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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Welcome to WDC bettyready2write! *Balloonp*I am celebrating you with a review for "Talent Pond New Year Review Dinner Party!*Glass**Tiara*


*Delight* I was drawn to the evocative title that got me pondering on things I miss. The word "already" had a different sense after I read your poem, which had a unique perspective and theme. I liked it!

*Bursty* You created a heartfelt tone in the speaker that felt like she was in a dream. The sentiments touch the heart as we learn that this person can never return what she would give. Sad!

*Heart* It could be about a missing loved one and yet your author's note gives a cool and different context. The poem takes on a whole new dimension. Loving someone you have never met reminds me of doing intention work...like what would it be like if you had a partner. LOL

*Bursto* The free style suits the theme and emotional content. The steady rhyme added to the flow and the punctuation assisted the read when I read aloud. I liked the flow and image of "never-ever right around me" and inner rhyme of "arms", charms". I wondered about the use of two "ly" adverbs together. I have read that they are not as descriptive. *Wink* They do make sense here though. I liked the two aspects in contrast: "his lady" and "wench". *Thumbsup* Cool.

*Star*Thanks for sharing your original expression with its evocative sentiment and interesting concept. It was fun to ponder even though had a sad aura.

Keep on writing into the unknown! *Quill* I hope you find a home here at WDC.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Hiya Norman!
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*Glass**Tiara*


*Smile* What a cool theme for a poem. I have not thought of Elvis in a long time though every so often the folks in a town not far from here have an Elvis festival..yep way up here in Canada. LOL I think they play up the old story of Elvis being seen places! *Laugh* so why not here?

*Thumbsup* I thought it was original to share as if you were having a dream where you see the highlights of his life and the fall in sequence. In a dream you can envision in a unique way. You capture his iconic stature vividly with detailed description. I think readers could imagine him the way he was and how he was at the end from your vision. I laughed at the last line..also iconic.

*Guitar*The 4 line rhyming stanzas flow like a song and while not all the lines have a patterned syllable count, the rhythm was lively and fun to read. I enjoyed the comparison in verse two in the off rhyme "older", "soldier". The voice and tone was consistent and I like how there is a tinge of sadness as the poet reminisces.
The last verse is a potent opinion that is born out as he was an idol to the end.
He was an icon of a changing time, one of a kind. *Heart*

*Music1* I wondered at the lack of punctuation but it is a choice at times. It works well without it.. I was just pondering if it would add something to use it. *Wink*

*Star* Thanks for bringing back memories with this well conceived poem, well deserving of its awardicon. *Starstruck* Rock on!


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Review of Ghost Dog  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Happy New year Huntersmoon!
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*Glass*{e:tiara


*Heart* I couldn't resist this cool title about a Ghost dog! When my cat first passed on, I swear I felt him around at times. Freaky when you feel something walking on your bed at night and...mm! Yep, I think there are connections beyond. *Heart* Love never dies.

*Ghost* Your poem is a delight to read with its loving tone, almost like a tribute to this beloved pet. I was charmed by its name and how he got it! Sweet. I enjoyed the ghostly events that are attributed to this dog and the last verse is a lovely notion. I can so imagine the dog being impatient as they always are ready for adventure and attention...NOW! *Laugh*

*Dog1* The quatrain verses are balanced and flow with ease, using abab rhyme consistently. I tried to discover a defined syllable count to lines like 8,6,8,6 but found a number of variations. *Wink* I did not really notice when I read aloud as it trips off the tongue with ease. The bit of variety does not hurt the read and I was caught up in the interesting tale. Plus the poem has some wonderful use of assonance, and alliterative bits to assist the flow. I liked "death cannot deter", "spirit, wild and free" ( a cliche and yet gave me a sense of the dog's essence both alive and in the world beyond), and "snuggle near" (such a sweet image).

*Starstruck* This lighthearted poem was fun and made me smile, and think of my pets and of all of my friends who have dogs...who, you know, are people too! {e:heart} Thanks for sharing your ghost dog and his antics.



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Review of The Climb  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Happy New year joylife!
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*Glass**Tiara*


*Mountainsb*Yes! I like the philosophical tone and concept in this poem. You capture such wisdom in a mere 24 syllables! I think it is true that each step you make feeds the high vibration one feels at the top of the mountain.

