Nixie Martell cheerleader's (nixie9) Reviews

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The hook
Hands down, the title and the brief description.

My mistake
I have a habit of reading the end of a story (or poem) before beginning the journey into someone's story world. I was prepared for something simple, I guess. Your poem took me totally by surprise. I read it five times to absorb all the meaning, and every time my heart broke.

I've never read a poem this complicated that flowed line after line. I am no poet, so if this composition follows a specific format, I apologize for not recognizing it. I liked the lack of punctuation throughout. It created continuity.

Quite a shift in POV when the man is introduced. Once the meaning sunk in,though, the intent was crystal.

Oops/suggestions
Somewhere in the lines (who's) should be (whose), but for the life of me, I can't find it again.

Personal connection
Honestly, I can't explain to anyone how much I have in common with Toni, without hurting myself (mentally) further.

Final impression
I wish I knew how much work and time you've put into composing this. It must have been a painful process, or perhaps cathartic. Despite the agony, this is a gorgeous and unique write.

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#4634720

Review of The Escape of Ni-essa

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi Pepper Nixie here.

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

The Hook
The hyphenated name clued me in as to the type of story I would be reading. After that, well, what encouraged me to continue was the professional appearance of the story. It was well-balanced, with a larger font.

And then I read the opening paragraph. A mystery opened in my mind that I was eager to solve. With no idea who Ni-essa was, her fear was palpable, but at this point still obscure.

Right from the beginning, the scene showed a futuristic theme, and a woman on the run. She must have been hiding selling tickets, so still, her identity wasn't verified, and her fear amplified. A total puzzle.

A closer look
Excellent foreshadowing having the students observing the silver hand of Galen. It didn't seem important at the time. I thought maybe it was enhancing the setting. Wrong.

Due to word count limitations, there was a lot of reading 'in between the lines'. Which is fine. A reader likes to their natural curiosity stroked now and again.

It took me three reads, not really understanding what had transpired in the second part of the story. It may have helped if [queen] was capitalized. (However, the bounty hunter did call her 'Your Highness'. Also, a description of where she was being held would have aided a smoother transition.

That's where I really got hung up. Maybe if the Queen and King had names.

Emotions evoked
Puzzlement, panic, and disgust (at the end).

Bumps along the way
"Then, she was falling, helpless to break her fall."
I'd like to see a different word, rather than repeating fall. It's sort of a given. No one can really control a fall.

Whoosh
Picky, yes. But considering the excellence of your writing, that stood out as weird.

A closed book=lasting impression
And that's why it took me three reads to capture all the nuances. I see how the foreshadowing was so germane to the story. Otherwise, it would have been a mystery when her brother died in such an odd manner.

No wonder the queen ran. I guess that king will have to keep her around to mother the 'brood' he would create. What an awful man. Holding potential children hostage.

I could go on and on, but I'll stop. Suffice it to say, I really liked your story. Outstanding write!

The last sentence sealed the deal.

Love this image from Brooke! Personal signature

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#4634372

Review of More Sue

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Congratulations on your WdC Anniversary.

Hi Rich. Nixie here.

Time to celebrate your (belated) 13th WdC anniversary!

Title and brief description
I wasn't sure about the title, but I was interested to see what insight might be revealed.

Overall impression
Total confusion in the beginning. I'm guessing there are other 'Sue' stories in your portfolio. Otherwise the story begins much later. I'm sure you had a specific reason for adding all the 'Sue' info.

The dialogue was witty and concise and a pleasure to read. Lots of white space helped as well. So many writers use a small font and skimpy spacing, I have to squint to read it.

Can there be a link to the Ref at the bottom. My field of vision is narrow.

Personal reaction

Oh, my. What an absolute example of how to turn things around. If a guy said that to me, I'd walk out. I think (I hope) with more women working, social norms have changed.

And I can't resist adding what happened to my daughter, years ago. Waiting at a stop light, the guy in the car next to her rolled down his window and asked "What's the fastest way to get in to your pants?"
Her response? "Drive straight for two blocks, take a left and go straight to hell."

In the end
I bet the memory of this story will run through my mind for the rest of the evening. Nicely done, despite the confusion, which I'm guessing is on my part.

~Nixie
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#4634353

Review of The Angel Portal

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

Hi rjsimonson Nixie here to celebrate your 16th WdC Anniversary.

Title and brief description
Irresistible for both. I liked the way the title led to the curiousity shop. It was surprising, and encouraged me to read more.

Overall Impression
Fantastic write, imaginative and fanciful. One never knows might be in a shop like that. The immediate setting was clear in my mind, and I wished I were Julie.

