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This poem and the comments left for it in blog intrigued me. I came here tonight to learn more about you, reconnect my memories to the past. It's hard to keep perspective around here without revisiting the old haunts, and thought of you as one of my stops.

I think you and I lost very important people to us, our mothers. I found that I had some guilt going into my mother's remaining days in a nursing home, not knowing how to be with her. She was incommunicative at the end and I was about to start a family. I wished I could have shared that with her.

But, when I eulogized my mother the day of her funeral, something wonderful happened. She lifted me. I would choke through that eulogy lovingly crafted for her undeterred. And my brothers hugged and held me after like never before. My third brother, a Jehovah's witness, was only critical and withholding, and I suppose, jealous because of my talent for words and the attention I received right before he was to take the podium. Follow that, Gary.

You, however, still felt loss and grief and were compelled to compose a poem about your living sorrow. It's like there was no message left for by Mom you after her passing. That's unfortunate.

When I think about this, I'm reminded that for nearly a month after my mother's departure she was in my dreams every night. She was alive and whole again and celebrating like she was still home, in the past, in my memories. She could talk to me again! It could have been, these dreams, were a part of me (somewhere in this dark soul) that I didn't know existed. But, it surely felt spiritual and life affirming while my wife lay next to me with a baby in her belly.

It should have reaffirmed my faith, but it did give me great joy and comfort because she healed me after death, with my loss. I was afraid I didn't know how to act of behave because no one in my life had died before that. One year later, my dad did. And I was stronger and more capable of being an adult about it. It's sad that you did not have that same experience.

Your poem, like Kare Enga pointed out, had long lines and I thought could use verses or spacing to break up a large block of text to help with the read and to consider your words more carefully.

I did like the repeated introductory line to some of the thoughts that gave it the rhythm that Kare mentioned. A poem should flow off the tongue and I'm sure if you had read this aloud it would. It is endearing and personal while relatable to many. I don't think the common words chosn were trite or cliché like greeting card poetry, but hit the mark the way they should.

This was nice,

Brian

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This is another in reviews rediscovering a blog that is memorial now and has information from the past that could inform this reader about the author and early goals as a published writer who resided at this internet community.

I wish I could have helped you edit your text. I might not have been as much help in my early days, as I was rediscovering writing. I didn't have a handle on the workings of the internet. I treated these social communities more like interactions i might have at a business. You were there to show me the ropes. Now I look back and see in your blog a passage from "Doorway To Hearts" your first and likely most successful self-published novel. Let's repose for context:

'August 1, 2006

More on "A DOORWAY TO HEARTS"

Trent's deep blue eyes focused upon the gorgeous jade-eyed woman he had just rescued from the Grizzly, and he knew without a doubt he would wed her one day soon. Beautiful wasn't the word for Kristy Whittaker, he thought as he carried her away from the bear's dead carcass.
Unaware they had been spotted, Trent and Blazing Star's secret would soon be exposed and make following their hearts even more difficult.
"Follow your heart, it will lead to salvation"...or will it lead to Blazing Star and Trent's ultimate defeat?'



If I were helping you to edit this today, the first thing you share in a piece of writing is the most important: the hook. What I found was descriptiveness and a section of writing that rushed and needed to take it's time and avoid redundancy. You describe his eyes looking at her eyes in one sentence. People might say, 'so what?'

You don't want to get a reader derailed before they even start. The open to something should be the most pristine, if it is your intent to capture the eyes of potential viewers of your fiction. There is also a love or adjectives, especially brilliant ones. There are two to describe Trent's eyes and three adjectives to describe her, including her jade eyes.

I could spend almost an entire paragraph getting to know the eye color of two people being introduced. I could use an entire paragraph to introduce the physical features of one character. Either way, I would take my time. If you give readers too much they might miss important details, re-read and show down, and just skim or quit. You don't eat your food fast and you don't force feed adjectives and descriptions. I prefer pacing when it is a novel. If it's a short story, descriptions get more impactful. Not enough time to lay out plot and resulting actions otherwise.

So, that's what I learned from this portion of your blog tonight, the rediscovery of a former author that I have wondered about from time to time. I'm hoping to collide with more details to construct and image of you, since only one really, really one photograph circulated the entire internet. You were older than me. Probably an identity thing or an age thing. Who knows.

Brian

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for entry "Sherri L. Gibson
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My assumption upon reading this would be that you wrote this as an introduction or a jacket cover to what I believe might be your first novel. Though, you wrote many. I don't know if the opening "An Indian!" was meant to be provocative, but is historically accurate of what a person would have thought or said in those times. IN current America, PC culture has informed many people that even to frame or capture a remark that, especially one as an introduction to a book, would send up those flairs to the moral police.

You actually weren't a well known author, self-published. I'm sure people in this community would disagree. But, because you flew under that radar, I would have still likely to this day, a book cover that shouts this out would not really draw the ire of anyone, unless under just the right circumstances.

This genre of fiction reminds me of a dying type of literature that might be very hard to resurrect, just as television westerns of yore. But, you never know. I felt the introduction teased enough and had enough plot to give a potential reader something to pique interest. I might have noted the slightest of grammar problems, on a short missive that shows the tiniest of strain to edit for detail and flow. It didn't come off as fresh or invigorating, but it got the job done.

This was the introduction it appears to your blog in 2006 which doesn't have a heck of a lot of entries. I decided to revisit it tonight, as there may be some mysteries hiding about the writer who sidled up to me and gave me encouragement in the early days. I'm sorry that it soured and that I didn't understandwhy. I think for all the cheerleading you did, you might have approached with compassion to mend our fences. when I saw another side of you I was devastated. That doesn't mean you weren't a good person. It means we had a communication problem.

