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Review of Writings for 2017  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* Oh wow, Lisa, I never heard of this form of poetry, Bop! I love it! Gosh, you did a great job in this amazing example. I like the problem, argument, and solution in this structured poem. You kept to the line sequence well, all the while making this 'story poem' make sense.

You drew me in with the first stanza, where you helped me understand the dilemma of the coal mines and it's effect on the environment. I loved the poetic descriptions you used. I could really envision the cliffs and the waters, and I could imagine the dust, too.

The repeated sentence was a perfect break, and I believe it gave more impact to the thoughts you suggested.

Your readers will read more about the consequences of the stated problem in your next stanza, where you covered so much about the town's people.

In your last stanza, I would capitalize the 'i' in It'll at the beginning of the first sentence.

I liked the solutions you presented. Training and replanting are great ideas.

Hey, also the green font is perfect for an environmental poem. *Smile*

Great job, Lisa. *Delight*


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Review of Baby Animals  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your baby animal poem.

*Exclaim* Oh Lisa, I love, love, love this poem! My first reaction was to put an awardicon on it, but I see that Elle already gave you one. Bravo! Well done!

The presentation is very beautiful. I like the pink color and the emoicons, too, as well as the centering. With that said, I couldn't help but imagine this as a children's story book. Did you ever consider trying to get it published that way? I don't know much about that, but I do know that I would love to read it to my granddaughter! I could picture this with colorful animal pictures, and each stanza would be on each page. If you ever read a book to a toddler, then you know what I'm talking about...

Well, your first stanza is a fun hook. I liked reading about the cute little duck.
Waddle, waddle, waddle So cute!

The flow of your poem was wonderful, and the rhyme was very pleasant and easy to read.

I liked how you ended the adorable poem, with talk about learning of more animals by going to the zoo. What a nice introduction this would be for a child about to go to the zoo!

Very well put together. *Smile*


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Review of My African Gray  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your pet poem.

*Exclaim* Hi Lisa! What a really cute pet poem. I loved the way it rhymed and told the story about your lovely African Grey Parrot, Katie. I'm assuming it's a pet that you have. She sounds really sweet.

My favorite line was the heart warming lines at the end of the last stanza. Our pets are so very dear to our heart, and I believe you expressed that well in your last stanza...As well as all of the other stanzas.

You gave a nice idea about the fun-loving bird, and the relationship between the owner and the pet. My friend's African Grey can whistle, too! I could imagine how yours whistles.

Maybe you might be able to post a picture in the item of her someday. *Smile*

Nice work in putting this poem together. *Smile*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your cNote shop.

*Exclaim* Penguins!! These penguin cNotes are so cute!

I enjoyed browsing through all of them. I chuckled, and had a very nice visit here.

My favorite is the 'port raid'! So funny!! It's perfect, because I could imagine all of those many penguins storming through. *Laugh*

The friendship one, and the 'hugs' one are also a couple of my favorites. ...And, gosh, the baby 'fuzzy' penguins are adorable!

I liked that your prices are decent, and that you offer many cNotes in this shop. Each one of them has just the right saying along with it. They are great for every occasion, as you mentioned in your brief introduction. Nicely put together. *Smile*


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Review of Sprocket  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your story.

*Exclaim* I really enjoyed reading your steampunk story, Schnujo. I found it to be very entertaining, and it held my attention throughout.

I felt that you touched on the personalities well, in the limited space. Mr. Alexander, though a brilliant airship racer, tended to be absentminded and lacked confidence at times. The determined Sprocket kept him on track and filled him with the confidence which he badly needed. You made that clear, as the motherly character calmed the racer's fear, told about other ways in which she helped him with his daily tasks, and assisted him with keeping his appointments.

The smooth flow of your story made it easy and fun to read.

Great story line. I liked that you wrote about the prompt, or I would have wondered what the bold words were all about. Well done.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your item.

*Exclaim* Hi Lady Elf . You're touching poem brought tears to my eyes...Only such well written writing could do that! *Laugh*
I also lost my dad, though in recent years, rather than you did as a kid. My dad and I were really close, and I guess I thought I'd have him forever. Here's a picture of us together: "Words of Comfort for Maryann
Your poem brought back sweet memories of him, as any child close to their dad would relate to all of the things you mentioned.

Great start to your beautiful poem, with a Carousel of thoughts! Truly a poetic way to begin, and made me eager to read on.

