I just read your poem. I am reviewing for “The Earth Day Contest”.
First impression: Beautiful Fall is an appropriate name for this Rubaiyat poem. I like the simplicity of your writing.
The poem: You paint a beautiful picture of the Fall. The beauty of the fall nature gave your heart pleasure. Fall is one of my favorite season. In fall leaves are changing colors, flowers changing colors, the gentle wind begun to blow; new life everywhere.
Favorite Lines:
The smell of Fall in the air.
Walk along without a care
As I step over the stones
And the wind flows through my hair.
Theme and creativity: Your rhyming scheme is absolutely beautiful. The tone of this poem is soothing that kept me reading your poem to the end. I like the imaginary “Winds cut through you like a knife As I walk along loosestrife“. The rhyme of the poem (a,a,x,a) makes this poem brighter like the fall.
Suggestion: I think you could use more imaginary to make this poem interesting.
Overall: I enjoyed reading your poem. Thanks for sharing. It’s a wonderful poem. I learned how to write Interlocking Rubaiyat poem.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing.Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
First impression:
This is a good piece of work. The title caught my eye. I like the information’s you have given here about Shorter neck Canada Goose. I learned that the endangered Canada Goose have long gray wings, lower their webbed feet. They found in Pennsylvania campus. They have a wide variety of moods and gestures when they communicate with each other.
We the human being rules the earth. We are polluting the air by the greenhouse gases. Polluting sea by the plastics and wastes. It affects many other species. Each year thousands of species disappear. Many animals are being lost due to our negligence. Sometimes hunters haunted them; We cut the trees and destroying their habitat. Sometimes hunters hunt them ignoring the rules of hunting.
It is high time for all of us to think about the endangered species and do our best to save and protect them.
The article: I want to thank you for your description and presentation. The way you present this kept me reading to the end.
Favorite part: “You will see them in the very, very early spring as soon as the ice is gone into the late fall. They are non migratory and will stay as long as they can find food and they will go south long enough to find food. They won’t starve,” said Neyer.”
Overall impression: I enjoyed it reading. I learned many from this piece. Thank you for sharing. This is a wonderful piece.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I'm reviewing for "The Simply Positive Group." I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work. I strive to give honest reviews and I hope you find this review helpful.
Initial Impression:This is sad but beautiful poem. I like the concept.
Theme and Creativity:This is thirteen line rhymed poem. Beautifully described the feelings.
Suggestions:
1. It would be excellent if you make four line in each stanzas (a,a,b,b)
2. Remove the commas. Besides that, the poem was amazing.
I like the lines
“Find your courage and your valiance,
Seek your passion and your defiance,
Wear not the mask of grief in your search for relief,
Use not the crutch of despair”
Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I read your story. you wrote this piece following the prompt “ It was a dark and stormy night. I liked the stormy picture you painted here,
The Story:The story was about Jake and Kim. Who fight with the ten feet waves in a dark stormy day. You have painted beautifully the stormy night picture. I want to thank you for your description and presentation. I especially like the ending “Kim screamed as a terrible pain tore through her leg and then pulled her under for the last time. The devil of the ocean claimed another victim.”
My Suggestions:I understand you wrote this story with limited word count. And I think you can make a bigger story from this piece.
Final Thoughts:Overall, this piece was very well written. I enjoyed your story.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I read your story. I'm reviewing for The Simply positive group.
Initial Impression: This is a wonderful story. Beautifully told and written.
Theme and Creativity: You wrote this piece with clear descriptions and presentations. I like the smallest details of your story. I like the dialogues. I especially like the character Macy. The diolouge floated beautifully between the characters. All the characters are well developed.
I like the ending.
Suggestions :I didn’t find any mistakes. I like the images of your writing.
Overall Impression: Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed your story.
The story:: You are telling this story through the eye of a six-year-old. This is a wonderful story. I like the idea. I like the way you wrote this kept me reading.
This is a story of a kid and a pair of hamsters. The kid loved his pets and cares them. But one day he found that Heidi ate all her babies. This made the kid incredibly sad, frighten him. But he did not understand that the animals do not think like we do.
