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Review of O Canada  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Petra! I loved this crossword and it totally reflects our country Canada. Your opening was interesting and informative. I smiled at the beaver line! *Laugh* The voice was inviting and the mood was entertaining.

*Leafr* Your clues were challenging and included all the provinces. Yay! You chose some iconic items like the oldest store, Juno, and the CBC. I was able to get most of them. The two words with U at the start gave me a challenge. LOL I couldn't recall the oldest park so did a little cheat research. I have been there too! Beautiful spot.

*Leafr* I like how you describe "the area that stretches.." I think it is a challenge to come up with clues that give little away. I think the clues were well done. Folks could learn a lot about out country here even if they might have to look some things up..like daylight saving time. *Laugh* I knew that one!

*Star* I had lots of fun doing this puzzle. Thanks for your tribute to Canada.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Wolf* Hello Big Bad Wolf! It was a stay in bed day so I was checking out activities to pass the time. I like word searches and came across your folder filled with activities. It was a great idea to list all the fun in one place. *Cool*

*Wolf* This is the second puzzle of yours I completed today. I remember Zena so it was cool to find out her alternating jobs. *Smile* The words you chose make sense to the topic. I liked how you used some past tense verbs too. It is original. Having a summary overview of Zena and your intent in the opening was purposeful and the link to your folder was so convenient. *Smile*

*Wolf* The puzzle was just challenging enough not to frustrate me yet kept me involved. *Laugh*

Thanks for sharing this bit of fun!

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Review of Life For Sale  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*Happy anniversary month, Lostwordsmith I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

*Cupcakev* I chose this title as I have just moved and sorting stuff was a challenge. You have really caught the vibe of an older person who may have to move to smaller place and leave so many things behind. "shaking hands" and "accumulation of a life" gave me that idea. I could envision the image so clearly and felt sad.

*Cake* The free style worked effectively and the short lines gives the piece a staccato effect of tears I think. The phrase standing by itself "Sold off..." was evocative too. Your vocabulary and use of repeated sounds created a pleasing flow to read aloud.

*Star* I enjoyed this very much as it touched me.

Keep writing on! May you have many more years contributing and having fun at WDC. *Balloonp*


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Review of 21 Candles  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews*CakeP*


*BalloonR**ConfettiP*HI Wickedfugitive! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

*Candleb* This short sweet poem has a wonderful concept of choosing a dream as each candle may hold one. Cool! I like the idea of collecting flames. *Fire*

The form has a free flow to it with effective rhymes. I wondered if line three needed a subject like "I". I played around with "collecting.... and giving" as an alternative. *Think*

What a wakeful night activity! Thanks for sharing your interpretation of the birthday prompt, which was evocative and fun to enter in with my own imagination. *Star*

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Star**BalloonB*Welcome to WDC! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


Wow! I liked the idea of many forms of cancer from the title. Awesomely symbolic!

Your free verse is very evocative and I could feel the vibe. The image of "mind red" and the personified "Cancer eats" are so effective. The laugh line is evocative too. Well done.

The repeated words were purposeful and I enjoyed the short lines and flow. The lone word in the middle creates a space and had me pause to consider. *Thumbsupgreen* I am not sure why "Of me" is capitalized. *Confused*

Thanks for sharing your expression and craft. I hope you enjoy WDC as you Write on! *Star*

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Review of The Five Elements  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Celebrating you with an Anniversary Review.

Happy Anniversary wishes Master OM. Wow! A whole year old. *Smile*


*Fire* Wow! I just came across your metaphysical magic! I really enjoy these themes as a tree hugger. *Laugh* This poem has a mastery to it. It was a joy to read aloud as the flow and rhyme were so effective. The tribute to the five elements and their meaning and importance is inspiring.

*Wave1* The structure of this was appealing too. I liked how you changed around the order of the elements heading each verse as you repeat to emphasize the topic. The summative couplet at the end is effective too and brings us full circle to the beginning of the poem. *Delight*

*Wind* The vocabulary fits the theme and your rhymes are awesome. Use of repeating sounds also add to the potency of reading aloud. I love the line "perfecting the lotus, petal by petal". Brilliant.
You really used the symbolism and language of the creative power in a natural way that emanates a truth.

