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#4331138

Review of Science

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Rated: E

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Hello M.Deity,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your sixth year with us.

Overall Impression: This story was very weird. In fact, it was so weird I didn't understand it. Don't get me wrong. I did like this story. But I didn't understand it.

The Story Itself: What I liked the best about this story is that you brought up the eleventh dimension. You are right about there being more than four. But how do you know about the eleventh one? Is this the fiction part of your story? If so, then you are wrong. There are a lot more than four, or even eleven. There's several hundred of them. and I'm a little curious how you knew that.

Your Characters: You gave miles a name. But you didn't 'me' one. If this were my story, I would have given 'me' a name too. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke: This whole Short Story is one big dialogue between Miles and Me. The only thing that it didn't have was the quotation marks around it.

Any Last Thoughts: I'm also a little confused about how this story was written. It was categorized as a Short Story. But the way it was written it looks more like an old fashioned screenplay scene, skit, etc.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

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#4331137

Review of Longing

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Rated: E

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Hello Demacian Freeman,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your sixth year with us.

Overall Impression: I agree with you that love hurts. Sometimes it's good. And sometimes it's bad. It depends on the individuals involved at the time that it happens. But I think that usually it's good. Unfortunately, when there is good there is also bad. We are both.

The Story Itself: This read more like ramblings or thoughts about love than a Short Story. Don't get me wrong. I liked this story a whole lot. It just didn't read like one to me.

How They Spoke: There was no actually dialogue in this story. But it read to me like it was all, or almost all, dialogue without the quotation marks or thoughts without the italics to me.

Any Last Thoughts: Instead of just telling us how you felt about the good and bad involving love, you should have written a story about someone that was affected by it both ways. I know that's not an easy thing to do with a Word Count limitation, especially one this small. but it can be done.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4331136

Review of Mary GO Getter

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Rated: E

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Hello Will Dee,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your eighth year with us.

Overall Impression: It was a simple story. But it was a well-written one too. I liked it very, very much.

The Story Itself: A lot has happened almost all at once for Mary. It started out bad with her car being vandalized. And then it got worse. The parents of those teenagers should have paid for her car or paid for a new one. As for her boss and landlord, both of them should have been more lenient under the circumstances.

Your Characters: Mary is of course the main character in this story. And I liked that you gave her a name. A lot of writers don’t do that. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

Any Last Thoughts: I think that you did a very good job with this story. Do You have any more like it? If you do I would like to read and review them too when I get the chance to do it. And if they are as good, or better, than this one then I definitely want to read them.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

PureSciFi aka spacefaction
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#4331134

Review of Wake Up? Dead?

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Rated: 13+

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Hello Geoff,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your third year with us.

Overall Impression: This read more like dialogue without the quotation marks or thoughts without the italics. Don't get me wrong. I liked this story a whole lot. It just did read like a story to me.

The Story Itself: It was a 'story' about several things. this story is about death mostly. but it's also about waking up and dreams too.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: I'm not sure. But I think you made a couple of grammar mistakes with this story. I noticed that you used the word 'maybe' several times in this story. And I think that's a no-no when it comes to grammar. So, is the word 'or' to start a sentence too. you might want to look into both of these possible errors in grammar.

Any Last Thoughts: I think you did a very good job with this story. But I am wondering why it is so short. There's nothing wrong with that. I'm just curious about it. Was it because of a Word Count limitation contest?

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

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#4331133

Review of Potty Time!

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Rated: 13+

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Hello womandisciple,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your tenth year with us.

Overall Impression: This story made me smile. It's a problem that every parent has to deal with. And I think that you did a great job in how you dealt with it.

The Story Itself: The story is about a little boy that tries to go to the bathroom for the first time by himself. But his mother is right there with him telling him what to do and what not to do. I always thought that it was harder to train little boys than little girls when it comes to this subject. And after reading this story I think that I am right. The one thing I probably would have done differently if I wrote it is having him do Number Two instead of Number One. Number one is easy to learn how to do. It's Number Two that's harder. At least that's what I think.

Your Characters: True, the little boy is the main character in this story.
But so is his mother. I know that it's hard to do with a story this short, but I would have given them names. Maybe something like 'Carol said, "Ready to go by yourself, Tommy?' or '"Ready to go by yourself, Tommy?" Carol asked.' I think it makes a story better if they have a name. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke: Most of this story was dialogue. And the dialogue itself looked good to me. But the way that it was done was a little bit confusing.

