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PERSONAL VIEWS
You did a fantastic job with the descriptions in this short poem! The sentiment is so sweet and it was an enjoyable read.
GRAMMAR/SPELLING
I didn't notice any spelling or grammar mistakes and it flowed very well.
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PERSONAL VIEWS
I really like the story behind this poem. There's a great deal of imagery that you have conjured for the reader, bringing us right into the story. The details are amazing and the story behind it unfold effortlessly.
GRAMMAR/SPELLING
I found no grammar or spelling mistake, though I would like to bring line 1 or stanza 3 to your attention. It's just a nit-picky thing, but having the word 'grew' twice in the same line jars a bit. You did a great job with the rhyme scheme and the rhythm felt smooth all the way through.
OVERALL
Overall, I think this is a wonderful poem with great descriptions.
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PERSONAL VIEWS
Oh my! This sound sooo familiar. I live in Florida, and know that heat all to well! (It's was over 100 last week!) You paint a great picture here, very easy to envision and FEEL.
GRAMMAR/SPELLING
There were no spelling or grammar mistakes noticed.
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MY PERSONAL VIEWS
I found the format a little off-putting. I think it was the double spacing between the lines. While this starts as what could be a very emotionally charged poem, it falls a little flat, at least for me, at the end. It's almost as if you are making fun of the pain the narrator is going through.
GRAMMAR/SPELLING
There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed and the poem flowed well. The rhyme scheme worked well to move it along nicely.
OVERALL
I think you did a good job, but for me it was missing something.
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MY PERSONAL VIEWS
I'm not quite sure how to take this. If you leave out the ending it could actually be a very good beginning for a longer story. You set the scene well and even with the minimal descriptions the reader can get a sense of the setting.
GRAMMAR/SPELLING
There were a few places I noticed where the grammar could be tightened up a bit, an example would be the ending of the first paragraph.
OVERALL
You have a very good voice, and it would be interesting to see the main idea of this in a longer work.
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Hi usmc329 I am here to review your monologue which was listed in "Simply Positive Review Forum " . Please remember this is only one person's opinion and the decision to change your work lies with you.
PERSONAL VIEWS
I think this is a wonderful tribute to those that risk their life day after day to serve and protect us. I was, however, confused when you started talking about a police officer and then ended with the Marine.
GRAMMAR/SPELLING
There were no spelling mistakes noticed, though some of the things you mentioned did feel a little repetitive.
OVERALL
You did a great job conveying your feelings and paying a wonderful tribute.
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MY PERSONAL VIEWS
This is an interesting article about an age old question. You did a good job conveying your thoughts and making them make sense. Love is different for everyone, and the moment we decide we are in love is different.
GRAMMAR/SPELLING
I found no grammar or spelling mistakes.
OVERALL
I found this to be a well written opinion piece.
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MY PERSONAL VIEWS
This is a very sweet and loving tribute to a woman who obviously means a lot to you. You did a great job conveying each emotion and your word choices worked well.
TECHNICALITIES
For the most part, the rhyme scheme worked well, although, the second stanza didn't quite hit the mark and felt a little forced. The rhyme and flow was also done well, save for the second stanza again.
OVERALL
A very nice, loving poem that is full of emotion.
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The power of nicotine...I can relate, LOL I think I would have found a way to the store anyway
I think you did a good job telling this story. It was cute and funny and had a light tone to it, though I am sure it wasn't so light when it was happening, .
I didn't find any grammar or spelling mistakes, and I enjoyed reading this little story. I think you should try your hand and doing it more often...hint hint.
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MY PERSONAL VIEWS
While I found this to be a very sweet, touching poem, the lack of format and punctuation was distracting. Because of the way it was formatted, the flow and rhythm were stunted and the meaning behind it was lost.
The words here are good and I think you put the emotions in well.
GRAMMAR/SPELLING
The only mistakes I found were in formatting and punctuation.
OVERALL
I think if you reworked this a little, it could be a nice little poem.