You gave us a 'vision' of your dad in the next stanza, where all of our sights and sounds were opened up...hint of your dad's cologne...jingling of coins in his pocket...tobacco essence...fur collared coat...Nice descriptive poetry there.

The next stanza gave me chills. I remembered my dad teaching me how to ride my bike when I was little. You described your experience well, and did it with perfect rhyme, which I loved so much. (My dad taught me how to fish, too!)

The humor of your next stanza was delightful, and probably had my favorite line in your poem - "The faster he drove, the more it shook/ We had more laughs than a comic book." Very nicely done, and showed the great times you enjoyed with your beloved dad.

Toast and tea...Breakfast is, I think, a great 'quality time' to be shared with family. My dad used to make us muffins every Saturday. You went on with more stanzas in your long 'story poem', which made it pleasant to get lost in. Toward the end, you brought us back to how it began, with the Carousel of thoughts coming to an end. It was a great way to add closure to your poem.

So sorry to hear that your dad passed on Christmas Eve. We had my mom's funeral on Christmas Eve, so I can relate to what you went through. Nice work with this piece. You're a very talented writer. Good luck with the Quills on it! *Delight*



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Review by Maryann
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your story.

*Exclaim* What an awesome story! You added a really creative twist. In fact, it gave me the creeps! LOL
I normally don't read horror stories, but I neglected to look at the genre before I read it, so you could imagine how much the ending twist was a surprise to me! *Laugh*

I felt that your story was very well written, and I could understand how well deserved the award placed on it was. Nice work. Did you win the contest? I hope you did.

You gave a good idea of the character's personalities, especially Rick's...He had too much pride to admit that he didn't know how to get out of the woods.

I loved the light humor with Kevin thinking the back woods brothers reminded him of Tweedle Dee and Tweedle Dum! So funny! LOL
Who would have expected them to be so nuts!*Laugh*
I liked the way you added the way which they spoke to their voice.

Nice work with putting together this very entertaining story.


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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your cnote collection.

*Exclaim* Hello again, SciFi! *Smile*

Even though I commented though email, I wanted to send you a few comments in review form as well. *Smile*

So far, I showed this to a few friends. They really love this item as much as I do! *Smile*

You certainly did a great job with this, and I can hardly wait to show it to more members. I plan to add a link to it when I send out review raid notes this week, and I already added it inside the heading of the "November Power Raid.

I truly like each of the colors in these planet images. You chose well, with the word colors.
The variety of cNotes is really nice so far. You have so much covered...Birthdays...Anniversaries...Welcomes...Etc.

I like the messages, too! What a nice message to get...That the sender might be back to visit and review their port! Very thoughtful. Great work, and thanks again for making this very impressive collection.


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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your 'Amazing' cNote item.

*Exclaim* Wow! I'm in awe at the organization of this item. This gives 'all occasional cNote shop' a whole new meaning! Anyone can come to just this one place, and find whatever sort of cNote they might be interested in. All one needs to do is simply click on a picture, and they will be redirected to the cNote shop of their choice.

The images used to redirect are stunning! I love the look of the 'gifts'. It gives your item a friendly, party atmosphere, as one would see in a real life party/greeting card store! *Delight*

I found the information to be clear, and user friendly. I had no problem clicking around at all of the great areas. This one is going into my favorites for sure, and if there wasn't already such a pretty ribbon on it, I would give it one...Thought is there! *Heart*

Congratulations on this one being a quill nominee, btw. Well deserved. Good luck! *Smile*

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Review of From Beyond  
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your paranormal story.

*Exclaim* What an intriguing idea for a story! It's perfect for Halloween, because it has a 'Twilight Zone' or 'Outer Limits' feel to it! I love those type of shows, and I love your Star People story!

I liked the idea of people who are guardians of the stars. I had no idea where this story was going, so it was, indeed, a suspenseful twist. I thought the parents were going to tell their daughter that she was a witch, and that her powers would now be revealed because she was turning thirteen. Great job...I never saw the Star Guardians thing coming! *Thumbsup*

You wrote this well. I enjoyed reading about the birthday party, and Lilly's thoughts about the party. I could 'feel' for the girl, as I hoped the family would make more over the special age of thirteen. Gosh, why couldn't you have them give her presents, even though the real 'present' was the information about her people! *Laugh**Wink*

When your captivating story was over, I wished there was more of it to read. I felt like this would be a great, introduction to more chapters yet to come. You have the makings of an interesting book here, Nixie. I could imagine beginning chapters of Lilly's ordinary life, with the parents keeping secrets in the background. Then, as chapters progress and the birthday party event happens, Lilly could be told more information. Next, she would maybe begin training. I would love to read about what being a Star Guardian in the Sky is like.

