem about politics.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: I was almost afraid to click on this one because of the 'Politics' title. I'm glad I did because you offered a calming tone and a soft, neutral feel throughout your poem. I knew that countless amounts of time people voice their passionate opinions about their views, and seem to get frustrated that every single person doesn't feel the way they do. It was a pleasure to read your piece which actually offered 'politics' in a friendly way.

*Check2*ERRORS: I couldn't find any errors. Well done with your proofreading and checking.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I thought your very last line summed everything up nicely: "Compromise and Unity are key". Sadly, I have no clue how to initiate that, so I try to politely change the subject whenever a neighbor, friend, or relative brings up a political topic. I prefer to talk about dogs and other pets. LOL *Laugh*

Although this is a free verse poem, I liked how it had a structured look of your own, with the same word beginning each stanza, and a uniform look all around. I also liked that each stanza focused on the points you were making, such as how sometimes people can be overly dramatic, rude and show tempers.


*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: I really wouldn't change much, except perhaps centering the piece, and maybe adding colored font. 'Just a thought for another day.

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Review of Woodpecker  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem

*Exclaim* Hi Someone! I enjoyed reading your pretty poem. It reminded me of the sights and sounds of a green, spring day. I often hear the birds outside and the sounds of woodpeckers.

I liked that you took your poem through the journey of the determined woodpecker building her home. We saw the world through what the woodpecker would actually be going through.

She pecked away trying to create that home, despite all of the hardships, such as predators and other dangers. It finally had a wonderful home before the storm arrived, which I thought was a nice, happy ending.

Great choice making the font green, as it adds to the pleasant experience of reading your poem. Nick work! *Smile*


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Review of Personal C-notes  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your cNote item.

*Exclaim* Hi Purple Princess! I couldn't help but give this great item a bright purple awardicon!

I love cNotes, and these are really cute! I like all of them, but my favorite is the last one of the couple with the caption, "There's nothing better than you!"

I'm glad you put the purple image first, because it goes so well with your theme of purple. *Bigsmile*

The introduction writing is a nice touch, and it was a good idea to list three of your other cNote shops.

I normally don't use cNotes which are over 750 gps, but these will be nice to use for special occasions like Valentine's Day.

I hope you eventually complete this shop by adding more of the Romantic cNotes. Great work!

Enjoy the WDC Birthday Celebrations this week! *Delight*


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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your TV item.

*Exclaim*Hi Typo! I enjoyed the nostalgia of your TV item. Some of those, like Howdy Doody, Sky King and Rin Tin Tin, I've never seen, but I smiled at the memory some of those other ones brought back.

Heck, I still watch the reruns of Star Trek and Bonanza these days! I was just thinking about Happy Days yesterday when my husband and I was a Twilight zone with a very young Ron Howard in it. I think he was in that before he ever landed a role in Mayberry.

I would add a few pictures here and there throughout your story of shows like Captain Kangaroo and Bat Man. Or, why not add in a few popnotes for people who aren't familiar with the shows. The following is an example of a popnote:

Beverly Hillbillies

Thanks for sharing this great item, and have fun this week at WDC's Birthday Celebrations! *Balloongo*


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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your great poem.

*Exclaim* Hi Meg! You're poem about one of my very favorite birds caught my attention. I've been to Australia three times, and each time I always enjoyed seeing the Kookaburra birds at the parks.

I liked how your poem told a story. I could picture the bird sitting in a tree, waiting for his favorite food to go by. In this case, he finished his breakfast, and was setting up for lunch! *Laugh*

I never thought about what a Kookaburra eats before. I imagined it ate fruit. ...So I learned something from your poem.

I liked how you wrote how they laugh. *Smile*

Your image isn't working, btw. I put one of mine at the bottom of this review. *Bigsmile*

Nice rhyme and fun poem. Have fun this week with the WDC Birthday celebrations! *Smile*



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Review of Dead Leaves  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your short story.

