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Review of The Sailboat  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC Ceredir! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


Wow! I enjoyed reading your free style poem where you lure me onto the sea on the sailboat. I was drawn in by your vivid image of the storm in the first verse! Well done.

*Fairy*You captured the experience of the boat being caught in the storm with clear imagery. I could imagine the boat bobbing, oars, hull from your detailed description. It also evoked the idea of the determined boatsmen struggling to make it home. *Smile* Words like "bobs:, "plunge" and "creaking" and "all tumult to defy" all help create the pictures. Super! The last verse leaves us to wonder the outcome.

*Fairy*The 4 line verses were pleasant to read aloud for its consistent rhyme and flow. It had a sing song effect as if bobbing on the waves. The choice of vocabulary suits the theme and created an appealing soundscape for reading aloud. *Thumbsup* For example the 'K& c" sounds in verse three. etc.

*Starstruck* Whew! I hope they make it. Thanks for sharing this vivid vision and craft. I really entered into the storyline and enjoyed the read.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Here and Gone  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Happy Party Time billieg! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp* Oh My gosh! This is such a tragic tale of loss and you lead us from the joy to the heart break in a few verses. I was reading your blog as you shared your good news a few days ago. The tag line indicates that this is personal... for true?*Shock2*

*Fairy*The couplets are effective for the theme and emotional content. They are well composed with a consistent ab rhyme and smooth flow. The weave of the language is wonderful with turns of phrases as in line four and the last line that is emotionally potent. The last word can also refer to how the pain must be for the poet as well. *Sad*

*Heart*There is a pleasant soundscape to read aloud and the content is vividly expressed. The opposites of joy , anticipation with the sadness is potent. The word "before" repeated is a good choice as is the word "swallow" as it puts me in mind of a hard pill to take. This is even worse, though noone ever knows the higher reason. Awesome expression. *Salute*

*Star*I appreciate what it took to share this. Wow! The title is so evocative and fits perfectly the content. *Hug1**hug**Hug2*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Abby Gayle! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp* What a cool variety of cnotes! They cover friendship, thanks, get well, welcome and anniversary! Something for every one! I like you cover picture for the shop..an original glyph interpretation of cnotes... they are like a song! LOL

*balloop* Your introduction is so inviting as it engages us with questions, proposing why we might require a note. Wow! Good to know they are home made. I was wondering if you are the creator. I like that it has the feel of a catchy add with the ideas in the forth line. *Thumbsup* In a nut shell sales!

*Balloonp* The cnotes are vivid with easy to read messages on the pictures. I love the dog one..sharing sticks is hilarious and I know some dogs won't. LOL The WDC anniversary one made me laugh!! Such an expressive rabbit! *Laugh* The Welcome note is sweet and the message about soaring so fits our WDC experience...getting our talents out there! I laughed at HAY and I knwo several folks who would love wolves...just find some one who needs to feel better. *Think*

*Balloong* I had fun reading these notes and they are reasonably priced. I want to send that dog one somewhere.*Delight* I will be adding this to my favourites so I can find it easier. *Heart* Thanks for sharing this cool contribution to WDC! You rock! *Starstruck*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Jeremy! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp*This c-note shop is amazing and I was drawn to the title that spoke of a truth! I like it! Having a shop dedicated to thanks is such a kind and relevant notion. *Thumbsup*

*Flowery* Your introduction to the shop is charming with its pretty colour title and warm welcome. Your message is inspirational and your rationale for the shop is clear. I like the words of wisdom that so many here do wonderful things. The narrative here is well written with an enthusastic inviting vibe.