I know I could be a bit prickly even in those days, but I was naive and full of a desire to write and be published. I met you and sought your advice because I wanted the traditional approach, unlike your own. I guess I questioned self-publishing too much. Maybe, that was my flaw. I don't think it's ethical to pry on the wallets of authors wanting to see their words in print. So much has changed since the days of Publish America, where your novels saw print. Now, we have Amazon and other online or direct to print books. You never have to pay to see your words unless you want them on pulp.

So, yeah. It's been some time since I started here and you rambled in and out of my email account with review after review of all my awkward poems. You were a horrible speller but full of enthusiasm and cheer. I had my reasons for doubting authenticity back then because no one had a face, just words. I never got to know you or really anyone else here for that matter in 14 years. You'd think as writers it would be easier. Again, I'm the prickly one.

To conclude, I want to revisit your words tonight and try to get a perspective of the past. So many words have been purged. Maybe, I'll get another glimpse of you, the old days, me, somewhere in the text. Not sure.

Brian

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Dear WindSpirit3

In your poem "The Soul Deep Growsing, I was so captured by the expressive Capitalized words the narrator is hashing out like thoughts that can't completely connect or fill sentences. I stopped after one read and decided, from the bottom, to read this poem in complete reverse and it had what felt like coded messages going the other way. Look at me spinning your record backwards.

But that's what a good poem with a unique structure can do for a reader. We are inspired, or at least I am, to look at meaning through different lenses. I think you have captured something here that might come from a great amount of experience penning words. I have come to this poem now want to take away some lessons and hopefully provided my response to what I've visualized and felt.

A beautiful Rose..

Of strawberry Awhaireness

Bam! Struck. I'm sure not a typo...right? But, a character is introduced, being created and the narrator is slowly and somewhat incoherently responding to her.

From down Deepness grows

The Intimate Intellectual Compassion, I so seek.

I can assume Rose was a nurse and the narrator was a patient in whatever state. The mind is struggling here for whatever reasons to process but is compelled by reaction to get it out. It could be a stumbling in the mind like one who is drunk, on drugs or just mentally incapacitated. Either way, this works on a real time basis, trying to sort out an assesment of this woman.

Not sure of next line to be

But now feeling Completes Thee

The Wisestubborn in me

There is more words enjambed and creating unique compound words that strangely describe. I especially enjoyed, "But now feeling completes thee". It feels a bit like self-awareness in this encounter. I can't help but feel patient is bonding to nurse, though I could be interpreting that wrong. I have the poem description line as a terse introduction to this that doesn't give a sense of any sentimentality.

The following seems like it would take a lot of inspection to fully inform a reader that this is more than gibberish, though I suspect some is. This first line starts out like words that just sound alike. Some may have meaning to the voice in this poem. The brain is aiming for something coherent in this moment, grasping all and anything that come to mind

Ground - Proud - Announce - Soundly

Admits me, from subtle - but Deep

Energy Agreed To Silently Unspeak

Natural Understanding: - of Souls Secret Speak

Gratitude in our need for close distant Quiet Speech

I think he's just trying to show appreciate for Rose, but also express, what she understands but he doesn't, that he's having trouble communicating with her.

I guess the title informs too. That should have been cited in my review. I would go on much longer about this poem, if I had time. I may come back again and take another stab at it. I was highly engrossed and want to find a way to inform myself as a poet to create language in poems like this. Thank you for share this inspiring writing.

Brian

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Dear Ruwth,

I don't know if I've ever read a poem from you before. It struck me smack dab in the middle of the forehead when I saw that it had earned a prize in the Shadows and Light Poetry contest. Good for you.

The title was immediately recognizable, Jesus Loves Me, and this offering was sooooo Ruwth. *Laugh* While this surprised me, the content did not. I know of your strong faith and many items written about your father. I can feel that somewhat bittersweet connection depicted in your words. You use a progression of time in the poem to show the roots of your religion, where it started with that song that inspired the title. The song I know all to well as a baby boomer.

This poem goes on a journey for the reader viewing Ruwth with family: church to church, and song to song that ends with "Amazing Grace" which is really about the sweet appreciation of a blessed life of what we've been given. Appropriate to end with.

I believe this is definitely auto-biographical with this use of the freeverse approach to a poem. You did a good job keeping the lines tight and informed while keeping a nice flow for a reader that was easy to understand and relatable.

Thanks for the invitation in the WDC chatroom we call 'Scroll' to come and check out your writing to lend a review today. Congratulations again on the poem's recognition and your blessed life. How Great Thou Art!

Brian

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Review of A Vivid Dream  
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Dear BrieHart ,

This "A Vivid Dream was very riveting for a depiction of personal experience. What you offer personally to a subject like this opens this reader's eyes. Drug addiction is not something I can relate to, but I can tell you from what you describe, it goes far beyond my comprehension of what I seen read or seen in film and TV.

I find that you put the reader in that moment, finding myself wanting to say 'don't do it!' The introduction of this set scene and made me wonder what makes a person want to plunge a sharp object in their arm, or how they get started. It doesn't mention anyone else, like it is a solo interaction with something that is either addicting or can give relief.

When you describe this scene, I find as a reader I am needing more detail. It did not seem dreamlike, yet that was how it was depicted in the final paragraph. To me, this shows promise and a need for further development. It also feels like the beginning of a story that has yet to be lived.

I have to keep reminding myself that this is not fiction, but a monologue and categorized as personal. People often say real life (truth) can be stranger (better) than fiction. As a reviewer, I want to be supportive of whatever you decide to do with this. I just got done reading something by a person who reformed themselves in prison and now inspires others to get on a better path.

Hopefully, your story has redemption, too. That better days lie ahead, if they haven't already. Thank you for sharing this with our community and hopefully, you'll continue to write through your experiences, wherever they may take you, to a satisfying horizon to follow.

**I am a reviewer for the Power Reviewers group and am incentivized to lend feedback to newcomers and all writers of this website in hopes that they are inspired to continue sharing their words and stories with the rest of us. I still review how I want and want you to know the opinions in this feedback are my own and are not the possession of my affiliated group or this website that wants members like me to encourage writers and other reviewers to keep this domain active and energetic. To hopefully, keep these interactions going, promising and hopeful.