*Tree* Thank you for sharing this inspiring expression and your gift. I loved it!
May you have many more years of sharing your craft at WDC! *Cupcakev*

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Review of A Crow  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Hi Lou! This is a review to celebrate you. I love crows!

I really enjoyed entering into this scene. Your simple language and imagery is vivid. Repeating the line about the crow is so evocative and brings attention to that creature. I could imagine the scene as I have watched crows. I had to laugh at the end to think that the crow could report back to you. So magical!
I like how you repeat key words from verse to verse. The last verse brings us back to the first in a way.

I don't think you need a capital letter on "There" In verse 2 as it is preceded by a comma and continues the thought. *Wink* Also the word "But" may not need one though you could put a period after "little". I can see you wanting to emphasize the word "but" though. *Smile* Just pondering.

Using the present tense makes this immediate and easy to draw me into the experience. Good job!

Thanks for sharing your craft. I do love a good crow tribute. *Laugh*

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Review of Halloween  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight*Hello espero! I just found this seasonal poem and was impressed with the end line acrostic letters spelling Hallowe'en! Wow!

*Ghost*I was drawn right into your vivid imagery from the first line. Piles of food and blood red punch
caught my attention and was a clue to the theme. Use of words like "transcendental" is unique and adding the question in the forth line gives the reader something to ponder. *Thumbsupgreen*

I wondered if the next line should be part of the question as it seems to sit there as incomplete phrase. *Confused* maybe!

*Jackolantern* The warning tone is effective in the sixth line.

*Pumpkin* I had to read the last line again as I pondered the idea of changing "with" to "from". Just a puzzlement. *Smile*

*Star* This was fun and I appreciate the work and thought it took to create it! Wonderful. Thanks for sharing your craft.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Smile*Hey Maryann! I had to drop by with a party favour for you! I love haiku and cows so I am happy to rediscover your humourous poem.

*Balloongo* I can so see the cow and you gazing at each other. I have eyed cows too and usually they are quite friendly...or maybe I was lucky! I have heard some are ornery. I gather from the picture you paint that you picked up the bad vibe. *Wink*

*Balloons*The form uses the 5-7-5 syllable style and has a turning point that makes me want to smile. Using the present tense fits the rule of having the event happen in the moment. I think you can leave off the capital letters as haiku generally does not use them. The lines flow together as one sentence to paint a picture. True haiku does not use sentences but phrases. Still, it was entertaining and gave me something to think about. Haiku prompts readers to enter the scene and find their own experience. This inspired my own memories of cows so I could enter your view! Made me laugh. *Thumbsup*
I wondered about why it would be silly if it was unfriendly. *Wink*

*Star* A picture of a cow would be cool here too. I can just picture it! LOL Thanks for sharing your first poem...went back in history...just like reminiscing at WDC! *Laugh*

Love and Light and enjoy the party! *Cake2*

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Review of Music's An Art  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Shamrock* Happy Spring Richard! Thanks for participating in our Free for All March Raid. Here is one of your reviews from your winning prize! *Rabbit3*

*Shamrock* Wow! What a fabulous feat of creating this musical lipogram with no letter e!!*Shock2* I imagine it took some ingenious thought and editing. Kudos!

*Rabbit2* I so enjoyed the way your poem flowed off the tongue with its solid inner rhyme
and variety of rhythms that felt musical. The soundscape was pleasing with your use of assonance and consonance as well especially "s" sounds throughout.

*Music1* I like the way your message shows the history of music and types and song with references to myth, history and sagas. Your words convey so many ideas. The image of the "song's coals" made me think of early peoples singing around fires and the idea of saga words drifting made me think of early bard's tales that could go on and on. I like how you describe the variance of musical rhythms too. *Clock*

*Shamrock* While I did not notice a steady rhythm, the third line I found a bit tough to read with comfort and flow... "humanity's kindling songs coals". I wondered about leaving "humanity" out as souls could refer to that...though I know the idea of humanity is important. *Think*

*Star*An impressive lipogram that engaged my imagination! Thanks for sharing your craft and genius!