*Balloonp* The cnotes are beautiful and range from the elegant to the plain in background and font. Each one a unique treasure. The message within the cnote itself is thoughtful and can apply to anyone. I see using it even for Account Anniversaries. The same note occurs in each card. Perfect.
The first one is my favourite though the fountain pen style of script on the second one rocks too.
Lovely collection to suit different styles. *Thumbsup*

*Balloonp* The cost for them is sooo reasonable and accessible to even newbies. So kind to be inclusive and it really fits with your theme of thanks being a daily act. So affordable for this. *Heart*

*Starstruck*Thanks for your generosity in creating this valueable contribution to WDC. I will be adding it to my favourites for sure. *Delight*
Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of In Your Eyes  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Lady Leo and Welcome to WDC! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp* What a sweet idea to write to your sister. I am the eldest of 6 so I can relate to this heartfelt poem.

You express with a caring voice and such pride in your sister's being herself. The tone is upbeat as you speak directly to her and share your pride, wisdom, and hope for her in her life. I really relate to your sentiments in verse 4 and heartwarming when you can see yourself in her. *Heart* I think youngest sisters do hold special place in older sister's hearts. LOL The last verse is so reassuring, as we all like to know someone will have our backs.

*Star*The poem is well composed with a smooth rhythm and consistent rhyme so it was pleasant to read out loud. The language is simple and direct and the contrasts of youth and old soul, innocence and cruel, are effective in your message as you express what you observe in her and from your experience of life.

I think your sister would love to receive this! Thanks for sharing so authentically your vision. *Heart*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Raccoon Haiku  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Happy Party time Dominique! I am popping in with a short review! *Delight*


*Balloonp* Wow! I love the sound effect of the title "Raccoon Haiku". *Laugh* How clever to use the scientific name and how you weave interesting facts about raccoons.

*Balloonp*I see you have used the 5-7-5 syllable pattern in the 3 line verse and have two images to compare: the masks and nursery. I am not sure this would be technically named a traditional haiku as it is missing a cut line ... but it is so inventive and original. I really enjoyed pondering on it with its clear images of black masks etc. The first line is poetic image for sure! *Thumbsup*

*Quill* I wondered why you used the word "group" with nursery as the idea of a group is inherent in the word and meaning of "nursery". *Wink* I am not sure what else you would put here...it just seemed to mean the same thing. A minor consideration. And drop the capital letter on "The" as haiku only uses it with Proper nouns.

I loved reading the poem aloud as you have done a wonderful job with the soundscape using repeated letter sounds especially "K" and "N". Well conceived! *Thumbsup* The last line provides a synonym or connection to the masked ones in line one.

*Starstruck*Thanks for sharing your rendering of haiku, this evocative vision so appealed to me! Well done.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp* Yay Sharmelle! Thanks for playing in "Eighteen Candles Poetry Contest!! I am popping in with a short review! *Delight*


Yippeee! This is a a unique acrostic giving praise for WDC. You even got it to rhyme! That is no small feat! *Salute* The key letters are bright and large on the page so the message of birthday really pops.

*Balloonp* Good job with the format and even getting it to rhyme. I like the way you wove personal experience and hope of growing at WDC. IT is a fine way to tribute. I laughed at the line about being better writer..without a crayon! *Laugh* Brilliant!

I think the word "threw" in lines 11 and 13 should be "through" to have meaning with the next lines. *Wink*

*Balloonp* The message was interesting and highlighted some aspects of WDC that you find awesome, the activities, friendship and writing. I liked line with the I -"I bet it was hard...".
and how you dealt with all the E's and how you show your own participation as a newbie...as a tribute that the site is magnetic and fun! *Thumbsup*

I was confused by your last line as I would have thought..."cannot" would have been "can" if you are asking whether , with so much going on here, do you think we could leave it behind. The way it reads , it sounds like you are asking: do you think we cannot leave you behind? *Wink* Must be a typo. Also it is a question, so a question mark would be good. *Smile*

*Star*Thanks for sharing you vision and jumping into the party mood and contest with flair.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Yay! Thanks for playing in "Eighteen Candles Poetry Contest!! I am popping in with a short review! *Delight*


*Balloonp*Wow! This is a wonderful acrostic with a celebratory vibe! I loved the idea of "Cosmic..Journey!" Well said.