My main desire is to connect with other writers from all walks of life, as it will benefit me as a writer moving forward by whatever serendipity may as yet befall me as a lowly member of this community of 14 years.

Brian

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Dear Joe ,

I was intrigued by this "Corrections and rehabilitation. I wanted to know more of the story or stories that contribute to your perspective. The title and description line alone was enough to draw my attention, though maybe not enough of a teaser for the casual reader. Kudos, BTW, on the username, and if your true name, it's great for this.

What I think is important in non-fiction and fiction are flawed characters who find a way to at least a level near anti-hero. Going back as far as Shakespeare, as I've learned, characters who have been redeemed are greater than one who is perfect and never soured.

The insight and perspectives learned in prison and to be able to reflect on how you came to the realization that you could be a better version of yourself to share your story with others who need help is refreshing and worthy of being considered by readers.

The execution of what you have to share relies on how much you can draw from these personal experiences to share and to frame in a way that is helpful, not only to others incarcerated, but people looking in from the outside.

You touch on those experiences and relate clearly and with some rudimentary prison lingo like big boy/big girl that can add flavor to what you share. I think through seminars or TED-like Talks, the information pours out of you. But, what about blogging it? You will need an outlet to flow through point by point the info you have to share.

I think there is great potential with this that can look back and ahead with this assertiveness that you are reformed and others can have faith that there is more out there that awaits them. They can shed the past from within and learn to deal with those who apply their biases from without.

You've got a pretty good handle on this subject. I bet you can draw on resources to inform your stories to take them to the next level. It was a pleasure to read and to lend feedback on your inspirational, self-help introduction to the writing world.

Write On,

Brian

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Dear Life's a Beach... says Joey C , }

Unfortunate the world we life in and the direction journalism and politics have taken that they have met at the road up ahead called an election year. This is an important topic for discussion. Your words are profound, poignant, insightful and a bit out of the scope of the average writing.com member. I believe of the cast of thousand, maybe 100 could give voice to warn a decaying journalistic society to get back to real news...something Trump isn't wrong about...yet still party to -- fake news.

Most of the introduction above I wrote before the pandemic, tucking this feedback away in my review tool. I return to it today, as I have seen that the world news scene become and it has gotten a bit more intense. Yet, your argument "No Longer Professionals In Journalism still applies. I think the world reporting scene we once knew is sadly gone and replaced by this divisive atmosphere with basically two polarizing parties. Reporters are basically responding to every little thing thrown out rather than deciding to focus on what news serves best.

I will say, if people are talking about something, it requires coverage with the proper perspective. Bad on journalists who break stuff like this, as if it should be news. I do know as a former journalist, there are some who lose objectivity and professionalism because they are political. This taints what they report. Their community alone should rebuff them for breaking stories like that, but it's a different time. But, once that info is out there, other sources can decide if it is necessary to put the comment that fueled a story into proper perspective, once people who read these things in social media hash tag the crap out of it.

One of the first things I learned as a journalist was, do you write stories about bomb threats to say a school. Back then, thirty plus years ago, the instructor said it was NO. I was the person who defied that logic by saying, what if parents are asking why isn't my kid in school today? It was before mass shootings at schools, before drills and lockdowns to keep kids safe. But the answer was, maybe. It was better not to report it in most scenarios because it could inspire copycat episodes. Though, that is not the main concern of the journalist. It is whether it is important for people to know, for whatever reasons. I think the logic shifted a little too much.

News agencies are really vying hard for loyal followers. And to do that, they have to think like the average citizen. I feel President Trump keyed in on that and speaks directly to them in a way these people can relate to, like someone with a fifth grade education. There's plenty of gotcha journalism out there now. Trump was aware of it, called it fake news, but then fanned those flames for his own personal benefit. Now were in frying pan with social media and politics during a pandemic with riots.

What you say about reporting is very true. The profession lacks self-respect, though can still have shining moments. As we turn to social media for immediate information, news outlets are trying to 'be the first' and cultivate stories that are basically reactionary. In my day (*Laugh* I said that), editors and journalists would gather in a room and discuss what stories they were working on and what stories that were going to be printed that day. A 24-hours news cycle. The more advanced we have become with the technology (cellphones, internet, social media apps) the more Lou Grant became TMZ and TikTok...a music platform?! Everybody can be a journalist and get validation for it. Journalism started to stoop to their level to compete with opinionated grandmas and teens.

Fact checkers are a dying breed. They might be more of actuaries now. Let's see how many remarks the president said that are false. And even then, it's what reports are being said that can be disproven or debated. I keep hearing in news stories about things that can or cannot be proven to call out someone like the president for asserting a belief.

So, the need to be relevant is important to a news outlet. These agencies are still relied upon, but I wonder where all the retractions are. I see online stories with notes 'edited for clarification...' about this or that. I see others, warts and all. Newspapers have found being online is a way to remain relevant, whether people are willing or not to click on links or pay for services remains to be seen.

Maybe, we can blame Rupert Murdoch for this affect on American journalism. I know when I was a reporter, people whispered about you if they questioned how you conducted yourself as a reporter. It was self-schooled. You weren't in with that crowd until everyone saw you took your craft/calling seriously. I can only imagine what it's like amongst them now, if they even associate with one another. In a small community where I was a reporter, it was surprisingly cut throat.

But I digress, you landed some very important points with this. I agree about the need to put new companies on notice for letting their ethics slip to the floor. It's unfortunate that there is little respect left for legislators and government leaders now labeled politicians. I didn't even cover lobbyists, but that's not directly related to what you shared. So much to consider with your impressive essay with call to action.

Brian

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This was longer than I planned. I hope you will forgive errors in grammar or spelling and the rambling. It was good to get my writing juices flowing, though not as well framed and structured as your output.