*Mountainsg*The use of the image of mountain climbing, which is also about reaching any goal, is effective in your unique response to the key word prompt.
It was pleasant to read aloud especially with the instances of assonance like long "i" words, "ur" words and the "oun" in "mountaintop" and "surmount". Nice play on the key word. *Thumbsup*

*Mountains*I like how you capitalize the first two words as it indicates that they go together as a title or noun. I thought the sound in this first line mimicked climbing..the ups and downs. The structure is solid and coherent the way you wrote in on the page and the word "but" catches the attention like we are about to hear something vital.

*Star*Your message is inspiring and something to ponder. I like to think celebrating each step helps solidify our esteem and knowing we have potential, so when we see what we have done, it motivates to keep going when the time gets tough.
Thanks for sharing your vision with so few words. *Delight*

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Review of Download This!  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
*Delight* Hey Jeff!
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*Glass**Tiara*


*Laugh* I was intrigued by the title as there are all kinds of downloads! I was so happy to see the idea of mental downloads..as in psychic ability as more people are developing sight... and this is a scary idea that one could be totally vulnerable to another's mind.

*Burstg* The way the human solved the problem was genius and I infer that the aliens, who seem well travelled, have never had this sort of download! The concept that humanity is so nasty with obscenities is brilliant comment.

*Alien*I enjoyed the dialogue and you did a great job telling a whole story in the conversation of these two characters. I was drawn in by the vibrant first lines, a dramatic speech that made me curious. I laughed at the description of "you're a tiny little thing" and it set up the contrast in appearance. Tony's curiosity is childlike and evident.

*Delight* It was fun to read the conversation that really revealed the alien's disgust so vividly as well as Jack's sense of humor and his ingenuity sharing his not so nice experiences. Talk about Video downloads and assimilation! I think the idea he had no choice is like a red flag and a challenge.

*Thumbsup* It is amazing how you left so much to the reader's imagination too in the cryptic lines about the sacred creatures, what is possible etc. You keep it open for minds to go anywhere. *Laugh*

It was an effective ploy to use italics for the alien speaking from his mind while regular font indicated Jack's talking.

*Rolling*I burst out laughing at " that's just plain wrong" and the last line! Too funny!

I like the happy ending that Jack is the hero and earth is saved...at least from alien assimilation.*Wink*

*Star*Thanks for sharing your imaginative and comical writing! Good luck in the contest! I had fun! Write on into the new year!

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Review of High Hopes  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
*Delight* Happy New year Legerdemain!
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*Glass**Tiara*


*Delight*Wow! This was a unique and surprising response to the theme of high hopes and I guess gangsters can have them. I like that this guy was doing something kind of positive in getting out of the biz! What a way to do it! Great twist at the end. I should have expected it maybe. LOL

*Burstp*The short story caught my interest with the first line showing a celebratory action of the characters that made me curious to read on. High fives can be for so many things and they were out of breath so..they could have been racing. *Wink*

*Bursto*I like how you slowly reveal why Hendon wants to leave and we get a good idea of how his boss is as Merv's conversation furthers the story. The dialogue is useful and moved the story at a good pace. You don't say how old Merv is but I get the idea he is much younger as he has more fear of the consequences and wants to stay out of trouble.

*Burstb*I like how you have them look down the alley...Hendon for one purpose and Merv for another before the surprise hit. I smiled when he said the number of hits and it was now obvious he was well planned. It really showed he was used to doing it when he could do it to a colleague and yet showed also he knows quite well what Merv meant. *Thumbsup* I did wonder if it was wise to do it when there were already cops around seeking, in case they heard it.

Two glitches for me:

I wondered if "they'll" in the line "they'll have to lay low for a short while" should be "they'd". It sounded off to me. *Think*

This line: "Once you're in with Girardo, you're in." threw me off a bit as at first I thought Merv was speaking it...eg. the You... but then thought it was narration. Would it then not be third person? *Confused* Could just be me.

I enjoyed reading this shocking crime piece and it really did fit the theme. *Star* Thanks for sharing your gift. All the best in 2020! *Wand*



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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Hi J. L. O"Dell! I am happy to review your entry at "I Write in 2020" and for "Talent Pond New Year Review Dinner Party.