Your acrostic is well constructed and I like your key word choices, like "literists", "cosmic", and "engaging". References to key elements of WDC like Rising Stars, contests, writing, art and talents are well woven into the poem so it gives tribute to our site. *Thumbsup*

The decorations on the page give it a party flair too. The image of a sunburst is really cool as I see WDC has radiated on the web for this many years as a milestone! Good choice.*Smile*

I see the last part of your acrostic is the number 18 but the phrase you use works with out having to use the numbers as a key with a note beside it. That would be a challenge. *Think*

Thanks so much for sharing your joy of WDC in this forum and with our community. And it is your first time at our party, so imagine what you will see in the coming years as you add your flair to the site! It is authors like you who make all the difference! *Starstruck*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Shadowfall  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp* Happy Party time Papadoc! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonr* Guess who popped up on the Random Reads? How lucky can I get...and it is a haiku, a form I so enjoy and continue to study! *Heart* The title, though Haiku tend not to have titles, is evocative and gives a clue to the mystery of your haiku. I know we add titles so we can keep track but I have read that old haiku just were numbered as titles give away the meaning at times. The idea is to have the reader just ponder the poem and find their own conclusions. *Wink* yet it is easier to find with titles around here.

*Balloonr* I enjoyed the flow and image of yours and smiled at the end. The last line gave an alternate consideration to the tripping! It is comical too!

*Balloonr* I see you used the 5-7-5 method of syllables, 3 lines and the topic concerns a natural occurance. *Thumbsup* I think in the best haiku, sentences are not used but rather phrases. Also haiku are observations in the present tense moment, comparing two things. I notice you begin in present and go into past. *Wink* I took a class and it blew my mind at how I was not really doing haiku..but the way we learned in school...which is kind of watered down. LOL

*Balloonr* Still, the overall effect of the poem is expressive and the imagery is vivid. I enjoyed entering into the reflection as I can imagine the shadow spreading out depeending on the light. It would be funny if we tripped on it. LOL

*Balloong* Thanks for sharing this delightful poem. I had fun! *Star*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Carol! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you and give this magic a little plug! *Delight*


*Delight*FAntastic theme and Appealing page! You are a master at creating intricate activities for fun, contribution and comraderie! *Salute* The title is so original and endearing that it would make folks want to check it out. I did! The little BEE CAUSE glyph is adorable and expresses the idea of the raffle having a function.

*Balloonp* I absolutely had fun reading your engaging conversations on the page. Inviting and friendly, your intent and rationale is presented along with an enthusiastic tone! The humour brings smiles and makes me read on!

*Balloon* The rules are clear and the cost of tickets is reasonable. The goal is high and why not go for the most! Your causes are worthy and your surprises generous and ultimate prize spectacular. I am sure it will draw folks for the chance. *Shock2* It makes it more fun!

*Balloonr* The page is well organized and decorative. I like how you allow for even group tickets to win the prize if it happens that way. Good idea to explain the parameters up front! *Thumbsup* I did not see an end date except the word Fall. But then I saw that you have a set goal that you want to make, so I assume when you make it, then the end will come. *Laugh* I better go get some tickets!

*Star* Thanks for creating another huge contribution to our community and for your time and effort maintaining it! Good luck in your goal. Looks like you are getting close.*Wand**Genielamp* for luck!

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Pelican Cove  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Than Pence! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Delight*I had enjoyed your Lobster poem so I am jumping into Pelican Cove! *Laugh*

*Balloon*Another delightful read that kept my attention right to the end. I like the western theme and it is comical to think of the birds dressed up in cowboy hats. LOL The idea of them helping found the site is original...or is there really a myth? *Shock* You create quite a vivid picture of the event that apparently is carried on in a later time. Your last line was awesome and again I had to laugh. *Thumbsup*

*Balloonp* The poem seems to be written in rhyming couplets though two verses have four lines put together. Is there a reason for this? It flowed off the tongue smoothly as I read it aloud and some of your rhymes were cool, like "sticks" with "transfixed", "birds and turds", founders and flounders" (really funny idea! so apt.) The images were so clear. I could imagine the dive bombing and the waddling through town dressed up. "feathered horses" too funny! Brilliant conception. *Star*

Not all the lines had even rhythm count and it did not detract from the read. I was entertained by the story line. *Salute*

*Balloonr*Thanks for sharing your talent and this comical tale. I had fun!