Any Last Thoughts: The way that this was written it reads more like a poem than a Short Story. Is there a reason why you did it this way. Don't get me wrong. I like this story very much. I'm just a little curious as to how come you wrote it the way that you did.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4331130

Review of What's up with Whatsit

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Rated: ASR

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Hello Mrs. Whatsit,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your eleventh year with us.

Overall Impression: These blog entries was very interesting. It's not because I didn't like it because I did. But it didn't make much sense to me. All three blog entries that I read were different from each other. That's not a bad thing. I have read a lot of blogs like this one. But it's still interesting.

Your Blog Introduction: It was a very weird Introduction. Don't get me wrong.
I liked it. But it didn't really make much sense to me. What does it have to do with your blog entries?

The Blog Itself: At first I was only going to review your latest blog entry because it was kind of a long one. But I noticed that the next two were pretty short. So, I read all three of them. The first one I could understand. And the third wasn't too bad. But the middle didn't make any sense to me. What was that one about? I know that it's a list. But what kind of a list was it? I'm also a little confused about the named that you mention in your blog entries. Some of them you said who they were in connection to you. But some you didn't. Did I miss something in reading them?

Any Last Thoughts: I now it doesn't read like I liked your blog. But you are wrong about that because I did like it. In fact, I wanted to read more of it. And I still do, if I can. But I just have the time to do it right now.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this blog with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great blogs like this one.

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#4331129

Review of A look at my personal life and thoughts.

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Rated: ASR

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Hello brom21,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your seventh year with us.

Overall Impression: I like the way that you think. You're not afraid to open up when it comes to what you like to do besides write. Which like the rest of us is your top priority. What I like the most about these blog entries is that you are a Video Game fanatic. And you aren't afraid to write about it.

The Blog Itself: I'm sorry, but I only had time today at work to read your last two blog entries. I want to read more of them. Especially, if they are as good or better than these two are. But I just don't have the time to them right now. As for the blogs themselves, they are both pretty much the same thing. You mostly talk about playing Video Games with your friends. There was a mention about finishing your Novel and editing it, though. And you did mention that you wrote for three hours on it. I would like to know more about this Novel.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: Yes, I know that grammar, spelling, and missing words aren't important in blogs. But I still think that you should make every effort to do them with that in mind. And I noticed that in the first entry that I read there appeared to be a few errors. You might want to checked that out.

Any Last Thoughts: Do you write Fanfiction based on these Video Games. If you don't you should be. They always say that you should write about what you know best. And from what I read Video Games is what you know best.

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Thank you for sharing this blog with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great blogs like this one.

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#4331128

Review of L'aura del Campo

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Rated: 13+

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Hello Kåre Enga writing poetry ,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your twelfth year with us.

Overall Impression: I loved these blog entries. I'm not a big fan of poetry. Probably because I'm not very good at it myself. But I know what I like. And I liked these very, very much.

Your Blog Introduction: When I first looked at your Introduction I thought to myself, 'Oh no, I'm not going to be able to review this one because it's in Spanish. I only took Spanish one year when I was in seventh grade. And that was back in the Stone Age.' But a second later as I read on I realized it wasn't in Spanish. At least I think it was Spanish. But I might be wrong about that too. I'm very happy that I was wrong about the foreign language. Otherwise, I wouldn't have read these great blog entries.

The Blog Itself: What I liked best about these blogs was that they were poetry for the Thirty Day Picture Prompt challenge. I have seen several blog entries for this challenge. It seems that everyone on WDC is doing it except for me. But this is the first one I have seen done with poetry. I also liked that they weren't rhyming poetry. It's the kind of poetry that I write. The first and third picture you chose I have seen before, especially the first one. But I haven't seen the second one before now.

Any Last Thoughts: I only read the last three blogs. But not because they were too long. It was just the opposite. It's because they were too short. if I had continued on I wouldn't have been able to stop myself. They were that good.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this blog with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great blogs like this one.

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#4331127

Review of Blog @ Work

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Rated: 18+

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Hello WakeUpAndLive~it's Spring ♥,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your first year with us.

Overall Impression: First of all I wanted to welcome you as a Newbie. I know I'm almost two weeks in doing that. But I wanted to do it anyway. look at all that you have accomplished in that year. You have almost doubled me. And that took me three and a half years to do. I can see why someone gave you that upgrade. Keep up the good writing. Not only with your stories and poetry, but with your blog too.