Well, you left me with thoughts about your intriguing story. Well done, Nixie. *Delight*

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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your Rocking Power item.

*Exclaim* Hello again, Nixie, and Happy WDC Anniversary Week!

While looking thought your portfolio, I realized that I wanted to give your very awesome Power Reviewers folder some well deserved stars.

This is a very precious treasure box to our group. You have here items such as group cNotes, the Member Birthday, Anniversary and 'Talking' forums, and tons of other things.

It was like walking through a 'memory lane', as I came across fun items, like the crossword puzzle and the numerous activities.

I love this very organized folder. Nice work, Nixie. *Smile*

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your college appication.

*Exclaim* Britt, congratulations on your decision to continue onto college. After reading your inspirational story, I can see that you are strong and confident. I wish you all the best! *Delight*

I found a few things which might improve your story. First, I would leave lines between the paragraphs to give it a more reader friendly appearance. You want to make them want to read it, and also to make sure people will give this awesome story a chance.

I noticed that you switched tenses a few times. I also have trouble with this, but you want to make sure your application is as good as you can make it.
Here is an example:
You wrote: "I quickly realized that..."
And here, you wrote: "My brother and I are upstairs..."

I'm not sure I like that first sentence. I would make a different 'hook' sentence, such as:

The first time my Dad decided to confide in me about the disturbing problems which my mother was having, didn't come as a shock to me. I sensed something was wrong my whole life. One ordinary day while my brother and I were playing a board game together, my Dad and Stepmom called us downstairs....

Watch out for 'run-on' sentences, such as what you have here:
"I know what separates her from other “normal” parents: drug use, stealing, and living without caring whether or not you have responsibilities; but the question of why she acts like this is a mystery I haven’t been able to solve, but always wanted to."

I would break that up a bit, and add in a few more words in order to make it flow smoothly.

Here is an example of what you could do:
My mom's issues with drug use, stealing, and living without caring about her responsibilities certainly separates her from 'normal' parents. The question of why she acts like this is a mystery I haven’t been able to solve, but I always wanted to.

I'm not a fan of beginning a sentence with the word, because, as in this one:
"Because of her I have an innate curiosity of why people do what they do."

Perhaps you might tweak it up to something like this:
My lifelong experiences left me with a passion to find out why people do what they do.

Good luck with your college experience. I hope you find great adventures in your bright future. *Smile*


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Review of The Land Of Ons  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your satire.

*Exclaim* Hi Same Ol' Sum1 , and happy 6th WDC Anniversary to you!

I'll have to be honest...I'm going to be telling lots of my friends about your terrific fantasy story! *Laugh**Laugh**Laugh*

My husband and I watched the movie, Idiocracy, again this week, so your story couldn't have come at a better time. In the movie, an average guy, who could have been a less-on from your story, accidentally wakes up in the far off future. I won't tell you any more in case you ever wish to see it...

I didn't know what to expect from your story when I first started reading it. It should be listed as comedy, but the 'surprise' of it adds to the fun experience. *Laugh*

You're a very talented writer. Your writings are always clear and reader friendly. This one is no exception. Nice work. *Delight*


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Review of Friendship  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your item.

*Exclaim* Hi Sunny, I'm stopping by on your Angel Day to visit your port again.

I had to express a few words about this wonderful cNote! It was a marvel to look at, because it's very pretty and different.

What a nice quote from C. Pulsifer about friendship! The idea that the colors of a rainbow reflect the colors of friendship is a very beautiful concept.

I love the beauty of nature which explodes out. The rainbow softly splashes across the rock cliff and it's greenery, while the water splashes below. Very nice. *Smile**Dropb*


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Review of Fearful Flying  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* Wow! What an interesting form of poetry. I'm not too familiar with this form, but I really like it. I love haiku type forms, and I think this one is similar.

Gosh, you presented this poem well. The bold, centered print, as well as the font which you chose, adds to the eeriness of the chilling tale.

I could imagine being out, or worse, traveling in a plane, during an icy storm. You succeeded in expressing the dark, cold, and turbulent feeling, with your well chosen descriptions. Nice work with this Tyburn poem.