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Eagle Eyed  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Ann Ticipation! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Delight*Wow! I love to watch hawks and have seen more of them here than eagles! The awe inspiration is the same though so I am thrilled to find this poem. Your observations are interesting and I like the originality of sharing them by asking the eagle questions! *Cool*
I wonder if the eagle is an animal totem of yours. I think it is so cool that you saw them in South Africa! How amazing! And yep, I guess even eagles have fears!

*Balloon* It was fun to read the flow of questions in verse form! Your rhymes were effective and the tone of inquiry, curiousity and wonder is quite present. It has a child like vibe.

*Balloonp* I had to laugh when you asked about status..as if he would care.

*Balloonp* I wonder if you need a comma after "soar" in the third verse. I stumbled with the meaning and had to read again. I wonder if there is a more vivid word than "beautiful" and I was puzzled that the beautiful side would not include the power of its claws. I liked the odd wording of "all country side scour"! Good catch to get that word to fit the rhyme though it is a long line. *Wink*

*Balloonp*The flow is not even in each line but it did not detract from the read and my interest in the content. Thanks for sharing this tribute to the eagle as you merit it with intelligence by speaking to it. I loved it! I am inspired to try this kind of poetic reflection as I watch deer all winter. Thanks for the musing.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Cathedral  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Balloonp* Happy Party Time SWPOET! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Delight*Oh how delightful a concept about trees being like a cathedral! I love it as I am a tree hugger! *Heart* Your poem really has a deep, meaningful message and the contrast with how man uses, destroys and yet have awe for them. I think it is because nature totally accepts us and receives us without judgement. Who else really does that? But the creator of all. *Heart*
This is brilliantly conceived.

*Balloon* The free style serves the theme and reflective tone of the piece. The repetition of the second line at the end is effective for emphasis and completing the circle. The consonance of the "c" sound in the poem is effective as well. The alliterative "w" and hard "d" sounds add to the appealing soundscape as well. "beneath, feels, and trees" does as well. Without rhyme these devices bring so much to the overall effect and flow of the work. *Thumbsup*

The only word that sticks out is that long adverb in the middle, yet I do not know what you could use to get across that words do not do the unexplainable justice. LOL

*Starstruck**Tree* Thanks for sharing your potent vision and craft. It is a real tribute to trees and inspires us to ponder!

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Africa! Africa!  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Pony Tale! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Delight* Wow! I enjoyed reading your vivid vision of Africa in this quatrain like poem. I like the refrain that reminds me of a lyric and it gives the impression of the poet's appreciation of Africa.
*Balloon* Each verse portrays a detailed description of an aspect of this country and it was easy to feel and see the landscape so lovingling expressed.

*Balloonp*The weave was an absolute pleasure to read aloud that I couldn't help read it a number of times. Beautifully rendered with effective rhyme and flow. The keen use of assonance and consonance created the soundscape that enhances the flow and sense appeal.*Salute* eg. the "p" in the last verse, inner rhyme and 'g' in third verse, h in second verse and lots of 's". Awesome composition.

*Star*It feels like you know the landscape intimately and are able to take us with you. The personification in the last verse and other places is perfect! Images like the "sky's liasons" and
"night pounces" are evocative. *Star*

*Starstruck* Thank you so much for sharing this sacred vision and your excellent crafting. It is a wonderful tribute to Africa.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Fall  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Victoria! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Delight*I chose this as Fall is just on the horizon! Your title directly addresses the theme and the tone of the piece reveals your appreciation of fall's magic.