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Review of Meet Olivia Berns  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Shamrock**Rabbit2* Happy March Mayhem, Lurie Park! Thank you for participating in our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group Raid! *Delight*


*Gold*Wow! It is so inspiring to see a young author take on writing a longer work! Good for you. I think the title of chapter one: Meet Olivia Berns is appropriate in introducing the main character.

*Tophat* You begin with the school setting and the picture I get of Olivia is that she day dreams and may be a selective mute, only speaking to few people. Or maybe shy.

*Quill* I notice a few glitches as I read aloud..so a few fixes could make it flow better.
Line 2: The verb "wondering"needs to be closer to the the "about the fun..trip.'
eg. Gazing out the window from her desk, Olivia was wondering.."
Also "fun going school trip" is missing something. *Think*
I like how you seamlessly flow in the the name of the town.

*Wink* I would drop the adverb "dumblessly" as I am not sure what it means. Comma after "Anne, on her way,.."

*Smile* I think the word "creme" in the french version. "cream" in English. Nice description.

*Delight* I like how you keep me wondering about Olivia and why she is reserved to speak. I wonder how she became friends with Jack and Anne. I notice one of the genres you use is fanfiction. Are jack and Anne from the Tree House?


*Rainbowl**Rainbowr*A delightful beginning leaving me wanting to know more.

I see you have made a book item! Yay! I will be back to read more. *Star*

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Review of Super Toilet  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Shamrock* Happy March Sumojo! I am happy to review your item for "I Write in 2021!" *Delight*


*Gold**Rolling* Oh my gosh! This ad is so funny as well as being seriously convincing.The last line was perfect and we all would hope so.

*Rabbit* I think appealing the environmental issues and the techy aspects makes this ad of interest to a wide audience. Even compulsive cleaners would love it!

*Dchoco* The tone of the piece is friendly and inviting and you give lots of reasons why it would make a perfect purchase. Your ideas are so creative and original. I laughed aloud at the "bluetooth capabilites." *Laugh**Thumbsup*

*Tophat* I like how you add a bit of history in your reference to the inventor of the toilet and the name you give yours is brilliant. Everyone likes Super...heroes or super anything. Or a smart toilet. *Smile* Let's hope it does not have a Siri voice! *Shock2*

*Quill*I wondered about making "it will give your bathroom..." it's own sentence as opposed to a phrase. Or better yet... something like "to your home, giving your bathroom the swanky.." so it flows freely as a phrase. *Wink*

*Delight*I had so much fun entering your vision of this futuristic invention! Brilliant notion. Good luck in the contest. I love it!*Star*

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Review of Not Inferior  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp*Welcome to WDC and to "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group! Your reviews look great. I was drawn to this poem as the issue is so relevant in these times *Thumbsup* and it is sad that there are places where women are still considered less Than! *Sad*


*Balloongo*Wow! I love the potency of feeling in this expression as you tell it like it is in some places. I like how you give advise at the end, trying to encourage men to wake up.

*Balloonr*Using rhyming couplets was a good choice as it reminds me of wisdom poetry. Your rhymes are well chosen and your facts on the subject stark. Well done.

*Quill* I noticed a few little glitches so I will mention them to help your piece shine even brighter.

In verse 1: Man is singular, so "consider" should be "considers" and "condemn" should be "condemns" to be correct. Or you could say "he does condemn". It still can be considered a rhyme with gem. I love the image of man thinking that of himself!