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Review of The shadow  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Well, you have somewhat stated the concept. A person might read this and ask, 'but what about it?' "The shadow is an opportunity for a foray into a part of the human psyche, and I for one might move on from this to learn even more.

I think psychology is intriguing when you get down to concepts like this. Questions for me include, how does one arrive at this theory. I feel like I'm checking myself to see where this shadow resides in me.

This could be an intriguing topic. But, it lacks even an argument, or defense. Or, is this the shadow? Definitely, Jung had little weakness. But, it is a worthy topic to explore to seek how we project our weaknesses on others and the world.

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This was intriguing. I like a good, axe-grinding argument. So then, you have no opinion?

Facebook is a mess. I'm sure they're taking steps to address it. It doesn't help that we have a President who likes but doesn't like social media. I think this should all die down some time after the election.

But, you are right. People are ignorant and misinformed and ripe for the picking. Putting aside Trump, the lightening rod for all of this. Does the right and left go at it as hard? You've posed some good points in your open but then strayed from your point about ignorance.

I think labeling and name calling is what got us in this mess in the first place. Everyone is so emotional and everyone is so right. Whether people vote or not doesn't mean they don't have a right to express an opinion. It is important that people come to the table and learn to have respectful discussion. Those days appear over. As dead as religion has become. Who made us think we don't need church?

We've lost our way. We've already been corrupted. Question is, can we get it back. It's too late. Call it. America is kaput.

And that's just my opinion. I'll be checking out in a few decades. Y'all can deal with it, since you won't clean it up. Decency. It's about that. As structured arguments go, thoughts weren't well organized. You could go on Facebook with this. But, a writing site? It came up short. It shows promise with such colorful language. You have passion, I'll give you that.

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Review of The Book  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Dear RodneyGray,

Well this opening chapter to your novel definitely seemed unique to me with the makings of something that could be the beginning of a fantasy series. I found that I wanted to read on and discover once the magic was introduced and wanted to know where the story was headed. However, I would have liked to know more about the main-character-to-be for this series of chapters called "The Book. I needed some kind of backstory or something about him to see as an anti-hero with some moral, as it seems to set up.

From their encounter to that darn pipe that changes them both, there are some keenly mapped out passages that take their time unfolding. But, when we get to the bodies metamorphizing into younger people, it was very intriguing. This served as a great open. I could envision this adapted to some TV series or movie scene, as it would take special effects to realize what I read.

The depictions of the two drunk on this body altering genetic magic is keenly riveting, as it feels we are watching the scene unfold in real time. And there is some real lively dialogue that is so period appropriate to enjoy. I had Siri read it to me in a female British accent. Good on me. The two with their sensibilities informing the other until the realization that Jenson would not survive this 'experiment' and that the Book would be passed on to the other who went from one-eyed, wrinkled and dirty to a young, renewed teen. This might be the only truly cliché thing about the scene is that something happens where someone else is entrusted with a secret power.

They broke the pipe. Why break the pipe? I guess, with the book, it will give the main character something to do and try remaster the magic from the author's words. So, we have one thing in the story to wonder about. Whether another pipe can be created. Does it have to be a pipe? Anyway, then others could be rejuvenated and restored. Perhaps, it could also work against evil some how. McGuyver it. Let's not get ahead of ourselves.

The stage is being set with the dialogue about keeping this sorcery as a 'Threader' as secret. It sets up good vs. evil. Playing God. Repressed by a government that would want this knowledge or to repress it. Threader, could be the title of another book in a series, or whatever. I just saw a lot of possibility with this one.

Great fun with the drunk dialogue, BTW. With British Siri, it was a hoot! It was a pleasure to read and consider this story and it's first chapter. I do believe I will be reading further to see how this moves forward.

Brian

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I liked most of this, "American Insurgency. I was willing to give it a try. I haven't been reading too much fiction these days. Need to reavert my eye.

That is a mighty conflict-resolution in the works. You have an eye for storytelling. Part of me always asks does there have to be a love interest, too? How does this guy take on the mob whose out to take his life and still have time for the single life? I get that some are in it for a good romance, snares a larger audience. I forget it's not just for tv and movies so we can see a little lip action, or flesh on flesh.

This to me has potential, but the main character seems a bit starched, despite the love interest. I love that it's not the dime a dozen Italian mob as mafia stereotypes.

Good luck,

Brian
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It's good that you're open to experiencing new music, just because it's on writing.com. But there is a lot to experience with this number one song that is an anthem of a generation going back over a decade ago. Here's what you missed:

Black Eyed Peas describe this as a, "college anthem for people looking forward to escaping life's pressures by going out and having a ball."

This club-inspired number is one of a number of songs on The E.N.D. that reflected Black Eyed Peas member Will.i.am's newly discovered love for dance music. While he was in Australia filming the movie X-Men Origins: Wolverine, Will spent his time off-set in Sydney's clubs where the electro grooves being spun by visiting DJs such as Italian production duo The Crookers turned the Black Eyed Pea musician on. He told MTV News: "It was hard, and it felt like hip-hop, only faster." Back home in the States, Will told his Black Eyed Peas bandmates, that dance music, not hip hop – was the stuff inspiring him now.

The E.N.D. takes its name from an acronym for "The Energy Never Dies." Will.i.am explained to MTV News that The E.N.D. "is our version of embracing change and celebrating the new."
Taboo of the Black Eyes Peas told Marie Clare: "This is the first time we actually had all four of us on a song simultaneously with the verses, which is something different for us. Usually we break up the verses and everybody has their parts. It was a good opportunity for us to show the world what would come of it."

When the song achieved its 13th consecutive week at #1, it overtook Glenn Miller's record in the pre-rock era. The Black Eyed Peas, totaled 26 non-consecutive weeks in charge to spend at least half a calendar year as the number one song.

The song's 14 weeks at #1 tied with Mariah Carey's "We Belong Together" for the longest stay at #1 in the 21st century.