*Smile*Your short poem has captured the theme of the title as once animals reach this age, they need to make their way as independent. It almost feels sad but when one considers other mouths to feed...it makes natural sense.

The image of the wolf circle can be imagined with ease. I like the word "establish" as it makes me think of the yearling's progeny and setting his own dynasty. LOL It is not usual to use the same word twice in such a short poem as you did with "yearling" and as it is the key word it does add emphasis.

*Quill*I wondered if the two "yearlings" were the same yearling and which had the cubs to feed.
Why is there a comma after "pack" when it is a part of the next line idea?

*Smile*The use of the period after "on" is effective as it mimics a separation with the last line. Dramatic. *Thumbsup*

Thanks for sharing your appreciation of the wild and your crafting with only 24 syllables.

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Review of ( Mama`s Heart )  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Welcome in Greg!
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*Glass**Tiara*


*Heart* Mama's Heart is a perfect title for this heartwarming tribute to a Mother and her abiding love for her family. It gave me a warm feeling to read the elements of how this mother shows her caring as it reminded me of my mom! Ah the trials of a mom with six kids!

*Heartb*The quatrains had complex sentences and phrases and while no defined rhythmic beat, the rhyme was strong and I enjoyed reading the verses. I think the longer weighty lines add a serious tone to the poem with its vital subject matter.

*Heartg*You use good detail in your descriptions and present tense verbs makes it feel real right in the moment. As if it is every mom, everywhere, or a hoped for mom in the case where there were not such good times with mother love. The mention of the girl and boys do make it a specific mom that the poet has in mind. *Wink*

*Heartp* The images of her singing to them, holding their hearts always is sweet and the contrast of "instructing" as a strict mom will for the child's benefit is well shown too.

*Delight* I enjoyed how you weave in the ideas that the children may not understand the mom's actions at times until later. So true! I recall thinking as an adult, "why didn't I listen to my mom!" LOL

*Quill*I noticed a few typos/glitches:

In verse 1:
"thats" in line 3 needs to be "that's"
"thier" in line 4 should be "their" *Wink*

In verse 2: line 2 "there" needs to be "they're" to mean "they are abrupt". What a neat word to use to describe the naughty kids. *Thumbsup*
I think you need a comma after "ill" to keep the pattern and pause the line.

In verse 3: "wont" should have an apostrophe: "won't"

I wondered why Honour has a capital. Is it for emphasis or an important trait?

*Star* The last line is powerful and the phrase "loud without a sound" is brilliant and so evocative. Wow! *Starstruck*

Thanks for sharing this well conceived and sentimental tribute to a mother's heart. It is touching and reveals an ideal perception that I wish more children in the world could experience. *Heartv*

Write on!



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Review of Tumbled Granite  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Happy New year Words Whirling 'Round!
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*Glass**Tiara*


*Tophat* What an elegant expression! I loved it!

The imagery from your detailed description is so vivid I could see it and feel it in my mind. The first line caught my imagination with "gray shoulders" and I was enchanted into your vision. *Salute*

*Delight*Your quatrains are balanced and it was a joy to read them aloud. The rhyme is well done ( only two places you used plurals eg. cool, pools) and your use of poetic techniques like alliteration, assonance and consonance created an appealing soundscape. "sliding silver glints" and "chill torrents tumble..drowning deeps" are wonderful examples. Each line seems carefully crafted to capture the pristine beauty of this space. Original expressions like "bald pates" sparked my attention and I could imagine those dragonflies.

*Dragonflyb* Using the present tense was potent as it put me in the moment where the scene unfolds and movements occur. The use of natural punctuation aided the read and pace. The enjambments were effective especially the line with "o'er". Not sure about "the" but I see the pattern you are making in each first line and it did not throw me out of the read. *Wink*

*Thumbsup* The title is evocative and a cool image in itself and the last word was a great surprise and harkened back to the title as the whole process repeats itself. I appreciate the time it took to do justice to this place in nature..to get just the right word pictures that appeal to the senses. I really get the sense of the seasonal flow here. Very well conceived. *Star*

Thanks for sharing your word wizardry in this stellar composition, well deserving of its ribbon! It took my breath away! I want to go there. *Bigsmile*




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Review of Pain  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Welcome to WDC freelancer1131!
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*Glass**Tiara*


*Delight* Wow! Congratulations on posting your first items. I like poetry so I chose this piece. I so enjoyed your tag line quote. I have not read Nietzsche in a long time and the notion here give reason for the lows and highs of life. It reminds me of polishing coal to a diamond.

