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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Desire,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'A Charming Ring to It'

Title: An interesting title, I wasn't sure where the story was going

Description: I do love the prompts for Daily Flash and Writer's Cramp, They are such a good way to get the creative juices flowing.

Contents: I felt so sorry for Lydia. Bless her heart, if those are her future in-laws, she should run to the nearest exit. Of course, her future mother in law did seem to warm up at the end. Maybe, things will work out after all.


Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Masks  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Deelyte-Chillin',

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Masks'

Title: Piqued my curiosity

Description: Inside the faces we use... deep thoughts, the person we project to others depending on our roles with those people.

Contents: A look at what my dad would call putting your brave face on. There are so many times everyone has to pull up their boot straps and move forward, no matter what. The expectations are there and we have to follow through. Everyone has those periods in their life.
Your poem flows well, it's message is concise and clear, and leads the reader to wonder, when do we really get to be 'ourselves'.

Thumbs up: The first two lines say so much to the human condition

Conventions: no errors noted

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Image  
Review by Amay
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Paradoxical,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Image'

Title: When I first looked at the title, I thought it was going to be an image- a photograph or something similar. I was surprised to find a poem.

Description: An interesting tag line.. It would definitely make someone take a look into your port to read.

Contents: Your poem reads like a stream of consciousness. Thoughts that flowed from the moment that you were living in. Interesting metaphors, and a depth of understanding of human nature is evident.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Michael,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Of Pumpkins and Labradors'

Title: Your title alone would probably draw me into read this piece. I love Labs.

Description: Love the Writer's Cramp. It is such a great way to get your creative juices flowing.

Contents: You've written a poem about two loves of mine, harvest time, and puppies. I love labs... I said that before. What an inspired dream for your poem. Very nicely done. I hope it did well in the contest.

Thumbs up: The ending was perfect, all of the labs around and the most precious Snowy found in your bed. Delightful.

Conventions: sea for see in the first stanza

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jus an Ordinary Jyo,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Fare-the-Well' which was recommended by my friend, Sum1.

Title: The title of your poem fits very well with it's message.

Description: Meeting, parting, the relationship in between. This is something that is very relate-able to all readers.

Contents: Thank you for sharing both versions of your poem. I enjoyed the first, but I think I like the second better. It seemed to flow better for me. I'm sure others will disagree, but you need to choose which one is your favorite.
This poem seems very appropriate for me to read today. Tomorrow, my best friend's mother will be buried. I won't be able to be there, but in your words I've found comfort. Thank you for sharing here on WDC.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Deelyt- Chillin,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'From Courageous to Cowardice; A Journey

Title and Description work together bringing the familiar character of the Cowardly Lion to the reader's mind. Definitely a draw, what did make him such a scaredy cat?

Contents: What an interesting back story for a beloved character the Cowardly Lion. It begs me to wonder if he'd been better named the henpecked lion. Back to your story. I love how you wove the characters familiar to many children through your piece. You've incorporated Aseop, Warner Brother Cartoon's Speedy Gonzales and Barney. I' don't know if you're a Star Trek fan, but the wife reminds me of Stella, Henry Mudd's wife. Very nicely done. Then you brought it all back to the story of The Wizard of Oz.

Conventions: I didn't notice any glaring errors within your story.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Desire's Paradox,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'When Trouble Walks In'

Title: The standing joke at our house is all of our middle names are Trouble- so naturally I had to read about when it walks in.

Description: Your description piqued my interest. Noir look... I'd never heard that term used in relations to movies before a few months ago. I've always loved the style, but didn't realize it was a style.

Contents: Extremely well written. The style and characterizations fit perfectly. You can almost hear Bogart striking the match and narrating the tale as it unfolds. Excellent!

Thumbs up: Daily flash fictions are such a great way to get the creative juices flowing. I do hope your story did well.

Conventions: I didn't notice anything glaring.

After promising results and wishing good night>> I think I would have said bidding a good night instead of wishing.


Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of The Silent Moo  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sunshine Loves Stormy Weather,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review ' The Silent Moo'

Title: Many things ran through my head when I read the title. So naturally I had to find out if I was any where near correct. I wasn't.
Very good.

Description: Then I read your description and did some more thinking, cows on the side of the road. OK, let's see what's going on. I thought to myself. I was wrong again. This is getting to be a habit.

Contents: Your commuting story started off, and ping my brain went to - traffic accident with cows. I think it didn't pay me to think so much. I totally get why a dinner of steaks would have been impossible. There is something about those great big cow eyes ant their long eye lashes. Maybe, they were going to the farm, instead of the meat packing plant. I can only hope.

Thumbs up: I loved your ending.

Conventions: No errors noted

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Home  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Lilyrose,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Home'

Title and Description: The title and description work well together to draw a reader into reading your poem.

Contents: You've created a list type of poem with your noun, then a few words about it's importance. I love how it starts briefly and then grows to expand returning to the brief ending. The form created is beautiful. Your words are powerful and flow with ease. It reminds us all of what we enjoy doing here on WDC, our innate joy of writing.

