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Review of Christmas is Here  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Amethyst Snow Angel ,

Your parody lyrics, "Christmas Is Here," crafted in the style of an Imagine Dragons song, cleverly blend humor and introspection to create a refreshing take on the holiday season. The lyrics navigate the familiar landscape of Christmas traditions, injecting a humorous twist and a deeper reflection on the essence of the celebration. Let's delve into the various elements that make this parody engaging and effective.

Stylistically, your lyrics successfully capture the energetic and dynamic style associated with Imagine Dragons. The use of colloquial language, playful rhymes, and the incorporation of specific Christmas references contribute to the parody's authenticity. Lines like "Tripping over tinsel, it's dangerous" and "Shop at Ross, gift for the boss" showcase a witty play on words and demonstrate a keen understanding of the original song's tone.

Meter and lyricism play a crucial role in maintaining the rhythm and flow of the parody, aligning with the melody of "Whatever It Takes." The verses maintain a consistent meter, enhancing the musicality of the lyrics. For example, the line "Everybody's waiting for Santa Claus" maintains the cadence expected in an Imagine Dragons song. This adherence to rhythm is essential for capturing the essence of the original track while infusing it with a festive and humorous spirit.

The theme of the parody cleverly subverts conventional Christmas expectations. The lyrics humorously critique the chaos of holiday preparations, the stress associated with gift-giving, and the societal pressures surrounding the season. The lines "What is it 'bout Christmas / Makes people think it's time to kiss?" and "And that means more than just traffic (A ton)" poke fun at the clichés of the holiday while inviting reflection on the deeper meanings often overshadowed by the hustle and bustle.

The chorus serves as a poignant anchor, redirecting the focus from the superficial aspects of Christmas to its profound significance. Lines like "Christmas is here / And that means peace out to everyone" and "Hold the fruitcake, we're not ready / 'Cause Christmas is here" pivot the lyrics toward a more reflective and spiritual dimension. This thematic shift adds depth to the parody, transcending the initial comedic critique.

For suggestions, consider exploring opportunities to enhance the internal rhyme scheme or introduce variations in rhyme patterns to further mimic the intricacies of Imagine Dragons' lyricism. Additionally, experiment with vocal dynamics and pacing to capture the intensity and emotion characteristic of the original song. This can add another layer of authenticity to the parody.

This was fun and a unique experience, reviewing your Christmas parody lyrics.

Sincerely,

Brian
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Review of Stars  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Kallie,

As I perused your poem "Stars," I found myself navigating a celestial tapestry woven with emotions and metaphors. The imagery of the stars, vibrant and varied, immediately draws the reader into a contemplative space. The opening lines, "The stars are colorful tonight / All cheery and light," establish a whimsical and optimistic atmosphere, setting the stage for a journey through the night sky.

Your style seamlessly blends simplicity with depth, creating a poem that is accessible yet rich in meaning. The rhythmic flow of the verses mimics the natural cadence of thought, making the exploration of emotions and ideas feel organic. This style, evident in lines like "Then there are the stars that are darker, the ones not so bright," allows the reader to effortlessly connect with the celestial allegory you've crafted.

The theme of the poem, centered around the symbolism of stars, offers a versatile exploration of emotions and relationships. The contrast between the "cheery and light" stars and the darker, dimmer ones creates a nuanced reflection on the spectrum of human experiences. The inclusion of stargazers and star-chasers adds layers to the theme, introducing the concepts of connection, pursuit, and the cyclical nature of life.

The form of your poem embraces a free-verse structure, providing you with the flexibility to navigate the celestial metaphor without constraint. This open form allows the poem to breathe and evolve, mirroring the vastness of the night sky. The use of enjambment, such as in the lines "They grab the ones they feel they would perpetually clutch / Then there are star-chasers who follow the ones grown dim," contributes to the seamless transition between ideas, creating a continuous and engaging narrative.

Poetic devices, particularly metaphors and personification, play a significant role in enhancing the depth of your poem. The stars become symbolic representations of emotions, experiences, and relationships. For example, the image of star-chasers following the dim stars suggests a pursuit of meaning and connection even in challenging or obscured circumstances.

For suggestions, consider experimenting with varying line lengths to add a visual dynamic to the poem. This could mirror the diversity of stars in the night sky and enhance the overall visual impact. You could also explore the sensory aspects of stargazing to further immerse the reader in the celestial experience. Perhaps, an experience like this puts your readers in scene.

It was a pleasure to discover and review a new writer in our little community. Hope we will see more.

Sincerely,

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Review of Square Rose  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Val,

"Square Rose" unfolds as a poetic tapestry woven with intricate threads of independence and dependence, each stanza a brushstroke on the canvas of human connection. Your choice of imagery and metaphor creates a rich and evocative landscape that invites readers to explore the delicate dance between freedom and interdependence.

Stylistically, your poem exhibits a unique blend of vivid imagery and contemplative introspection. The opening lines, "Independence / Is the free fall of amber tenuous and pale autumn-leaves," immediately set a tone of reflection on the transient nature of autonomy. The use of autumn leaves as a metaphor for independence introduces a poignant visual element, capturing the fragility and temporality of the theme.

The form of your poem, with its distinct sections devoted to independence and dependence, provides a clear structure for readers to navigate the nuanced exploration of these concepts. The transition from one section to the other is seamless, mirroring the fluid nature of the themes being examined. This structured form allows for a focused examination of each facet, enhancing the overall impact of the poem.

Poetic devices, such as metaphor and personification, play a pivotal role in conveying the complexity of the emotions and ideas presented. The thorned wreath around an innocuous rose becomes a powerful metaphor for dependence, invoking a juxtaposition of vulnerability and beauty. Similarly, "to unclench the monarch-butterfly in your lips" employs personification, transforming a simple action into a symbolic gesture laden with emotional resonance.

The theme of interdependence, woven throughout the poem, adds layers of meaning to the exploration of relationships. The imagery of angels dancing and a man turning into a statue to hold a fallen leaf on his shoulder evokes a sense of shared humanity and interconnectedness. This theme reaches its zenith in the lines "We are interdependent angels / or else / why would a man turn into a statue," underscoring the inherent need for connection in the human experience.

For suggestions, consider experimenting with varied line lengths to create visual and rhythmic interest. Strategic line breaks can emphasize key ideas and guide the reader's attention. Additionally, there’s the possibility of incorporating more sensory details to enhance the reader's immersion. Descriptive elements related to touch, scent, or sound could deepen emotional resonance of your poem.

