Title & Description:
The title and description both work very well with this piece!
Idea & Storyline:
The idea behind this is very creative. I would, however, like to know more of the story surrounding it. I think this would make for a wonderful, foreshadowing beginning to a longer story. Perhaps the visits to this house were in a dream and, in real life, the narrator searches for this place –and, eventually, finds it [or do they? Lol]? Just a thought.
Dialog & Narrative:
This is well-written and easy to understand. The simple language felt breezy and flowed smoothly from beginning to end.
Emotion & Imagery:
These are definitely the strong points to this piece! As I read this, I felt calm, at ease. That feeling, combined with the beautiful descriptions which made everything simple to see, made this read like a step into another world –a world that I would love to visit again and again! At the end, I felt the loss and disappointment of the narrator. Wonderful!
Typos & Suggestions: morning and night...sunset and sunrise This is just a matter of opinion, but I think that switching the order of sunset/sunrise would improve the flow by matching up the times...?
stray more than eyesight Something here caught my attention as 'off' but I am not sure exactly what. Perhaps “farther than eyesight”? I think that just a bit more reference to distance in this sentence would improve the clarity a little...
Overall:
I truly enjoyed reading this and think that it is a wonderful display of talent! It is creative and simply beautiful! If you ever decide to add to this or do anything more with it, please let me know!!!
Thank you for a peaceful vacation of breathtaking scenery.
Title & Description:
The title and description both fit this poem very well!
Flow & Format:
The AABB rhyme scheme worked well with your words to keep the flow smooth from beginning to end without seeming forced!
Emotion & Imagery:
I am fortunate to say that I could feel and relate with each word of this poem! The imagery is, of course, up to the reader's mind's eye as well will all see someone different appearing before our eyes, but the emotion is clear! You not only make the reader understand how you feel, but he/she can easily feel it through your words! Wonderful!
Typos & Suggestions:
Line Eight: always[,] sweetheart, Since this line is being said to 'sweetheart', there should be a comma before, as well as after, the name.
Line 15: dream[,] this I think that a semi-colon might work better than the comma here, but that could just be me. lol.
Overall:
I really enjoyed this poem! It is well-written and simple to feel! Line Four definitely stuck out to me and I love it! You relayed the feelings of love wonderfully!
Title & Description:
The title and description both fit this perfectly, but I can't help feeling that the description may give a bit too much away...
Idea & Storyline:
Very entertaining! The idea behind this is very real and very easy to accept as an any-day occurence!
Dialog & Narrative:
The dialog worked was well-suited to the characters and situations as well as working wonderfully with your narrative to keep everything flowing smoothly. The simple wording made everything clear and easy to understand.
Emotion & Imagery:
The every/any day setting and situation made it simple to see everything happening! I could feel the frustration toward the obnoxious Cletus and got a great laugh from the ending --Wait! Should I really admit to that?
Typos & Suggestions:
buck [comes] The word 'comes' threw me off as it seemed to change the tense... I understand that the narrator may say it when the story, but it seemed, to me, to throw off the flow of the narrative...
Overall:
I really enjoyed reading this! It's very entertaining and well-written! You did a wonderful job! Even in such a short space, you managed to bring your reader right into the story! Great job!
Title & Description:
The title and description both fit this piece perfectly!
Idea & Storyline:
This is a revealing glimpse into your life! You managed to tell your history and relay your feelings wonderfully without allowing those feelings to get in the way of you message. It flowed very smoothly --something I would never expect from a piece covering so much over such a length of time (Okay, I have just backspaced and rewritten that several times so as not to offend or disrespect, but I cannot word it... Sorry for any offense or disrespect...)!
Dialog & Narrative:
The first person POV worked beautifully to help the reader understand where you are coming from and easily relate to your words.
Emotion & Imagery:
The imagery may change for each reader, but your emotion comes through clear! As a reader, I was filled with anger at the beginning stories, but then could easily feel your pride, relief, and tearful joy of the end result!
Typos & Suggestions:
I read through this three times, SEARCHING for a typo or suggestion, but I found nothing! Sorry!