Both sound and smell descriptions added to the ambiance. nicely done.

Personal connection
So, I've always wanted to own a serendipity shop filled with items of curiousity and a cafe in the back. Dreams die hard.

Oops
I found enough errors that took me out of your head space, which was really a shame. Since this was written in 2012, I"m guessing it's unlikely you'll return to edit the story. However, you can email me if you want specifics.

Question? What did the golden boy have to do with the cat? Obviously they were one in the same, but was this germane to the story? If boy and cat were one entity, wouldn't the cat have the same color fur as the golden boy? Just a thought. There are more questions I'm pondering.

In the end
What a beautiful conclusion. I liked the wrap-up, but Julie knew the angel before? That didn't make much sense to me. Angels are wondrous. Why didn't Julie see how special her specific angel was? How did the curio cabinet come to be in the store.

The memories were wiped from Julie's mind, and she had no idea how she ended up in the dress shop. Very cool and fitting. Sweet message, too.

I wish I could rate this higher, but with so many mistakes...

~Nixie
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#4633386

Review of A Sliver of the Street

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi FrankenDuf. Nixie here to celebrate your 6th WdC Anniversary.

Major props for writing all these contest entries. I bet the hosts were super happy. I've always wondered how to write a story like this, and now know I can't.

My first impression was that the main character was an animal living in a kennel for strays. (The white van gave me that impression.) Weird, I know. On the second read, I saw that made no sense. (Regina, as an animal, pressing her face against the glass didn't fit.)

Time to re-think. Just because a story is short, it doesn't necessarily mean the plot is simple.

In a few short words, you conveyed apprehension and pathos for Regina. I can see her little face peering through the glass. Way to break my heart, though. She was hoping for a forever home. What a winsome way to convey her experiences thus far. Nicely done.

My only suggestion (thinking of Quills) would be to choose a genre and categories. Even if not for a Quill candidate (I don't think we have that category) these tiny treasures feel undervalued due to their lack of identity.

Knowing how to convey feelings and characters in a few short words, complete with a setting and conflict is truly one of your talents. Thanks for the opportunity to read and learn!

~Nixie
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#4633357

Review of My Friend’s Enemies

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi Ironworker. Nixie here with an anniversary review.

Initial impression

Yes, yes, and okay.

Excellent opening salvo. Identify the characters and the conflict. The aliens dubbed [The Nezuar] immediately alerted me. Ah, sci-fi.

Um, my review is forming up to be a blow by blow commentary while I read. Hope that doesn't bother you.

oops
The [D]oorbell rang.
The doorbell rang.

The third paragraph scrambled my thoughts. Judging from other parts of the story, I know you know how to improve it.

And then there's a few verb tense switches that are confusing.
Winston sits up

“As you have surmised, the Doctors question...
Since we're not using the doctor's name, Doctor's should not be capitalized. [doctor's]. Also, that whole sentence is a mouthful. I'm sure you know how to straighten that up. And, that filler word [just] has to go.

I didn't sense too much ongoing objection about the aliens moving in. After all, humans are, or already have, killed the earth. What really got my attention was The Nezuar's compassion for humans. The pain and worry from the alien was touching. The ending was dismaying, though.

I liked this description of passing time.
In a moment of silence that seemed to last an hour...

Nice write! I enjoyed this adventure.

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#4633338

Review of The Step-Fairy (Editor's Pick)

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi Pepper!

HAPPY 12th WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM

You captured all the elements this reader likes. An interesting conflict for your main character, and strong secondary characters.
I can totally see this happening, and the dad's resentment felt fair. I think the same situation would develop even without the money aspect, but you chose an example that punctuated the reason for the split. Otherwise, readers may be asking why.

Even though I have no experience with this situation, I didn't need it to connect. It's tragic when affection or attraction comes from the want of money. Marc did his best to 'compete', but mentioning he shopped at Walmart drove home the point in only a few words. Nicely done.

Oh my goodness. Marc's 'get even' fairy tale amused me. I could see an indignant Meggie spouting her objections to the fairy tale. She did agree with the dad about the nagging part, which made me laugh. But Marc felt better, and since he's the main character, it's his place to complete the story arc.

Which reminds me, spectacular job 'showing' what your characters looked like, without listing the specific aspects, like a list.

I didn't understand why Dudley (perfect name to set the character's image) was the new step-daddy. Had there been one before him? Step-daddy makes sense to me, but not the 'new' part. More heartbreaking would have been if Meggie had called him her new daddy.

