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Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Review 2 of 5 from your friend JACE !


BASICS: (title, description,...)
Title, description, rating, and genres all fit this perfectly! (I will admit, though, that I was surprised 'Inspirational' was not among the genres!).

DYNAMICS: (emotion, imagery,...)
This essay definitely stirs the reader's emotions! It reads with ease, the words yanking on the reader's heartstrings before smacking them in the face with reality! (A good thing! lol). The message is powerful, strong, and thought-provoking! The imagery is rather reader-driven, which makes this even easier to relate to!

TECHNICALS: (grammar, flow, format,...)
The flow was smooth, everything easy to follow as well as understand. I did, however, detect a few little 'hiccups':

Intro, Paragraph 1: For every year[,]: I just kind of noticed a natural pause here, so I thought I should mention it. *Wink*

Paragraph 1: Over the years[,]: Since this added detail to the sentence, I think that separating it with a comma would improve the flow and clarity here.

...me[,] and[,] frankly[,]: The comma after 'me' is not needed since only two things are being linked together. Comma before and after frankly, however, may work to separate this word of "added detail" from the main point of the sentence.

Paragraph 4: 10[-]years[-]old: Since this is not being used as a noun, it does not need to be hyphenated. (A ten-year-old boy is ten years old.) I think. lol. *Wink* (same with 4-years-old in the paragraph 5).

Throughout: The rule with numbers changes according to who you ask, but I think that, at least, the smaller numbers (4, 10) should be spelled out.

PERSONAL VIEWS: (suggestions, thoughts,...)
Bravo, my friend! This is well-written and incredibly stated! This yanked on the strings of my heart and put tears in my eyes. At the end of my first reading, I actually had to get up and go for a cigarette break just to have ten minutes of silence to reflect. That definitely does NOT happen often --actually, this may be the first time I have ever been so moved into reflection that I had to walk away; usually, the reflection time occurs at the computer. *Blush*

OVERALL:
This is wonderful! I love the powerful message contained in this essay and hope that I, and every other reader, will carry it from the day of reading this to the last day of his/her life. This is a strong, emotional, IMPORTANT life-lesson that many may take for granted.

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Review 1 of 5 from your friend, JACE !{/u}


BASICS: (title, description,...)
Title, description, and rating all fit this perfectly. The genre, however, could be changed. *Wink*

DYNAMICS: (emotion, imagery,...)
The reader can easily feel the desire and passion of your words. The imagery is vivid while also being open to the reader envisioning their own memories. *Wink*

TECHNICALS: (grammar, flow, format,...)
I did not see any grammatical errors and found the flow to be flawless. This reads smoothly from beginning to end and everything is easy to follow as well as understand.

PERSONAL VIEWS: (suggestions, thoughts,...)
I really wanted to say that I wanted more to this piece, but it just felt complete...

OVERALL:
This is a very sensual piece that drags the reader in and makes them FEEL your words! Wonderful, Shannon!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of Synchronicity  
Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Review 5 of 5 from "Invalid Item" !


BASICS: (title, description,...)
Title, rating, and genres all fit this perfectly, however, the description might benefit from a word or two of insight...?

DYNAMICS: (emotion, imagery,...)
This poem is loving and enchanting, making the reader feel the love and passion behind the words. The imagery is simple, your words making the reader envision the face of his/her own loved one (or one from the past. lol).

TECHNICALS: (grammar, flow, format,...)
You stuck solidly to the Lanturne form which worked wonderfully with your words to keep the flow smooth from beginning to end.

PERSONAL VIEWS: (suggestions, thoughts,...)
Don't ask me why, but my mind wanted 'Us' to be the last line. *Blush**Pthb*

OVERALL:
This is a beautiful, sensual poem that speaks volumes in only fifteen short lines! Wonderful, my friend! Simply superb!


*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of IT MATTERS NOT  
Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Review 3 of 3 from our sister ~Vikki~ !


BASICS: (title, description,...)
Title, description, rating and genres all fit this perfectly.