This won for Best International Song of the Year at the 2010 French NRJ Awards. This song appeared in promos as the theme for the CBS summer prime-time lineup months before it was officially released.

In 2010, Will.i.am told Rolling Stone: "What is the easiest emotion to act? Anger. What is the hardest? Joy. That's 'cause joy is complex. It's somber, sad, happy, heartbroken, hopeful - it's all these emotions in one. What you hear in 'I Got A Feeling'? To me, that's joy. You're in pain, but tonight's going to be a good night. You can't feel happy when you've been pissed off the whole week. You have to go straight to joy."

Will went on to explain that he wrote the song within an hour after standing on the steps of the Lincoln Memorial at the inauguration of President Obama. Said Will: "Nobody asked me to write 'I Gotta Feeling.' It just came."

It was announced by Nielsen SoundScan on May 3, 2010 that this celebratory song had reached 5,561,000 downloads. This meant it became the best-selling digital song of all time.

The song was the first ever single to be downloaded more than one million times in the UK.
The song was the Black Eyed Peas' most successful single of their career, topping over 25 charts internationally including the ones in Australia, Canada, Ireland Italy, New Zealand, UK and US.

Will.i.am told Nekesa Moody of the Associated Press that the reason the tune was so successful was because it gave people hope in a downward time. "It's a positive, feel-good song at the time where there's question marks and uncertainty. People want to be reminded that it's going to be all right," he said.

Until this song's success, there had been the occasional dance hit song, but in the main radio programmers fought shy of dance music. Speaking to Billboard magazine in 2014, David Guetta explained how "Got A Feelin'" was a turning point. "For so long, I couldn't understand why it wasn't on the radio like it is now," he recalled. "I was playing every weekend to thousands of kids who were going crazy for this music, and I could feel that everyone wanted to hear it. The demand was there."

"'I Got A Feelin' was when radio seem to say, wow, okay, this is actually working, this is marketable," he continued. "And then everybody changed their format. Now, of course, we're way beyond that and onto something completely different."


Probably more than you ever wanted to know! *Laugh*

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Dear M0nsterRain ,

It means you're disconnected. Example: When I'm reading text and something gives me a thought, I realize I've still been reading while thinking about something that took me away in another direction. Once this realization sets in, I have to go back and figure out where I drifted off. My brain is not capable of being in two places at once.

Here in "Nothing in Particular you have described a situation where hypothetically, and apparently commonly amongst us, we have looked into 'something' and then lost all memory of it, the thing. It begs questions: Is it a mirror? Could it be a painting? Might it be an event unfolding outside the window? You see, if you give context, a reader might better relate. You can give them a 'for instance'.

To me, this just explains so much about how we are becoming devoid of emotions, like dehumanizing zombies who roaming about, disconnected and overwhelmed by the world today, that we cannot connect with singular moments.

Another example: A person who watches a show on a screen who is also playing a game on their phone. I have three people like this in my house. I'm studying and analyzing away (visually) about the character's actions. I see them with their heads down and ask them if they saw it/that, could comment on it. There is no rewinding, just moving on. They are happy with distraction in a handheld box. This is the new movie experience. Why are more people not mugged or robbed everyday?

This is not how our brains were meant to be wired. It is not organic. It is unhealthy. I think these worlds we live in are dividing us. We turn to these worlds as if they contain all the correct information because it is immediate. But, in real time, we cannot look at an object and walk away with an experience or feeling.

You probably don't know how profound this simple statement sounds. It is not fleshed out. It does not take the idea further. It's just a 'did you every notice...' set up but without a punchline or tagline. You have an opportunity to give this functional statement more weight and fuller meaning. It is essentially your thesis/topic sentence. Why not build on it?

Oh, but I've done it. You probably have your own take, but maybe feeling a bit more informed? I hope that my review helps answer this poser and gives you fuel to write more. Do, write more. Let's see where this goes. And let me know. I'd like to come back and revisit.

thanks for sharing here in our community and keep writing,

Brian

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Review of In Praise of Dawn  
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Dear Snow Vampire ,

Wow, I had no idea how complex this poem was until I popped open the link to poet's note. The rhyme scheme is very ambitious. I realized I hadn't even noticed the rhyme scheme after two reads and had to read through "In Praise of Dawn again to pay closer attention.

I really did realize I had caught that rhyme with that triple rhyme in last two lines of first stanza. It's actually quite impactful with the short lines. Making use of those prompt words included one expression that caught my eye, 'soar thought' which for some reason made me think of 'sore'. I don't know if this is a stumbling block other reader's face. Apparently, I'm reading with an auditory eye.

I felt this to be a very spiritually connected poem without concrete images that connect to that reality. I did like that contrast at the end with the final verse where night is destroyed by that sunrise. It felt like hope for a new day. It was like getting through a difficult night but realizing with a beautiful sunrise, all is right again. Very connected to nature.

This was a pleasure to read and consider to inform me and lend my reactions.

Brian

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Dear ♥octOGRE tHiNg♥ ,

So many items to consider in this long list of your favorites over the years. I started reviewing some of them as we are celebrating 20 years of Writing.Com. I thought it might be fun to explore old and new items to see what interests.

I have to admit, I was looking to see if I made the list. I don't think we've crossed paths. I made it a point to give attention to some of the members who are less frequented on their travels through our shared community.

I point out that there are a lot of invalid items in here now, as well. I suppose it's because people either left WDC or who only have basic accounts now? Unfortunate.

Thanks for the inspiration to consider and review some of these items.

Brian




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Review of Peace  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Dear The Dreamer ,

I consider the weight of the world nearly every day now, just like your poem "Peace so poignantly describes. I'm putting a focus on poems with the theme of suicide as a considerable subject. I have come across this narrative ode to giving up and want to consume and possibly lend feedback to illustrate my concerns.