In verse 5: "disdain" should be "disdains" to go with the singular pronoun "he". *Wink*

I wondered about the need for the word "human" in the second last verse but I see you needed to rhyme. *Think*

*Balloong*This poem clearly illustrates your theme and how you feel about it. I even picked up a feeling that you see some hope....if man will listen. The point about being fed by the mother should hit a heart in them, yet I suppose with years of society norms make some attitudes automatic. The world is changing though, and voices like yours are a light! *Star*

Thanks for sharing your vivid vision and craft. Keep on writing. *Starstruck*



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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Heart**Crown* Congratulations fellow pawn on becoming Queen in the Wonderland. You so deserve your *Crown*! I have fallen into your space in the rabbit hole *Rabbit2* following your progress every now and then. Now I have been sent by the Queen on an official visit and could not resist giving you some kudos! What a grand time I have had. *Delight*

*Rabbit*Wow! You are really on a roll and I have so enjoyed the entries I have had a chance to read. I was really impressed with your Haddock eyes rendition...Using all the verses! *Shock*

*Laugh* I was so amused by your Feather game (how cool) and the Jury is so creative. I liked how your used some characters from wonderland imagination. I would love to go to your Giggology class. What an amazing idea and really it is one that would inspire health and send positive vibes through the land. Great invention! *Thumbsup*

*Horse* Your poem using H's was also well composed and you got to use the words ten times each, making sense and not seeming repetitive! That is a feat. I have not managed it YET! LOL

*Ax* I was wondering about adding some colour and flair to your introduction section. Your book is well worth showing off! *Wink*

*Starstruck*Thanks for joining the adventure again with your wonderful creations this year! It has been fun. Have a *Cookie4* Queen Hullabaloo2 and celebrate!

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Review of Wonderland 2021  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Heart**Crown* Congratulations Queen NormaJean on making it through "Wonderland in fine form! *Starstruck* And avoiding the *Ax**Wink*


*Rabbit2* Wow! Great job on completing the rabbit hole full of prompts in Wonderland. Your intro is inviting and I liked the glyph of the rabbit that sets the scene. I have enjoyed reading your entries so far!

*Cakeb* I was amused by your "Cut the Cake" and enjoyed the romantic story where you used the H words. It is quite a feat to use the words repetitively and make sense. Lovely. I am finding this one tough to do. Kudos!

*Heart* Brilliant how you made your name more likeable. Cool namesake!

*Trainbr* I had to laugh at the dog monopoly! Very inventive idea for the prompt. The trip on the train was charming and I like how you incorporated some Wonderland characters and the Goat's story about the billy goats Gruff and the nursery rhyme references like the cow over the moon! Wonderful imagination!

*Tiara* I liked your take on manners. References to etiquette I am sure many folks today have no idea. Your jury folks were interesting and I like how you used some made up characters that might live in Wonderland.

*Heart* Your writing was clear and easy to follow and your vibe is enthusiastic! Thanks for joining the adventure. Enjoy some *Cupcakev* and *Teag* and the Queen's tarts if you know where they are. Save some for us fellow pawn... we may join you if we do not lose our heads. *Heart*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Rabbit2**Teapotb* Helloooo fellow white pawn! Congratulations on your *Crown*! You raced in "Wonderland in record time. *Thumbsup*Here I am racing for the crown myself. *Wink*


*Rabbit2*It was a real pleasure to read your chapters and still have a few to look forward to later! You had unique points of view that were interesting and inspiring.

*Tophat* I thought it was a cool idea to include your love of chess by adding as many chess references as you could...and actually kept track! *Shock* It gave another layer of your challenge.

*Mushroomb*Each chapter fulfilled on the prompts in original ways and I laughed at the story of avoiding punishment. Good one! The Thimble poem was brilliant. I was convinced it would make a cool prize. {for some) LOL The alliterative work in the H tale was effective and fun to read aloud. You had wonderful detail about your jury members and I could see why they would be helpful to your cause. And yay, you managed to get a poem about chess in the chapter task: a game of chess! *Thumbsup*

*Mushroomr* I liked the cool ending of Talking with Time and your poem in the "haddock eyes" prompt had an original theme. Yummy! Well done. Your closing entry was sincere and helpful to future fellow pawns. Gifting a trinket in some of your public prompts was a generous and lovely gesture too. *Heart*

*Ax* I wondered about adding some colour and Wonderland flair to your brief introduction to the book. It deserves to be shown off! *Wink**Rabbit**Balloonp**Tophat*

*Crown* Thanks for joining the adventure with your unique style and madness. It was inspiring to watch you hop around in the rabbit hole and melt through the looking glass. have a well deserved rest and some *Cupcakeo*, *Teag* and if you still have some tarts that I heard you stole, enjoy them too...or save some for the rest of us poor pawns if we make it there without losing our heads! *Laugh*

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Rated: 18+ | (2.0)
Happy Valentine's Day Carly! *Heartv* I am happy to review you item in "I Write in 2021" forum.