Conventions: No errors noted.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of DEATH  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Mitch,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Death'

Title: To make a long story short, my best friend's mother is standing at death's door. I'm just hoping that my friend can make it home safely before she passes. I think that's why I chose to read your poem.

Description: I think we all have those days once in a while. Some of the best writing comes out of our trials and pain.

Contents: You've written a poem of contrasts... Was it worth living a long life? Is death really the end? It's a stack of legal paperwork and jerks that don't understand someone is dead. Holy cow, the stories I could tell about settling my aunt's estate.

Conventions: I think it would help the reader if you added some punctuation marks, or maybe you thought they were pointless... like death> Interesting quandary to ponder.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Uncertainty  
Review by Amay
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Checkmate!,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Uncertainty'

Title: The title called to me. It seems like so much of life is Uncertain these days.

Description: Short and sweet description, points perhaps to a direction where the heart and the head are in conflict? I wonder?

Contents: While your poem is short, its message is powerful . Ruled by the heart, the head wonders what the heck just happened. I imagine there are many readers and writers here on WDC that have felt that feeling of loss and the emptiness left by someone else's words and actions.

Thumbs up: Great flow and powerful word choices.

Conventions: I didn't notice any errors

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Here Lie Memories  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Poppy June,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review "Here Lie Memories"

Title: Your title sparked the old debate, I must laugh. My Grandmother would repeat the lie/lay rule to me over and over. I still stop and have to remember the poem to make sure I have the right word.

Description: I think I may have seen the movie, but even if I have it's been ages and I probably don't remember much of it. I appreciate your honoring your inspiration.

Contents: You've captured a moment in time. The beginning of an interesting premise hopefully to be continued. I want to know what the man is going to do with the ax. Will he sell? Is he an ax murderer? Oh my... please continue to weave this interesting story. Make twists and turns that weren't in the movie.

Thumbs up: Those last lines had me going. Please do continue this tale.

Conventions: She hears the door open behind her, the hinges creek like an angry cat shrieking, she spins around and for the first second; they just stare at eachother. >> could be more than one sentence. Period after cat shrieking,
third paragraph- typo- each other (missing the space)

She looks him up and down- same wording as the paragraph before. What about She studies him. or something like that?
fourth paragraph- goldne>> typo gold earrings would work well too.

She is the first to speak.>> really isn't needed since she introduces herself in the next line.


Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Coltraz,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'The Last Performer'

Between your Title and Description I was drawn in to read your short story. Each day they meet, sounds like each day is a new adventure with no memory of the previous meetings.

Contents: Your description is a perfect fit, a gentle tease for the story to come. You superbly lead the reader through the meeting, of old acquaintances. Drawing the reader in to your web, as they follow the conversation. I know we've all been in situations where we just wanted not to acknowledge an old classmate, or friend that time has created a rift between. But then, the twist at the end... the old geezer is talking to himself. Awesome job!

Thumbs up: 'And so it continues until I realise how silly I’m being, talking to my own reflection.' Touche!

Conventions: When I was reading the first time through, I was going some tags as to whose doing the talking would be nice. But then I got to the last line, so my comments were null and void. No errors noted, and I haven't any suggestions that would make your piece stronger.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Trick or Tweet  
Review by Amay
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Tom Buck,

I’m honored to read and review 'Trick or Tweet'

Title: Nice twist in the title.

Description: Wonderfully written, a tease as you will.

Contents: What an amazing story. You grab the attention of the reader from the very beginning, and keep the pace up the whole way through. Starting at the end, then bringing in the memories of technology gone wrong. Learning that technology would eventually be the end of the race. Conspiracy, mystery, love story, all woven together in a single fast pace short story.

Thumbs up: Excellent read. I read a novel on similar theme not long ago, but it was like pulling teeth. I thought I'd never finish it. Not so with your story, a very enjoyable prophetic tell. We'll have to see, won't we.

Conventions: I didn't notice anything that would deter the reader, in fact, I was too engrossed in the story to notice anything unless it was really glaring.


Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Heart  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Song Bird,

Happy WDC Anniversary Month!

I’m honored to read and review 'Heart'

Title and Description: Your title and description worked together to make me want to read this poem.

Contents: Your poem has a nice flow and rhythm. It does relate the imposing fear of darkness. Not the absence of light, but the darker side of humanity. Nicely done

Conventions: My only suggestion would be to center the poem. It's irregular lines tap on my OCD shoulder.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Cait,

Happy WDC Anniversary Month!

I’m honored to read and review 'Day in the Park'

Title: Your title alone takes me back to days when my children were young and we'd spend the mornings at the local park.

Description: Thank you for letting the readers know that this is a contest entry.

Contents: You've create a visual diorama of the day in the park. It's almost list like in its structure of all of the things going on, but how does the person seeing all of this feels about it.

Thumbs up: You've included a lot of bolded words, wow what a list of unrelated terms. You've incorporated them into poem nicely.

Conventions: Since you've used punctuation every where else, you should add a period at the end.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Vow  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi April Desiree,

Happy WDC Anniversary Month!

I’m honored to read and review 'Vow'

Title: The title made me wonder.. wedding vows, promises kept or broken. It sent me in to a curious state, what kind of vow?