Your expression here is potent in voice and the image of one struggling in the mind as hurt desires to throw him off base is vivid. The queries are relevant and I can relate to the state of mind. I was struck by the truth of "I wish I was stupid" and thought of all the times that being of higher awareness always seemed harder.

*Quill* The free structure fits the emotional content and theme and the personal voice is real. The repetition of "craves" is very effective as it is like a chant and repeating the word "evidence" as you have is a good device. I had to keep reading to the conclusion. Well done.

I could so sense the underlying "soul" power that lives beyond the mind's chatter and beliefs.
It is like the poet knows there IS more even if hurt is present. The mind will ever seek the why's while the soul knows the truth and joy beyond. *Smile*

*Starstruck*This is an evocative expression and the fact that "I get up again" is hopeful. Thanks for sharing your personal vision that inspires. One hopes in the writing of it, the way clears. *Smile*

Keep on writing and birthing your own star! *Star*

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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Happy New year Tinker!
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*Glass**Tiara*


*Delight* Oh this is so brilliant! Not many write limericks about themselves and yours is not only humourous but celebratory as well! Congrats on becoming Yellow. ( I realize it was a while back but I never saw this poem til now! *Whistle*) It is a wonderful way to give tribute to your promotion!

*Bursty* It was a delight to read your limerick with its fine rhyme, flow and comical flair.
I noticed you followed the format though if line one was 10 syllables it would match with lines 2 and 5 for a 10,10, 6, 6, 10 syllable pattern. *Wink* It did not throw me out of the read aloud, just a minor point of form. *Thumbsup*

*Bursty* I laughed at the attributing "thinking " to being a yellow case.The contrast to the word "winker" is unique and made me ponder. I had to look up the different meanings. *Laugh* Too funny! Considering that the poet "expounded" before he was Yellow, I feel it will now escalate as well.

*Smile*The punctuation served the read and the dialogue added drama and I thought of someone who was so proud! Well done!

Thanks for sharing this very entertaining bit of genius! You have a gift for words. *Starstruck*



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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Delight* Happy New year Jody!
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*Glass**Tiara*


*Delight*Wow! It was cool to find a bit of history in your port. I studied history long ago but never heard of this king so I was curious! *Smile*

*Thumbsup*I like how you set up a point of interest: that he was king three times! It seems an unlikely possibility as in those days ex kings either died or were killed. He must have been lucky. The name Dutiful certainly suited him. It is rather an amazing tale.

Your biographical report retells how he did it and the information is simply told, which is good for a children's genre piece. It was coherent and paragraphs were well organized,sharing facts. The voice was consistent with a factual tone.

*Quill*I wondered about adding this phrase to the next line to shorten the prior one in the second paragraph. "and was a mean and cruel king" . Something like "He was a mean....king, so in 326..." It would flow better and get rid of the "and". YOU could even use a more active voice as in " the nobles overthrew him and....Elidurus became king." Although "made him king" would work to if they chose him. *Wink*

*Questionp* I wonder why the other two brothers overthrew him. It might add some detail to the story. It sounds like he was quite a kind and forgiving person. I wonder who recalled the old king was in the tower. It would be cool to add a bit about the way of the land during that period of history. Yet, your topic was about the three time king.

It would be cool to write a poem tribute about him. I am keen to go and find out more! Thanks for this taste of old English history. Maybe add a link to a resource. *Wink*

Keep writing on in the new year and have fun! *Starstruck*



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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Happy New year Prosperous snow. Congrats on all of your fine work at the Contest challenge. *Salute* YOU rocked it!
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*Glass**Tiara*


I have been really enjoying reading through all the poems you have been doing and came across this one with its celestial title and I love stars! *Wink* Also I see it is a poem form with which I am not familiar so I am checking that out too.