It's sort of a seductive freeverse poem with it's patterns and rhythms with stresses in just the right places. The poet twirls this text in and out of short to long lines while keeping the reader on that string. With that open, it starts with lines that short and sweetly repeat a rhythm over the word 'little' to entice us to move with the dance.

The narrator mostly talks to its audience, so it could sound like a plea for help. But, it also seems to call on someone or something else, like the night or someone who could make life more bearable. In a way, it's up to a reader to decide. I think the poet is just going for it here, already freeversing and styling while computating thoughts a somewhat freely associative way.

The third and last stanza tell a metaphoric story using the old cliche, 'weight of the world.' To me this is the poem's only challenge. It properly conveys a message, but to get to that next level of description, it requires metaphors as expressions that could still describe something crushing or heavy. It's pretty much all been done. No real points of for trying, but realize that telling the same story in a slight different way does not hold a reader.

I still like how you go into that final verse, catching one's breath, 'I let go.' Though, this doesn't sound like someone who is ready to give up on life. That may not be the targeted theme, though in my search for poems about this subject, it yielded this poem as a result, likely from a tag.

I think the order of events is a little off. The crush happens in verse 3 but the world falls in 4. I'm at peace line is good. It doesn't really hit me with that finality.

Overall, you use of language and structure was quite pleasing and I think you have a poem with a few tweaks that is worthy of commensurate audiences.

Brian

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Review of Going For A Walk  
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Dear Flapjack_Destroyer ,

The subject of suicide in writing is something I want to investigate here in some of the latest poetry I chose to review. I have come upon this short, descriptive poem "Going For A Walk that reads like a poetic event that has happened. The narration shows experience of knowledge of how suicide might occur, I feel. But, I have questions.

First, is this a poem about suicide, because it came up in the search engine at WDC for poems on this subject? Obviously, one does not just walk to a ledge and step off and describe an experience like falling, with 'wind brushes your hair'. The landing is another issue, but birds singing you a song is like a goodbye. These images compelled me to explore further.

If this is about suicide, it's not impactful enough. I mean, the ground doesn't greet you with a kiss. More of a sucking noise or splat, I can only imagine. And we are imagining, because either the narration is misleading or this person is still alive after what was simply a failed attempt.

Now, what I really can envision, is a person who wants to die and is being dramatic. All the right words and descriptions are used to make this a beautiful demise. I think it's more of someone describing in a way like a person tries to get someone to believe they are leaping to their death after some dramatics and tada! Jumped five feet.

The title, too, is intriguing. It plays on the reader's mind as they read with the short, obtuse description line. We can only assume what it could imply. I find the poem poignant but not logical and yet compelling. So, two out of three for me there. It's brief and to the point. I like the depictions and drama. Overall, pretty good.

Brian

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Review of The Decision  
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Dear olandreth,

I found some difficulty reading this play for a couple of reasons, but must point out that the effort to produce this is impressive.

One of my first difficulties was knowing you was speaking because character attribution seemed to be missing throughout. Or, if it was one person monologuing, it appeared they were speaking to their self. Though, I thought the direction to speak to the audience made it feel more like a one man play.

The play didn't start of intriguing, with the main character just speaking. Very little action or in the moment stuff is happening, making it feel indulgent rather than expressive of ideas or actions. I had to wade through it to get to larger points and go pulled into long drawn members of unusual situations or encounters that didn't coalesce but strayed from whatever this could be about.

I did enjoy some of the depictions in memory, like Helmut who was drinking his wine, along for the ride, but no one knew why. There was good use of descriptive language and nostalgic reveries that just made it seem like a person's autobiography on stage. Something akin to a Broadway monologue or an arthouse dissertation on what it was like to be someone walking through life.

I couldn't offer suggestions beyond that or anything that could make this better. I was looking for something in a play that felt like theatre, with actions and consequences that made a member of the audience feel an observer or participant somehow in events playing out.

Brian

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This is a long standing argument that I have considered from time to time as a reviewer and writer in this community. I am happy that you addressed it and leant your experiences and passionate takeaway. However, I think there is more you could consider in "On Reviewing Etiquette.

Now, the circumstance you illustrate is perfect. It is the kind of situation that many reviewers come across. We want to help. If someone says they are not good at poetry and want to get better, it says to a fellow poet, show me another way. How do you illustrate that in words? You could offer different examples of where an author could have gone with an idea, as they might be stuck.

In the process, some reviewers might get high handed and rewrite an entire piece for them. This is a natural instinct. It is most likely not welcome, except in rare cases where someone really wants another vision of what they are trying to attempt. No one is saying here's how your poem should read. It's how it could read from the reviewer's perspective, if they are kind and not arrogantly phrasing their feedback offerings.

Would I rewrite another person's poem. Almost 100% No. Do I consider it in some rare instances, Yes, quite often. And the way it is done is in samples of what could be said. We offer stronger words and adjectives and suggest different structures, themes or how to align metaphors and imagery. It's natural to do all these things as would any English teacher who needs to illustrate what is considered best by them.

No one here claims to be the expert, just writers with experience. It is okay to offer revisions. If a writer is not very good, it may mean they have not considered reading good writing. So, another way to demonstrate, is to point them in the direction of good literature like their own, that they are trying to accomplish.

You did such a great job of relating experiences, the failure, the sting and the realization when you have had happen to you what you had done to others. All perfectly natural and not preventable. It will happen as long as this website exists. And for what it's worth, the reviewer gains something from the process of deconstructing and reconstructing. In fact, the review gets more out of it.

Perhaps, reviewers should rewrite the horrible poems into something beautiful and wholly separate from the piece they are reviewing. If it is good enough for their own cache of work, it should be included with a notation of thanks to the original writer for inspiration. As long as they are only using it as a prompt and not sampling heavy sections of the poem. This might also honor the reviewee in a small way.

Good share and takeaways. I appreciate the insight which I have become familiar with in my years as a writer/reviewer here.

