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Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello!Wolfbane

I just read your story. This is good piece of story about Black Wolf and Corn fed Jim. Beautifully told and written. Writing a story for children’s is a challenge. The way you wrote it kept me reading it from the beginning to the end. Especially I like the ending.

Characters: All the characters are well developed.


These are my thoughts and ideas alone.Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review of A Needed Friend  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Magoo

I'm reviewing for "The Simply Positive Group".

*Butterflyb* Initial Impression: This is a nice poem. I like the story. It is beautifully told and written.


*Idea* The Poem:
This is a poem about friendship between a child and a pup.


*Pencil* Technique: Every stanza of this poem has the rhyme scheme of a, x, a, x. Rhyming not only makes the poem more interesting, but also makes the rhythm faster, happier, and brighter. .

I appreciate the simplicity of this poem.

*Bulletg*Favorite lines:
The pup perked up, then lay back down
with blanket as a hood;
a child in pink asleep in peace,
a mom now understood.

*Cut* Suggestions :I didn’t find any mistakes. You have used the correct punctuation marks where they are needed

*Starg*Overall Impression: . The poem was amazing and the ending was brilliant. Thank you for sharing

These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  
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Review of The Magical Day  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing for "The Newbies Academy Group" . I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work.

I like the story about a fat boy Bruce Willis who was bullied because of his size. Bruce Willis expresses his inner thought and feelings in his diary. I like the way you wrote all these.

This was a very good letter. You did a good job moving this story into happy ending.
Suggestion: I think you need a paragraph break. A little bit editing will make this piece more interesting.
I enjoyed your story. Keep writing.

*Fairyr*Mina *Fairyl*


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Review by Mina~
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi

I'm reviewing for "The Newbies Academy Group". I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work. I strive to give honest reviews and I hope you find this review helpful.

*Butterflyb* Initial Impression: I appreciate the simplicity of this poem. The way you wrote this kept me reading.

*Idea* Theme and Creativity:Your poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words. The tone of this poem is soothing. You beautifully put your feelings into words.

*Pencil* Favorite lines:
I’d like to share this dream of mine,
A dream that could come true.
And if you would, I’d gladly share;
This dream, I would, with you.

*Cut* Suggestions: This poem is one that I find nearly perfect. I did not find any mistake.
I enjoyed your poem. Keep writing.


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Review of The Old Oak  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Starwriter

My name is Mina~ and I'm reviewing for "The Newbies Academy Group" . I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work. I strive to give honest reviews and I hope you find this review helpful.

*Butterflyb* Initial Impression:I like the story of the oak tree and the images you painted here.

*Idea* Theme and Creativity:Your poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words. The tone of this poem is soothing.
*Pencil* Favorite lines:

You’ll find ‘round the trunk and limbs
The writing of sweetheart names
Generations carved and trimmed
You’ll find ‘round the trunk and limbs

*Cut* Suggestions: This poem is one that I find nearly perfect. I did not find any mistake.

I enjoyed your poem. Keep writing.


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Review of Be yourself  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello!Ali

I just read your poem.

This is a good poem packed with message. Concept is unique. This poem is beautiful inside every line. It is our own responsibility to bring our own talent and act accordingly. I love this piece especially the last stanza

But make your enemies friends.
Let your imagination fly
Out with the stars
Until you feel free.
Never let your mind go
Till you reach the stars

I look forward to read more of your write.

These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review of Scorched planet  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello!Wolfbane

I just read your poem.

*Butterflyb* Initial Impression: Wonderful poem about our mother nature.

*Idea* Theme and Creativity: I like the way you describes beautifully a lot of problems that our mother earth faces now. But sadly we don't pay the respect that she deserves. We create the things to make our life easier. But by using them we polluted the air and sea.

*Pencil* Technique: I appreciate the simplicity of your writing. Your rhyming scheme (abab) is beautiful.

*Pencil* Favorite lines:
We ask ourselves, when? No one really knows.
We played our part, now all our soul's to blame.
The ice will move in to crush as it grows.
Live, carry what's left of our human name.

*Cut* Suggestions: I didn't see any mistakes.
*Butterflyb* Overall Impression:. Thanks Wolfbane for sharing this important message.

Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello!Neva

I am sending you a review of your poem, "A Thanksgiving Past" . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.

*Bulletg* WHY I AM REVIEWING THIS ITEM:I liked this gratitude poem and the way you telling this.

*Bulletg* FIRST IMPRESSION : Beautifully told and written. Through this poem you are remembering your Grandma, mother, Grandpa and what they gave to you. You remember their cooking “Turkey and oyster dressing”, “baked the pumpkin pie” “whipped the cream” “cranberry sauce”.