If I might make one suggestion...I'd write a bit about this form of poetry right inside of the item, under the poem. Many people don't like to open links, so people not familiar with it would miss out on the perfection and beauty of what you did with the form.

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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your item.

*Exclaim* Oh my gosh! What an amazing picture! How lucky you are to have one like that. Someone in your family kept photos really well.

I absolutely loved the 'old' look of it, and the triangular edges, which make me feel as though I were looking right into an old and cherished photo album.

The picture tells a lot of history! I love the wagon with the big wheels, the horse, and what the people were wearing. Gosh, that was your dad on the horse! How amazing!

If I could suggest anything at all to add here, it would be to add a tiny bit more about the experience. What area was this taken in? What time period? Do you know where they were traveling? Are the others here your relatives as well?

Thanks for sharing this item. I've been trying to track my relatives on some ancestry places, and it can really be frustrating sometimes. I am always impressed when someone has such really fine pictures. *Smile*


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Review of Twenty Wishes  
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your item.

*Exclaim* Hi Megan! Gosh, I'm so glad Gabriela gave you such a beautiful awardicon for this amazing item, or I would have! I absolutely loved it, and now I want to read that book which inspired you to write this. Your item is an inspiration for anyone who ever wished for a 'bucket list'! *Bigsmile*

By the 'numbers'...
Your number one is that you wish to visit England and Ireland. What are you waiting for!!! Keep an eye on those airfare prices. To buy a round trip ticket from the east coast of the U.S. where I live to England can cost over a thousand dollars. If you keep an eye out for specials, you will easily find tickets for way under that price. I actually saw a rt ticket to Bath for about 300 dollars, but at the time I needed to fly my daughter (she was 16) to London, so I couldn't have her traveling all over England.

I liked how you mentioned that you want to see castles and things of the medieval flavor. You wrote those thoughts so beautifully...I especially liked how you imagined walking where royalty, peasants and gypsies have been.

Your second wish to visit Transylvania is sounds so exotic! It makes me want to google all about it!

Your third wish was to buy a Harley Davidson motorcycle. My husband and I also owned a motorcycle in our early years. I could never imagine getting on one again now. You and your husband would have fun, indeed.

Four and five about about new houses. I smiled at how sweet you are...To wish for a new house for your son and his wife! That was such a nice thing to write!

An animal rescue center for your sixth wish really made me smile! I love animals, too! Wouldn't it be nice to save all the animals you could!

Scrap booking classes, your 7th wish, sounds like something that is very possible! I wonder if you might be able to get started at your local library? Would they let you meet with a small group in one of their rooms? You would be able to see if you like it - Why wouldn't you! -- And maybe you'll get a following. Have some cards made up, and before you know it, you'll be advertising on local bulletin boards. *Smile*

The 8th is to get more books published. Wow! You have two already. Very impressive...Maybe you might make up your mind this Nano season to write another one which will be published.

I found your nine, ten, and eleven all very wondrous. You made me close my eyes for a moment and imagine that flower garden where one could read in serenity. A Nascar race is always seen on TV. I never thought about actually going to one. What about a famous horse race, too! The cruise to Alaska is something which I've always wanted to do. I will never get to do that, because my husband absolutely hates the cold.

I'm not sure about your number 12. World peace might be something you'll have to write a fiction story about. Maybe that might be a great nano story for you to get started on! A society where there is world peace!

Wow! Your number 13 is to stay at the Walt Disney Suite in Cinderella's castle. Could one really stay right in the castle? I never knew that...

You're 14th was to have the Thomas Kinkade Cinderella Castle painting. I used to love Kinkade paintings. I have a castle painting by him. I wonder if it's the Cinderella Castle. *Confused* I was on a cruise with my husband years ago. We attended an art auction there, and the castle was one of the items. I absolutely fell in love with it! No one bid on it, so after the auction was over, my husband negotiated and got it for me. I had no idea, until it was delivered to our room when we were about to leave the ship.

I'm having way too much fun with your list item, so I'll end this now. Thanks for sharing your well written list of twenty wishes! It was very entertaining. *Smile*


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Review of Caught Up  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Exclaim* I enjoyed reading your great little story. I love stories which show good values, and yours did, indeed. I thought the guy was in the police station because he did something bad again, but he was there for his son. The ending was especially nice, and I felt that you tied it all together neatly.

The conversations felt entertaining and believable. Nice work.

