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Review of That Chair There  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Thanks for asking me to review this work. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a fascinating bit of writing... an almost fantasy/Dr Seuss-esque type of work. I enjoyed the mischievous curious child you wrote about. He has to take the dare and in the end pays for it.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
The first person you used was ingenious.. this made it personal to the audience reading it, too. I liked how the mother chose the chair her son became because it suited her and was 'comfy'. But the boy/chair was right, he should not have done what he had done. I also enjoyed the rhyming, it made the piece "sing-song" and I liked how you separated the sections for each part of the tale.

Grammar
I saw no glaring errors.


Suggestions:

A larger font would make it easier to read.

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Review of My True Friends  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your work on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I was really affected by this work. I, myself, have had a life of a few close friends, not even 2 or 3 most times. I do value them and I am pleased you wrote how I feel so well.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I like the sound of your odd friends, because that is how I am and my friends are too. I like how you described your friendships and how they were with you when you needed them.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:

Perhaps you could use a larger font so it is easier to read.

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Review of Friend or Foe  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I found your story on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was an interesting read. I was drawn to keep reading until the end. And, I gotta admit it, the end was nothing like I thought it would be.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
The character sounds confused, and I am also confused. I am not sure what was meant in this story, especially the end the way it was.
I liked the descriptions of the iron bat dragging and hitting the lightbulbs.
"Just as the light was about to reveal who he was, the bat swung up and broke the light along the ceiling..."

That was a bit scary to read. The whole thing was a bit scary to read, actually. That is why when she saw him and, what .. realized he was her long lost love. It was even more confusing.

Grammar
No errors noted


Suggestions:

Thanks so much for posting here, welcome to writing.com.

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Review of Assembly  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your work on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
Oh My God! Forfend those Do-it-yourselfers who wreck things out of proportion to what it seems like it should be! I found it very amusing when Jay spoke:
'Jay jumped up excitedly, "it works!!!".'

A total lack of reality sitting there! LOL

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I can imagine that situation, watch all the lights shut off down the street!!!


Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:

You could use a larger font for easier reading.

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Review of COLORS  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I found this to be a factual statement of what Fall is.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
Using colors to highlight your words is nice, but there needs to be more emotion and excitement about what you are writing.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:

Larger font would make it easier to read.
Also, think about you want the reader to FEEL... poetry is about feelings, not encyclopaedic statements.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
It is an interesting expression and one that is entirely too accurate in my opinion. That is why I don't make them anymore. :)

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I like how that expression starts out with a grand entrance with a dragon head and spread wings. The end being a dejected tail where nothing was accomplished.

Grammar
no errors


Suggestions:

A larger font would make this easier to read.

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Review of Santa Stalker  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was pretty funny. There are many people out there that WOULD do all that and more!

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
"You know I've filed a restraining order
to keep you out of my life"
Very funny, speaks it all in one phrase.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:

Maybe a larger font, but I forget, too.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a good description of impatience and coveting that which we don't have. It IS a shame that we Humans are unable, often, to observe something wonderful and make no changes to it, trying to 'perfect' it.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I liked the rhyming, it didn't seem forced.

I also liked the lines:
"jealously, we must acquire
that which holds a desired trait."
It is too true that what we haven't is rarely good enough, that we seek more and more.. more wealth, more attention, etc.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:

No suggestions, I enjoyed the message you posted.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a poem expressing the sorrow at the loss of so many people and our innocence as well. It WAS a tragedy.. and that tragedy struck more than a simple building, it struck us in the deepest part of our hearts and souls as a country.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
"to remind us of our great loss
and a rebirth of brotherhood."

A reminder that we need to remember those who were lost, and come back stronger and more vigilant against those who would try to tear us down.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:

No suggestions required.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a powerful image of abuse and cruelty from a strong person hurting weaker people. The abuser as a monster is totally accurate. I have been there myself in a similar situation.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
"He says, 'sorry, I love you'
won't set bones, make bruises disappear"

This is a strong image to grasp, hearing lies and seeing the truth.

Grammar
no errors noted.


Suggestions:

Perhaps a larger font would make this easier to read.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
Very nice image.. nice concept, I like it, I like it a lot.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I like the image of imprinting ourself into our souls.. the essence of us, distilled into an amorphous entity (i.e.. our souls). I also like the image of our moment memories measuring us, bring us to a finite physical end.

Grammar
no errors noted.


Suggestions:

I like how you presented the poem, but if you could use a larger font it would be easier to read.

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Review of anxiety  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I can feel the anxiety and the quest for escapism. I also have felt those ways and used sleep as my step out of reality and life.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
This perfectly summarizes the whole poem for me and exactly how I felt many times over.