Your Blog Introduction: I'm glad that you got upgraded. And I hope that you can keep it going after your three months are up. The best way to do that is through contests, especially the daily ones. Another way to do that is through reviewing too.

The Blog Itself: True, I only got to read the last two blog entries. But it wasn't because I didn't like them. it's just the opposite. I liked them a whole lot. The main reason I stopped after two is because of their length. Don't get me wrong. There isn't anything wrong with how long they are. I have seen some that are just as long, if not longer. The first blog was about a Picture Prompt challenge. A lot of people picked this picture. I'm just curious if anyone picked the other one? I agree with you about this prompt. Laughter is important part of our lives. We all need to do more of it. The second blog was also a Picture Prompt. But instead of just one side prompt like the last one, this one had two side prompts.

Any Last Thoughts: Are all of your blog entries like these two. If so, I would love to read them too. I just don't have to time to do it right now.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this blog with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great blogs like this one.

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#4331126

Review of Everyday Canvas

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Rated: 18+

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Hello [1]Joy,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your sixteenth year with us.

Overall Impression: This blog of yours lives up to your name. it was a real joy reading it. What I liked the best about it is that you based it on Prompts. Some blogger do have theme when it comes to their blogs. I've got two of them. But some just want to rant and rave or ramble on.

Your Blog Introduction: What I liked most the most about your introduction was the quotes that you wrote about and the pictures you displayed showing blog originations that you are affiliated with. Then in the last line you tell us what your blog is about.

The Blog Itself: True, I only read your last two blog entries. But it wasn't because I didn't want to read more. I just don't have the time to do it right now since I am at work. I loved them. The first one was about Life being a Journey. And I agree with what you wrote about. I do believe that everyday is a different journey. Also, I agree with it being especially important to us as writers. The second one was about seeing. And I agree with you on that one too. There are a lot a ways of seeing beyond just with your eyes.

Any Last Thoughts: I think you have done a great job with this blog. At least you have with what I have read so far. And if the rest of it is as good, or better, than these two then I definitely want to read more of it when I get the chance to do it, if I can.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this blog with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great blogs like this one.

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#4331124

Review of Hey, life? Are you kidding me?

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Rated: 18+

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Hello audra_branson,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your nine year with us.

Overall Impression: I like that you are a free spirit when it comes to blogging. That you are willing to write about basically anything. I'm just the opposite. My two blogs are theme based. What I liked most about is was your Introduction. You went into a lot of detail with it.

Your Blog Introduction: You are right, too many Bloggers do treat there blogs like their stories, poems, etc. They are more worried about getting it grammatically correct that it effects the blog. I'm one of them. I also like that you are so close with your son and his dog. My Mon and I were like that too. Only instead of a dog it was a cat named Sugar Burger. And I really like that you are a teacher, especially for Middle and High School students. We need more teachers like you.

The Blog Itself: True, I only read you latest blog entry. But I wanted to read more of them. I just don't have the time to do it right now because I am at work. As for the blog itself, I was a little confused by it. You started off talking about 'Never Look Back' in number one. But then you seemed to have forgotten about it and moved on to something else. There's nothing wrong with that, but the title indicated that the whole blog was about never looking back.

Any Last Thoughts: I think you have done a great job with this blog. At least what I have read of you I have. And if the rest of it is anything like this I definitely would like to read some for of it when I get the chance to do it. If that's okay with you.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this blog with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great blogs like this one.

PureSciFi aka spacefaction
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#4324965

Review of Silent Cries

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Rated: 13+

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Hello misunderstood1,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your sixth year with us.

Overall Impression: I think this story was great. And that you did a very good job in writing it.

The Story Itself: This was a very sad story. Not because of how Tyler died. But the reason why he died so young. He died because he was different. And no one should kill themselves because they are different. Whether it homosexuality or something else suicide isn't the answer. In fact, it should be just the opposite. Make those who disapprove of you pay for it. Revenge is always better than suicide. At least that's what I think.

Location, Location, Location: I'm not exactly sure where this story takes place.
But if I read this story correctly it's at the High School where Tyler attended.

Your Characters: Of course, 'Z' is the main character in this story. But I am curious about one thing. Why did you give her a name like that? Is there a reason why you gave her that name? I liked that you gave your characters a name. Even if it's a weird one. A lot of writers don’t do that.] Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke: There wasn't a lot of dialogue in this story. But there was some. And what dialogue there was looked good. at least it did to me.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: It looked like you did some thinking in this story. But if you did you didn't italicize it. Am I write about the thinking between the talking to the others there and the ending of your talking.