It was a pleasure to have discovered your poem (and a new writer in our community) in one of the more recent poetry newsletters.

Sincerely,

Brian
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Review of Ripples  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Daniel,

I was perusing the latest poetry newsletter and found the promoted link for this piece.

Your poem "Ripples" invites readers into a contemplative space, exploring profound themes through the metaphor of a stone creating ripples in water. The simplicity of your language conceals a depth of philosophical inquiry, making each word a ripple that resonates with existential reflections.

Stylistically, your poem embraces brevity, a choice that enhances the impact of each line. The concise phrasing, as seen in "A stone, / rippling through water," immediately establishes a focused and deliberate tone. This style mirrors the contemplative nature of philosophical inquiry, where brevity often allows for heightened impact and reflection.

The theme of interconnectedness, portrayed through the metaphor of ripples in water, serves as a powerful lens for examining the complexities of human relationships and existence. The notion of a stone changing the essence of another, with individuals connected and suspended in time, creates a vivid image of the interconnected web of life. This theme unfolds gradually, like ripples expanding across a pond, allowing readers to engage with the layers of meaning embedded in each line.

Your poem's form, with its repetition and circular structure, echoes the cyclical nature of existence. The repetition of phrases like "together, apart, tethered, we find" adds a rhythmic quality, reinforcing the interconnected themes. The circularity of the poem contributes to the sense of continuity and emphasizes the perpetual nature of the philosophical exploration presented.

Poetic devices, particularly metaphor and personification, play a crucial role in elevating the poem's impact. The stone becomes a symbolic agent of change, representing the actions and choices that shape the interconnected lives of individuals. For example, "controlling foundations, destination, a stone" imbues the stone with agency, suggesting a profound influence on the trajectories of lives.

For suggestions, consider experimenting with the placement of line breaks to create visual impact and emphasize key ideas. Strategic line breaks can guide the reader's attention and enhance the overall rhythm. Additionally, you might want to consider furthering metaphorical imagery to further deepen the exploration of interconnectedness and existential themes. For instance, extending the metaphor to describe the depth, quality or light upon the ripples of water could enrich the sensory experience for the reader.

Congratulations on the highlighted newsletter link to your poem and a pleasure to have discovered your writing.

Sincerely,

Brian
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Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Angela,

As I immersed myself in these evocative verses, a poignant narrative unfolded, tracing the journey of a soul in the cold embrace of a new city life. The opening lines beautifully set the atmospheric tone, describing the lingering chill as remnants of winter, mirroring the emotional landscape awaiting exploration.

Your concise yet powerful imagery captured the essence of the protagonist's emotional state. The eyes shining in delight at the new adventure juxtaposed against the city's eventual swallowing of her fragile form painted a vivid contrast, symbolizing the transformative nature of urban life. This duality between anticipation and disillusionment laid the thematic groundwork for the unfolding narrative.

The city, personified as an entity that both welcomes and extracts, served as a compelling metaphor. The extraction of new ideas, coupled with the sense of being lost and unborn, conveyed a palpable struggle between the allure of possibilities and the harsh realities of navigating an unfamiliar terrain. The use of stark language, such as "lost, unborn," heightened the emotional impact, leaving a lingering resonance.

Your poem adeptly employs a shift in perspective, emphasizing the protagonist's disillusionment. The lines "As if no knowledge exists. / All completely stripped bare." convey a profound sense of vulnerability and disillusionment. The repetition of "bare" emphasizes the profound stripping away of familiarity, leaving the protagonist adrift in a sea of uncertainty.

The exploration of light, particularly through the imagery of street lights, adds another layer to the poem. The once bright lights that shone into broken eyes, reflecting a passion, now reveal a stark truth – the stories were lies. This shift in perception, from the hopeful illumination of passion to the revelation of falsehood, contributes to the poem's thematic depth.

For suggestions, consider expanding on the internal struggle of the protagonist. Delve into her thoughts and emotions, allowing readers to connect more deeply/directly with her journey. Additionally, experiment with varying the rhythm or rhyme scheme to enhance the poem's musicality, mirroring the ebb and flow of the protagonist's experiences. It’s a bit tight and locked into some short lines/expressions.

I found your poem as a long ago entry in the seldom utilized Monthly Poem contest. It’s unfortunate more members don’t subscribe. I think it’s the redacting rules that discourage entries. I had considered it once upon a time myself. Either way, a pleasure to have stumbled in to discover your offering.

Sincerely,

Brian
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Review of PPC 4  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello Ned,

I peered into your Promptly Poetry selections and was immediately drawn with curiosity from the title of this poem. I’m offered a view of an enchanting world, the vivid imagery of a lush, green fairy garden immediately captivates the senses. The small windmill, proudly painted in the brightest white, captured this reader as central figure in the magical landscape. Its arms, stained as brown as wood, added a touch of rustic charm, creating a visual symphony that unfolded with each line.

Your choice of introducing Norwyn Nedengrass, the gnome, as the guardian of this ethereal space added a delightful layer to the narrative. His watchful presence near the pink petunias by the babbling brook not only established a sense of connection with nature but also hinted at the underlying theme of resilience in the face of external challenges.

The playful interaction between Norwyn and the busy body bumble bees introduced a subtle tension, creating a dynamic atmosphere within the garden. The bees' taunts about the motionless windmill cleverly echoed the theme of persistence in the face of skepticism. Norwyn's stoic response, standing guard for hours, revealed a quiet strength that resonated with the overarching message.

The rhythmic flow and rhyme scheme in your poem added a musical quality, enhancing the whimsical atmosphere of the fairy garden. The repetition of sounds, as seen in "busy body bumble bees" and "Bumble-bodied busy bees," not only added a delightful cadence but also emphasized the persistent buzzing that became a backdrop to Norwyn's steadfastness.

In terms of suggestions, exploring the emotional depth of Norwyn's character could further this piece. Perhaps delve into his thoughts and feelings, providing readers with a more profound understanding of his contentment despite the challenges. Additionally, you might experiment with varying the rhyme scheme to add a touch of unpredictability, mirroring the ever-changing nature of a garden.

This poem was a pleasure to consume and consider for feedback.

Sincerely,

Brian
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Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Again Joey,

Your sonnet, "A Florida Thanksgiving," is a joyful celebration of the unique warmth and charm that Thanksgiving takes on in the Sunshine State. The 14-line structure, coupled with its rhythmic flow, captures the essence of the holiday and the distinct Floridian setting. The poem seamlessly weaves together vivid imagery, familial joy, and a sense of gratitude, creating a snapshot of a Thanksgiving celebration bathed in the glow of the Florida sun.