Suggestion: Overall, This is a beautiful story. My suggestion is put some paragraph break. A little bit editing will make your story more interesting. Besides that, the story was amazing and the ending was brilliant. Thank you for sharing.
I read your poem. I'm reviewing for "Invalid Item"
First Impression:This is a wonderful poem with a unique concept.
Theme and Creativity:The poem packed with messages inside every line. Yes, depression is like a monster controlling our brain. You did a wonderful job expressing yourself and describing it beautifully. Your rhyming scheme (a.a.b.b) is absolutely beautiful.
Favorite lines:
"There he starts playing "The Impossible Dream",
Whistles in between to this hypnotic theme.
Sad dreamy tunes, the rain turns to tears,
That special lady who shared all his years"
Suggestions: I did not find any mistakes.
I enjoyed reading your poem very much. The thoughts you have included are beautiful. I look forward to reading some of your other work.
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First Impression:This is a wonderful poem with a unique concept.
Theme and Creativity: This poem consists of four rimed stanzas of forty lines. I appreciate the simplicity of your writing. The poem has lovely thought inside every line that kept me reading it to the end. The tone is soothing. I like the way you put your feelings into words. Your rhyming scheme (a.a.b.b) is absolutely beautiful like the floating sea wave.
Favorite lines:
" There he starts playing "The Impossible Dream",
Whistles in between to this hypnotic theme.
Sad dreamy tunes, the rain turns to tears,
That special lady who shared all his years.”
Suggestions: I did not find any mistakes.
I enjoyed reading your poem very much.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
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The poem:This is a beautiful poem. You painted a perfect storm picture. I like the imagery you describe here. The way you wrote this poem kept me reading to the end. You made a good word choice of words.
I like the little rhyming of this poem. The ending is brilliant.
My favorite lines:
Man and beast alike breathe a sigh
of relief at having outlasted the storm.
This is beautiful heartfelt poem. I appreciate the simplicity of your writing. This poem has lovely romantic thought inside every line. I like the way you put your feelings.
My favorite lines:
Your name is written in the heart
i am in love with the mountains
Suggestions: I think you need to capitalize every first word. Capitalized all the "i".
Greetings Magoo! I am sending you a review of your poem. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
Initial Impression: This is a wonderful poem with a unique story .
Theme and Creativity:The way you wrote this poem kept me reading to the end. You have good imagination.
Technique: Every stanza of this poem has the rhyme scheme of a, b, a, b. It makes rhythm faster, happier, and brighter. .
Favorite lines:
As beast and human drew a crowd,
the registers were ringing loud.
The wealth of all began to grow;
the land was filled with lots of dough.
Suggestions :I didn’t find any mistakes. You have used the punctuation marks where they are needed
Overall Impression: . The poem was amazing and the ending was brilliant. Thank you for sharing.
I love this poem because of the main thought of the poem about our mother nature. It’s written so beautifully that makes me read your poem to the end. It describes lot of problems created by us (the human being). We the human being rules the sea, air and land. It describes beautifully a lot of problems that our mother earth faces now.
Even though we know that there is no other planet to live.
Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I just read your poem.
I'm reviewing for "The Simply Positive Group"
Initial Impression: This is a beautiful poem with a unique concept. I appreciate the simplicity of your writing.
Theme and Creativity: The poem has lovely romantic thought inside every line. Your rhyming scheme is absolutely beautiful. I like the way you put your feelings into words.
Favorite line:
" I’ve looked in your eyes; seen how they shine.
At something I’d say, some sort of sign.
I saw the tears that never fell,
You held them back, so very well.”
Suggestions: I did not find any mistakes. You have used punctuation marks where they are needed.
I enjoyed reading your poem very much.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
Initial Impression: A very good gratitude poem with a unique concept. The poem expresses the poets feelings about her mother.
Theme and Creativity: This poem consists of two rimed stanzas of eight lines. It describes the feeling of awe, love and gratitude to a parent. The rhyme: a-a-b-b makes this poem brighter; the flow of this poem is wonderful. I could say poetically that it floats like the floating sea waves.