Overall:
I live and was raised in a very mixed town. My neighbors were (and are) black and have always been part of my family. This made me think of my "Mema" and all that she has lived through as a black woman. (And I also thought of when she'd pick me up from school if I was sick and the looks the secretaries would give us when she said she was picking up her granddaughter and I'd walk in, this little blonde-haired, blue-eyed white girl and call her Mema and hug her! lol). Experiencing all of that and then dealing with racism has always been a part of my life. I have never known different than to defend...
You captured everything beautifully! The pride of seeing our country elect Obama shows great maturity and strength. I have always been proud of my country, but now more than ever! I pray that God will keep the Obama family safe and out of harm from the racists that still exist!
This is well-written and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it! I really don't know what else I can say. I am sorry that my review is not helpful, but please know that, to me, this piece is perfect as is.
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Title & Description:
The title and description both suit this poem very well, however, I think that the singular 'Voice' in the title might fit a little better and that adding just a word or two of insight into the poem to the description would catch more readers' eyes?
Flow & Format:
The ABCB rhyme scheme worked well with your words to keep every flowing smoothly from beginning to end without the rhymes feeling forced or hindering the emotion of your words!
Emotion & Imagery:
The imagery is, of course, up to the reader, but the emotion is clear! Your feelings are clearly relayed throughout this poem making it easy for the reader to not only feel for you in the situation, but also making them understand and FEEL your feelings!
Typos & Suggestions:
Line Eight: soaking Having the word soaking in the same line as 'wet' felt a little redundant to me. Perhaps 'making'?
Line 11: I think that changing the comma at the end of this line to a semi-colon might improve the clarity and flow into the next line.
Overall:
First attempt?? You're a natural, then! This poem is well-written and a great display of talent! Thank you for sharing this! Write On!
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Title & Description:
The title and description both fit this poem perfectly!
Flow & Format:
You stuck well to the Lune form and everything flowed quite smoothly from beginning to end...
Emotion & Imagery:
The imagery was great and I love the calm, peaceful, happy feeling of this poem! The hopefulness and tranquility of happiness came through clearly!
Typos & Suggestions: The light coloring of the text made this feel like a little strain to read; I think that using a bolder color would make this more appealing to the eyes. I think that adding punctuation throughout this poem would help to guide the reader's voice as he/she reads.
Overall:
This is a well-written poem! It is peaceful and cute! A wonderful tribute!
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Title & Description:
The title and description both fit this poem perfectly! (Though the description could use a word or two of insight into the poem, but the title kind of covers that...)
Flow & Format:
You stuck well to the Monchielle form and everything flowed smoothly from beginning to end without the rhymes seeming forced!
Emotion & Imagery:
This was easy to see and made me sleepy! lol. I love the calm, peaceful ambiance of this poem --it came through clearly and relaxed me right away! The sweetness of the ending put a big smile on my face!
Typos & Suggestions:
I didn't notice any typos nor did any suggestions come to mind!
Overall:
Ahh... a poem with punctuation! I love the whole idea of this poem and the feelings that it filled me with were heavenly! Your talent is clear!
Title & Description:
The title and description both fit this poem perfectly!
Flow & Format:
The ABAB rhyme scheme worked well with your words to keep everything flowing smoothly from beginning to end! The only rhymes that seemed off were Lines 17 and 19, but they still did not hinder the flow all that much.
Emotion & Imagery:
This is a very creepy little tale! It sent shivers down my spine!
Typos & Suggestions:
I didn't notice any typos nor did any suggestion pop into my head!
Overall:
I really enjoyed this poem and I love that you added a link to a story based on it! I can't wait to read the story!!
Title & Description:
The title fits perfectly! The description, however, seems a bit lacking; maybe add a word or two of insight into the poem?
Flow & Format:
The flow was smooth and rhythmical from beginning to end! The AABB rhyme scheme worked very well with your words without seeming forced! (Okay, so Lines 3 and 4 seemed like a little stretch, but it still worked for me! lol)
Emotion & Imagery:
This is easy to imagine and VERY creepy! I hope that your readers all heed your words!
Typos & Suggestions:
I got nothin'!
Overall:
I really enjoyed this little poem! The flow was great and message is a good one! It's a very spooky poem! Perfect for the season! (Or, more specifically, the day! lol)
Title & Description:
Both fits this piece perfectly --and, let's face it, what could be more eyecatching than 'Hotel COWlifornia'??
Flow & Format: Let's just put it this way... I'm glad I'm alone! LOL. By the end of the first verse, I was singing this --and it woked perfectly with the 'Hotel California' tune!