DYNAMICS: (emotion, imagery,...)
Your words resonate strength, encouragement, and support! It is easy for the reader to feel your words and, hopefully, take them to heart! This poem has a beautiful, powerful message that I hope I, and every other reader, will carry from this day forward. The imagery is reader-driven, making memories flash before the reader's mind's eye, which create a bond between the reader and your words, making this simple to relate to.

TECHNICALS: (grammar, flow, format,...)
The AABB rhyme scheme worked wonderfully with your words to keep the flow smooth from beginning to end without any rhymes seeming forced.

PERSONAL VIEWS: (suggestions, thoughts,...)
Of course, I'm going to mention punctuation. *Pthb* But I also want to point out the word what's in lines 7, 8, and 10. The contraction kind of stood out to me since it is the only one used in this poem. I read through it twice as is and then twice with 'what is' instead and, personally, found that 'what is' felt better as I read. Of course, it could just be my wacky mind! *Wink*

OVERALL:
Oh, Sherri! The strength that I felt from these words was amazing! This is a poem that I'd love to read every morning as it would definitely give me the strength to take on anything! Beautiful! Thank you for sharing this and giving your reader's a bit of the power and support that we all need!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of CRAZY HORSE  
Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Review 2 of 3 from our sister, ~Vikki~ !!!


BASICS: (title, description,...)
Title, description, rating, and genres all fit this poem perfectly.

DYNAMICS: (emotion, imagery,...)
The admiration and loss behind these words are easily felt by the reader. Your own feelings toward this great chief were relayed beautifully, stirring the reader's emotions so much so that I had tears in my eyes! Everything is simple to envision, adding to stir of emotions made by your words. The added images worked well to set the mood for the reader and make it even easier for the reader to see everything.

TECHNICALS: (grammar, flow, format,...)
Stanza 2, Line 3: greatness[,] and: Comma is not needed since only two things are being linked here. *Wink*

The flow was smooth, though the few 'half-rhymes' did catch my attention. They did not, however, hinder the flow which was smooth from beginning to end.

PERSONAL VIEWS: (suggestions, thoughts,...)
I think that a bit more punctuation might make the flow even smoother.

OVERALL:
This is a beautiful tribute to a lost hero who will never be forgotten in the hearts and minds of many. You have told his tale wonderfully. I think he would be proud and embrace you for this superb dedication.

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of ROSEBUD  
Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: E | (4.5)
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BASICS: (title, description,...)
The title, description, rating, and genres all fit this poem perfectly.

DYNAMICS: (emotion, imagery,...)
This poem has a nice, observational tone that sets the scene for the reader so that his/her emotions are easily stirred. Everything is easy to envision and the added images definitely help to further what the reader sees as he/she reads.

TECHNICALS: (grammar, flow, format,...)
You did wonderfully with the acrostic form! The flow was smooth from beginning to end.

PERSONAL VIEWS: (suggestions, thoughts,...)
A few things here, lol... First, maybe make the beginning letter of each line bold to better show the form (Not everyone picks up on things, lol...). Second, I think that punctuation could be added to this poem to make the flow even better --especially some kind of closing punctuation. *Wink* Third, I think that this poem should come with a warning that it should not be read after a certain point in A Doorway to Hearts! *Pthb* Having read the part I mean, this poem packed even more of a punch!

OVERALL:
I enjoyed this poem and feel that it contains a strong message for the reader. And, for some, maybe even a good history lesson!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of Little Jamey  
Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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BASICS: (title, description,...)
Title, description, rating, and genres all fit this story perfectly.

DYNAMICS: (emotion, imagery,...)
The emotion is definitely clear; This put tears in my eyes and really yanked on my heartstrings! The imagery is vivid and easy to see --too vivid and easy to see!

TECHNICALS: (grammar, flow, format,...)
Everything was pretty easy to follow and understand, however, there were just a few little "hiccups" in the flow as I read...

building things[,] and : The comma here seemed to obstruct the flow.

their husband and [Dad]: No need to capitalize since it is linked to a possessive noun.