Regards,

Brian

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Dear grandmapenny,

You make some very solid arguments about reviewing in this community. You launched right into your points like I was walking into the middle of a conversation. It gave me a chuckle.

I think with a lot of patience, a reader can glean a lot of good takeaways from the viewpoints you share. However, it's riddled with structural and grammatical errors, like run on sentences and fragments. That doesn't necessarily mean it's bad, just could use some improvement.

Overall, this feels more like conversation that writing a structured essay, as I see it. You need a thesis, or a main point, to build these 'arguments' you make. It helps for coherency, so a reader can follow your line of thought and where it's going. You point out midway through this article that you noticed a lapse to state something.

It's okay to has something like this out and get all the information you have out there. What makes it easier for people who come to read is have the information flow from one thought to the next logically and structurally.

The one argument that caught1 my eye the most is the stories about 12-yeqr-olds and people who write for therapy here. It's to be expected that people are unaware of a writer's background or the reasons why they write. I expect when they see something that doesn't sound coherent, some might react in a negative way. Bad on them for doing that. They should take the time to consider background, if it exists, for context before sending words. Some just don't have the patience.

Which brings me to my point. Is this the best place to protect a 12-year-old and the mentally weak from harsh realities about their writing abilities? There are safe havens here, but I don't think WDC can protect all writers from criticism. The art of critiquing has been around longer than the written work. As long as someone could grunt discontent. It's a natural part of our reality.

It's unfortunate, but is what it is. We hope that when someone suffers, others are there to pick up the pieces after the fall. After all, who among us has not suffered from sharp criticism in our lifetime, even at 12? How we handle it and move on with resilience is more important. We can't always protect those tender feelings.

I found you have given much thought to reviewing and show great courage to speak your mind and come with keen observations. It was pleasure to consider and lend feedback.

Brian

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Review of Hope in Yourself  
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Dear Kengi ,

I liked this poem "Hope in Yourself because it has logically set up an argument by presenting examples of what 'hope' gets you, while sending a message about self-reliance above all. The poem plays heavily on the Hope theme and drives home many points, almost too robotically at times.

I wanted to see more fun and play in the text rather than driving every line of the first three stanzas with that solitary word. And the way I mean this is, try to start a stanza with the word and introduce all related subjects to it. Start the next the same way. I think if you wanted to go for repetition to make a point, that could have come in the third stanza with hope, hope, hope, hope to start all those lines before turning on the next verse and sending the message home.

There is some poignancy in the things you say. It is a message that many readers can understand because it is straightforward, it speaks it self in plain terms. With poetry, we try to express by showing and taking the message to the next level for an awakening. This is something that can yet be realized with what you have shared.

It is an empowering message. I like the call to action at the end. We should all aspire to wake up from the trance that holds us. But what is it? I think knowledge of why we give in to something greater than our own self will is a theme worthy of consideration and a poet's hand to explore.

Ultimately, what I get hung up on is the phrase, 'hope in yourself'. I think 'rely on yourself' or 'depend on yourself' is a more apt depiction to go with this message. Hope does not drive the machine. Hope is wishful think. Hope that you wake up? That is not the strong message that you desire to convey here. I can see beyond the words used to what you really want to say, knowing that a slight adjustment and a move away from living in a fantasy world is what people need to survive.

I really do appreciate this poetic effort and what you have shared. When a poet is compelled by a message that should be shared, by all means deliver. Fortunately, in this community, we have reviewers that can see between the lines and help you embolden that message.

Regards,
Brian

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Review of Broken  
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This was a very compelling read in spite of the overdone themes and imagery that spark emotions in this well-structured and paced poem.

I had to read through twice to grasp that opening imagery, taking the strongest clue from the description line. The introduction in verse one would be lost on a reader without that cue and I wondered how to make that scene with imagery more accessible to the wondering mind prying to read your words.

Ruby-colored liquid
Stains her hands.

This is very visual and just enough of a tease for the poems opening. I had thoughts whether progression should have revealed the expression of 'rain leaks' as the actual introduction. But, I think the act of cutting oneself would precede the tears. If already crying, the next action to cut seems more consequential. I like the idea of this act being a compulsive action that brings about the realization about the true pain of no love. The line break 'Ruby-colored liquid/Stains her hands' did interrupt the read a bit. I prefer an expression to finish rather than break in this situation, unless it is to get a natural pause, which I don't believe was required here.

Red droplets
Trickle down her arms.

In the first two lines and in the following two lines, I somehow felt compelled to think adding the word 'The' to start either sentence would seem natural, but only once. But, maybe not at all. It may be personal preference here.

Rain leaks from
Her stormy eyes.

This is very visual but an odd image when the work 'leaks' is used. Now why is that? Again, is it just me? There is a wealth of words that could come from an online search of a thesaurus to better frame that, to my mind.

Her voice escapes
From dead lips.

This is chilling, especially on re-read. Is she dead? My mind wanted to know that second time through. Is it final words? what are they? Though, as expressions might go, from somebody emotionally numb inside, except that there are tears. Where the tears from physical pain as she was dying? Not clear enough, but vague enough to tease a reader to want to know. We read on...

She gazes at
The setting sun
But that departing radiance
Does not look back.

Ah, good. Still alive. And, a very nice expression to imagine that we look upon the sun as if looking for a connection to it, to nature. While we may feel comforted by it, I get an eerie feeling of one who is realizing the sun does not know. There may be no one person, thing or spiritual entity that could know this suffering. It feels very alone.

She sings out
To the stars
But those distant beauties
Do not listen.
She reaches out to Heaven
And is overwhelmed
By darkness.

These lines present some challenges. These expressions are not as strong as the first, though they are easily understood. It doesn't reach deep enough to move a reader. We are looking to the stars and heavens for something, a sign, an acknowledgement? But 'do not listen' and feel 'overwhelmed by darkness.' This really intones the sadness.