Your cameo is well structured according to the note you helpfully added to the page. *Wink*
The poem imitates a brief image of deep space with its stars and light travels, kind of like a cameo. It seems that the beauty involves the stars, and how light travels as well as the sparkling effect.

I wonder if having a colon after "space" might indicate that it refers to stars, and light when you say Beauty in the first line.

I like the use of the word "bawls" as it is so unique and has a sound that mimics a wide space and means "loud sound". Cool! I wanted to put a comma after "hydrogen" as the next word seems to refer back to the word "light". I had to reread it. *Wink*

This was pleasing to read aloud for your words are well chosen for sound effect and thematic content. I could easily imagine this star magic. {e;starstruck} You share a lot of science in a short poem.

Thanks for sharing this expression and craft as well as your prolific imagination and scope of vision! *Starstruck* I am inspired to give this form a try.

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Review of Restless  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Happy New year and Welcome to WDC Madeleine.
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*Glass**Tiara*


Wow! I enjoyed reading this unique expression and can relate to restless night musings. Great topic to share. The genres you chose are relevant for the work as well.

I admire the way to have two poem streams in this free style presentation. It makes it seem like there are two voices and we all know the mind can have conscious and subconscious musings going on in our heads at the same time. Cool! *Cool* Using italics to separate the trains of thought was effective. It took me a minute to get the flow.

The contrast of the dark and light vibrations is vivid. I could see the image of the poet's and positions and feel the eerieness of the creeping night. Cool latin word. I had to go look it up as I have not taken latin in a while. The image in the first verse is so clear I felt for the sleeper.

I appreciated the soundscape as I read aloud too. Some awesome use of assonance and consonance as in "soft covers on cold feet", repeating "ee", "s" "d". "c: etc. add to the flow and atmosphere of the poem. *Star*

I was happy at the end when peace is found. The metaphor of the stranger into a friend is wonderful.

Thanks for sharing your startling vision. I appreciate the effort it took to get this into twin form and it did feel like a meandering night mind. *Starstruck*

Write on and I hope you find a home here at WDC.

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Review of Not Thinking  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Happy New year Greg!
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*Glass**Tiara*


I was drawn to the interesting title that made me curious. How often we do things without thinking? LOL Also I enjoy limericks so looked forward to a laugh.

*Laugh* What an original theme for a limerick! You really capture a vivid picture of this "guy" and his strange way of travelling. I liked reading it aloud for its steady rhyme and repeated "t" sounds. Nice work with the bit of alliteration in the last line too.

*Smile*The limerick has its five lines and seems to have the syllable count of 9, 9, 6, 6,(or 5, 5} 9. I noticed that line 3 -4 do not match : one is 5 count and the other is 6.
Also the last line is longer than 9 syllables and broke the flow for me.
Perhaps something like: : "by the huge hole in his..."

Otherwise it was quite a humourous read! *Thumbsup* That I think is the challenge of limericks.

*Quill* A few grammar glitches I noticed:

In the second line I think "That" should be "who" as you are referring to a person.

"ride's" I think needs to be "rides" as it is not a possessive useage here.

Also to make "torpedo's " plural, it needs to be "torpedoes". *Wink* I wonder why you used a captital letter here.

*Thumbsup* I think the poem really shows the idea of the title. I can so see him maybe going to his wedding or special event and thinking this was the way to get there quick! *Laugh* I was thinking his "bride" might not be amused. Actually using that instead of "tailor" might fix the beat in the line and add another layer of inferred humour.

*Star*It was so fun to enter your vision. Thanks for letting me play in your world. Take what suits you and leave the rest. *Wink*

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Review of I can't sleep  
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
*BalloonP* Happy New year whiskerface. I am here with a review to celebrate you as this popped up on the random Reads! *Delight*

I could so relate to the title and its theme. I have nights even when I am tired that sleep seems to keep at bay. I like that writing is one of your go to activities when sleeplessness strikes.