*Thumbsup* FAVORITE LINES:I liked the last stanza
"A Thanksgiving past
We gathered in the kitchen
And not in a dining room
Mom's cranberry sauce
Made with the whole cranberry
Memories of Thanksgiving"

*Bulletg*OVERALL IMPRESSION This is a wonderful narrative poem; flowed beautifully. I learned how to write an sedoka poem. Thank you for sharing. I liked the way you put out your feelings. I enjoyed your poem.


Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello!Jack & Phoebe Fan

I just read this delightful piece from friendship genre list. It’s beautifully written, which occurs in our daily lives. I want to thank you for your sweet description and the way you wrote this.

My favorite line: the last two stanza

"She's been my best friend for 72 years.
Through joy, heartbreak and many fears.

I realized finally that the woman I see
has always been my best friend, ME!"

I enjoyed reading this one. Thank you for sharing

These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello!DEATH NOTE

It's been pleasure to review your story on behalf of the Simply Positive Group. Please be reminded that this review is my opinion only.

This is a wonderful autobiography of a pen. Beautifully told and written.
The most I appreciated is the descriptions and presentations of this story and the way you wrote this.

This is a story, View from the Pen. The pen remembers the time when it was red and shiny. She loved running over the soft and smooth pages. But one day the girl accidentally put the pen down and dented its nib.

I like the ending where “I stay in her pen stand, waiting to be taken in her fingers again, drink in ink once more and spill it all out for her … but I guess I will have to stay like this and wait in vain for the rest of my life!”

I enjoyed it. I think you can make bigger story from everything I just read. It would be interesting.

These are my thoughts and ideas alone.
Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review of My Critter Zoo  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello!espero

I just read your poem and I'm reviewing for "Simply Positive Group" .

*Butterflyb* Initial Impression:This is a good poem with a unique story. Yes, there is nothing like a good, faithful dog. We may have many best friends but dogs are the only one to soothe our soul.

*Idea* Theme and Creativity: Your poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words. The rhyming scheme (A, A, B, B) makes this poem more interesting and faster.

*Pencil* Favorite lines: The way you wrote this poem kept me reading it from beginning to the end. I especially like the lines

“I was speechless, and yet it was so darn cute
That I didn't have heart to give him the boot.
I watched him leave but soon back he came,
Almost as though he were playing a game.”

*Cut* Suggestions:You have used the right punctuation marks where they are needed. I didn’t find any mistake.

I enjoyed reading your poem very much.

These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review of F.R.I.E.N.D.S.  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello!WriterAtHeart

I just read your poem. This is a beautiful poem about heartfelt friendship.

Friends are the shoulder you unashamedly cry on.
The cushioning you need when the whole world is against you
Life is a bleak, dusty, desert if you have no friends.

I like the little rhyming. This poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words.

My favorite lines
So live with them.
Laugh with them.
Never settle for anyone else, but them

These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Thank you for sharing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello!Neeti

First welcome to writing.com. I am reviewing your poem on behalf of The Simply Positive Group. Yes, Life moves on no matter what happens. There are so many obstacles in our life. We should be positive to face those challenges.

I like the subject of your poem. You wrote so beautifully. Especially I like the lines
but life moves on......
simple,alone and sometimes dark,
but with its spark,

“with its spark” yes hope never dies.

Suggestion : I think you need to capitalize the first word in the first line.

I enjoyed your poem. Well done. Keep writing.

These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi hiwakura


This is beautiful poem about environmental awareness. It describes lot of problem that our mother earth faces nowadays. The way you wrote this poem keeps me reading. God has given us this beautiful world to live on. But we are polluting this world by greenhouse gases. If we keep polluting our world then it will probably die out on us.

The concept is unique.

I like the lines

We are next; we need to
Reverse the progress
Save the world
Raise the forests
Cut the cars, the oil,
The fumes,

I enjoyed reading your poem. It's beautiful. This is my idea alone. Keep writing.

Mina.


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Review of Near the Fountain  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello!Nikola

I read your poem "Near the Fountain" . This poem has a soothing tone.


Through this entire poem, you painted the nature of the fountain and people so beautifully and that make me read this poem to the last word. Through this poem you wants to dig out your inner feelings. You felt as you are the part of nature, Like "Music of their voices blend
with the water's song in a joyful symphony."

I liked the little rhyming and the flow of this poem. I've enjoyed reading your poem. I like the lines

"Near the fountain
people dare to dream:
hopes, joys, sorrows.
The calm waters reflect
in cooling harmony."


These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I enjoyed your poem.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello!Wolfbane

I just read your poem "My Name Is w0lfbane" .

It’s a very delighted poem. I really enjoy it reading. It keeps laughing. The flow of this poem floats beautifully with your crafted words.

The way you wrote this poem keeps me reading it from beginning to the end. I especially like the title the lines

Someday, I hope it would propel me to fame.
Within you I plant seeds, the size of a grain.
Maybe you will remember my name.

