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Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a good description of impatience and coveting that which we don't have. It IS a shame that we Humans are unable, often, to observe something wonderful and make no changes to it, trying to 'perfect' it.
Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I liked the rhyming, it didn't seem forced.
I also liked the lines:
"jealously, we must acquire
that which holds a desired trait."
It is too true that what we haven't is rarely good enough, that we seek more and more.. more wealth, more attention, etc.
No errors noted.
No suggestions, I enjoyed the message you posted.
Thank you for sharing your poem. Write On!
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