"My dreams only tell stories of escape
An escape that is just out of reach
when I awake."


Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:

On the last line of the second stanzas, you need to put a space in between:
"an escape that is just out of reach" and "when I wake" because you want consistency through out the work.

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Review of Corvus Corax  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I really loved your descriptions.. it was perfectly written.


Artistic Voice and Imagery:
Reminds me of 'The Raven'. That Harbinger of Death written by Poe. I enjoyed:

"Ebon harbinger
Never welcome overhead -"

Those lines really catch my eye. I liked how you centered the Haiku, really good emphasis on what you were writing.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:

I think it would have been easier to read with a larger font.

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Review of Creation.  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This really was a well-conceived and written work. It brings in all aspects of creation into cohesive and viable meld of ideas.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I love how you rhymed and it wasn't at all rushed or forced. It flowed. I loved this poem, I really enjoyed it.

"A fusion of cells, blood, sweat and tears.
A miracle of life, that's yours and ours."

Very nice imagery written here.

I also liked how you addressed the issue indirectly of "creation vs. evolution" with:

"No one knows how we came to be.
How humans form and live to be free."

This is a view that everyone can accept.

Grammar
No errors noted.



Suggestions:

I do suggest a larger font to make it easier to read.

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Review of Memorial  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I hear your reverence of visiting that memorial. It is a special place that deserves the respect demanded.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I like how you described the rituals surrounding the Tomb of the Unknown Soldier.

"There is a sanctity about it
you won't find in any church
no matter where you look for it
or how long you search..."

I like the rhyming and discipline you used writing this poem, a sort of military precision.

Grammar
no errors noted.


Suggestions:

I have no suggestions.

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Review of The Drip  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your flash fiction on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
Talk about the straw that broke the camels back! Wow! Very funny read!

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I loved your description of the falling water drop "like an Olympic contender". and "Split like a grape" very nice images.

Grammar
no errors noted.


Suggestions:

I would use a larger font but otherwise this is a fun read.

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Review of Texting  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
You wrote convincingly of a desire to text but did the right thing and did your math worksheet. Welcome to Writing.com.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I like how you use the texting AS the poem. And then in the end, works on the school work. Now that bespeaks self-control, and that's really cool.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:

I suggest you use a larger font, and keep writing!

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Review of Pass  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a very honest poem. I've felt that way before about school and classes.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I liked how you used your dislike of the class to motivate through this poem. It is after all, a poem.

Grammar
No errors noted


Suggestions:

Practice more with your writing, there could be unplumbed depths to find.

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Review of The Invitation  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your flash fiction on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a good read with an amusing twist. I liked how the main character is ready to believe the worst and got the best.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I liked how Ted eased out the door in amusement rather than irritation. That put a nice slant on the work.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:

I suggest a larger font for easier reading.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This poem seems to be a lament for the passing of an age of humanity and a curiously cautious look for the future.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
The ideas are well-presented, but I am not sure what era we are talking about... the computer and electronics age, perhaps?

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:

I have no suggestions to make.

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Review of Bitter Tears  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a sad poem, a recollection of a failed or ended relationship. I felt sympathy and loss for the author.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:

"You faded from my life,
And became one more memory,
A mere milestone
In a life of loneliness."

This evoked a powerful sense of regret for the author that he hasn't moved on in his grief for the ended relationship.

I liked how you centered it, it had good flow.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:

The only suggestion I have is to make the font size larger for easier reading.

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Review of Curt Butt  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I found your prose on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was clearly a man who needs help.. he is plotting the fall of a colleague and childhood companion and using untraceable ways to do it, but it keeps backfiring on him.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
This was a very venomous man who cares little for how he hurts other people, in fact he enjoys it. I felt anger at him, but cheered on Harvey for healing his relationship with his parents.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:

A larger font would make this easier to read.

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Review of That Day  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your short story on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a curious read... a reluctant employee that does care about the Boss. Then he gets the business and is so shocked he faints.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
The fact that Mr. Franks was going to retire and give it to his employee speaks well for the employee as a worker. The fact that George fainted made it clear that he wasn't in any way aiming for the job and that speaks well for him.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:

I can only suggest a larger font to make it easier to read.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your short story on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was an engrossing read. I like how matter-of-factly you write his actions and reasons for doing them. Kind of like a bad James Bond.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
A do-gooder thief who only targets other thieves, I love it!

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:

A larger font would make this easier to read.

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Review of This is America  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your editorial on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I liked your fervor supporting your feelings about this country. You presented a good argument for a country like ours. I'm not going to make this into a political discussion, but I did enjoy the premise that working together our people can be better.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
This appears to support the way we, in this country, help small groups of people to unite into an amalgam that all are a part of.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:

I only suggest a larger font for easier reading.

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