I get why you're emphasizing Marc's lack of finances, but sometimes he sounded child-like and whiny.
...big shindig, dressed up all fancy-like.

I also disagree with the portrayal of him being 'less' because of his job.

And then here's Marc internalizing his image of the bed. One of my faves.
Kind of looked like a mosquito net to Marc.

Oops.
"I’m a princess, and princesses are suppose[d] to have royal beds."

Distancing words [felt]
He felt his gut tighten, the acid turning.
Suggest, [his gut tightened, acid churning.]

Filler word. [just]
The man just didn’t play fair.
I think it's perfectly normal for a person to use this word, but in fiction...well...not so much. It doesn't add anything to the story, which means, sorry, [deletion].

I've been told in some reviews when I first started here that editors don't like semicolons. Huh. Just some info to pass along.

I can see why this was an editor's pick for a Newsletter. Thanks for the opportunity to read and review your work.

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#4632754

Review of Open Mouth-Insert Foot

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi Wolfwalker
Nixie here to celebrate your 16th WdC Anniversary.

Title and brief description
After reading the title and brief description, I was already smiling and anticipating how this scenario would play out.

Overall Impression
True, I laughed all the way through, but what really stood out was your unique word choices and sentence structures.

Being who I am, I googled the origin of the phrase. I found several metaphorical ones, but at the top of the page was what I remembered. The usage of the word began in 1900, referring to hoof in mouth, a cattle affliction. Sorry, that's me skating around the intent of this piece, throwing water on the hilarity.

Personal connection
Remember the expression 'measure twice, cut once?' I'm a talk first, think twice. Always after 'putting my foot in my mouth'.
I have a brother who would write something like this, and the story reminded me of him. Thanks for that gift.

In the end
My only reason for the 4.5 was because the font was too small, and there needed to be more white space. My eyes are burning from squinting.

Fantastic write!

~Nixie
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#4632585

Review of Sunrise Over Autumn

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Hi Snow! Nixie here.

HAPPY 19th! WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM

Fantastic. Almost two decades of membership and you're still active. And now you present us with this odd tale. (odd in a good way.)

The dialogue carried the story along. The straight facts from the AI made me wary. Humans are so sure they can take over any planet.

The concise back story fit right in with the flow. Just enough to understand Amber, and not too much to overwhelm.

I sure hope that ship can beat it out of the gravity well supersonic fast!

Oops.
We're not like you, we need real oxygen to breath."
breathe not breath. And what made Amber unlike the others?

before [setting] down in the pilots seat.
sitting? settling?

began to devour the colonist.
colonists?

Thanks for the entertaining read. Sci-fi is my fav genre.

Kicking down the walls of normalcy

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#4631656

Review of The Birth Of ...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

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A child is burdened with the responsibility of saving the earth. That sums up the plot, but the summation does not do the story justice.

I wondered how Natasha's pajamas would be of significance. What struck me the most, other than it showing her vulnerability, was how it was woven in with the orb's appearance. What a beautiful moment when it glowed her colors. An indication that yes, it was here for her. I also liked the further expression of her fragility when she realized she'd have to balance.

There was no explanation for why Natasha was the chosen one, other than her 'feeling it was right'. Had she sensed this moment all of her life?

Who was the narrator in the beginning? An omnipresent POV? The switch to Natasha flowed seamlessly, offset by the stars.

I felt no emotional response to the story, but the message was outstanding, if a bit obvious. Well, to most of humanity, I hope. With no one listening now, it seems unlikely Natasha could save the world. She would need some sort of superpowers or gift.

Since that's my only bone to pick, a 4.5 star rating feels appropriate.

Thanks for your entry!

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#4631653

Review of Cecilie

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Rated: 13+

| (3.5)

Short Shots: Official WDC Contest

Judges' Review

Hi Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

The opening sentence made me laugh. I pictured a young, punk woman, a bit of a rebel, who delighted in the color of the sky complimenting her hair. But, oops, I was wrong. Was the narrator a beast? Descriptions that gave me that impression

(dyed her hair to match pink ears-fur on her spine-but then people came...huge footprints. Am I confused?

What transpired involved some sort of being that expected people to terrify her, as this had defined her life. She reminded me of a teenager thrilled by the idea of scaring everyone.

I didn't expect to see a horse, and I'm not certain how that added to the plot. It sounded as if the horse was also going with her.

Biggest surprise of all, she belonged to the stars? I sensed nothing ethereal or otherworldly about her (other than her long lifespan.) Was she on a planet?

Great description of the setting, which could have been expanded.