Stylistically, your poem embraces a vibrant and descriptive language that paints a vivid picture of the Thanksgiving gathering. The opening lines, "In the Sunshine State, where the orange trees sway," immediately set the scene, transporting the reader to the sun-kissed atmosphere of Florida. The choice of specific details, such as the rustle of palm leaves and the ocean's quiet hum, adds a sensory richness to the poem, allowing readers to feel the coastal ambiance.

The theme of family, warmth, and gratitude permeates the poem, resonating with the spirit of Thanksgiving. The image of grandsons uniting in merriment under the bright sun captures the essence of familial joy. The lines "We count our blessings for all that has come" encapsulate the overarching theme of gratitude, inviting readers to reflect on the abundance of blessings during the holiday season.

The sonnet form, with its 14 lines and iambic pentameter, provides a structured framework that complements the celebratory nature of the poem. The rhyme scheme, in this case, abab cdcd efef gg, adds a musical quality to the verses. For example, the rhyme between "bright" and "come" in the lines "Their laughter echoed under the sun so bright" and "We count our blessings for all that has come" creates a pleasing harmony, enhancing the overall rhythm.

Poetic devices, such as alliteration and personification, contribute to the poem's lyrical quality. The alliteration in "Grandsons, four in number, in merriment, unite" creates a melodic cadence that echoes the joyous gathering. Additionally, the personification of Florida's embrace adds a touch of intimacy, turning the state into a nurturing presence that embraces the celebrants.

For suggestions, consider experimenting with variations that add visual interest and emphasize key ideas. Strategic line breaks guide the reader's attention and create a dynamic visual impact. It’s always possible to explore incorporating further sensory details to immerse readership in the vibrant setting of a Florida Thanksgiving.

As always, a pleasure to peruse and provide comment for these interesting offerings.

Sincerely,

Brian
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Review of Betrayal  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello John,

I found a short fiction that held my attention long enough to keep reading beyond the first paragraph. A story with a good hook. "Betrayal" weaved a compelling narrative exploring themes of friendship, loss, and the dark consequences of suspicion and deceit. The story delves into the complexities of human relationships, gradually building tension and revealing unexpected twists.

The opening paragraphs effectively establish the somber atmosphere of Max's funeral, providing a poignant backdrop for the subsequent events. The concise yet vivid descriptions of the characters and setting create a strong visual impact, allowing readers to immerse themselves in the story. The line, "Forty-two is much too young to die," immediately evokes empathy, setting the stage for a contemplative exploration of mortality.

The introspective thoughts of the protagonist, contemplating the impact of work and stress on one's life, add depth to this narrative. This internal monologue sets the stage for the character's realization of the need to prioritize life over work. The theme of self-reflection and the quest for a more fulfilling existence is a potent element that resonates with readers.

The story unfolds with a skillful blend of mystery and psychological drama. The suspicion and uncertainty surrounding Joan's activities create a sense of intrigue, keeping the reader engaged. The narrative maintains a steady pace, and the gradual revelation of the protagonist's dark intentions adds a layer of suspense.

One area for improvement could be the pacing of the unfolding events. Consider providing more space for the emotional impact of Max's death to resonate with the reader. Allow the grief and reflection to breathe before diving into the suspicion and subsequent actions.

The portrayal of the protagonist's descent into dark thoughts and actions is compelling, but there's an opportunity to explore the internal conflict and moral dilemma in more detail. Delve deeper into the character's psyche as he grapples with the decision to confront Joan and the subsequent drastic actions.

Furthermore, while the twist in the plot is unexpected and adds a layer of complexity, possibly explore the emotional aftermath and consequences more thoroughly. The resolution appears abrupt, leaving room to get further into the psychological toll on the protagonist.

I found "Betrayal" offers a gripping exploration of human relationships, betrayal, and the consequences of suspicion. Strengthening the emotional resonance and providing more depth to the internal conflicts could elevate the impact of the story. It was a pleasure to read and contemplate your tale for this offered feedback.

Sincerely,

Brian
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Review of Old Winds  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Again Fyn,

I’ve returned for another. You’ve featured my stuff many times in newsletters and realize I should offer something back for the noteworthy attention.

"Old Winds" is a captivating exploration of time, change, and the enduring echoes of the past. Your poem beautifully weaves together the elements of style, theme, form, and poetic devices to create a vivid tapestry of imagery and reflection.

Stylistically, your use of vivid language and evocative descriptions immediately draws the reader into the natural world you've crafted. The phrase "Old winds blow through canyons carved by time" sets a contemplative tone, inviting readers to join in a journey through the ages. The consistent, almost rhythmic cadence of your lines contributes to the meditative atmosphere, allowing the reader to be immersed in the unfolding scenes.

Thematically, "Old Winds" eloquently explores the passage of time and the interconnectedness of nature. The imagery of canyons carved by time, dancing waters, and towered granite alludes to the enduring landscape that bears witness to the ages. The poem becomes a meditation on the cyclical nature of life, capturing the essence of change while emphasizing the underlying sameness that persists.

Structurally, your poem embraces a free verse form, allowing for a natural flow that mirrors the organic themes within the verses. The fluidity of your lines enhances the sense of movement, mirroring the winds and waters that play central roles in your imagery. The varied lengths of your stanzas contribute to the poem's dynamic rhythm, creating a harmonious balance between reflection and momentum.

Poetic devices enrich the sensory experience of your poem. The alliteration in "scoured by dust" and the consonance in "pummeled into a life slurry" create aural textures that enhance the imagery. The repetition of the word "Old" becomes a refrain, anchoring the poem and emphasizing the timeless quality of the elements you describe. Consider exploring more metaphorical language to amplify the emotional depth of your reflections.

As for suggestions, you might consider experimenting with line breaks to emphasize key moments or images. For instance, breaking the line after "a poem of change and sameness" could add emphasis to this central idea. Additionally, explore expanding on specific images or metaphors to provide readers with even more vivid connections to the themes of your poem.

It’s been a pleasure considering your poems for feedback. Happy Holidays! *SnowMan* *snowball*

Sincerely,

Brian
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Review of Flight Home  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Fyn,

I came across your sestina "Flight Home," in a list of Hooves’ favorites. I’m not on the list. Oh, well. I enjoyed your poem, captivated by the poignant theme of departure and the cyclic nature of life.

