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He’s Brian K Compton on behalf of Super Power Reviewers
I can relate to this poem and how you depict arthritis, as with knees. Both of mine are considered arthritic and I stay active with sports. Here, you have a person who is pushing through the pain, especially in the winter months. It give me some notions on notes to possibly improve.
Winter has drier air. And of course, humidity aids these arthritic joints. Also, this poem approaches a situation where the narrator begrudges being limited, unable to take walks, hobbles, pushes through pain to get the necessary chores done. All relatable. It sounds like this person does not consider things to aid osteoarthritis to improve movement.
Might be an opportunity to introduce salves, medications, hot soaks and natural remedies like glucosamine to help the suffering. How this relates in poem would be the question. You have the narrator be naïve to these options with the current focus. Perhaps, when relating how this pain is similar to the discovery in the last verse, it sets up well. In fact, it's surprising. So much, it makes me want to realize if more can be made of that drama.
Reasons for not taking brisk walks again: no one to walk with.
Night chores not getting done, being done before coffee: dealing with the loneliness, staying up late, out of routine. It could be considered we self-punish, don't seek remedy. Remain in constant pain because we are conditioned by the one who left.
There's no foreboding for the 'gone' person. Foreboding could be in words that imply death, or in words that imply loneliness, or even abandonment, rejection. However, the poet attempts to convey, I think you can give the reader a chance to read through again and catch some clues. Give the poem a bit fuller meaning.
There is potential in this poem. I can relate to being the hobbled one who over-did it or is not putting in the work to keep body in shape, protect knees with a brace, orthopedic shoes, etc. Every little bit of detail you put in there like that could add to descriptiveness in poem.
I really enjoyed this. It was a pleasure to read and lend feedback,
Brian
Super Power reviewer