*Exclaim* I thought this was a really creative story for a short fiction.
I could imagine a dull classroom, where students minds get lulled into a half-asleep daydream.

My favorite description was of the carpet of leaves outside the classroom window. I felt that it painted the picture of autumn breezes well.

I wasn't sure how old Clayton was, but I assumed he was a young child. Maybe now that the contest is over, you might add a few more lines to this little story to elaborate more on Clayton's age and the age of the narrator. You might also mention why the narrator was having this daydream. Was he psychic?

Speaking of the contest, it doesn't seem to be in business anymore, so I would remove the link to it, but I would keep the prompt.

Nice work with the descriptions and with putting this creative story together. *Smile*
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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your great Chicken recipe.

*Exclaim* Okay, so I'm sure this is the first time my new puppy experienced watching me laughing out loud at my computer...My five year old Boxer is used to such outbursts. Thanks for making my day! I loved reading your recipe, and if you ever write a cook book, please let me know because, not only would I buy it, but I'd buy several copies to give out as gifts. *Cool*

So, it takes two beers to finish making this dish..*Laugh*

I love the humor throughout. One of my favorite lines: "You can use any kind; your own leftovers, KFC, or that bag of hot wings your gal smuggled out of the restaurant where she works" So funny!!

I liked how easy your recipe is. I was getting hungry reading it. I'm sure it tastes awesome. I might print it out and have my grown kids make it next time they visit. They'll get a kick out of it, and I'll be sure to hide the ketchup but leave a jar of Ragu around instead. *Delight*

Thanks again for sharing. This was a treasure of fun. *Smile*
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Review by Maryann
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your summer beach poem.

*Exclaim* Ah, as I type this in my house, I can imagine being on that beach.
The sights and sounds of your well-written poem brought me right to it.

I could imagine a young poet, inspired by the salty air, crashing waves, and damp sand, experimenting with rhyme and beauty with her pen in hand.

You made me wish I were on that beach, feeling the sand on my feet. Great descriptions of what could be going on. The little flowers and steaming soup were great additions, but my favorite was the way it began. The beach dreamed of summer visitors. Very nicely done.

Awesome name of the beach, by the way. ...Crabapple Beach...Is that a real place?

Enjoy your weekend, Joy, and happy dreams of summertime beaches. *Beach*


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Review of Silent Enemy  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* Hi Pure Sci Fi, and happy anniversary week! *Smile*

I loved your poem. You mentioned that it was your first try at poetry, so I really hope you write more like this sometime. In fact, I thought your poem read just like an epic story poem. You might like to write another one for contests such as this: "A Story-Poem Contest!!!
It's all about story poems, such as yours.

I enjoyed reading through this fantasy tale about the battle in space. Of course, I am a bit partial because I love everything Star Trek! *Laugh*

Your readers can feel the intensity of the ship suddenly being attacked by surprise.
The ship seemed to be still in the darkness of vast space, when the other ship proceeded to fire. I thought that the descriptions of the laser balls of light exploding were a nice effect.

I liked your ending stanza the best. It leaves your reader pondering the situation. We wonder why this could have happened. The ship attacked and it was over as quickly as it began. You succeeded in creating an ending, which keeps your reader thinking about your poem. Nice work. *Smile*


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Review of The Dance Of Dis  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your great poem.

*Exclaim* Happy WDC Anniversary, Angus! Wow, what a fun poem to read! I was a very delightful experience on my very stressful day! The smooth-flow of your rhyme seemed to have a calming effect on me, and I was captivated by the story.

You chose your words well, as in the character name of, Irene. I loved the story and explanation of the 'Dis'. The Webster notation at the bottom was a nice touch.

I'm glad that I stopped by to wish you a happy anniversary month, because I really enjoyed reading this poem. *Smile*


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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your item.

*Exclaim* Hi Michael! I really loved you inspirational article, so I gave it five stars! I didn't know what to expect when I first started reading it. I thought it was a technology article about how to use photoshop (..which I did find intriguing, by the way. I might have to check it out.) I learned your easy tip about fixing zoo animal pictures. After reading more into the article, I could see that it was an example which could be used for real-life experiences as well.