The opening stanzas weave a vivid scene of geese in flight, invoking a sense of nostalgia and inevitability. The use of the bow as a symbol adds a layer of metaphorical resonance, connecting the speaker's personal journey with the graceful yet determined movements of the geese.

Your style, characterized by evocative imagery and reflective introspection, seamlessly integrates with the sestina form. The repetition of end-words creates a subtle rhythmic cadence, enhancing the thematic coherence. For instance, the recurrence of "bow" echoes both the physical curvature of the boat and the emotional bowing to life's currents, creating a subtle harmony.

The thematic exploration of goodbyes and the passage of time is masterfully interwoven. The recurring motif of waves serves as a metaphor for the undulating nature of life's transitions, emphasizing the inevitability of change. The winter without goodbyes becomes a poignant moment, crystallizing the impact of absence and the emotional weight of departure.

Your use of poetic devices, such as personification in "Clouds overhead gathered gray with unfallen snow," adds depth to the narrative. The winter setting becomes a metaphor for the emotional chill of loss, underscoring the interconnectedness of nature and human experience. Perhaps, you could explore further avenues for metaphor and symbolism to amplify the emotional resonance in this piece.

In terms of suggestions, you might experiment with varying line lengths to create a dynamic visual impact. For example, elongating lines during moments of reflection and shortening them during impactful revelations can enhance the reader's engagement. If that even fits with a sestina, but with another endeavor of a similar theme.

It was a pleasure reading one of Hooves’s (Mom’s) favorites. I’ll go sulk in a corner now. *Laugh*

Sincerely,

Brian
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Review of Nepenthe  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello H. M. Marie ,

Upon prying in to look upon "Nepenthe," I found myself drawn toward the tumultuous emotion that resonates through your title-driven poem. The opening lines, "I would rend the skies – fracture the empyrean ether with a scream," set a powerful tone, immediately invoking a sense of passion and urgency. The vivid imagery of tearing through the celestial realm creates a strong visual impact, and it effectively captivates the reader's attention.

Your choice of style is notable, blending the ethereal with the visceral. The juxtaposition of "fiery legions" in the second stanza contrasts with the delicacy of "gossamer Moment" in the closing lines. This duality enhances the emotional depth, painting a nuanced portrayal of longing and determination. The poem's structure, with its concise yet impactful lines, contributes to the overall intensity, allowing each word to carry significant weight.

The theme of relentless pursuit and the desire to reunite permeates throughout the poem, creating a sense of yearning that resonates on a profound level. The metaphorical hunt through the cosmic expanse adds a layer of mystery, inviting readers to explore the depths of emotion embedded in the verses. The use of celestial imagery, such as "meteoric gossamer Moment," elevates the poem to a cosmic scale, infusing it with a transcendent quality.

In terms of poetic devices, your incorporation of enjambment enhances the flow, creating a seamless progression from one line to the next. For instance, the enjambment in "fling aside / dust of fiery legions" propels the reader forward, intensifying the urgency of the narrative. Additionally, the repetition of the conditional statement "If I believed" adds a contemplative layer, emphasizing the delicate balance between hope and skepticism.

As a suggestion, consider exploring the emotional landscape further by incorporating sensory elements. With the employment of textures, sounds, and scents that accompany the speaker's celestial journey, this could be enriching for the reader's experience. For instance, describing the "fiery legions" with sensory details could amplify the immersive quality of your poem.

I found the narrative of this short poem very commanding. Somehow, the structure caused me to look at it upside down. It even reads well backwards, reads as one sentence, because you could start with line eight up to top and it would almost be the same. Or, what appeared to me. Just one of the little things that suggest something is well written, to me.

Sincerely,

Brian
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Review of On the Other Side  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Joey,

"On the Other Side" is beautifully crafted, how love transcends physical distances, incorporating elements of nature and celestial to convey a deep emotional connection. The style is contemplative and romantic, evoking yearning and devotion. The theme of enduring love across vast distances is interwoven with vivid imagery, creating a narrative that should resonate with readers.

The form is structured, utilizing well-defined stanzas to guide through the speaker's emotional journey. Each stanza contributes to gradual revelation of the feelings, mirroring the unfolding layers of love. The use of rhyme, such as in "dreams" and "seams," adds a musical quality to the verses, enhancing the overall rhythmic flow. This rhythmic consistency contributes to the poem's soothing and contemplative atmosphere.

Poetic devices are employed with finesse to enhance the emotional impact. The metaphorical use of the Atlantic Ocean as a metaphor for the physical separation between the speaker and their beloved is particularly poignant. The line "Miles apart, yet close in dreams and thoughts" encapsulates the central theme, emphasizing the power of love to bridge geographical distances through shared dreams and thoughts. The comparison of the beloved's laughter to a melody in the ocean's song adds a sensory layer to the poem, invoking aural and visual imagery that deepens the reader's connection to the emotions conveyed.

Rich in its exploration of love, further exploring the personal reflections on the challenges and triumphs of a long-distance relationship could further the impact of this poem. Delving into specific moments or memories shared across the Atlantic could add a more intimate dimension, allowing one to connect on a more personal level. For instance, expanding on the metaphor of the lighthouse beacon and the anchor could create additional layers with symbolism, offering insights into the emotional resilience and commitment.

Your poem's closing lines beautifully capture the essence of enduring love, emphasizing voice of this unwavering devotion. To enhance the emotional resonance, experimenting with varying line lengths or incorporating enjambment in the final stanza could add dimension. This can create a sense of fluidity, mirroring the boundless nature of the depicted love.

In consideration, "On the Other Side" is a heartfelt exploration of love's ability to transcend physical distances. Its contemplative style, vivid imagery, and effective use of poetic devices contribute to a poignant and resonant narrative. And, with subtle adjustments to rhythm and exploration of more specific moments, your poem has the potential to deepen its emotional impact. A pleasure once again to view and offer my thoughts.

Sincerely,

Brian

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Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Thaddeus,

"Longing To See Sis" is a heartfelt elegy that beautifully captures the essence of love, loss, and the enduring connection with a departed sister. The poem exhibits a genuine emotional depth, conveying the profound impact Linda had on the speaker's life.

The style of the poem is sincere and evocative, allowing the emotions to resonate with the reader. The straightforward language adds to the authenticity of the piece, making it accessible and relatable. The use of rhyme, particularly in pairs, enhances the rhythmic flow, contributing to the poem's musicality. For instance, in the lines "Your smile lit up our hearts, and still does to this day. / We miss hearing your laugh, so we take time to pray," the rhyming creates a gentle, comforting cadence.