I would suggest leaving space between the dialog. It will make your story more reader friendly. Right now, the words look like one block. You might, for example, make it look like this:

“Well,” He laughs, “I guess the apple doesn’t fall far from the tree.”

“No, he’s not anything like me. He’s a good kid.”

“So were you. You just got caught up in bad situations.”


Also, this seems like just one part of a larger story. If you posted what the contest prompt was about, it would help the reader to understand what you were trying to accomplish. ...Flash fiction about a person sitting in a police station..., for example..

Great work with the dialog in this well written story. *Smile*


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Review of Leah's Goat Image  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your item.

*Exclaim* *Chicken* Oh my gosh, Jeannie, you have goats!! What a lucky granddaughter you have, to grow up around so many wonderful animals. My kids (and myself *Blush*) always loved to go to petting zoos in order to see and play with the goats. You have your own! Very impressive!

*Zebra* I loved all of the names which your granddaughter thought of for the goats. She is very creative. I think mine would have all sounded like 'Snowy'. *Laugh*
Again, I'm glad that you write things along with your images. Sometimes it's said that a picture is worth a thousand words, but you told so much more by writing along with it.

*Owl5* Your granddaughter is beautiful, and the goats are so cute. I bet she had a lot to do with how friendly they became.

*Duck* You should add a link to Leah's goat stories in this item, too. *Delight*


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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your item.

*Exclaim* This is a very pretty image, Jeannie. I like the contrast of the orange against the black.

The flowers really give this a delicate look, and the font with your name is pretty, too.

I like the quote. I felt that it's perfect for friendship, and it's so true!

I really think it's nice that you wrote something along with the image. So many people simply put an image into an item with little or no words. You explained a lot along with this one, and I agree that the flowers are eye-catching. Very nice. *Smile*


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Review of Angels Among Us  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your item.

*Exclaim* Hi Minja! I'm just getting around to giving your amazing activity some pretty stars! *Bigsmile*

I really like the uniqueness of this contest. Not only is it a great tribute to a fantastic group, but it offers the opportunity to write some fun and inspirational poems.

It's rare that I enter any contests, but I couldn't resist entering this one with a fun poem. I'll have to get around to visiting the others who have entered...

You set this activity up well. I loved the tribute introduction, and the images sure do look pretty. I especially liked the one above the nice Luciano de Crescenzo quote. It's so beautiful. Blue is one of my favorite colors!

You have it all set up well. I liked that you listed the entries right on the forum heading. It makes things so much easier to see. The prizes seem very nice and well thought up. The rules also seem very easy to understand, since they are clearly written.

Excellent work! Have fun with your great activity! *Smile*


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Review of Chapter One  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your story.

*Exclaim* I think you have a great start to an exciting story. I enjoyed reading it, and I feel that it really shows promise. You seem to have a creative plot beginning.

I liked how you began the story with action and intrigue. It made me wonder why the mother was so agitated. The next paragraph added to the suspense with the sound of pounding on the door.

I noticed some parts which could be easily improved. I see that you mentioned this is a rough draft, so the following are a few ideas.

First of all, I would change the title to something exciting. ...Luke's Change of Heart...Anything other than 'chapter one'. You already wrote that it's the first chapter in your brief introduction.

You have several phrases which are repeated. I think your story would read more smoothly if you changed some of that repetition. For example, in the first paragraph, you spoke of a 'brown wooden door'. You repeated that same phrase once again in the third paragraph. Your readers already know the description of the door. You might, instead, focus on the action. I would change that to something like, 'My head swam with nervous thoughts as I reluctantly eased the door open'.

I would suggest tweaking the part about the young man's description in the mirror. At first, I thought this was a supernatural tale, where a mysterious being was somehow looking back at the guy. When I looked at the genre which you listed, I saw that it was a Crime story. This allowed me to understand that you were using a clever way to describe the main character. I think it's very creative to do it that way, but I would make it clear that the guy was looking at his reflection. Perhaps you might begin with something like, 'As I walked toward the door, my eyes caught a glimpse of my reflection in the mirror, and I really didn't like what I saw...'

Also, I would change up a few of your adjectives for variety. For example, you mentioned that the door was brown. Perhaps you could say the eyes were 'chestnut'. ...Or, say that the door was Oak.

I hope you'll polish up what you have so far and add more! Keep those thoughts flowing! *Smile*


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Review of Sophia  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION:This is a suspenseful short story, inspired by true events of witch hunting events of the early 1600's.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Gosh, I loved this story, and I wished there would have been another exciting chapter! *Bigsmile*
I imagined what the morning would bring for Sophia after she hid for the first night. Did she make it to a different town or two? Did she find a nice woman who she might work for as an apprentice?