I like the directness of the first line to set up the experience. Just letting the pen scribble on the page is as the mind rambles I think can settle things. And it looks like you found a gem in that the ponderings led to ideas for your challenge. *Wink*

I was as surprised as you were with your "Really?" when you mentioned the prompt! Who thinks these things up? Also, how is a defunct band "covered" by someone who is dead? What does that mean? *Facepalm*

I laughed at the polarity of it will be tricky and then the vast flow of names (all of them I am familiar with) and the realization that it won't be a problem. I infer that it may have been that keeping awake...the muse wanting to get a handle on it. LOL

The writing feels like flow of consciousness that relates to the tag line of musings.
I think "its so much rubbish" should be "it's..".

Now I am curious as to which one you did! *Smile* I also wonder if this was all of the musing of the evening or just a shareable snippet. It is a short "Pouring out"! *Laugh*

Keep on writing and musing into the new year.*Star*


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Delight* Happy New year and Welcome to WDC Vincent.
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*Glass**Tiara*


*Laugh* Oh my gosh! What an interesting title and the concept of a fashion virus is hilarious. This story in the form of a letter from a Lord of a township to the Kelpstone Minor people is so original and I had to keep reading.

*Penr* It does indeed read like a political response and the lord's voice is clear as he gives his advice as to what is to be done in a variety of cases that are being questions. I burst out laughing at the first line about the stovepipe pants and having troops sent out to assist and wiards researching the fashion plague that are luring the young folk. *Laugh* It is quite imaginative.

Your language suits the time and theme. I loved "rogue tailors" that "stitch these monstrosities" and the concern about "lips" from pork and the meanness of kicking Gnomes. *Smile* Your satire rocks!*Salute* "not dump garbage....in debate forum" *Laugh*

*Smile*The lord's name is unique and the way he speaks shows his character and concerns vividly. The letter was well structured and paragraphing made coherent sense.
I wondered if this comma after "state of unrest" should be a semi colon.

I was really entertained by your vision! Thanks for sharing this highly creative and well conceived letter! *Starstruck* Keep on writing and I hope you find a home here at WDC.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Happy New year and Welcome to WDC Rhacun!
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*Delight*Congratulations on posting this first item. The title sets the theme of beginnings and it suits your mini bio theme. The genres you chose are applicable as well.

I could relate to your first forray into WDC. Ten years ago I joined as a free style writer as well and you will find many who write for relief, fun as well as more professional reasons...all are expressions and we value that in everyone. I liked your notion of writing being a "reliever". I am sure many of us can agree. *Smile*

Your piece considers two questions which are clearly outlined on the page. One about your rationale and how you found WDC. Thanks google! The other about how you began writing and a bit about your background. I so get how differently the two sides of the brain operate and real life can sometimes not allow the muse's work! *Wink*

Wow!You learned Japanese? "jap_eng'? Brilliant.

*Quill*A few little glitches:

Continue to use the past tense in the first lines of your second section:
eg:
In my childhood days, at elementary school, I loved..."
When I "entered" college..
when I asked... instead of "ask". *Wink*

*Star*I like how you end your piece and am curious as to where you will start. What do you like to write? And remember there are all kinds of online helps with language and grammar etc, so be brave and write on! *Smile* Have fun and hope you find a home here at WDC.
Also, reading and reviewing others is a great way to get back into the swing of the language. *Heart*

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*Delight* Happy New year Prosperous snow!
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*Laugh* Your evocative title caught my interest as I was curious as to how good luck has a cost. It reminded me of some things are too good to be true..or watch what you ask for. LOL

*Confettir* I was not disappointed as I had a good laugh! I like how you use the "tradition" or black eyed peas as a good luck item. I wondered about adding an author's note about how that came about. I read you had to eat 365 peas for prosperity to come about. *Shock*

You capture Uncle Joe vividly in his belief and his new year activity in his man cave! The cost of his choice was hilarious and realistic! I like how you leave us in no doubt of our inference.