[Are] you okay?: The r here kind of seemed out of character for the character. *Wink*

PERSONAL VIEWS: (suggestions, thoughts,...)
Tears...falling to the ground like rain.: There I was, getting all emotional and I got to this sentence and stopped. C'mon, Mr. Jace, I think you can do something more original here. *Pthb*

It was a little hard to distinguish the reality from the dream at first, but that could be my tired mind. *Blush*

A few naughty little comments in this story --a but controversial when it came to a few military-themed sentences... Not saying if that's good, bad, or indifferent, just something that was in my head.

OVERALL:
This is a tragic story with a chilling, heartwarming ending. It is well-written and creative. A big part of me wants more of this story; wants to see this dragged out, to know more about everything, but I'm just a curious little kitten. lol. *Blush*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: E | (5.0)
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This folder is a wonderful endeavor! Sometimes, it's just so nice to glimpse into someone else's life. The items contained in this folder are fun and entertaining!

One small typo: quite [possible] some: possibly...?

All in all, I thoroughly enjoyed my visit to this folder! I do hope that you'll add more soon!!!!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Review 3 of 5 from "Invalid Item" !


BASICS: (title, description,...)
Title, description, rating, and genres fit this perfectly.

DYNAMICS: (emotion, imagery,...)
Everything is simple to envision and the excitement of childhood filled my heart through your words!

TECHNICALS: (grammar, flow, format,...)
Paragraph 4: was all[-]important: I think that hyphenating here would help to link these words together as one thought.

Paragraph 6: reach optimum for speed: Something about this phrase kind of threw me off. Maybe the word 'for'? I'm not sure exactly, but something just read funny to me. *Blush*

Aside from those two little 'hiccups', the flow was smooth and everything was simple to follow and understand.

PERSONAL VIEWS: (suggestions, thoughts,...)
I want more! lol. The ending seemed to be too abrupt and, for me, it came far too soon! I could read winter adventure's for hours! (You won't hear that from me tomorrow when the snow's piled up outside and the internet is out. lol.). It really sounds like it was a blast and that made me rather jealous. lol. *Blush* And not just for the fun that you had and wrote about, but for the fun that I had and don't anymore (makes me want to get up and make a fool of myself --then I'd be in hospital in pain, lol!).

OVERALL:
This is chock full o' good ol' fashion fun and playfulness! The happiness really just leaped out from the screen! Again, I want more, though! *Pthb*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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I was disappointed to see only one item in this folder --and, after reading that one item, that disappointment was only furthered! The item contained within this folder is wonderful! I would love to see more 99-word-stories from you! The one here is strong and powerful, which, even in my short visit, I'm detecting a knack for from your end!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello, I'm Stephanie Grace! Welcome to WDC! You're gonna love it here! *Wink**Kiss*


BASICS: (title, description,...)
The title feels like more of a description than a title, but still fits perfectly. *Wink* The description, content rating, and chosen genres all seem to fit perfectly as well.

DYNAMICS: (emotion, imagery,...)
I was drawn right into this, my interest held from the first word to the last --and beyond! This is easy to understand and I had plenty of faces from the past flashing before my mind's eye as I read!

TECHNICALS: (grammar, flow, format,...)
I did not notice any grammatical errors and the flow was smooth from beginning to end.

PERSONAL VIEWS: (suggestions, thoughts,...)
In short: I want more! lol.

OVERALL:
This is some wonderful ground work! I can't wait to see where you can take this! (And, please, when you do write more, e-mail me!)

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of Truth  
Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello, I'm Stephanie Grace! Welcome to WDC! You're gonna love it here! *Wink**Kiss*


BASICS: (title, description,...)
The title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this poem perfectly!

DYNAMICS: (emotion, imagery,...)
While reading, it was very easy to understand your feelings, as well as have my own emotions' stirred. Many memories flashed across my mind's eye, making this a poem that was very easy to relate to.