Any Last Thoughts: Overall, I think you did a great job with this story. Do you have any other stories like this one? If you do, I would also like to read them too if I ever get the chance to do it.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4324962

Review of Things Happen

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Rated: 18+

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Hello Silver Bird,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your eighth year with us.

Overall Impression: I like this story a whole lot. What I liked the best was how the wife found out what her hubby was really up to.

The Story Itself: It was kind of obvious how this story was going to end from almost the very beginning of it. At least it did when it came to the affair. But not the divorce. That was kind of a surprise. Then again, it wasn't. I wasn't surprised by the divorce itself. But why the wife got it.

Location, Location, Location: The main location for this story was the hotel where the hubby was found with his Lover. In fact, that was really the only location. An office and wherever the wife was during their conversion, probably their house, was mentioned. But they were only mentioned.

Your Characters: Of course, the wife was the main character in this story. But so was the hubby and his Lover too. The one thing I would have done differently with this story was to give them names. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke: There was a lot of repeating words and phrases in this story.
and that's a little distracting.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: All that repeating of words and phrases I think are a grammar error. You might want to check into that.

Any Last Thoughts: It was kind of predictable almost right from the start. Maybe instead of the Lover being just another man I would have written him as a shemale instead.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

PureSciFi aka spacefaction
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#4324960

Review of Emily's Window

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Rated: E

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Hello Heather,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your ninth year with us.

Overall Impression: Wow, that's all I can say about this story is WoW. I think you did a fantastic job with it. What I liked best was about the mystery involved with it. Why couldn't they be together? Was Emily's mother homophobic? It sure read like that to me. The only thing I would have done differently is I would have solved with mystery with my her mother didn't like Stephanie.

The Story Itself: It read like it was about a lesbian relationship that Emily's mother didn't approve of. But it could be about the age difference too. Emily was nineteen. But how old was Stephanie? Since she rode her bike to Emily's house ten miles away she could have been younger than that.

Location, Location, Location: You did go into a lot of detail with the location for this story. But with this type of story details aren't that important. I think you did a very good job in describing this story.

Your Characters: Of course, Emily and Stephanie are the main characters in this story. And I liked that you gave your characters a name. A lot of writers don’t do that. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke: There was a lot of dialogue in this story. And I like that a lot. Most of my stories have a lot of dialogue in them too. As for the dialogue itself, it looked good. At least it did to me.

Any Last Thoughts: I can't think of anything else to say except that I loved your story. Do you have any other stories like this one? If you do, I would like to read them too if I can, and if I get the chance to do it.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4324959

Review of My girlfriend

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Rated: 13+

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Hello Noahftm,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your sixth year with us.

Overall Impression: I'm a little confused about this story. Don't get me wrong.
I did like this story a lot. What I am confused about is that you categorized it as a Gay/Lesbian genre. But I didn't see that in this story.

The Story Itself: This was a story about a couple that was about to become intimate with each other. It was definitely a Romance/Love genre story. But there wasn't any Gay/Lesbian genre in it. Unless you are considering the Boxer. As I was reading it I kept wondering where the Gay/Lesbian genre was going to come into it. But it never did.

Location, Location, Location: The location for this story was the bedroom where this encounter took place. Personally, I would have gone into a little bit more detail about this bedroom. Especially, if I wanted to establish it as a Gay/Lesbian story.

Your Characters: I'm not sure who is telling this story. Not even sure if they are male or female. I think names are very important in a story. Especially, one like this one. It could have established they were both females. Unless it a type of name that could go with either gender. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: I noticed that you didn't capitalize most of your 'Is' in this story. I'm not exactly sure if that is a grammar error or not. But I think that it is. You might want to check into that.

Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have separated these paragraphs with a space between them. I think that it's easier to read if you do that. But that's just my opinion.

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Review of One Nice Sunny Day

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Rated: 18+

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Hello writergeorge,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your ninth year with us.

Overall Impression: At first it didn't look like this story was going to go into the Gay/Lesbian genre because it was involving a so-called straight couple. But as the story progressed I realized I was wrong. This is a Gay/Lesbian story sort of but at the same time, it isn't. I still think that you did a great job with it, though.