Favorite Lines: “Mommy I smell you, your sweet fragrant charms,
as you hold me so closely, in your warm gentle arms.”
: The poem is unique it brings the innovative life in words. I especially like the title and the imaginary of your poem. It flowed wonderfully with your crafted words. Here you begin by comparing love with jungle. I like the way you put your feelings into words.
Favorite lines:
Though this triangle of love
Must survive and endure,
For the tiger, who he dreams of,
Is giving ground, to be sure
OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The rhyme scheme of A, A, make this poem brighter.
I enjoyed reading your poem. It’s beautiful.
This poem is unique. A great write and the way you displayed it. It brings the innovative life into words. Sometimes some people bring us back to the old days. I like the way you put your feelings into words. The rhyming A, B, A, B makes this poem more interesting and faster. Your poem floats well with your crafted words. I especially like the last stanza
So, I thanked this man for his pleasure today,
Placed change in his hand before walking away.
My mind still vivid from my younger years,
As I swallowed hard and sniffed back the tears.
Thank you for sharing your wonderful poem with us.
I just read your poem. Yes, Indeed books are the lovey gift. A good book can change us and help see the things in a ways we had never seen before. Books make us think and inspires us to be a better person.
I like this poem and way you wrote this. Especially I like the lines
“I could have, for your birthday,
Bought you a silken dress.
You might wear it thrice a year,
Lest it be spoiled by stress.
It’s a lovely poem. I like the little rhyming. Your poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words. I enjoyed it reading.
I am sending you a review of your story, "Nobody Loves Me" . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
WHY I AM REVIEWING THIS ITEM: A wonderful story. I like the title.
FIRST IMPRESSION: You wrote beautifully in the view of a thirteen-year-old child. I like the way you wrote this piece kept me reading. I especially liked the ending.
STORY LINE This is a story of a kid who feels unloved which makes him sad and unhappy.
OVERALL IMPRESSION: I appreciate the simplicity of your writing. I enjoyed your story.
I'm reviewing on behalf of "The Simply Positive Group" .
Initial Impression: I like how you put your feelings into words. This is indeed a good poem. the way you wrThis is a good poem with a unique story. Yes, there is nothing like a good, faithful friend.
Theme and Creativity: Your poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words. The rhyming scheme makes this poem more interesting and faster.
Favorite lines: The way you wrote this poem kept me reading it from beginning to the end. I especially like the lines
I cannot believe he is mine
Such a good friend
My soul and his intertwine
I will not find one like him ever again.
Suggestions:You have used the right punctuation marks where they are needed. I didn’t find any mistake.
I enjoyed reading your poem very much.
I just read your poem from "read and review page". I like this poem. The way you wrote this kept me reading your poem to the end.
You have made a good word choice (ancient, yearn, eclipse, water to create the mood of this poem.
Your poem flowing beautifully with your crafted words. I understood this poem is written for a contest. And I think it followed the prompt.
My favorite lines
We are witnesses
To this natural phenomenon
No blood will be spilled
No violence unbound
Just a witnessing
Of wonderment.
Final Thoughts:I enjoyed your poem. It's pleasure to know someone like you.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
The Poem: I like this thoughtful poem. The main image is wonderful. Our life is like the autumn leaf. The falling leaves become compost to nourish the soil of new beginnings.
My Favourite lines:
"Returning swiftly, the grass took me over.
Then part of me came back as a four leaf clover."
Final Thoughts: I enjoyed your poem. It's well written.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I read your story. This is delightful story. The concept is unique.You have written a very good piece of story, I liked the way you told the story with very clear descriptions and presentation. Your story makes me laugh especially where you say "I will return, my darling, when I am taller and your hair is longer. I will scale this tower and we shall be together!”
The Story: I like the plot.
My Suggestions: I didn't find any mistake.
Final Thoughts: I enjoyed. It's well written.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
Happy Writing!
Mina
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Favorite lines :I especially like the last stanza
We are witnesses