TECHNICALS: (grammar, flow, format,...)
The flow was smooth, but I think that removing the skipped lines between each line of the poem could improve it.

PERSONAL VIEWS: (suggestions, thoughts,...)
The only suggestion I have is to remove the skipped lines.

OVERALL:
This poem is incredibly honest and easy to feel as well as understand. Great job!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Review 2 of 5 from "Invalid Item" !


Basics: (Title, description, etc...)
Title, description, rating, and genres all fit perfectly.

Dynamics: (flow, emotion, imagery,...)
Everything flowed smoothly and was easy to follow as well as understand. I enjoyed the calm feeling of this piece that allowed the reader to understand and feel the feelings that you felt. Throughout this piece, everything was clear to see!

Technicals: (grammar, format,...)
a time [where]
         *Bullet*Could just be me, but, each time I read this, my mind automatically "said" when.

in the North[.]
         *Bullet*I think that replacing this period with a colon would add strength to learned lesson that follows.

snow swirl[,] and
         *Bullet*This comma felt out of place since 'and' is only connecting two things.

Christmas Eve [day]
         *Bullet*The word 'day' felt a bit unneeded since it is implied by naming the specific day.

Not all our Christmases...
         *Bullet*This sentence felt a little out of place... Due it's placement, it almost felt like you were saying that you didn't always Christmas vacation on Christmas. *Wink*

Personals: (suggestions, thoughts,...)
I agree wholeheartedly with you about winter! lol. Living in Jersey, I've seen my share of snow (expecting more tonight, too, lol) and have always loved watching it --just can't stand to be out in it! And forget about getting me into a car! lol.

Overall:
This is well-written and I loved the lighthearted feeling of it. The ending was very touching and oh-so-true!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of Dear Me - 2009  
Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Basics: (Title, description, etc...)
Title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this piece perfectly!

Dynamics: (flow, emotion, imagery,...)
This had a smooth flow and everything was easy to understand and follow --a great feat with the different 'voices'! *Wink* This started out very creepy, then had me smiling and nodding my head until the end! It is simple to relate to and definitely stirred my emotions... By the end, I had fallen so deep into your words, that I felt like I just got an awesome pep talk and could do anything! *Blush*

Technicals: (grammar, format,...)
I'm weakening and I'm...
         *Bullet*The change of tense here caught me a bit off-guard.

inadequacy[,] and
         *Bullet*This comma felt a little out of place since only two things are being links here.

reading [other's] works
         *Bullet*others' since you're talking about more than one 'other'. *Wink*

Personals: (suggestions, thoughts,...)
Biggest Suggestion: If you entered this in the 'Dear Me' contest, remember NOT TO EDIT! *Kiss* Can't do that after deadline! (I wrote two entries, included something about procrastination, put off typing them, lol, and ended up losing both of them! lol)

Biggest Thought: Good Luck and Amen!

Overall:
This is probably the most original 'Dear Me' letter I have EVER read! I'm pretty sure it is. lol. *Wink* It's incredibly creative and well-written! I love it!!!
*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Basics: (Title, description, etc...)
Description, rating and chosen genres all fit this perfectly. I do wonder, though, about 'Present' being singular in the title.

Dynamics: (flow, emotion, imagery,...)
The flow was smooth without the rhymes feeling forced. The imagery was wonderful and easy to envision! The emotion throughout this poem was lighthearted and fun!

Technicals: (grammar, format,...)
Line Two: I got a bit caught up here due to the tense changing from the Line One. (polishing/ softened)

Line Three: of [ole]
         *Bullet*Could just be a force of habit, but I'll say it anyway. *Blush* Ol'?

Overall:
This is a charming, heartwarming poem that put a smile on my face!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of BLUE BOOKCASE  
Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Basics: (Title, description, etc...)
Title, description, rating, and chosen genres all fit this perfectly.

Dynamics: (flow, emotion, imagery,...)
This story flow well and was easy to understand and follow from beginning to end. The emotion came through clearly, admiration and tears both filling my heart as I read. The simple imagery made everything easy to envision throughout.