I'm happy she found people to guide her home. I know that feeling of not belonging and wish someone would take me home to the stars.

What I liked best? The originality of the second footnote. Most creative.

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#4631651

Review of Outcast

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

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Hi Beholden

So, two questions. Who was the outcast? Why were they 'wrecked' on the planet? Was their ship separated from the camp and the only one that crashed short of their intended destination?

I enjoyed reading your story because of the causal way you led us in to your dream world. It was spoken as if the planet was something we all should be aware of, and that made me feel invited and and immersed in the plot to come. A fair amount of tension drove the plot forward. The characters had to make a decision. It's hard to imagine the seemingly insurmountable task, that trek up the mountain.

Your characters each had specific personalities, with each excelling in different skills.

Your sentence structures were varied. Nicely done. That's one reason this plot was easy to follow.

Now, considering your earlier explanations of the danger climbing the mountains, neither seemed to have a particularly difficult time. A breathless dialogue, or near fall would have emphasized the struggle. i.e. the whole show vs. tell suggestion. You had nearly a thousand more words to play with this conquest. Summing up the experience with these words 'have been told often enough' didn't seem right. There's simply no casual summing up the arduous challenge. After all, this is the characters' conflict that they must overcome.

Good names often draw intrigue. The odd names of the characters and the planet added a sci-fi element to the story. You chose this as your first genre. And rightly so.

It took me a few reads to 'feel' the weight of the conclusion. It was unexpected, but upon reflection, it was both humerous and smart. Someone probably would think them insane.

I liked how the personal question at the end drew me in. If I only knew the particulars mentioned in the beginning, and an expanded scene, I may have rated this a 4.5

Thanks for your entry!

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#4631650

Review of Holograms

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Rated: 13+

| (2.5)

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Judges' Review

Hi Kotaro,

What a brave and adventurous trek into your story land. The topic is unique, and the resolution surprising. I wondered where the old man lived. For some odd reason, I was picturing a lighthouse. Weird, I know.

(very cool, what happened when Gonzo stepped inside.) There was only scant evidence of a setting.

I'm still trying to wrap my head around what happened. The conclusion was that startling and a total turn-around from what I expected of Gonzo.

So, the old man has several copies of the document. He's waiting for the 'right' person to come along? Who would that be?

Also, how does the story relate to the image prompt?

I found no grammatical errors. Excellent! The low rating relates to the comments above.

Thanks for entering the contest!

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#4631645

Review of The Vanishing Stars

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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Hi Chris,

The rush and immediacy of the plot drove me forward, plunging me into the story. My heart was even beating fast. I'm impressed that everything in this story was pertinent. The foreshadowing of the stars missing proved to be the swing of the story's arc.

At first, I was angry with the dad. So human-like. Shooting blindly toward something he didn't understand. I wanted to cry, thinking the being would be dead. What a surprise when Abigail healed it. A huge sigh of relief from me.

Through the dad's interactions with Abigail, I understood him and loved him for being such a good dad. The point wasn't over-played. Nicely done, especially with a word limitation.

A few spacing issues barred this item from perfect. Four chunky paragraphs threw the story off-balance. In the paragraph beginning with "In a panic" the sentence was too wordy. It was important to emphasize the 'vast open valley' But was [floor?] the correct word.

The originality of the plot and characters that were relatable made reading your work a joy, with a jolt of fear to keep me off-balance. Well done!

Thanks for entering the contest!

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#4631644

Review of Eight Months of Something?

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Rated: 18+

| (2.5)

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Hi Sci-fi

Thanks for writing this in a bold and larger font. It was easy on the eyes.

I'm sure the plot is fused in your mind, but I found the story as vague as the title. It wasn't always clear who was speaking. There were so many characters in the plot, and that did not help. And I didn't understand the premise. Are the characters mentioned the only ones still alive, under the surface of Galvian? And for the few who are leaving, where are they going?

What is the sickness? At first, I thought you meant the sickness was shared when males and females developed relationships.

Lots of repetition slowed down the reading experience. I lost count of how many times the word 'boring' was used.

Even after reading this four times, I remain baffled. That said, it takes courage to enter this contest. Thanks for taking part.

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#4624126

Review of Worlds apart

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi there. Nixie dropping by with a special message for you. An anniversary review!

HAPPY 16th WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM

This wasn't an easy piece to review. I wasn't sure how deep the pain would go, as I too have lost a sibling. My sister was only 30 when she died, way back in 1983.