Emotion & Imagery:
Okay, so it's not as haunting as Hotel California, but, in a way, it's better --The smile that the title put on my lips never faded and I had a good laugh at the end! Wonderful!
Typos & Suggestions:
I have nothing to put here!
Overall:
I loved this!!! I can't think of a better way to start my WDC day! Thank you for the smile and the laugh! [Not so much for getting 'Hotel California' stuck in my head; now I have to go and dig through CDs to listen to it!]
Title & Description:
The title and description both fit this piece perfectly!
Idea & Storyline:
This is an informative piece! (I can't tell you how much I appreciate finding a Halloween piece that deals with the reality and history of the day instead of the spooks or playfulness!)
Dialog & Narrative:
This is well-written! I like the matter-of-fact tone that such a piece should have.
Emotion & Imagery:
The imagery and emotion are, of course, largely depedent upon the reader. I love that you did not let your own feelings toward the holiday interfere with you sharing the facts!
Typos & Suggestions:
The Celtics [1st]...I think that spelling out the word 'first' would better suit this piece.
...their children.[]I...There's no space after the comma here
door to doorI think this is a matter of habit, but perhaps this should be hyphenated to link it together as one thought?
Overall:
I really enjoyed this piece and found it to be well-written and well stated! (Being rather anti-Halloween; I always enjoy the history of the celebration MUCH more than the modern day festivities!). You did a great job with this. I'm sure that many of your readers will find information within this piece that they did not know before!
This poem is incredibly creepy! It's chock full o' Halloween sights and fun! I didn't see any typos nor did any suggestions come to mind! It's a very spooky talent and a wonderful display of the talents that you possess!
First poem, huh? Well, I think it's adorable!!! You stuck well to the 5-7-5 syllable count and it put a smile on my face! What more could I ask for?? (OKay, maybe a cow picture at the bottom? lol)
Another wonderfuldisplay of talent from a beautiful woman!
I love this poem! Everything flowed beautifully from beginning to end and, for me, it was a soothing comfort as the rain pounded at my window while I read!
The only suggestion that came to mind is to add a comma after 'crashing' in line 9.
This is a beautiful dedication! This poem is extremely easy to feel! The hardships and strength came through clearly. You stuck wonderfully and solidly to the form! Everything flowed smoothly [and strongly] from beginning to end! I saw no typos nordid any suggestions pop into my head!
All in all, I found this to be a beautiful, striking poem! I love it! Thank you for sharing this!
Hello, GEOFFREY ROBSON! I'm Stephanie Grace and I'd like to share my thoughts of 'Crique' with you...
This was well-written and easy to envision! Very true-to-life! This was very creepy!! You made me cringe a little... This was a very entertaining peek into your life! It's amazing what memories can be brought back by simply little comments, isn't it? I saw no typos!
The only suggestion that popped into my head is in the following sentence:
It was what I call back in the day. This was one place where the flow felt a little bumpy. I think that italicizing 'back in the day' would improve the flow here.
All in all, I found this very entertaining! It made me wonder, made me smile, made me cringe, and made me smile again! Thank you for allowing me this little peek into your life!
Hello, Hidden Writer! 'Tis I, Stephanie Grace, here to share my thoughts of "His Hunger" with you! [insert evil laugh here]
This was well-written and very creepy! This piece shows clearly your talent for bring your reader into the world of your words and making him/her see and feel everything! The "choppy" style of this (not an insult... I mean the way the lines are separated, lol) makes it easy for the reader to follow the narrator's thoughts without feeling overwhelmed or making the piece feel too fast-paced! The ending comes as a shock to the reader, causing a shift in mood while also neatly wrapping everything up! Great job!
...total [aw]... awe Was this written for a contest? The colored words add to the affect of them, but it also made me think that this might be for contest. If that's the case, I suggest adding a word count as well as a link to the contest... I don't think so though, lol... I dunno!
All in all, I truly enjoyed this short piece! I found it creepy and very entertaining! Thank you for sharing your talent with us!
This is a wonderful tribute to a beautiful woman! This is well-written, easy to understand, and simple to see and feel! A WDC with no Maryann? I can't imagine such a thing! Thank you, Aunt Dottie! I didn't see any typos nor did any suggestions come to mind! This is perfect! (Hence the awardicon it bears, right? lol...)