Technicals: (grammar, format,...)
Paragraph 2: that, [and] all...,
         *Bullet*It felt like more time was passing here then actually is, I think that adding the word 'and' might help smooth that out a bit...

Paragraph 4: at [the] moment
         *Bullet*This felt like a change of tense. Perhaps 'that'?
and [the] school
         *Bullet*Since no specific school is being talked about, I think that the word 'the' can be omitted.

Paragraph 5: The opening sentence of this paragraph felt a little bit redundant. Perhaps reword...?

Paragraph 9: momentum[ ].
         *Bullet*Stray space.

Paragraph 10: "So it will..."
         *Bullet*Since the speaker changes from one person to another here, I think that starting a new paragraph here would improve the clarity and flow.

Personals: (suggestions, thoughts,...)
Your granduncle was a quite a man, very admirable.

Overall:
It's always hard to read such pieces --and not only because of the tears that come to my eyes. You wrote this wonderfully and I thank you for sharing it. Your uncle's words, as well as your own, gave me a great comfort. A peaceful, hopeful feeling that really warmed my heart and filled it with strength. Thank you.
*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of Julian's Secret  
Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Basics: (Title, description, etc...)
Title, description, rating, and genres all fit perfectly!

Dynamics: (flow, emotion, imagery,...)
This definitely held my attention from beginning to end! It is enchanting and exciting which forced me to want to know what would happen! (Never know with you, do I? lol) The imagery was wonderful! Everything was simply to envision! (A past obsession with all things Alice helped too, I guess. lol)

Technicals: (grammar, format,...)
Paragraph 21: stairs[,] and they
         *Bullet*This comma felt out of place since there are only two things being linked here.

Personals: (suggestions, thoughts,...)
The only suggest/thought that is screaming in my head right now is for you to add more! *Pthb* I'd enjoy knowing what happens next!!!

Overall:
I really enjoyed reading this! It is well-written and very creative! The ending did seem a bit abrupt, though, but that could just be me falling too much into the story. *Blush* Aside from the main storyline, I also loved the creativity of 'Ecila'! *Wink* I picked up on it and loved it, then laughed when it was noticed by the father. lol. Glad he caught up with the rest of us! lol. *Wink*

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of Wandering Wounds  
Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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This is a beautiful, touching introduction to your book that put tears in my eyes. The background story is incredibly emotional and heartbreaking (I'm typing this, by the way, while my Aunt is at radiation for cancer that they couldn't confirm or disprove, so they just sent her anyway...). It is a wonderful glimpse into your life and what has inspired you. I don't know what else I can say.

The notes at the bottom made me feel like I was eavesdropping, but they put tears in my eyes. This all truly warmed my heart. Thank you for sharing this.

I did, however, notice two little things to point out: In the notes, there should be commas before and after the name being spoken to. (Thank you[,] Stacy).

All in all, this is wonderfully well-written and touching.

Thank you, again, for sharing this!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of Discovery  
Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Heart*From your friend stacylynn71!*Heart*
Review 5 of 5!

Title & Description:
The title and description both fit this poem perfectly!

Flow & Format:
The flow was smooth from beginning to end and you stuck well to the 5-7-5 syllable count.

Emotion & Imagery:
This poem is simple to feel and definitely tugged at my heartstrings. The imagery is, again, up to the reader.

Typos & Suggestions:
I saw no typos nor do I have any suggestions.

Overall:
This is well-written, beautiful, and touching! I love it! Thank you for sharing this with us!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of Captive  
Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*Heart*From your friend stacylynn71!*Heart*
Review 4 of 5!

Title & Description:
The title and description both fit this poem perfectly.

Flow & Format:
The flow was smooth, however, I think that punctuation could make it even better.

Emotion & Imagery:
This is easy to feel and relate to. Again, the imagery is up to the reader, but I think that we all have someone that we feel this for, as this could be related to more than just lovers.