*BalloonP* I so appreciate the personification of the season and the notion of "collapse" and then "curtsy". What evocative imagery you create throughout! Your use of detail in your descriptions play to the senses too. I like the socks and soup and the zephyrs. *Thumbsup*

*Balloongo* The poem flows in a pleasant rhythm when I read it aloud and the rhyme adds flair. I notice you have a distinct for the start and end with a little line missing a rhyme. It did not throw me out, just made me ponder. eg. lines 5-6-7, has 5 and 7 rhyming but line 6 has none. Makes fall look like it is doing its own thing. Cool! Awesome rhyme words like "debut" and "cue" fits with the idea of curtsy and made me think of debutants! *Laugh* Your last line bears that out as well. Fabulous!

*Wink* I think you need to say "are on cue" as "exhales" is plural.

*Treefall* This was a vibrant vision that is a tribute to fall and it was easy to enter into its jubilance. Thank you for sharing your gift.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Balloonp* Happy Party Time pretty35! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Delight*Wow! This is a sad and moving story that expresses the tragedy of a abuse child. Your vividly capture the situation and what might go on in a child's mind during this experience with her mother. I like how you include the notion of mental escape, as it is a valid one. How else could one endure?

The voice of the child, told from her point of view is potent, and I know that the adult poet has put words that the child at the time would not have known perhaps. Even "Mentally escape" may not be a child expression. To give her the voice is powerful. The contrast of the beauty in her dream and the real life is so vividly described.

*Salute* You capture her hopelessness in the metaphor of swimming with no where to go and not lighthouse. Brilliant metaphor for the situation. *Thumbsup* Her puzzled queries echo through the piece even from the first "what did I do now?". So sad that the pill bottle will be the legacy! The hope that her action will wake people up makes me wonder how many others thought this. I like the significance of the 8. I would take out the word "guess" and keep the statement bold and direct here.

In the last line I notice a typo "lie" should be "like" I think. *Wink* The narrative is coherent and easy to follow with a intense vibration that prompts our emotional response. Well done!

*Star* Thanks for sharing such a heart wrenching vision of a reality, often hidden.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Amanda! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Unicorn* AW! I could not resist the evocative title and of course, I like unicorns and already felt bad he was sad, so had to check it out.

*Balloonp* What a cute little poem story and you show why he feels sad and yet will use what he is teased for in a positive way. This is a good lesson story for all of us and kids might like it too.

*Balloonr* The poem is a quatrain with a consistent aabb rhyme. The images are vivid and I could really feel for the little guy. You reveal how he thinks in a third person narrative.
I notice the rhythm is not always even by syllable count, yet it flowed quite well when I read aloud.
The places that threw me out a bit was line 4. I wanted to add "he's a guy" for a better flow as it feels short. Line 6 and 7 felt long and cumbersome..maybe "the bright colour feature..." and maybe" a regular colour"--we know he is an animal. I like the idea of "at least duller"! LOL

*Balloonb*There is hope that perhaps his job with kids will lighten him up as they will see his value! *Smile*

*Unicorn*Thanks for this charming poem with its wistful tone! *Smile*

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Review of Autumnal Haiku  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews*CakeP*


*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Valerie ! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Delight*I love reading haiku and continue to study its form as I learned it's essence is a lot deeper than just syllable count. *Wink* Your title gave me the theme and season and while Haiku apparently do not use titles, we often to so we know which is which. LOL

*Balloonr* Your haiku follows the old style syllable count well and I you have two images that you are contrasting: the wind and the leaves. The last line repeats the season. You already used the kigo words "coloured leaves" so the reader knows already it is autumn.
It is a really good attempt as you have no punctuation, it is centered and you have a seasonal word and it is about nature. Good for you.*Salute* Not everyone gets that. Less is more. *Wink*

*Wink*You might play with your two images in a different way and add if you want to stick with the 5-7-5:

the colourful leaves
falling down from the oak trees
crisp morning wind

or something like that.