The theme of longing and reminiscence is poignantly conveyed throughout. The speaker expresses the ache of missing Linda's presence, from the warmth of her smile to the joy of hearing her laugh. This theme is universal, and many readers will connect with the emotions of yearning for a loved one.

The form of the poem adheres to a consistent structure, utilizing quatrains with alternating rhyme. This provides a sense of order and symmetry, enhancing the poem's overall cohesiveness. The simplicity of the form complements the straightforward language, contributing to the poem's accessibility.

The use of specific details, such as Linda's homemade apple jelly and her love for pranking with flamingos, adds a personal touch to the elegy. These details create a vivid image of Linda, making her presence palpable in the poem. The mention of the flamingo prank becomes a poignant symbol, representing the lighthearted and playful memories shared with Linda.

One suggestion could be to explore more varied poetic devices to enrich the imagery and evoke a deeper emotional response. Consider incorporating metaphor or symbolism to amplify the impact of Linda's influence. Or, just something to consider incorporating when crafting that next poem. Expanding on the symbolism of the pink flamingo could provide a nuanced layer to this piece.

"Longing To See Sis" is a touching tribute that resonates with genuine emotion. The heartfelt expressions of missing Linda and cherishing her memory create a moving elegy. I found it beneficial to read and consider your poem for this feedback.

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Brian
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Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Chris,

"From Under The Willow Tree" establishes a captivating atmosphere with its evocative setting and mysterious elements. The story unfolds with a strong hook, drawing readers into Fae's world beneath the willow tree. The theme of a young girl navigating the challenges of her haunted environment adds a layer of intrigue and sets the stage for the unexpected.

The vivid description of the willow tree as Fae's refuge effectively creates a sense of security in contrast to the haunting experiences she faces elsewhere. The haunting entities, especially Arbuckle and Bucky, contribute to the eerie ambiance. These elements provide a solid foundation for the story, giving it a unique and engaging premise.

The pacing is well-managed, gradually building tension as Fae's curiosity about the barn intensifies. The interaction with the haunts adds complexity to the plot, hinting at a larger mystery surrounding Bucky. The narrative effectively combines elements of the supernatural with the mundane struggles of a young girl, creating a compelling blend of genres.

However, as the story progresses, you might want to consider providing more details about the haunts and their backstory. This could deepen the reader's connection to the supernatural elements and enhance the overall intrigue. Exploring the history of the farm and its previous tenants could add layers to the narrative.

The ending introduces a surprising twist that adds a chilling dimension to the story. The revelation about Bucky's true nature raises questions and leaves room for further exploration. The abrupt shift from curiosity to fear is well-executed, contributing to the suspense.

One suggestion is to refine the dialogue tags and ensure clarity in the exchanges between Fae and the haunts. For instance, in the line, "Play," Fae heard his voice, consider specifying whether the voice is audible or more of a mental communication to avoid confusion.

"From Under The Willow Tree" holds much promise with its intriguing premise, atmospheric descriptions, and unexpected twists. Expanding on the supernatural elements and providing additional context could elevate the story further. I wish you success in your writing endeavors.

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Brian
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Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hello Leighoire ,

Your story, "Do You Want To Know?" presents a gripping scenario and explores complex family dynamics. The opening paragraphs draw readers in with a vivid portrayal of the psychic medium's experience, setting the stage for a mysterious and emotional journey. The use of sensory details, such as the energy spots and the jolt through the spine, effectively immerses the audience in the supernatural atmosphere.

The theme of secrets and revelations is well-established, adding depth to the narrative. The unfolding drama between the characters, particularly the family's reactions to the psychic medium's revelations, creates tension and keeps the reader engaged. The incorporation of a diary as a key plot element adds an intriguing layer to the story.

One notable strength is the dialogue, which feels authentic and serves as a crucial tool for character development. The distinct voices of each character contribute to a realistic portrayal of their personalities and emotions. For instance, the daughters' skepticism and the mother's emotional turmoil are palpable through their words.

However, to enhance the story, consider providing more nuanced introspection from the psychic medium. Delve into her thoughts and emotions, offering readers a deeper understanding of her perspective and the challenges she faces in conveying messages from the other side. This could strengthen the connection between readers and the protagonist.

Additionally, while the dialogue is a highlight, be cautious of repetitive phrases, such as the frequent use of "I asked" and "she replied." Varying the dialogue tags in your attribution could contribute to a smoother flow and prevent monotony.

In conclusion, your story holds promise with its compelling premise and well-crafted dialogue. Strengthening the introspective elements and refining dialogue tags can elevate the narrative. You've created an engaging story that combines the supernatural with familial drama. I found it a pleasure to have read that I might provide this response.

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Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Michael Stirland ,

"Harmon The Hedgehog" is a delightful children's story that combines elements of imagination, bravery, and humor. The opening paragraphs successfully set the tone, introducing readers to the charming protagonist, Harmon, and establishing the whimsical nature of the tale.

The theme of courage and the power of encouragement shines through, offering a positive and uplifting message for young readers. Harmon's imaginative world, complete with a theme song and a wooden sword, adds a playful touch, making the story engaging for children. The incorporation of a theme song not only adds a musical element but also contributes to the story's potential for adaptation into other media forms.

The vivid descriptions of Harmon and his surroundings create a visually rich experience for young readers. The use of details like "beady black eyes," "round furry body," and "cute button nose" paints an envisioned picture of the hedgehog, enhancing the overall appeal of this story’s narrative.

The introduction of the "monster" as a fence post with a bucket cleverly plays with the idea of perception and fear, providing a humorous twist to the story. The theme song for the monster adds an amusing touch, showcasing the story's whimsicality.

One suggestion for improvement could be to expand on Harmon's emotional journey. Providing more insight into Harmon's feelings and thoughts as he faces the perceived monster would allow young readers to better connect with the character. For example, describe his initial hesitation, building anticipation, and the surge of courage after receiving encouragement. You might also consider incorporating more interactive elements or questions that encourage engagement with the intended readers. This could involve asking them to imagine their own courageous adventures or suggest what Harmon might encounter next in his ongoing escapades.

In conclusion, your hedgehog children’s tale offers a delightful and imaginative journey for young readers. Strengthening the emotional connection with the protagonist and encouraging reader participation could further enhance its overall impact.