*Heartb* Oh wow! I see this is for the Cupid slam contest which seeks ratings of 1 star or less! LOL I think this is tough call.

*Heartb*Not quite a pure poetic type format ..more a storem type and it has clear and evocative message with vivid imagery. I love the peeling frame, chasm, and purgatory.You have also used some wonderful assonance and consonance that creates a soundscape that assists the flow as I read aloud.

*Heartg* The darkness of this form of love is well illustrated and the idea of cupid being not such a good love symbol is awesome. The painful results of his work is potent here.

*HeartBroken* You might have messed up the punctuation to have the poem be less easy to follow. LOL The poem has no form as even the free verse is broken up.

*Heart*The mood is strong and you really create this Cupid in a horrid way.

Thanks for sharing your loveless creation! *Laugh* I enjoyed the vision.

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Review of In time  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Hi bas! I am happy to review your item in the "I Write in 2021" Forum!


*Smile* I enjoyed reading your flash piece and how you set it up with the present and a flashback. Your opening line made me curious as to why the building was important and I had to keep reading to find out what the character who felt triumphant was up to. He could have had dastardly plans. So it was a good mislead. LOL

*Fairy* I wondered about the word "rose quickly" in the first line. Or maybe if you say "had risen quickly" it might sound better. And you need a comma after "over the city, over Pearson." I think the "I" is missing in "“Sir please, am sure you ." Niggling typos! *Wink*

*Smile*Your flashback covered a lot of vital information that made me feel for the character. Your use of the prompt here makes total sense and gives the impression of how this big corps work at times. I liked the surprise at the end and the last action of Smith! I was glad there was not something more dastardly. *Wink*

*Smile*I like the contrasting emotions shown in the story and glad it had a happy ending. It is a relevant theme I think too as fate has twists to it. *Laugh*

Thanks for sharing your vision and good luck in the contest! *Shamrock*

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Review of Lovely Day  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Welcome J. Legacy. I am happy to review this short story. I really like the positive vibe of your reflection. Being in the moment and looking for the good can send good vibes to the world too. I think our perspective has power. *Smile*

*Balloong*The repetition in the first three lines "What a" feels poetic and adds a nice flow to the read. I wondered about putting the word "feel" before "the rays...". *Wink* I see that your repeat beautiful and lovely which works too. I might wonder about other similar words for variety in such short piece. Yet it still works to get the idea of gratitude and how you feel about the day. eg. What a gift it is to see the sun... etc. *Wink*

*Star* Thanks for sharing your vision to uplift us all. You could put "Experience", and Philosophy as Genre choices too. *Smile*

Happy writing!

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Review of A Perfect Circle  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Happy 2021 and Welcome to WDC Kris! I was intrigued by the tag line so here I am!


*Delight* What a wonderful read. I was hooked by the imaginative first line. I could really hear the voice of your main character and liked the number of names he addresses death with! Personifying death and making him confused was a brilliant ploy. The descriptions were vivid and the raised eyebrow speaks volumes.

*Balloonp*Dylan's logic made sense as you build his case, almost convincing us. The twist when the mist comes was so effective! Great how you got that line about 'time waiting for no one' in. *Thumbsup*
The tables turning makes a nice circle as the confidence changes places in the end. In Dylan's response "Oh" I felt his defeat. I thought it was cool that Death had patience and Time did not! *Laugh*

*Star* The mix of dialogue with a bit of narrative was effective and the conversation moved the story along coherently.