Her hair
Remains unstroked.
Her hand
Remains unheld.
Her lips
Remain unkissed.

These lines explain well, but seem robotic because of structure and pattern of language. The repeated 'her' and 'remain' within the narrative form are going for theatrics now. And while that is acceptable, the tone is overdone and needs a little finesse when showing. Could it read more like:

Her hair
remains un-stroked
with a hand
un-held, and
lips soft,
betrayed and
un-kissed.

I get the 'un' words and yet that are grammatically over the line, but do intone this pressing message of what we get...unloved...an actual 'un' word.

Her heart beats
But her soul bleeds.

The last line is your dismount. It gets like an eight out of 10 for me, but perhaps it could stick the landing a little better. Everyone's heart beats. It could 'beat on' as if she wishes it would stop. And while a soul bleeds is known by many, it is cliche. Beats and bleeds are not as closely related. We already had the bleeding from line one. Do we ignore that she might be bleeding out? Could it not be her soul we are concerned with at the end, but if she is willing enough to live?

Again, it detracts from the beginning of this poem. Is this all theatrics. A reader may wonder if the narrator is separating from self and fantasizing about dying, as if the mere drama of the agony like bleeding might bring one to rescue? Or, can we refocus that ending to say the soul does something other than bleeds? What is the soul's cost at this point?

Soul to me is equal to spirit. A spirit feels emotion. Though, the idea is to go for expression, the heart is not functioning expressively and the end but ironically functionally. So, the soul must ache, grieve, weep, die or what? That to me is the poser, then.

Well, it was fun to explore and consider this poem. It is not a direction reflection of the poet's depicted beliefs that I argue, but the way a poem states itself to be understood correctly by its audience. In helping you hone your aim at writing through these scenes, perhaps you'll find a better focus within the scope of what you have done well to craft here

Brian

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Review of No Sound  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Dear Trevor,

This poem "No Sound, dedicated to depression, really gets it right with the depictions of how if feels to send out warnings and have no one realize or respond and feel all alone with melancholy. I also know because people who suffer usually make a lot of personal pronoun references. A lot.

This is such a tight and easy rhyme and this has a really good flow and rhythm. I think the lines to be so short, it's equal to greeting card fare or a children's poetry. That is not to say the deep subject matter, however, is equal to that. This is a really weighty subject. And for that, the way it moves so quick and smooth, it doesn't capture the mood of depression. But hey, sometimes irony works.

Right out of the gate with that first verse, there was this two step with the that one word, where you introduce it but collect new thoughts around it, getting this narrative off the ground and going. Each thought put emphasis in a different place in the next line. It was not a rhythm that the poem continued to carry, but for an opening it was a nice hook.

I felt the expressions, however, just like depression, felt insulated and not fully expressed. There was some brief imagery with the moon and birds, but too generic and not carried out or connected to metaphors. Those few words could have been a touchstone for expressions to carry out the message and tone of the poem. If depression is your thing, it might be hard to reach in that bag of imagery and pull off some coherent connective references. But, it would be worth the try or effort how to learn to use such devices to connect to wider and greater audiences.

The other thing I notice with people who write about depression...it can go one of two ways: unemotive and lost or dramatic, which was your poem. It ends like someone who wants to say something but instead demonstrate through non-verbal actions that they will just lie here and wait, as if for death. In reality, it is to draw attention. That to me speaks psychologically to a reader and gives that flair a poem needs to give it vibrance.

So overall, I think you did well. It was a clean and neat read that was easily enough understood, albeit understated while just a bit dramatic. I feel this poem should relate to many readers.

Brian

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Review of Dilemma  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Ximena,

e.e. cummings would call this poem "Dilemma an antithetical jotting. He was prone to leaving unpublished notes and thoughts in journals that were eventually published after his death. This reminds me of poignant thoughts that a writer might have, without searching deep or finding a connection to true meaning about the mind's meandering.

This poem is a look inside the narrative mind and its psychological workings. The whole idea turns on the notion a person is always looking for love, while knowing it's impossible to attain -- beyond attractions and distractions. The most telling is the last two lines. It's the big reveal and it's irony: while we want it, we're so scared of it that maybe we don't want it...the obligation.

To a reader looking at the psychology behind the narrative, something deeper is at work in your poem. This speaker is not ready for love, projecting a weakness or flaw for the wrong partners, unsure of what they want. They know they want love, but they haven't defined exactly what that should be. This is like the set up of a much longer conversation.

Really, those last two lines deserve further discovery. I grant you that the voice in this poem has probably had bad experiences. It might mean they are drawn to the wrong people, or judging people the wrong way. This further reveals a need to decide what the future holds without another in their life, about self-reliance. Usually, someone who is strong and knows what they want, draws suitors like a moth to a flame. The vetting process is key.

So, all of this I get from your poem. I think it is the stepping stone to more poems. Maybe, you can have a setting where the eye wanders and wonders and can describe each potential candidate, describe their behavior: too cocky, too poor, not good looking, athletic, a ladies man, etc. Be like a P.I. for love and detect their habits, physical descriptions, if they notice the narrator.

It's like a mini story, that includes scene, description of setting and activities for flavor, perhaps mood, and then the types being considered. It takes one courageous act to approach just one of them to see the response. Will he be a winner? Will he be a smooth talker, seem interested, rush things or take his time, will he reveal and be honest?

I think just getting close to the flame and feeling the heat of emotion can serve a poem well. And, I think that if you can get beyond the neurosis to truly, bravely discover, it could be a fun little project. You can just imagine the encounters like an artist with a sketch paint drawing these scenes on paper. It could be about how they approach other women, behave among other men, respect the world they live in, etc.

Go deeper with this. I think it would be a rewarding experience to detect people's habits in a detached, objective matter to write concrete evidence like a police report to see if you can figure out the suspects in some imaginary line up for true love.

Okay, I've gone on too long. Tt was a pleasure. Good luck,

Brian

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