I really don't know what else to say! This is a touching tribute and a great glimpse into your world! It's amazing how scary these silly boxes called 'computers' can be!
I love the idea behind this and thank you for sharing it with us! I think this will definitely be helping out some WDC members this year!
The ideas represented throughout this piece are great! They are fun, original, inexpensive and very creative! Everything is well-worded and easy to to understand! It's amazing what you can do with ordinary objects! Talk about crafty!
Trim the edge of the [bad]... bag [ ]One problem with... Extra line skipped before this paragraph. [No], we have ghosts... Now [Hope] depot... Home?
All in all, this amazingly clever --and quite "green"! It's easy to tell that you have put some thought into this! THANK YOU, again, for sharing these easy, delightful ideas!!
Hello, Rixfarmgirl! I'm Stephanie Grace. I've just read "Bonsai" and would like to share my thoughts...
This is incredibly creative! Never have I seen acrostic and haiku combined! I can't even imagine how much of a challenge is presents! You stuck well to the 5-7-5 syllable count! You paint a beautiful picture with your words; the reader can see the bonsai! Very true-to-life!
All in all, this was short, sweet, and VERY well-written! What more can I really say? I loved this!
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To me, this is an inspirational poem that can relate to many aspects in a person's life!
Everything flowed smoothly from beginning to end. The ABCB rhyme scheme worked well with your words and did not hinder your message. I love that this is left open for interpretation! This could be a poem for a hatchling, a poem for a son or daughter finally leaving home, a poem for a divorcee... It is, to me, a poem that we can all relate to in some way --and I personally LOVE that you have written it in such a way that it can be taken as so! If you were to be any more specific, the reader may feel for you, but the emotion of really relating to the poem would be lost! I LOVE the "sea gull" look to the title! I saw no typos nor did any suggestions come to mind!
All in all, this poem is perfect in my opinion! It not only stirs the reader's imagination, but also their emotions... Add to that the imagery of your words and the openness of interpretation and I can't see how anyone could see this as less than perfect!!!!
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Stephanie Grace
P.S. I tried for something wrong, I really did, lol...But this was just too good... No constructive crticism from me for this one... I think it's perfect as is!
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First of all, Welcome to WDC!!! You're going to love it here!!! Welcome to the family!!!
This poem is very well-written and true to life!
The ABCB rhyme scheme worked well with your words to keep everything flowing smoothly and melodically from beginning to end! I love that you took a common character and gave the reader a glimpse into his/her life! I saw no typos!
I do, however, have a few suggestions... The skipped line between each line of the poem seemed to break up your words too much... I would suggest breaking this into four-line stanzas with no line skipped between lines, but one line skipped between each stanza. I think that a touch more punctuation would help guide the reader's voice. If you would like more specific suggestions here, please don't hestitate to e-mail me! I do, however, realize that punctuation in poetry is entirely optional, so this is just a matter of preference.
All in all, I really loved this poem and I cannot wait to read more of your writings!!
Welcome, again, to our family! Make yourself at home!
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I noticed that you changed this, so I wanted to come back and read it over! I love what you have done with it!
You stuck to the 5-7-5 syllable count! You kept it nature-based! It is simple for the reader to envision and feel what you are talking about! Wonderful!
Even without the added image (which was a wonderful touch, by the way...), this is simple too see! The flowers just pop up before the reader's eyes! This reads like a breath of fresh air! Very calm and peaceful. You stuck wonderfully to the 5-7-5 syllable count and, even better, stuck well to it being nature-themed!
What more can I say? Thank you for the beautiful imagery!
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This is just a matter of opinion, but I think that switching the order of sunset/sunrise would improve the flow by matching up the times...?
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Since this line is being said to 'sweetheart', there should be a comma before, as well as after, the name.
You relayed the feelings of love wonderfully!
I love the whole idea of this poem and the feelings that it filled me with were heavenly! Your talent is clear!
Let's just put it this way... I'm glad I'm alone! LOL. By the end of the first verse, I was singing this --and it woked perfectly with the 'Hotel California' tune!
This is a beautiful dedication! 
All in all, I found this to be a beautiful, striking poem! I love it! Thank you for sharing this!
The only suggestion that popped into my head is in the following sentence:
Everything flowed smoothly from beginning to end.