*Quill* I would drop the word "seemed" in "seemed pleased" as it is better to be direct and certain. He either was or was not pleased. It gives it more potency to have him just know he is right. Also I think the adverb "thoughtfully" is redundant. We know he is thinking as he is engaging in philosophical conversation. *Wink*

*Starstruck*Your story kept me engaged and I enjoyed your vision. Thanks for sharing your craft.

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Review of Friendships  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Happy 2021 and yay for your entry into the Party at the Cramp!

What a delightful read and I liked your comparing some friendships to short stories. You really captured what belonging to WDC friends can mean and I am glad you are finding inspiration and support. I have found the same! *Smile*

Your short story uses the prompt words in a meaningful way and I enjoyed the personal content with its positive vision at the end. I smiled when I read you did not know what a free verse poem was. *Smile* There is lots to learn here.

Thanks for sharing and good luck in the Cramp! Keep on dumping the doubt and negative memes. Remember NOone Can be you like you can. *Heart*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Snow4* Hi Prosperous snow! This moving piece popped up on the Read and Review page. The title struck me as I thought of how internet gives such an opportunity and yet still not like being present at a place.

*Snow5*Your words struck emotional chord as I could feel the sadness of the distance from the grave and also the unknown bits of your father's life. I know as family members pass on, so do the stories or experiences that we may not have known to ask about at the time.

*Snow3* I like how you begin with the gravestone script centered and then follow with a free verse reflection. It has a personal voice and aura. The image of the rose that will not be put on the grave is vivid. Using Father's Day is evocative too as our minds do think of our dad's then.

*Snow2* It is so moving that the poet has knowing and faith that prayer reaches its destination regardless of distance. The image of sitting at the computer and praying is a wonderful one. I think my dad is buried with his parents back in a village near Quebec. We never did go there.

*Snow4* Thank so much for sharing so vulnerably. Peace.

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Review of A Horse Tale  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Delight*Happy New Year Dorianne! This cute little limerick showed up in the Read and Review page. I like horses and just watched the movie Secretariat recently so it was fun to check out your poem. ood play on the word "tale". I laughed at your tag line too! Cute! *Laugh*

*Balloongo* Your limerick is well written with lively rhymes and rhythm. It was fun to read and the second line is suggestive of a moving horse. Cool to use that long word "thoroughbred".
I grinned at the last comical line as I could well imagine how he might go home and relax in a tub with a rubber ducky. LOL Though I know it can also mean "darling". *Smile*

*Balloong*I had fun entering your vision with my imagination. I like how we could all have our own picture of the kind of show the horse might do...strutting his stuff! *Laugh*
Thanks for sharing your gift.

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Review of Not new to me  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Welcome Gen42 to WDC! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you. *Balloonr*

*Balloongo* I was charmed by this inspiring vision painted with a few words! I enjoy nature and being part of it raises my vibrations. It feels like the poet is in the present moment..of being with it all. I see how living and dying are all part of the same flow. At least that is what comes to me as I read your words. *Wink* It feels like a shamanic dream.

*Balloony*The free style suits the theme and content. The repeating in the last two lines is effective too. I was drawn to the first two lines..appealing images to begin with. "breathing the sky" is expansive idea.

*Star*Thanks for this lovely vision! Keep on writing and enjoy WDC!

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Review of Set Me Free #2  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Balloongo*Welcome to WDC! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you. *Delight*

*Balloono* Wow! In this short verse you capture what anxiety feels like in a vivid way. I could imagine the speaker sitting there hiding within and the inner termoil of the mind. It has an intense tone and the punctuation assists the read.

*Balloong* I wonder if you need the word "constantly". and I think you can drop the "there're" in "there're playing" as we already know it is the thoughts playing. It would make the line flow better too. Also, it should be "they're". *Wink* "Ill" needs an apostrophe: I'll.

*Balloonv* The free verse style suits the theme and emotional content. The one inner rhyme with "head" and "dead" is perfect for emphasis. Your use of some assonance also adds to the soundscape when I read it aloud. {eg. repeating long e, long a, ing,} Good job.

*Star* Thanks for sharing your intense vision and craft. Whew! *Thumbsup*

Keep on writing and have fun here.

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