*Star* Your double etheree is a fine model of the form and it is amazing how you managed to get the story streamlined to fit the syllable counts. I appreciate the time it must have taken. *Salute* It has a coherent flow and was pleasant to read aloud with its instances of assonance and consonance. ( eg.hard c, long o, l, ea words) Well conceived and written. The imagery was vivid and I was drawn into the story. Hey you could add the recipe in a note..if Cora will share! lol

*Quill* One little typo in line two I think...should "New Year" be "New Year's"? *Wink*

*Star* I had fun entering into this vision and felt bad for Joe, although he should have known better. *Laugh* Thanks for sharing your craft and entertaining poem.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp*Happy New year and Welcome to WDC Samrat Roy! Congratulations on posting your first item, which I found on READ a Newbie page. *Delight* I am celebrating you with a review for "Talent Pond New Year Review Dinner Party!*Glass**Tiara*



*Smile*The title fits the theme and content of your posting and the genre settings are relevant as well.

*Star* It is a wonderful letter to the WDC friends who you may meet here and expresses vividly how you feel about joining. I like the positive vision you have of being part of a family. Many of us fell that way here as we write and share together. The word "treasure" is evocative and a vivid way to imagine the gift joining WDC might be for you.

*Flowerv* The piece is written in a letter format with a greeting and sending of wishes at the end. I like the idea of all being brothers and sisters and the sentiment you share suggests your hope and faith in people and the divine. We get a sense of your desires. I like the pink font which suggests peace and kindness of the heart as well.

*Quill* I wonder about expanding it to share what kind of writing you want to do, or what kind of works you like to read and review. I think also filling out a little bio could let us know more as well. You can also share in your notebook and on newsfeed to say hi to community members. *Wink*

*Quill* I think you can drop the commas after the word "we" in "we,all" and after "From".

*Star*Thanks for jumping in with your first written item and bio block. I hope you will find a home here at WDC. Write on!

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Review of A Baby Born  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Delight* Happy New year and Happy WDC Anniversary
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*Heart* It was cool to find your title as a friend's daughter just had a baby boy yesterday!

*Delight*Wow! This is fascinating expression that was a surprise given the lovely title about a baby. The language is philosophical! *Thumbsup* The short form says volumes in an original way. I love it! I can see how it sums up your longer version.

*Smile*I enjoyed the imagery and thought in the longer version too. The free style of two line verses matches the factual tone. I enjoyed the flow and imagery of the first two lines with the atoms and voices. The repeating consonants are fun. My imagination took flight here. *Thumbsup*

*Bigsmile*The flow and soundscape of the language was pleasing with elements of rhyme, assonance and consonance. I liked reading the rhythm aloud as well. I like that you ask a question in the middle verse even with minimal punctuation it fits the idea of a boundless space....from which it begins. LOL

*Star*I like poems that give me lots to think about and I enjoyed entering into your unique vision. Thanks for sharing your wonderful expression.

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Review of Screens  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Delight* Happy New year Jeff!
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*Tv*Scanning for newer poetry and came across this diamante with its interesting topic. I thought of all kinds of screens, like on doors, or room dividers, or computer or tv! LOL So I was curious to see which screens you would choose to compare or contrast in this form. *Smile*

*Computer* The glyph on your page is evocative...talk about mind control, hypnosis and the matrix. Wow! Scary.

*Smile* I enjoyed reading your diamante aloud especially line three with its alliterative seamless flow that seems to mimic the mind's connecting with the screen! Brilliant! *Star* The descriptive words you chose were vivid and so effective in showing the effect of screens on people. Contrasting the more positive qualities with the negative ones in the second half of the poem was well conceived and gives us lots to ponder.*Thumbsup*

*Tv* You really fit the theme to the format, using the rules to advantage. The first half of the poem had a good vibe and as I read the atmosphere got heavier. The idea of "desolate" is a good choice as is "dangerous" ...one hears so many sad things with people addicted and buying into online elements.

*Smile* You made good use of alliteration, assonance and consonance that assisted the flow and pleasure of the read.

*pen0* The last word seems to used as a synonym for screen and makes sense when one considers how the screens are separating folks. True concept! It also fits in with the screens that actually are dividers. LOL

*Star* Another well crafted and evocative poem that bears a wisdom and truth for us to ponder. Thanks for sharing your vivid vision.