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Review of WHISPERING WISHES  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Dear Departed Sherri, *Angel*

I was caught by the title. Engaging with "Whispering Wishes," I found a poem that reflects an exploration of grief and the impact of loss. The theme of yearning for a departed loved one permeates the verses, creating an emotional effect that many readers might be able connect with. However, some aspects of style, theme, and form I can provide with constructive feedback.

Stylistically, the poem’s simple language should effectively convey emotions tied to mourning for any reader. The repetition of the refrain "I’m constantly whispering wishes" serves as the anchor, emphasizing the persistent nature of this grief. However, need to be mindful of overusing this repetition, as it could lead to a sense of monotony. It might have been considered to use varied phrasing to maintain the emotional intensity while introducing a more subtle nuance.

The theme of loss is exhibited throughout, creating a noted narrative. The poem seems to rely on an attempt at sincerity, allowing readers to believe the depth of the speaker's pain. To enhance the thematic impact, it would have been wise to get more specific into memories or experiences that evoke the essence of the departed. This would have added a layer of vividness, allowing readers to also relate in the intimacy of those types of moments.

Structurally, the poem adheres to a consistent rhythm and rhyme scheme, contributing to its accessibility. However, it needed to be cautious of predictability. Experimenting with breaking away from strict rhyme schemes at key moments helps create surprise or emphasize certain emotions. For example, in the line "Wishing the emptiness I feel would subside," would need adjusting for the rhyme scheme to amplify the emotional weight of the sentiment portrayed.

Poetic devices, such as metaphors and similes, can be a poet’s friend, elevate imagery within a poem. Introducing figurative language to paint a more vivid emotional landscape would have helped. For instance, instead of stating "God’s holding you now until I join you," exploring metaphorical expressions can convey the spiritual connection, deepening emotional impact.

Now, if suggestions were made, it would be incorporating sensory details to evoke a more immersive experience. Appealing to the senses by describing sights, sounds, or scents associated with the memories of the departed is poetry 101. This could have enriched the reader's connection to the speaker's grief in this old poem.


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Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Max Kwoa,

"Irony, O Irony..." unfolds as a poignant elegy that delicately navigates the complex emotions surrounding loss, while also addressing societal shifts. The opening lines, "Mellow fumes of incense waltzing above your grave, Barely soothe myriads of senses all so livid," evoke a vivid atmosphere, using sensory imagery to immerse the reader in the grieving process. The choice of "livid" adds a layer of intensity, reflecting the emotional turmoil provoked by the perceived indignity of Irony's demise.

Your style in this elegy is distinctive, combining elegance with a touch of lamentation. The repetition of "Mellow fumes of incense waltzing" serves as a melancholic refrain, emphasizing the ritualistic aspect of mourning. The poem's tone oscillates between reverence and frustration, mirroring the conflicting emotions tied to the departure of a cherished concept. The deliberate use of enjambment, as seen in "Enraged by the ignominy of your passing," propels the reader forward, heightening the emotional impact of each line.

The theme of intellectual resilience against societal norms emerges as a focal point. The lines, "Deterring pompous arrogance defined your quest; Glorious battles facing bored minds all so rigid," reflect a nuanced critique of conformity and the intellectual battles Irony faced. The elegy suggests that Irony served as a guardian against the stifling nature of conventional thinking. The juxtaposition of "pompous arrogance" and "bored minds" highlights the societal forces that sought to undermine the essence of Irony.

In terms of poetic devices, the use of alliteration in "Glorious battles facing bored minds" enhances the musicality of the verse while underscoring the conflict between intellectual vigor and complacency. The repetition of the word "passing" in the closing lines creates a poignant echo, emphasizing the finality of Irony's departure. Additionally, the clever incorporation of contemporary elements like "wifi" adds a layer of relevance, subtly commenting on the contemporary challenges faced by nuanced discourse in a technologically driven world.

As a suggestion, consider exploring the impact of Irony's absence on the broader cultural landscape. How does society grapple with the void left by a concept that once served as a check against superficial thinking? Expanding on these societal repercussions could deepen the elegy's thematic exploration.

I enjoying experiencing this poem, to give thought and lend my feedback.

Sincerely,

Brian
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Review of Portraits  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Sharon,

Recently, I took an interest at looking for poems emulating art to inspire some ekphrastic poetry of my own and discovered your offering.

Congratulations on your First Place win in the Hopeless Romantics Photo Prompt Contest with your poem "Portraits." I’ve come here to explore the elements of style, theme, form, and poetic devices that contribute to the success of your piece.

Stylistically, I have found a poem that begins with a command, "Take my hand, be still with me," immediately drawing this reader into a moment of intimacy. This direct address sets a contemplative tone, inviting readers to share in the speaker's emotional journey. The use of vivid imagery, such as "movement in the angry sea" and "the setting sun upon her face," creates a palpable atmosphere, enhancing the overall impact.

Thematically, "Portraits" captures a poignant snapshot of a romantic encounter, emphasizing the transient nature of love. The portrayal of lovers in a "last embrace" conveys a sense of both urgency and finality, echoing the impermanence of fleeting moments. This theme aligns seamlessly with the photo prompt contest, as it translates visual inspiration into a deeply emotive verbal expression.

Structurally, the poem adopts a concise form, fittingly mirroring the fleeting nature of the captured moment. The brevity of the lines adds to the sense of immediacy, allowing readers to immerse themselves in the emotion without unnecessary embellishment. The careful balance between brevity and depth showcases your skill in conveying a rich narrative within a limited space.

Poetic devices play a pivotal role in enhancing the emotional resonance of the poem. The juxtaposition of the lovers' embrace with the dolphin's play and the tearing apart by the wisp of air introduces a layer of complexity. This use of contrast creates a poignant tension, underscoring the delicate nature of love and its vulnerability to external forces. The "wisp of air" becomes a subtle yet powerful symbol of disruption, echoing the fragility inherent in romantic relationships.

As for suggestions, should you revisit, you could consider experimenting with enjambment to evoke a continuous flow between lines, mirroring the fluidity of the depicted scene. For example, in the lines "Now gaze upon the dolphin's play / beneath the setting sun's display," a seamless transition between these thoughts could intensify the emotional connection.

It was a unique pleasure to take interest in your poem, to see how it functions, and lend comment.

Sincerely,

Brian
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Review of Wraith of Time  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY!! "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


A Belated Happy Account Anniversary, Aundria:

As I immersed myself in "Wraith of Time," the poignant metaphor of a caged bird standing on the grave of her dreams immediately struck a chord. The opening stanza set a somber tone, with the bird warbling an aria on the burial ground of unfulfilled aspirations. The theme of captivity and the impact on one's dreams becomes the focal point, unraveling a narrative of stifled potential. Very familiar to me, in my own pursuits.