Typos & Suggestions:
love[']s --> Should be possessive.

Line One: Extra syllable? (Could be intentional, but I thought that I should mention it just in case...)

Overall:
Another well-written poem. You managed to say a lot in a little space, and really make your reader FEEL your words! Wonderful!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of Ascent  
Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Heart*From your friend stacylynn71!*Heart*
Review 3 of 5!

Title & Description:
The title and description both fit this poem perfectly.

Flow & Format:
Again, the flow is smooth. (And, again, punctuation... lol)

Emotion & Imagery:
The emotion and imagery are both very clear in this poem. Your words made many images float before my eyes and warmed my heart. This is enchanting and... true.

Typos & Suggestions:
I saw no typos and the only suggestion that I can think of is for punctuation.

Overall:
This poem is well-written and really yanked on my heartstrings, making me think and reflect upon love I feel and love I've felt. Beautiful!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of Such a tease  
Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*Heart*From your friend stacylynn71!*Heart*
Review 2 of 5!

Title & Description:
The title and description both fit this poem perfectly.

Flow & Format:
The flow was smooth, but I think would be even smoother with the addition of some punctuation. (Personal preference, I know. lol...)

Emotion & Imagery:
The emotion is clear. I could feel the temptation, the desire; the frustration, the disappointment. The imagery is clear, but, again, left up to the reader. *Wink*

Typos & Suggestions:
I saw no typos and the only suggestion that came to mind is the whole punctuation-thing. *Kiss*

Overall:
I loved reading this sensual poem! It is well-written and quite stirring! *Wink* You managed to say quite a bit in only three lines!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of Rustle of Silk  
Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*Heart*From your friend stacylynn71!*Heart*
Review 1 of 5!

Title & Description:
The title and description both fit this poem very well.

Flow & Format:
The flow was smooth with only one minor 'hiccup' as I read...

Emotion & Imagery:
I am amazed at how much you managed to say with so few words. This poem really tugged at my heartstrings and made me sit and think at the end... The imagery is left up to the reader, which makes this poem even easier to relate to. (Is it wrong if I admit that I did not picture my husband?). *Blush*

Typos & Suggestions:
I felt a little bump in the flow in Line 5. Maybe a comma at the end here?

Overall:
I loved this poem! Short and to the point, this poem is enchanting and easy to relate to.

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of FOLLOW ME  
Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Title & Description:
The title and description both fit this poem perfectly.

Flow & Format:
The flow was smooth from beginning to end without any rhymes feeling forced.

Emotion & Imagery:
This poem is simply enchanting! It has a peaceful, dreamlike feel that took me away! The imagery is vivid and alive, which was only furthered by the added pictures.

Typos & Suggestions:
Stanza Two, Line One: I think that italicizing this line might help the reader distinguish the "spoken" words from the narrative of the following line.

Stanza Three, Line Two: Since only two things are linked together here, I think that you can eliminate the comma in this line.

Overall:
I absolutely loved reading this poem! It's well-written and beautiful!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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Review of Come back to me  
Review by Stephanie Grace
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Heart*Thank you for bidding on my item in "Invalid Item" !*Heart*
Review 5 of 5!(Already?? *Cry*)

Title & Description:
The title and description both fit this poem perfectly.

Flow & Format:
The free verse form worked well with your words to keep the flow smooth from beginning to end. The lack of punctuation, again, did not hinder the flow! *Delight*

Emotion & Imagery:
Not only did you relay your feelings clearly, but I found this touching poem easy to relate to my own life, which made a million and one memories and feels flood my brain and heart. The imagery is definitely dependent on the reader, but that makes it all the more easy to feel. (Is it bad to say I didn't picture my husband? lol. My "ex" had one green eye and one blue one. It's hard not to think about him!)

Typos & Suggestions:
I saw no typos nor did any suggestions pop into my head.

Overall:
This is a touching, soul-bearing poem that really made me sit and reflect at the end. I love it!

*Heart*,
Stephanie Grace
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