Write on and good luck in this year's I Write activity. er.. it is week 2 now, don't forget. *Binoculars* *sink*


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Review of Baseball  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Delight* Happy New year and Welcome to WDC George. *Smile*
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I found your poem on baseball on the Read A Newbie page. I used to love to play catch when I was a kid. I was a terrible batter as I usually had to pitch to smaller kids. LOL It is cool that it did become a national past time. It is interesting that you refer to the creator of baseball. I went to look up the name. Cool. I wonder about putting a little author note with a link at the bottom of the page for interested people. *Wink*

It was a pleasure to read your poem for its even flow and effective rhyme that tells the basics of a baseball game and its effect on the watchers! You make it sound fun and use vivid details. *Thumbsup* The poem is well structured in balanced lines that make it flow with an even beat.

You had some really fine enjambments too as "never roam" and "enthralls". *Smile* You really capture the energy of the crowd when the ball is flying. The punctuation assisted the read well too. I like how you make the title part of the poem as your first line refers to it without saying the name of the game.

I really felt your appreciation of the game in the tone. Thanks for sharing your vision and craft. *Starstruck*

*Quill*Keep on writing and I hope you find a home here at WDC!

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Review of Oh Canada  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Happy New year Jatog the Green!
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*Countryca* As a Canadian I could not resist the title "Oh Canada"! *Delight* I like how your focus is on the expanse of land especially its Arctic and wilderness places. Using Niagara Falls as a Canadian landmark is cool too seeing as the US also has part of them.

*Quill* A well constructed quatrain poem with pleasing rhythm and cool rhymes. I loved "few" and "caribou". I did notice in your last verse the rhyme scheme changed and in the first two verse the first two lines do not rhyme.*Confused* It is hard to rhyme with Canada. LOL I looked up fireworks and it is apparently 2 syllables...I still say as 3.

*Delight*You add some really neat information like the origin of Hudson bay and seaplane access. I did not know fireworks were taboo where you are from. I wanted to know more about crossing the border..as it seems you are adding experience to the poem.

I enjoyed some of the soundscape too with consonance like "stark cabin" and other "c" sounds and assonance as in the repeating "O" sound words. The punctuation assisted the read as well.

*Leafr* Thanks for sharing your vision and tribute of Canada. *Heart* I have not been to the Arctic yet but have friends who have taught up there with the Inuit people. And yep, they could only fly in and winters are long, dark and cold. *Snow4*

Keep on writing into the new year with flair! *Starstruck*

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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Happy New year and Welcome to WDC Holly Wogan!
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*Turtle1* Dinosaurs are a favorite topic for kids so this poem will surely appeal to them! The title reveals the name of a restaurant! How orginal. *Thumbsup*

*Dragonflyb* I enjoyed reading your creation of this "dino diner" which is a place for all types of dinosaurs. Your first two lines set the invitation with a lovely flow and rhyme. It is like an advertisement for the place. Cool idea.
The poem has an effective rhyming structure that adds to the flow of the lines that have a variety of lengths. Punctuation assists the read and I like the exclamations, which indicate emotion or excitement. I liked the change around line about meat for Carnivores.

*Quill*I wondered why words like Eat, Lunch, Dinosaur and Then (in line 4} are capitalized. *Think* I figured you wanted to emphasize the types of Dinosaurs..with capitals like "Herbavores".

*Quill* I wanted to put a period after "some more" as the first read through I tried to connect it to the next line when the line refers back to line 3. A pause there would really be helpful.

*Quill* In terms of flow, I wanted to drop the word "can" after Omnivores as it slows down the read. Yet I do see you are advertising that they can eat what they like at the restaurant. *Wink* I wondered about putting "can" after "fish" to make the line a bit longer. It feels short.

*Delight*I love the last line that perhaps you could make food for dinos in the audience! It sums up the piece effectively. I did wonder why you would have to cook it. LOL

*Turtle1* Your poem is fun with a quick pace and kids can learn a lot of facts about dinosaurs as you were clever to get the types of eaters into the poem: carnivores, omnivores etc! The chosen vocabulary is kid friendly, eg. green stuff! *Delight*

*Star*Thanks for sharing your appreciation for dinosaur theme, entertaining kids and me with this unique expression. A thought came to me now. I can imagine a diner for dinosaurs and imagined the mayhem as maybe they will all be eating each other as the herbavores eat greens. LOL

Keep on writing and all the best in the New year! *Wand* I hope you find a home here at WDC.

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