How often we self-confine ourselves, barred up from making our dreams and ideas a reality. If only we can see how to work around those bars, and perhaps, eliminate them altogether. Your well-written article offers the inspiration needed to succeed.

I also enjoyed the humor which you so effortlessly inserted here and there. For example, I would be the one who messed up the fur on the monkey. LOL
This casual humor added to the enjoyment of the piece.

I did see one typo, where you left out quotation marks before the word, 'really'. Other than that, I think this piece is great! Nice work. *Smile*


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Review of Rising Star  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
FIRST IMPRESSION:

THOUGHTS: This is another of your folders which I have read and reviewed just about everything inside of. You needed some stars and recognition for your work, and I'm excited to be the very first to give it to you. *Smile*

FAVORITE PART: I really enjoyed reading the items inside of this item. My favorite was the list of your favorite music songs and groups...I spent SO MUCH time listening to those songs!! Please don't tell my Martell Princess! LOL *Laugh*
I liked that you posted about two songs from one of my favorite groups, Cold Play. You'd probably enjoy Savage Garden songs, too. I used to love that group before the singers broke up. Around that time, I moved more toward Cold Play.

I liked reading your historical article. I remembered reading Johnny Tremaine and other Boston Tea Party type books as a young girl, and your story brought back memories. Yes, later in life, I spend more of my time in sci-fi's and cookbooks, but back then I read a few scholastic books. *Bigsmile*

It was fun to read some of the Rising Stars stuff. I know Gabriella here for years and years. She's one amazing lady.

SUGGESTIONS: I would suggest adding an image and maybe some creative writing to the body of this item. I can understand that sometimes we quickly sweep items inside of a folder to clean up. Well, now that those items have a 'home', maybe you might think about decorating this home. Think of it as pretty and decorative landscaping, like one might have outside their place of residence.

Game of Thrones  [13+]
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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a collection of various random item, such as contest entries and images.

THOUGHTS:I figured that since I already reviewed (almost) everything in this folder, and thoroughly read, looked at enjoyed everything in it, I might as well give the folder some pretty stars as well. I hate when folders are ignored and never have any stars on them, so I thought maybe you might feel the same.

FAVORITE PART: I enjoyed everything inside this wonderful folder. Whenever I open a folder, I always feel like it's a box of surprise goodies. This one was no exception. I really, really love that snow globe!! It's so pretty. What a great find!

I was delighted to read all about the actors and actresses of the Game of Thrones show which we are having fun with on WDC. Of course, our version of it, I'm sure, is much, much different than the TV show, but we are still having fun with it none the less. It was great to come across that gem of an item so that I could get to read about it. I hate to look things up on google because I get so distracted there! LOL Having this item to read was easier for me.

Your Hope story was a tear jerker, and showed your interesting creativity.

SUGGESTIONS: Oh! Nothing is standing out to decorate this folder! I like the image that ~ Aqua ~ made for you...The longer, blue, cloud banner with your name. Maybe you might consider putting that in the body of this folder, along with a longer introduction as to what we will find inside. After reviewing many things in your port today, I can see that you have a very creative way of writing. You might think of a very witty, and attention-catching paragraph to write here. *Smile*

I would suggest changing the genres which you picked. ...Other, other, other! How would one find this in their searches? Do people normally search, 'other'? Maybe it would be fun for Gaby to make that one of the daily genre searches for our reviewing! *Laugh*

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Review of My City of Dreams  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a bitter sweet tribute to a city where the narrator lives.

THOUGHTS: I was trying to figure out which city you were talking about in this beautiful poem. I was never really quite sure, and I thought you'd mention it as the 'punch line' near the end. You did say, 'City of Lights', but *Blush* that didn't really help me. I looked up, 'City of Lights' in a Google search, and actually a few came up. Paris, was the one which came up the most. Did I guess it correctly? Was it Paris?