The poem's style does well to capture the emotional weight of confinement. The juxtaposition of the bird's past life being an opera, and the current reality of a prison, paints a stark contrast. This stylistic choice highlights the transformative power of freedom and the subsequent loss when confined. The use of "trills a mournful refrain" intensifies the sense of sorrow, echoes the bird's lament within this metaphorical prison.

In terms of form, the poem adheres to a structured yet fluid pattern, mirroring the passage of time. The progression…remembering a life without bars to the monotony of repeating ballads…reflects the gradual erosion of hope and creativity in the face of confinement. The choice to present the bird's songs as unchanging over the years adds the layer of melancholy, emphasizes the stagnation within the cage.

Poetic devices, particularly the choice to draw inspiration from Maya Angelou's "Caged Bird," add depth to your poem’s narrative. The quote from Eowyn in "The Lord of the Rings" further enriches the thematic exploration, underscoring the fear of being confined and losing the opportunity for greatness. These intertextual references enhance the poem's resonance, connects it to broader literary themes of captivity and lost potential. For me, this resonates as a suppressed writer. We often get stuck in life, in our choices where to remain. My voice, stifled, cannot find a forum. Effectual, this poem, in getting a response from me.

As for any suggestions, it might be a good idea to consider exploring additional sensory details to evoke a stronger emotional response. That’s if you should revisit this older poem. Descriptions of the physical and emotional toll on the caged bird could amplify a reader's empathy. For example, getting further into the bird's physical state or the changing colors of its feathers over time might add some vividness to the portrayal.

It was a pleasure to have perused your poetry to find this particular piece to consider for my feedback. Hope you enjoy the rest of this month’s account anniversary.

Sincerely,

Brian
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Review of Anger  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*BalloonO* Happy WDC Anniversary Milhaud - Long Tail , *BalloonV*

Upon delving into the depths of "Anger," the stark simplicity of its title sets the tone for a journey into the tumultuous terrain of human emotion. The use of ellipses after the word "Anger" creates a pregnant pause, a breath held in anticipation, foreshadowing the intensity that unfolds in the subsequent lines. The brevity of these lines, combined with the strategic use of spacing, amplifies the emotional weight, drawing the reader into the visceral experience of anger.

The style of your poem exhibits a striking contrast, mirroring the turbulent nature of the emotion it explores. The initial lines employ vivid imagery, portraying anger as a descent into a dark abyss. The alliteration in "dark and roiling" intensifies the turbulence, while the repetition of short, staccato phrases in "a plunge downward," "a light sucking," and "disappearing act" creates a sense of relentless descent, mirroring the suffocating grip of anger.

Thematically, your poem masterfully navigates the turbulent journey from anger to liberation. The imagery of "leaden limbs" and "anchor weight" vividly conveys the physical and emotional burden of anger, anchoring the reader in the oppressive depths of this emotion. However, the turning point, marked by the gentle imagery of a "twirling kitten's tail" and the liberating ascent propelled by positive experiences, introduces a nuanced perspective on anger. The contrast between the oppressive descent and the featherlight ascension captures the transformative power of positive moments in overcoming anger.

Poetic devices play a pivotal role in shaping the emotional landscape of your poem. The metaphorical use of a "black hole" as a representation of anger is particularly poignant. It encapsulates the all-consuming, seemingly inescapable nature of this emotion. The juxtaposition of the "hateful mud-sucker" further personifies anger, portraying it as a malevolent force clinging to one's being. This vivid imagery serves to evoke a visceral response, immersing this reader to acknowledge the emotional turbulence described.

One suggestion to enhance the thematic depth is to explore the aftermath of anger's dissipation. Perhaps, if the poet has time to reconsider, delve into the lingering effects or the process of healing, offering a more comprehensive exploration of the emotional journey. This could provide a more rounded narrative to complement the powerful depiction of anger and liberation. Readers often enjoy resolution in a poem that heads in this direction, right after the described conflict.

In conclusion, "Anger" is a visceral exploration of the tumultuous emotional landscape, skillfully navigating the descent into anger and the subsequent ascent to bliss. Should you revisit, expanding on the aftermath of anger for a more comprehensive narrative can give completion, but overall, your poem resonates with evocative imagery and emotional intensity. It was a pleasure to discover and consider for feedback. Have a great WDC Account Anniversary month…almost over.

Sincerely,

Brian
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Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*BalloonB* "Once Upon a Thanksgiving" , a WDC Account Anniversary Review *BalloonY*

Hello Wolfius

Seems appropriate to consider your poetry about the season, incorporated in this anniversary review.

Upon diving into "Once Upon A Thanksgiving," I find myself immersed in the delightful rhythm of its verses. The playful use of rhyme and the sing-song quality create an inviting atmosphere, drawing me into the heartwarming spirit of the holiday. The poem's brevity mirrors the simplicity of Thanksgiving, emphasizing the essence of gratitude and familial bonds.

The style of your poem, characterized by its succinct lines and whimsical tone, allows for an accessible and enjoyable read. The repetition of ending sounds in "chompin'" and "giving" adds a musical quality, enhancing the overall cadence. This musicality resonates with the festivity of Thanksgiving, making the poem feel like a lively celebration captured in words.

Thematically, your work beautifully captures the essence of Thanksgiving — focusing not only on the tangible elements of turkeys and pumpkins but, more importantly, on the intangible aspects of family and love. The simplicity of the language becomes a strength as it mirrors the straightforward nature of the holiday itself, emphasizing the value of gratitude over material abundance.

In terms of poetic devices, the rhyme scheme contributes to the poem's harmony. The AABB scheme in the first two lines establishes an expectation, while the departure from it in the third and fourth lines surprises the reader, adding a touch of unpredictability. This subtle deviation mirrors the unexpected joys found in moments of genuine gratitude.

One suggestion to consider is the exploration of metaphor or symbolism to deepen the thematic layers. Introducing metaphorical elements, such as comparing the act of giving thanks to the blooming of flowers or the warmth of a hearth, could add richness to your already charming piece.

In conclusion, "Once Upon A Thanksgiving" is a delightful ode to the spirit of gratitude, encapsulating warmth and joy of the holiday. Consider experimenting with metaphor to add depth, but overall, your poem radiates the heartwarming essence of Thanksgiving as it stands. Have a wonderful season and happy 1st birthday in our writing community.