The Story Itself: A couple, Beth and Mark, go to the park to have a picnic. While they are having it they see two males walking through the park holding hands and appearing romantic toward each other. And they comment on that. What Mark doesn't know is that Beth had a lesbian encounter in college. In fact, it read like it was more than just an encounter. I think you did a great job with this story. The only think I would have changed with is was a space between the paragraphs.

Location, Location, Location: The location for this story was a park. I think you did a very good job describing it too.

Your Characters: Of Course, Beth and Mark are the main characters in this story. There were a few others mentioned. But they were only mentioned. I liked that you gave your characters a name. A lot of writers don’t do that. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke: There wasn't a lot of dialogue in this story. But there was some. And what dialogue there was looked good. At least it did to me.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: I don't think putting a space in between paragraphs is a grammar error or not. But you might want to check into that.

Any Last Thoughts: When I first starting reading this story and it was about a so-called straight couple I thought that it was going to be a gay bashing story. I'm glad that I was wrong.

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#4319068

Review of Cuddles & Kipper

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Rated: E

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Hello lacy,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your seventh year with us.

Overall Impression: I liked this poem a whole lot. But I was wondering what made this poem Fanfiction. Kipper does kind of sound familiar. Isn't that the name of an animated cartoon television series? Is that what makes this Fanfiction?

The Poem Itself: A bear and a kitten as friends. Bosom buddies that can't be separated. It's hard to believe that that's possible. Even if the bear was a cub. But Cuddles and Kipper have done the impossible.

How It Make Me Feel: I'd like to cuddle cuddles and Kipper. That's how I feel about this poem.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: It looks like you missed a word in one of your sentences. Shouldn't it be 'Like standing on a shore' instead of 'Like standing a shore?'

Any Last Thoughts: What I liked the best about this poem is that it's about two animals. Do you have any other stories like this one. If you do, I sure would like the chance to read them too. And if they are as good, or better, than this I definitely do want to if I can.

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#4319067

Review of Spam Scam

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Rated: E

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Hello copywriter,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your first year with us.

Overall Impression: Awesome, this poem was great. It got started me with the title. But it blew me away once I began reading it. I'm giving this poem a four-point-five star rating. It was that awesome.

The Poem Itself: I could never do what this individual tried to do. I'd be afraid that what happened to him would happen to me. Of course, how he got caught was the best part of this fantastic poem.

How It Make Me Feel: Jealous,
that's how I felt while reading this poem. I was jealous that he tried something like this that I couldn't or wouldn't. Even though he got caught he still tried to better himself.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: No, I didn't see any grammer errors. But that doesn't mean there wasn't any. After all,
a few of your sentences were kinf of long.

Any Last Thoughts: I noticed that this poem started out rhyming. And I like that a lot. But then toward the middle it became ever other sentence. After a few of them it went to none. Then the last few it went back to ever ither one. Is this what Free Verse poetry means?

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#4318844

Review of Ode to Voldemort

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Rated: E

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Hello irregular_onion,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your fifth year with us.

Overall Impression: I'm a big Harry Potter movie fan. So, when I saw the title for this poem I knew that I had to read it. The subject matter did push me back a little. But not enough to stop me from reading it. And I am glad that I did because I like it very, very much. I think you did a fantastic job with this poem.

The Poem Itself: You describe Voldemort from head to toe. Well, at least the head part. I don't think you actually mentioned his toes. But you did everything else about him.
and you did it a way that wasn't gross or disgusting. I think you did a great job at describing the name that should never be spoken. Wasn't that the phrase that they kept saying in the first three movies?

How It Make Me Feel: It made me smile. Especially, the last sentence that really wasn't part of the poem.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: there were several parts of this poem that had half-moon brackets around them. Is there a reason why you did that? I'm not sure, but I think that's a grammar error.

Any Last Thoughts: I agree that Voldemort shouldn't read this poem. but I don't think that it should be part of this poem, either. If you wanted to say it, I think you should have made it part of the poem itself somehow.

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#4318843

Review of My Mighty ship

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Rated: E

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Hello internet addiction,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your second year with us.

Overall Impression: What I like the best about this poem is that it rhymed. At least half of each section did. The other half was mostly repetition. And I didn't like that as much. That's why I have only given this poem three-point-five stars. There was a lot of words and phrase repetition in this poem.