It is really a thoughtful poem.

These are my thoughts and ideas alone.

Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review of Autumn's Chill  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello!

I read your Rubaiyat poem from the nature genre list. I love this piece. It describes how beauty lies in everything. The season which we generally consider to be wed to stillness and dryness. I like the beautiful nature picture you painted here. Red and orange leaves, whistling wind, birds, creatures all things blended together creates a beautiful natural picture. This poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words.

These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  
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Review of Our Backyard  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! Ms. Pat

I just read your poem. A beautiful gratitude poem for a sister. This poem has soothing tone that keeps me reading from beginning to the end. The flow of this poem is floated beautifully with your crafted words. I like the beautiful nature picture you painted here. Your poem reminds my sister who lived far away. I really feel this poem immensely.

I like the lines
"Two sisters sharing few store-bought toys
Making up games and our own joys"

These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Thank you for sharing. *Smile*

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! Sharon

I just read your story “Captain Kid's Search for Buried Treasure”. This is a story of two young boys who act out their pirate search for buried treasure.

The way you wrote this keeps me reading from beginning to the end. I like the conversation between the two young boys.

I understood that this story was written for a contest with the words “buried treasure” “alligator” “pail” “missing shoe” “camp”. And they fit beautifully with the conversation.

I sometimes read your stories and poems here and I think they are all wonderful. And this piece is beautiful. I like the ending. Thank you for sharing.

Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello!Calypso

I just read a beautiful children story.

First Impression: I like the subject of the story.

Story: The story was about three Pet store puppies. They were best friends. They slept together, ate together, and played together. They never talked about the time when they would no longer be together.

Dialogue: dialogue floated beautifully between the characters.

Suggestion: I found some mistakes though; I'm not expert in the same.

Whined Sebastian. "cut it out." Capitalized the word “C”
“What are you little guys up to over here." You need a question mark after the word “here”.
Spelling: Some minor spelling issues below which I marked
Delmolish should be “demolish”
“baby swimming pool that served as there home for now” should be “their”.

Overall Impression:I enjoyed this little puppy’s story. It’s beautiful.

These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review of Winter Blessings  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello!Dr Taher

I saw your name on the Anniversary review page. And I thought I would give you a review. I just read your story about adaptation. I like the subject . The way you wrote this read story kept me reading it from beginning to end, what I liked best was how Lalita finally adopt an abandon child. You did very well at moving the story toward a happy ending.

Story: This is a story about a divorced woman Lalita who finally adopt a child.

Dialogue: Dialogue floated beautifully between all the characters. I could imagine the scenes where they were.

This story is unique and it flowed wonderfully. I enjoyed reading your story. It’s well written.

These are my thoughts and ideas alone.

Happy Writing!

Mina  

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Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello!Kotaro

I found your name on the anniversary review page and I select this piece for review. I think you are a good story teller. The way you wrote this keeps me reading from beginning to the end.

I love the description and the presentation. You went into the smallest details.

Plot: Where all the firebombing takes place.

Dialogue: Floated normally between the characters Mary and Kenji.

I enjoyed reading your story. Thanks for sharing your awesome work with us.
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Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review of My Online Friend  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello!Bernie

A beautiful gratitude poem for friendship I just read. You are so lucky that you have got such a friend.

I think online friends play an important role in our life. So many people adore and love from afar. They just feel so real and so close.

Your poem reminds me some of my friends who lives afar. I have similar feelings like you. Sometimes I feel more comfortable talking with online friends rather than my real friends.

My favorite lines:

Just seeing a "what's up?" or a cheery "hey"
It makes my sadness and problems go away
Just having you there for me makes me smile

This poem is soothing and floated beautifully with your crafted words. I enjoyed it.
Thank you for sharing.

These are my thoughts and ideas alone.Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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Review of Doggie Time  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello!New

I just read your delighted story. Especially I like ending. “Nothing great really happens in a doggy’s life but sleeping, walking…. back to his normal food”. The way you wrote this piece makes me reading your story from beginning to the end.

I feel you could insert a few scenes so your story will be more interesting.

Overall impression: A great story. I really enjoyed your story. It's well written.

These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
Happy Writing!

Your Name  


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Review of The Shifting Sand  
Review by Mina~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello!willwilcox

I found your name on the Anniversary review page and I am sending you a review of your story"The Shifting Sand" . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.

Your story is set in the planet Saturn where the spacer Jack Conner’s spaceship suddenly crashed.

I could imagine a planet where the Jack Conner dropped down into the whirlpool and struggling hard with its force.

I love the descriptions of the planet you given here.

Dialogue: Dialogue floated beautifully between the characters. I like the way you wrote your story. I really enjoy it reading.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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