I thought it was a nice addition to add a historic note after your story. I think if I had been Sophia's mother, I would have left a long time ago with my daughter. I remember reading once, that it was common for men to accuse a widow of witchcraft, so that they can freely take over her house and belongings. I felt that this was the case with Sophia and her mother.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I found this to be a well written and very well polished short story.

I loved your captivating first two paragraphs. They offered suspense and intrigue, which made me really look forward to reading more.

The tale grew with chilling intensity, through each of your carefully chosen words. I could imagine being in that room, as the hinges jolted with each bang on the door.

You succeeded in expressing the urgency well, as Jeanne worked swiftly to assure that her daughter had a safe plan of action.

I liked the ending. Sophia proved to be a brave young lady, and she was on her way to being safe.

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Review of Keziah  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your item.

*Exclaim* What a beautiful daughter you have! ...And she's so very talented! I happened to click on this album, and I was so glad that I did! I had fun looking through the truly unique photos.

Gosh, she's such an artist! Were those her creations in the sketch book? I loved the photo of the theatrical hand, too. The face paint is amazing. She's only still a teen! Does she plan to be a make-up artist for film or theater someday? My daughter is an actress in California. I am always amazed at the stories she tells me of make-up artist talents. Your daughter seems to be a natural.

I loved the mockingjay feathers. Was she in a play?

I'm glad you included a few pictures of her without the theatrical make-up, and the graduation shots, so that we could see the incredible difference. She could be a model because she looks so sweet smiling for the camera!

I do like the look of your photo album. You put it together well. You have a nice introduction, and a good variety of photos of Keziah. Keep it going! *Delight*


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Review of Something Seen  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Note4*I AM REVIEWING YOUR STORY AS A JUDGE FOR "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest. THANKS FOR ENTERING!

*Star*This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

*Exclaim* What an exciting story! I don't think I've ever read a tale like this before. It's really a fresh and new idea.

My favorite scene was when Merideth thought back to how the scar beneath her right eye came to be. That was so scary and intense!

I did notice just a few tiny, little, very fixable, issues with your story, which I'd like to go over...
The beginning of the story, I guess right past the part with the little poem, was slightly confusing. I had to read it over twice. Since the beginning should be the hook, I think it could be tweaked a bit. I would, perhaps, add in a small bit of clear explanation as to what was going on, and then tease with the intrigue. Also, I would probably add the part about the blue lake matching 'one' of his eyes into the next part of your story where you mentioned that he has two different color eyes. I thought it was a misprint where it was.

I loved the little poem! I was mesmerized as to what that might mean.

I found a few of your descriptions just a tad bit confusing. Here is one example:
"They’d nearly reached the edge of the lake when the ground suddenly dropped off."
I wasn't sure what that meant. Did they reach a cliff? Was the lake at the bottom of a hill? There was talk about sand, but then the later descriptions made the terrain seem more like a forest. I think you might want to go back and take the time to add a sentence of more colorful descriptions since you were going for something very unique and unusual.

I felt that this part seemed very rushed and rambled - unlike the rest of your story: "Despite all the medical attention given…they’d never understood why he couldn’t walk, and he hadn’t spoken since they’d found him with his family’s bodies around him—not until her and the one time she glanced over her should at him at the wrong time and saw…I…Children and adults alike were afraid of the dichotomous eyes that stripped bare the soul and the scars from the attack had scratched away any semblance of innocence in the boy’s face."
I also understood that part was a crucial part of the story. I think you might go back and add more to it, breaking it up into a couple of paragraphs.
Also in that above part, there is a small typo...'Should' needs to be 'shoulder'.

I noticed a few other places which seemed somewhat rushed. For example, the part where she set out to find her son. I didn't understand how they became separated, but then I remembered it had been mentioned in the scene before, that they were staying the night. I had to think about that, and then I assumed that he was gone when she woke up. I'm sure you wish for your readers to be captivated, rather than stopping to wonder what's going on. This could be fixed by adding a line about how she awoke from a dream, and then continue from there.

While these small issues might sound like a lot, I truly did enjoy this unique story. I also felt that it had great closure, and I liked the happy ending. Perhaps you could write a sequel, now that the creature morphed and is still somewhere around. Keep up the great and creative writing!


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