You encapsulated my wild emotions in a few verses. I liked the upbeat feel contrasted by the sorrow. Best of all, the last line. I can still bring my sister to mind, merely by thinking of her. All we leave behind are memories. I wondered why anyone would try to push away memories. However, I respect that everyone processes grief in their own way.

The poem flowed smoothly, but I would have preferred more spacing between lines to show off the rhyming scheme. Long ago, someone mentioned in a review for me, that the reader deserved a better word than simply 'nice'. (line 8) So I'm passing along that thought.

Favorite line, poignant, accurate, and vivid.
"...no where city"

Nice write.

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#4617609

Review of Aunt Catherine's Blanket

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

Hi Hooves. Another port scan review from guess who?

Initial Attraction
The title piqued my curiousity, and the brief description sent my mind scrambling down the hallways of my past.

Overall Reaction
The uniqueness of the first stanza lit the path to understanding and appreciating this poem. Right away, I knew this was an elderly woman, and I can 't think of a more original way to show this. (I didn't even read the note until after I began the review. That's how eager I was to make the discovery.)

I liked this free-flowing poem that was not tied down by any rules or a specific style. The large bold font eased my eye-strain. Sometimes, it's the little stuff that counts.

I can't imagine a nursing home with free-roaming cats, but the irony? What your aunt avoided all her life found her in the end? In a way, it felt like comedic relief, but that wasn't the significant impact.

Personal Connection
My grandmother made afghans all the time. She never looked in her yarn basket, just fished around for the pieces. The result? Some truly horrible mismatches, uniquely Grandma's. She made one for each of my children, at birth. It was so long ago, the blankets are long gone.

And in the end?
Are you trying to knock me over and blow me down with such beautiful sadness? Because it's working. My grandma's blankets may not have lived on, but the tenderness of your last two stanzas gave me pause. Honestly, I held my breath a bit so none of the magic could slip away. Wonderful writing.

Personal image. One 1/4 of the inner me.

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#4617602

Review of Season of Discontent -

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Rated: 13+

Hi Hooves. Nixie here again.

Thoughts for you to chew on.

Cool title. I had no clue as to what might happen in this story, and I like it that way. Even the brief description was cloudy, so I knew this would be an adventure.

You are a woman of many talents. Just when I think I've 'got a handle' on your style, a story like this pops up.

I'll admit to thinking 'what the heck?' while reading. But I was laughing all the way through as I read.

You found a multitude of ways to remind the reader of the narrator's cow-ness. And then twisted it around a bit via multiple mentions of the Vera Bradley purse.

I'd have to break the reviewing rules against too much copy/paste to highlight all my favorite sentences. Okay, just one. Nope. Can't do it. Every time I single out a sentence as the best, I see all the others.

Did I detect a bit of some muck-slinging at the way our government is total chaos. Especially now that we're a split nation. And that's all I care to say about politics.

I had such a wonderful time reading this. It's the first time I've ventured over to the pastures of your cow-persona. I've always wondered how that came to be.

Finding comedy anywhere seems impossible these days. Thanks for giving me a reason to smile. My heart is less burdened now. Do you see the talent you have for making people (me anyhow) connect with your writing?

Reviewing your work was

Nixie
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#4617389

Review of A Bushy-Tailed Intruder

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Hi Hooves.

This is review #1 from my package at Sisco's auction.

The Hook
I am terrified of squirrels with their bulging eyes and brash behaviour. One time at a rest stop, a squirrel stole a candy bar right out of my hand. So with the title and brief description you chose, reading this was a no-brainer. I also wanted to ensure we were talking about the same rodent. Even though bushy-tailed was a giveaway.

A closer look
The unusual formatting was unexpected, but this was an easy read. The prompt words were sewn in seamlessly, no bumps along the way. I liked how the tension built sentence by sentence. You had my heart pounding.

Emotions evoked
Maybe the most amusing part was your husband's reactions. Men. The back and forth dialogue delighted me. An amusing way to drive a plot.

Men can drive a sane woman up the wall. And they clearly don't comprehend how to handle an upset wife. Laughter? Unforgivable. But, of course, they have the most logical course of action, which is so aggravating.

Excellent use of forewarning when you mentioned the 'thin' robe. I wondered where it would come into play. I thought maybe you'd get locked out, but, sorry, what really happened was even funnier.

Nice neighbors, though.

Vivid descriptions allowed me to enter the scene as if I were there. Your sense of humour is sharp and witty.

I'm not comma queen, and I don't see the point in mentioning misplaced ones. This sentence is only to backup my rating.

A closed book=lasting impression
Combining my personal connection and your experience definitely leaves a lasting impression in my mind. Well done.

~Nixie