The Poem Itself: I did like the way this poem flowed, though. And the different people that came on board a ship that didn't sail. They all seemed to be looking for something but finding nothing.

How It Make Me Feel: [4]

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: I only saw one grammar in this poem. Shouldn't there be a comma after 'rain?'

Any Last Thoughts: Where was the Fanfiction in this story. I re-read it a couple of more times and I couldn't see it. The same is true about the Gay Rights part of it that was mentioned in the title description too.

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#4318841

Review of Moonbeams

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Rated: E

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Hello h1gh1ander,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your tenth year with us.

Overall Impression: At first I didn't think that I was going to like this poem.
It was kind of boring. But just as I was about to move onto another poem it got better. And I'm glad that I continued on because if I hadn't I wouldn't have discovered how good this poem really was.

The Poem Itself: Where is the Fanfiction in this poem. Is it the fairy folk themselves? Maybe it's based on a movie, television show or a Novel series.

How It Make Me Feel: This was a very moving poem. It was also a very sad one because of what happened to the fairy folk.

Any Last Thoughts: I'm not a big fan of poetry. Probably because I'm not very good at it. But sometimes I get on a reading frenzy and I want to read it. This was one of those times. And I'm glad that I did. I think you did a great job with this poem.

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#4318840

Review of key to life

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Rated: E

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Hello Bonafical,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your tenth year with us.

Overall Impression: Where was the Fanfiction is this poem. It doesn't look like there is any. Don't get me wrong. I did like it. I'm just sure if it's Fanfiction or not.

The Poem Itself: I'm not sure what this poem was about. It didn't make any sense to me. I re-read it three times. And I still couldn't understand it.

How It Make Me Feel: I felt very confused about this poem. The more times I read it the more confused I was. Mostly because I didn't understand it.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: This wasn't your typical poem. Most poems are broken up into sections of three or four lines per section. But this one wasn't done like that. Is this a kind of poetry that I don't know about.

Any Last Thoughts: Even the title description was confusing to me. What was this Poem about? I'm not trying to be mean. And I know it sounds like I am. But I'm not. I would really like to know what it was supposed to be about.

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#4318839

Review of Dementor's Kiss on the Rocks

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Rated: ASR

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Hello Lily Shauna Via,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your twelfth year with us.

Overall Impression: This poem was a little scary. But it was a good kind of scary. It could have been the bad type aka horror, but it wasn't. I think you did a very good job with this story. Mixing scary without making it horror.

The Poem Itself: I'm a big fan of the Harry Potter movies. So, when I saw that this poem was about that I knew that I would like it. And I was right. I liked it a whole lot. True, I wasn't crazy about the subject matter. But the way you wrote it that didn't distract me from reading it or liking it.

How It Make Me Feel: As I read this poem if felt scared. Not for me. It wasn't a scary poem. I was scared for Harry.

Any Last Thoughts: Have you written any other poems like this one. If so, I would like to read them too if I could. And I'm not talking about just Harry Potter.

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#4318838

Review of The Day of the Dove

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Rated: ASR

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Hello Rose Grey,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your sixteenth year with us.

Overall Impression: What I like the most about it was how you have interwoven titles from the original Star Trek series into a poem. It was very imaginative and well written.
But it was also a little bit confusing.

The Poem Itself: I'm not exactly sure what this poem was about. I know that the titles told the story about finding peace. But that's not what I read. Where was the peace?

How It Make Me Feel: Confusion. That's how I feel about this poem. According to the title description, this was a poem about finding peace. But I didn't see that when I read it.
That's why I'm confused about it.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: Since these are titles from the original series shouldn't they be capitalized? I think that they should. But I might be wrong. You may want to look into to that.

Any Last Thoughts: I'm a big Star trek fan. So, I knew as soon as I saw this poem I knew that I was going to like it. But I was wrong about that. I didn't just like it, I liked it a whole lot.

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#4318835

Review of Lately Waiting

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Rated: 13+

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Hello Stephanie,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your tenth year with us.

Overall Impression: This is the best poem I have read in a long time. It might even be the best one.

The Poem Itself: What I liked the most about this poem is its repetition. The second line of the first section became the first line of the second. And it did that until the first repeated itself at the end. Who did you do that?

How It Make Me Feel: At first when it started repeating I was a little bit upset. Then when I noticed the pattern that frown smiled again.

Any Last Thoughts: I also liked that it rhymed. That's not easy to do with a normal poem. It must have been even harder with this one.

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