FAVORITE PART: Great work in putting this one together. I loved how each delicate stanza was only two lines, and the rhyme pattern added pleasant entertainment to your poem. My favorite lines were, 'For their leaders are just like them, and their promises are all a big sham'. This did add a 'political' sense to your poem. One of the genres you piked was 'other', but maybe you might change that to 'political' so you could get the extra views.

I liked the closure you gave at the end. The contrast of the City of Lights and the darkness which is there now, will leave your readers in thoughts about this meaningful poem. Nice work.

SUGGESTIONS: I really love poems which rhyme. I guess I've read so many Dr. Seuss books to my four kids while they were growing up. I spent way too much time enjoying your great poem! LOL A few of the words, though, I thought didn't really rhyme as smoothly as the rest. Here are a couple of examples: money and irony and religion and Justification. I'm not sure what you could put in their places, but maybe end those lines with different words instead...Like, They think and dream about hoarding money they make,
and never about using it, for Heaven's sake! It would have the same impact, in my opinion, yet it would rhyme more smoothly.

If this is about Paris, a small image at the bottom of the Eiffel Tower would be amazing. Or, maybe a short factual bio of the city, which sparked your thoughts for this poem.

Game of Thrones  [13+]
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Review by Maryann
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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a newsletter all about Jane Austen related material.

THOUGHTS: Hi Megan. I'm really glad that I somehow came across this very entertaining newsletter. I didn't realize that you wrote these. I learned a lot about Jane Austen which I did't already know, and I also enjoyed the other tid bits of information which you included as well. Gosh, I don't think I have any of your pretty Jane Austen merit badges. I hope to be able to get one someday. I'll have to learn how I might win one perhaps sometime.

FAVORITE PART: Oh my gosh! I always loved anything Barnabas Collins, so I'm, of course, impressed that you have an autograph of him...Well, Jonathan Frid. ...And Bat Man, too. How proud you must be of your collection! Where did you get them?

I liked how well written and informative this newsletter was. You even told about a Danielle Steel book (Dutchess). The last Danielle Steel book I've read was one that was different from what she normally writes...About a robot man, but I can't remember the name of it.

Not too long ago, I watched...Wait for it...Pride and Prejudiced and Zombies. Have you ever seen it? You'd probably like it, if nothing else, for the style. I really enjoyed it. Gosh, those gals were strong, and that reminded me of what you wrote in your newsletter. I liked that you said Jane Austen wrote her books about women heroines --Their inner lives, feelings, and points of view.

I'll have to see if my daughter ever heard of that Jane Austen beer called Tible which you mentioned. Thanks for sharing your very special newsletter. I learned so much from you today. *Smile*



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Review of Signatures  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a very impressive collection of a variety of images all in one place.

THOUGHTS: I couldn't pass by this collection without saying a few words about it during your WDC anniversary. Seeing all of these brought back my great memories of you through the years you've been a member here. Isn't it funny how images can seem like a 'journal' in itself? You have several "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group images, and well deserved nano images, too, included in this nice grouping.

FAVORITE PART: Again, I felt like I was walking down memory lane. Gosh, we know each other a very long time here. I actually remember making the Power one with the flowers for you way back in 2012. Gee the years fly by sometimes it seems. It was among the first batch of images I ever attempted.

I'll have to tell you, I spent way too much time in this collection enjoying your images. I love the Dolly Parton one, and the saying inside of it. I see that you have several pretty Power Group images, and you were gifted a few truly beautiful ones. Congratulations on the nano winner images -- to me, it means that you've participated in nano in some way, which is impressive. Other than sponsoring people, I've never touched upon that myself.

SUGGESTIONS: Just a small suggestion, but someday when you get a moment, why not add a pretty image to the body of this collection heading. Right now, you have, "All my signatures and other bits and bobs.", but I see that you created this item back in 2001, and you haven't modified it since 2014. You could probably go back and make the font larger, center it, and perhaps add some color. ...And, maybe one of your pretty images. I actually like the Dolly one for it. *Bigsmile*

Game of Thrones  [13+]
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by Gaby


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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (2.5)
FIRST IMPRESSION: I felt that this was a dreamy love poem to enjoy.