See how you observe two images without any subjective feeling about it, as you did in your original. And it leaves the reader to add their own picture or understanding. I got that from your version. Only the last line was really not needed. *Wink* Haiku also does not use sentences. *Shock*

Thanks for creating this lovely vision and practicing the challenging haiku form. *Starstruck* Thank you for letting me play with your craft.

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Review of One Way Ticket  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Heya Jeff! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


I missed this round of the contest I think ... the picture is dark and familiar anyway and your poem picked up the idea of the ferryman! I remember the myth. LOL Your title is excellent for the theme and punch line at the end too. It made me smile after the dark image you portrayed earlier in the poem. Wierd me! *Wink*

*Salute* Your etheree is well composed and flows coherently. I think it is a challenge to do! Your rhymes were thematic as well as true rhymes. You did use "sea" and "undersea"....not sure if repeating is the best, yet in this case it works well. *Wink* It does provide a contrast as the boat is above on the sea and the...deathly ones from under now that I study deeper.

*Balloong* I was drawn into the flow with the first lines...reading aloud is a delight with the "s" and "d" alliterative quality. The consonance of d and b produced harsh tones that fit the atmsophere. The first word is like an inviation or soft command...and then we realize the direction. LOL Well written.

*Star* Your etheree fit the prompt in a tradtional way and the fact that the girl is looking back made your last line even more potent. She may be hoping to go back. *Sad* Thanks for the vision. I think I will go back to the happy party now! *Laugh*

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Review of Light  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Hiya Sophy! Happy Party Time! I am popping in with a short review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp* The title drew me in as we are all light and I was curious! I enjoy cinquains and forgot there was a mirror one. It is interesting how many forms do have mirror aspects. LOL
I think the concept works well with the theme of light..as I think of reflection. *Wink*

*Heartv* Aw! This is so romantic a vision and I could enter right into the dream. The dashes that split the lines in each verse really work for pause and drama. Good call. The enjambents there were effective too. *Thumbsup* The imagery of the dancing light and the touching in verse two are vibrant ones. Wow.

*Balloonp* The mirror cinquain form is well composed and the pictures both occur in the lighted space. A nice comparison of the light playing and then the poet playing on the sleeper. Brilliant! *Star* The punctuation served the read well and I was not thrown out by any glitch.

*Starstruck* Thanks for sharing this lovely vision and your craft. I enjoyed my visit very much.
Keep on shining at WDC with your unique flair! *Fire*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Meta/Paradox  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Yay Jeff! Happy Party Time! I am popping in with a short review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp*Wow! *Shock* This is so fascinating and well conceived.. I love it!! The title lured me first as it is so different. So good call as now I got to see your genius. *Thumbsup*

*Balloonr* Your tanka is well composed with exacting defining images in words! Taking each of those lines as a first line in the free verse poem is brilliant. Your expansion on the meaning of each brief thought was enlightening and filled with engaging imagery. The idea of card game and "bete noir" is amazing. *Salute* I so agree with that last comment. I study Haiku and it is more than just syllable count. LOL {and the desceptively so..is right on!)*Wink*

*Balloonp*The poem was pleasing to read aloud with its effective uses of poetic techniques. eg. "indelibly entwined", "nuanced structure". I liked reading it aloud a few times! The first three lines of the last verse really appealed to me too in content and poem form.