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MY PERSONAL VIEWS
I will have to admit that I didn't quite 'get' this poem. I'm not sure if it's about a vampire or an abusive relationship or the ocean. It seems very chaotic and is missing a cohesive element to bring it all together.
GRAMMAR/SPELLING
I found no grammar or spelling mistakes, though I think this could benefit from some punctuation.
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MY PERSONAL VIEWS
I found this to be a very insigtful poem about human nature and how we tried to hide what is really going on behind mask of fake reality. You did a great job with the description and the dark undertones came through very well.
GRAMMAR/SPELLING
I found no grammar or spelling mistakes, and although this poem didn't have a particular rhyme scheme, its rhythm was good and it flowed well.
OVERALL
A very deep and descriptive poem. Well done!
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I found the voice of this chapter to be fresh and clear, and it had a very good flow. You set up the plot very well and even with all the information you provided on Grace's past, it kept this reader's attention all the way through.
You have a very good way describing each scene without it feeling like description. You added everything in at the precise moment it was needed and it kept the story moving.
Grace's character was done very well. She felt real and very charaismatic, even for a young girl.
I found no mistakes in grammar or spelling and your word choice was excelent. I look forward to reader more about Grace.
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This is a cute little poem about the realization everyone has to come to at some point in their lives. It has a good message and the flow works very well. There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed.
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I found this poem to be very thought provoking. We sometimes forget that making mistakes are what makes us all grow and become better people in general. The last lines give the reader hope and encouragment. There were no spelling or grammar mistakes noticed.
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This is such a precious poem that I think all parents can relate to. Children are definitely amazing, and each thing they do is something to cherish. You can definitely feel the love and longing in these words and the last line says it all. I found no grammar or spelling mistakes, and it's well written and hearfelt.
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PERSONAL VIEWS
I think you did a great job with this metered poem. It flowed well and was easy to follow. The last line really sums up the whole piece, making the reader re-think the rest of it.
I found no grammar or spelling mistakes and enjoyed the vivid imagery you conjure for the reader.
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Review 5 of 5 from the carnival.
This is such an amazingly vivid poem! I don't know much about poetry, but the form you used here worked very well. It had a wonderful rhythm that made it flow very naturally. I found no mistakes in grammar or spelling and really enjoyed reading this. Thank you so much for letting me peek into your port.
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Review 4 of 5 from the Carnival.
I really liked how you used the omnipotent narrator in this story. It reminded me of the old time story telling when everyone sat around and listened to the elders tell fantastical stories of the past.
This story has a very fantasy feel to it and you did another great job with the descriptions and the characters. The plot flowed well and there were no spelling or grammar mistakes noticed.
I found the pacing and tone perfectly fit to the piece and the language well used. Your dialogue was written nicely and it moved the story along as needed.
The descriptions in this poem are truly amazing. You capture the feeling of coming into one's self very well. The imagery is magnificent and well as the story told.
TECHNICALITIES (rhyme ect..)
The flow to this poem is done in such a subtle way that the reader doesn't even know they are moving from line to line. It's rhythm is perfect.
OVERALL
A wonderfully written poem that speaks of life renewed and meaning found.
I actually found this to be a wonderful poem that speaks of time passing and looking back at who we once thought we were compared to who we actually are.
TECHNICALITIES (rhyme ect..)
You did a great job with the rhythm, and the rhyme scheme worked very well.
OVERALL
A nice little poem about life and what might have been.
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Review 2 of 5 from the Carnival.
You definitely have a wonderful way with suspense in this story. You build up the scene well and the anger and hatred can be felt in every word. I would have, however, liked to know a little more about the characters and exactly what has/will happen. It seemed to end quite abruptly without coming to a conclusion. I found no grammar or spelling mistakes, and the words you used worked very well.
I found this very interesting. You did a great job with the three different points of view and you explained the story very well. You did a good job with the description and taking everyone's actions into account. There were no spelling or grammar mistakes noticed. The only thing that I would suggest is that it is written in a very passive voice. I think this could have a greater impact if there was more showing and less telling.
Thank you for sharing your work.
~ Vikki ~
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