THOUGHTS: Hi Mary. I'm so glad I decided to read and review your beautiful poem. I think that, with a bit of work, this can turn into something really very special. I really think there's potential in it, and I hope to give you some feedback of my ideas in how you can fix this up.

FAVORITE PART: : Wow, these sound, in my opinion, a lot like song lyrics. Did you ever consider adding more to them to make this into a song? I could imagine many brides and grooms getting married, and dancing at their wedding reception to these 'lyrics'. It would truly make a very perfect 'first dance' song.

You succeeded in expressing love and emotion in your well chosen words. I particularly enjoyed reading how they would take each others hands and be 'there' for each other. The descriptive words you picked seemed, to me, so sweet and beautiful.

SUGGESTIONS: Mary, what does this have to do with 'short stories'? I was pretty confused upon reading your brief introduction. As I said, if you add more and polish this up, you have something here for sure! You might change 'short stories' to 'a wedding song of dedicated love'.

I would also change the genre. I think you might find something else other than, educational to put this in. I thought it read more like a love poem. Romance, maybe?

Until the time you decide to add more, I would suggest to at least separate the poetic lines, break up the sentences, and center them. This way, it will give a more reader friendly appearance. It's really a pretty item, and deserves a little tender loving care.

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by Gaby


A Martell Image


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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.0)
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a haiku about small animals and nature.

THOUGHTS: Hi Peach! I recently wrote a poem about squirrels, and that's what drew me to yours. I had also been looking for something in the 'education' genre. I'm not sure I would have listed your poem in that genre, though perhaps it's fine there. After all, people do need to occasionally be educated about animals and nature. This shows your creative mind thinking of great genres to show off your poetry in.

FAVORITE PART: As I already mentioned, I do like poems (and stories) about squirrels, and yours was all about them in their natural environment. The form you chose, Haiku, is one of my very favorites.

I also enjoyed the part about the clouds. Gosh, I have my head in the clouds a lot of the time, especially when the child in me tries to finds images up there of rabbits, and, yes, squirrels. I can certainly relate to the squirrel as he watches up at the clouds! LOL

I loved the twist you put into your cute poem. While the other squirrels were playing, one of them prefers to have his head up in the clouds. So lovely and adorable.

I checked the form, and I found that the syllable count was done very well. Nice work in putting this one together.

You had the perfect brief introduction with, 'One day at a time'. What a smart little squirrel! That's how we should all be!

SUGGESTIONS: I'm not sure I would have picked the word, 'lightly' playing. Squirrels, in my opinion, buzz around quicker than bees. The high spirited creatures tumble and twirl, and zip all over the place. Maybe I would have replaced it with 'freely'. There are better words, but we are limited with the syllable count.

Other than that, maybe center the poem and make the font bigger, but of course that's up to you.

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by Gaby


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Review of Acquiesce  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: E | (4.5)
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a story about the culture of China, and one's experiences with it.

THOUGHTS: I felt that you wrote this story very well. It held my attention because you wrote it in an entertaining way.

FAVORITE PART: I really loved your descriptions. I could imagine the sun drying corn cobs on the little roof tops, and the donkey carts moving along. As a person who lives in the United States, this all sounded really exotic to me. Yes, I agree with your statement that those types of things show how truly hard the Chinese people work for a living. They are like, I would think, the rustic pioneers of U.S. yesteryear.

LOL I loved the humor you added here and there throughout your story, even though it's one of those 'sad but sweet' circumstances. The idea that street lights are only around for decorative purposes had me cracking up, although I could understand how scary it must be to cross the streets. I recalled my first visit to France, and seeing how the motor scooters felt free to drive on the sidewalks whenever they pleased. If a person is not used to it, it seems surreal.