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Review of I AM.....  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*PartyHatBl* This is an Account Anniversary review. *ConfettiB*

Hello Bash!

I've had the pleasure of reading your poem, "I AM…," and must commend you on your distinctive style and thought-provoking theme. The concise nature of the poem immediately captures attention, and your use of repetition adds a rhythmic quality that enhances the overall impact.

The introspective opening of the poem, with the repetition of "Way too," sets a reflective tone, inviting readers to contemplate the complexities within the speaker's identity. The contrasts you present, such as being "way too big" for some people and "way too happy" for sadness, create a vivid and engaging portrayal of the speaker's self-awareness.

Your style is notably bold and unapologetic, contributing to the poem's strength. The repeated use of "Way too" serves as a powerful device, emphasizing the speaker's assertiveness in defining themselves. Consider exploring additional stylistic elements or experimenting with line breaks to further emphasize key phrases, enhancing the overall visual and auditory experience.

The theme of self-identity and the rejection of societal expectations is clear and resonant. To deepen this exploration, you might consider providing specific examples or anecdotes that illustrate the speaker's defiance against societal norms. This could strengthen the emotional connection for readers, allowing them to relate more intimately to the speaker's journey.

The form of the poem, with its concise structure, aligns well with the theme of simplicity mentioned in the last line. However, you could experiment with enjambment or varied line lengths to add a layer of unpredictability, mirroring the unpredictability of the speaker's identity. This could enhance the overall flow and impact of the poem.

Your use of opposites and contradictions, such as being "way too cool" to be hot and "way too simple" to hold a grudge, contributes to the depth of the poem. Consider expanding on these contradictions, providing deeper explanations or vivid imagery that paints a more detailed picture of the speaker's multifaceted nature.

I found that, "I AM…" to be a compelling exploration of identity with its bold style and resonant theme. It’s possible to elevate the poem further, if you give further consideration, with experimentation anllowing additional stylistic elements, specific examples to enhance the theme, and exploring varied line structures. Happy 1st WDC Account Anniversary!

Keep up the excellent work!

Sincerely,

Brian
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Review of Dear God  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*BalloonB* Happy 1st WDC Account Anniversary KJB ,

I have come to offer a review for your anniversary at WDC. LET’S GET STARTED…

In this poignant exploration of faith and disillusionment, the poem "Dear God" delves into the complex dynamics between humanity and divinity. The opening lines set a reflective tone, questioning the perceived silence of a distant god and the temporal disparities between human and divine perception. The introspective nature invites readers to ponder their own spiritual connections.

The poet employs a conversational style, utilizing short, impactful lines to convey the emotional weight of feeling forsaken. The repetition of "Dear God" acts as a refrain, emphasizing the desperate plea for understanding. The poem's structure reflects the disjointed relationship described, with fragmented thoughts mirroring the fractured connection between the speaker and their deity.

Themes of abandonment, confusion, and the tarnishing of sacred bonds pervade the verses. The imagery of war ships and angels left at the gate evokes a sense of betrayal and highlights the consequences of misinterpreted faith. The use of metaphors, such as "Letting Go spells out," adds depth to the narrative, emphasizing the unheard voice and the struggle to release ingrained beliefs.

The second stanza intensifies the emotional turmoil, addressing feelings of blame and disbelief. The vivid imagery of hell engulfing homelands serves as a powerful metaphor for the societal chaos fueled by religious discord. The question of worthiness becomes central, questioning the sacredness of the speaker's relationship with the divine—a theme that resonates with anyone grappling with their faith.

The third stanza introduces a personal journey, where the speaker confesses to periods of denial and hypocrisy. The metaphor of a mirrored finish suggests a self-reflective struggle, while the mention of a littered sea and dried-up stream conveys the environmental toll of humanity's actions. This shift adds layers to the poem, expanding its scope beyond the individual to address broader existential and ecological concerns.

In the final lines, the reference to Gaia and the metaphor of blood running through pipelines confront the reader with the consequences of human actions on the planet. The poem subtly critiques the ego-centric worldview that blinds individuals to the interconnectedness of all life, creating a powerful call to reevaluate our impact on the world.

Food for fodder.

Sincerely,

Brian
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Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*BalloonP* *PartyHatBl* A WDC Account Anniversary review.
Subject: Review of Pennywise short fiction, “Night Of The Trumps!"*Scared* *Monster2*

*Balloonr* Happy WDC Account Anniversary, *BalloonB*

Dear Pennywise,

I explored your portfolio upon learning this month is your…*counts on fingers and toes* (hmm, I better have that looked at) 18th year at Writing.com?! I stumbled into this fiction quickie, struck by the title, “Night Of The Trumps!”…a great hook. I've read this flash fiction short story, and appreciate the intriguing premise you've set up in just a few words.

Your choice of dialogue adds a dynamic element to the story, creating a sense of urgency and tension. The "Night of the Living Dead" reference adds a playful touch, engaging readers with a familiar nod. However, the brevity of the piece leaves some aspects under-explored. Probably written for contest or activity, it’s a true challenge. The introspective opening could have benefitted from a deeper dive into the characters' thoughts and emotions. Give more to go on, motivations, quirks, back story, any conflict. For instance, you could expand on Barbara's feelings about her name and Kevin's teasing, giving readers a stronger connection to the characters.

The theme of the story is certainly clear, but consider weaving in subtle foreshadowing or hints throughout the introspective section to build anticipation. That’s what readers need, look for…and purpose of that anticipation. This could create a more cohesive narrative, enhancing the impact of the unexpected twist when the masks are revealed.

Regarding the ending, the abrupt shift from seeking help to a menacing situation is effective, but providing a bit more context or background could enrich the reader's experience. Perhaps a brief mention of the characters' suspicions or a hint at the masks earlier in the story could make the twist even more impactful.

Your use of dialogue is a strength, injecting personality into the characters. To enhance this, consider varying the sentence structures in your introspective paragraphs. This can add a rhythmic flow to the narrative and keep the reader engaged.

In conclusion, "Night Of The Trumps!" has a promising foundation. You can take it beyond these 300 words to see what more you can do to really put that hooked reaver in story. To elevate this even further, get deeper into character introspection, more dimensional, foreshadow the theme, provide a bit more context for the ending. What is it about presidents masks that are so creepy iconic trope for these artistic endeavors like cinema?

Keep up the good work! I wish you success. Have a great month!

Sincerely,

Brian
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