*Star* Your tanka rocked in its conciseness and concluding line! *Salute* This is going on my favs.
Thanks so much for sharing your crafting here. One can learn alot from your explanation that does not sound dry but flowing in a warm and rich fashion. Impressive piece. *Trophyg*

Light on the path as you write on! Keep shining as you continue to bring your flair to WDC!
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Review of Animated Cnotes  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Yay! Happy PARTY Time Leger! I am popping in with a short review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp* Wow! This animated shop is one I have not seen or passed by, likely because I am not Premium and thought I could not use them. *Sad* And I do know they can only be sent to Premium authors. Still I missed out sending the two promotion stars! I am sure some folks who were promoted may have been Premium. LOL Those are so celebratory! *Thumbsup*

*Balloonp*The opening banner is brilliant and inviting with its flair! You have a good variety of messages with illustrative glyphs. It is handy as the basic ones like thank you, happy birthday and friendship are ones most may look for! I like the little book worm! *Heart* The Dream one is magical and is awesome for inspiration of the muse. The firefly in the jar is fab!*Delight*

*Balloonp* The cost is reasonable for animated notes and I like that the message in on the picture and the cnote is blank.

*Star*I am glad I found this and will put it on my favourites. Thanks for all the inventive contributions over the years! Keep on shining! *Genielamp*

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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Hiya Snow! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you at 'I Write in 2018'! *Delight*


*Delight* Wow! This is an amazing expression and the theme really appealed to me. *Genielamp* The title establishes the theme directly.

*Balloonp*Your composition of the La Tuin is well conceived. Using the word "ode" as one of your rhymes is cool and gave me a feeling of old world. *Smile* I like the words you found to rhyme with it too! *Thumbsup* The syllable count and strange ryhme pattern is intact, though I see you use the same word "mode" a couple of times. It does work with your theme and it is a challenge to create this form. I struggled with it myself. *Facepalm*

*Balloonp* I appreciated reading it aloud with its inspirational aura and tribute to the divine as muse! The problem of choosing theme and writer's block are apt examples that writer's can relate to, and revealing your answer gives us all hope. Seek higher! *Angel*

*Balloongo* Thanks for sharing your vision and execution of this unique form! A lovely tribute to Baha'u'llah. *Heart*Good Luck in the contest.

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Review of Fyndorian's Desk  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Happy Party Time fyn! I am partying with a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp*This title of your folder is awesome and so fitting for the theme of a writer's tomes presenting within! The banner with the old desk rocks! What a treasure. *Heart* I love desks! Can't have enough of them even if only need one! LOL

*Balloonp* I appreciate that you also wrote a poem to headline your folder. It makes visiting so inviting and is an appropriate way to signal what we will find in the folder. In it you express what writing means to you in an eloquent and heartfelt way. Your imagery is vivid and the significance of writing is shown to be paramount. The image you create at the end of what would happen without writing is moving and potent! I had to smile. *Salute* I can relate in a way as I can really let a lot of stuff go when I express it out on the page! Saving grace at times. *Heart*

*Balloonp*The free style suits the theme and flows well when I read aloud. Your voice is strong and authentic. The idea that an old desk inspires is wonderful and I can relate to that too. Muses are everywhere..and the vibe around a desk can spark magic. *Wand*

*Balloonr*The folder is well organized and I like the collections of poetry in folders by year written! Titles like Beribboned Hutch and The Locked Cabinet are appealing and creative. What fun!

*Star**Quill*Thanks so much for sharing your gift of words here at WDC through the years. This folder is a spectacular testimony to your magic!

Light on the path as you write on!*Genielamp*
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Review of Poem For Our Site  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Yay Maryann! Thanks for being the first to enter "Eighteen Candles Poetry Contest!! Here I am with a short review of your bit of magic! *Delight*


*Balloonp* WOW! Your acrostic poem has a celebratory vibe and the page is so decorative. The poem is well composed and I so admire how you not only have the key letters at the start of each line, but also at the end! *Salute* That is a challenge to do and keep a coherent flow. Great job!

*Balloonr* Your poem has captured the essence of WDC in a few short lines and I am happy to see the word "magic" as WDC is filled with authors' musings! Expression is surely the magic in us all. To have a place to post our gifts in a caring space and develop friendships with like minded others is also magical and something to tribute as you do in your last line! *Heart*

*Star* I enjoyed reading your well conceived acrostic with its positive tone and vision of WDC in a nutshell! Thanks for your participation and love of WDC. *Genielamp*

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