I envy you and your husband for actually being right there at the Great Wall of China! Gosh, I would have had a few asthma attacks if I tried to hike up. I would have taken the skylift for sure, but good for you to do the hike. I thought it was nice of you to think of the high touristy postcard prices as a donation to the hard-working people who were selling them. I could relate to that, because I always seem to buy things that I really don't want, just because I understand that people depend on tourist money for income.

SUGGESTIONS: Thank you for sharing your cultural experience of China. Maybe sometime you might think about adding a picture or two of the Great Wall, or something from the bus ride. *Smile*

Game of Thrones  [13+]
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by Gaby


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Review by Maryann
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your true story.

*Exclaim* Hi Lisa. Your true story nearly brought tears to my eyes. I am so very glad that you're doing well now, and that you stopped smoking. It's bad that you had to learn the hard way, but, how does that saying go..'Better late than never'..Now, you can continue to feel better and better, rather than keep getting worse.

It's sad that you lost your dad when he was so young. No one should have to pass at 44 years old. Wow, you had many family members with lung problems! I had a great friend years ago named Rosemary. I remember how she struggled with breathing. She kept losing part of her lung through cancer procedures, and had to learn how to breath better with less lung. It was tough, but she was a fighter. Eventually, she lost the fight. She never smoked a day in her life, though. It baffles me that people with great lungs smoke so much. I have asthma, so I'm actually a bit impressed how good some people's lungs are.
If I'm even in the same room with someone smoking, I have an asthma attack.

So, yes, your great story was obviously thought provoking to me, as it is, I'm sure to everyone who reads it. Who knows, maybe you'll inspire some WDC members to quit smoking, or to help someone else to quit. I like how you named several ways and ideas of how to go about it. Gosh, isn't our modern medical science terrific!

Nice work, also, with including talk about properly educating children about the dangers of smoking. 'Get them in the bud', my grandfather always said!

Lisa, I really love your writings because they are so reader friendly. I like that you left space between the paragraphs so well. It gives your story an 'airy' feel, which is perfect for your 'breath of fresh air' story. Nice work. *Smile*


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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your item.

*Exclaim* Hello Jay. I loved the feel of this very upbeat poem. It's pleasant spirit makes for a great way to face the day. We all experience challenges, and you succeeded in expressing hope in this inspirational poem.

I like special forms of poetry, and the idea of 'Villanelle' was intriguing to me. I'll have to say that I wasn't so familiar with it, so I looked up it's definition as: 'A villanelle (also known as villanesque) is a nineteen-line poetic form consisting of five tercets followed by a quatrain. There are two refrains and two repeating rhymes, with the first and third line of the first tercet repeated alternately until the last stanza, which includes both repeated lines' I would suggest to add a bit about the form after your lovely poem, for people (like me) who might not be so aware of it.

This is a very lively and summery poem, filled with lots of fun. The wording which you used, such as 'neath and fin'lly, made me think of the romance of old fashioned poetry.
Your talents shined through the poem.

I 'saw' all of the sights and sounds of a summer day throughout your stanzas. You allowed your readers to experience things like a green field and the blasting heat of summer. Your creative use of words like 'storm o'ercast' and 'show'ring flood' adds to the beauty of your work.

Inside of the summer references, we also find strong inspiration of hope in which challenging days will be healed. Nicely done. Nice centering in your presantation, and I like both your cover image and the colorful one at the bottom, too.


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Review of Last Flight  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your suspenseful poem.

*Exclaim* Awesome poem, Kerri! I love poems about dragons, and I was glad I came across this very exciting one.

I felt the power of this poem. You chose terrific poetic words, which aided in that effect. You succeeded in awaking your readers senses, while we imagined winds blowing, bells chiming, and all in all the dragons battling through the stench and strength of seawater. You really did a creative job with this one.

I'm not very familiar with the Interlocking Rubyait form of poetry, so it was enjoyable to see one in action. *Smile*


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