Description: A promise to someone, with relationship, and love/ romance for a tag... interesting, was love lost? Or is it going to be about a beginning affair of the heart? I'll have to read to find out, a very nice tease for your reader to contemplate.

Contents: Your poems flows well. It makes me think about a long distance relationship, being apart due to circumstances beyond control. I'm sure it will appeal to many readers that have experienced that feeling of loss. Then again, as a mother, it is very similar to the feelings of leaving one's child at college and driving away. That sense of I'll love you forever, but I have to go, you have to fly now. Very intense emotions.

Conventions: There are a lot of people that look at poetry and feel like it has to have punctuation to be correct. Personally, poetry flows from the heart and the use of periods and commas should help the reader pause in the correct places, to stop and think about the words. There are places where I naturally paused.
The last line kind of made me stumble. For some reason, Jackie Gleason popped into my head. 'and away we go' ... when he started his show.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of I Seek Answers  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Meg,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'I Seek Answers'

Title: My first thought when I saw this title, was Don't we all! [/i} I like the title

Description: Unanswered questions, questions not asked for fear of the answers.

Contents: Very cool and contemplative. It gave me chills. In a relationship, there is always that sense of questioning back in the back of your head. Do you? Am I? Will we? The uncertainty of the journey, makes for lots of questions that sometimes we're scared to ask for fear of an honest answer. You'r poem flows and it just makes the reader wonder about their own relationships. Very cool, indeed.

Thumbs up: I love how you started and ended in same place. Still trying to dig the answer out.

Conventions: I didn't notice any errors and honestly I have no suggestions to make this poem better. Just wishing everyone good luck in finding out the answers to the questions of their lives.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Delia,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review Fly Kites, Climb Mountains

Title: Being a 'retired' Assistant Scout Master, your title caught my attention. Even in Scouting, parents love to drop of and let someone else deal with their children.

Description: I loved the description, as a former school teacher there were times I knew that I knew more about a child than their own family members did. I'll never forget the meeting where a parent honestly answered she didn't know what her daughter liked and didn't like. She never saw her. On the one hand you'd say that was awful, but in the daughter's case it probably was a good thing. It took a lot of time working with that mom to get her to see the wonderful things her daughter with limited abilities could do.

Contents: You've encompassed a lot within your article. I like the references to team building activities in the work place. While I hated them, since they were so contrived there were others that needed them to see the point of working together for the greater good.
Your relating team building back to the work of running a family is a very valid case. Too much scheduling of children's free time, too much over time on the side of parents are both driving wedges into the function of the family.
You've given signs to watch out for and suggestions for being more of a part of the family.

Thumbs up- for recognizing the problem, coming up with some simple and cost effective solutions that everyone could afford. And probably most importantly not being too preachy with your points.

Conventions: I think you could break the last paragraph into two- possibly three- starting a paragraph with >One of the telltale signs that the family is drifting apart is when parents don’t get anymore feedbacks from children regarding school, work, friends..... Starting a paragraph with >>Sadly though, most parents expect empathy, but they hardly do it. Come on, be on tract. Save that beloved “organization” from


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Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi TheGirlWhoWrote,

Welcome to the Power Raiders Summer Raid. Today, I’m looking specifically at pieces written by newbies to WDC.

I’m honored to read and review 'What Happened in the Woods'

Title: Your title captured my imagination-Now I want to know, what did happen in the woods.

Description: I'll read it because I like helping people, and I love suspense stories.

Contents: You've created three sentences that could be the start of a suspenseful piece. It needs a little tweaking, but a good start.

Conventions: Your first two sentences start with conjunctions. Now, if you remember the song 'Conjunction Junction', you know that conjunctions join things together. So what did that first AND connect with? I don't know. For it was dark,... works just as well >It was dark. or something like-- darkness surrounded the couple. By the way, who are they?
They're is the contraction for they are- they had to go they are separate ways? That's not what you meant- their separate ways.

Keep working on this, you have the story in you. Get the whole thing out! Go on! After all, you are TheGirlWhoWrote, now write!

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of The Mustangs  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Puma One,

Welcome to the Power Raiders Summer Raid. Today, I’m looking specifically at pieces written by newbies to WDC.

I’m honored to read and review ' The Mustangs'

Title: This poem title called to me, as I was driving home the neighbors horses were zooming through the field having fun

Description: It would be great if your friend would allow you to add a copy of their picture to go with your poem.

Contents: A delightful poem honoring the free spirited mustangs. You've captured the glory and the down side of the mustang, the capture and harnessing of their free spirit.

Thumbs up: 'They are the untameable children.' Within the seriousness of your piece, the joy of exuberant children flew into my mind... I've worked with so many hard children throughout my career.

Conventions: There was only one word that made me stumble when I read this. Though in the fifth line. I've gone back several times and thought about it. The line sounds good without the Though, and it's ok with it. It's up to you.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Ana,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review ' Get Along Kaleidoscope'

Title: The title is what drew me in. Memories of Kaleidoscopes as a kid and recent finds of really expensive kaleidoscopes sucked me right in...

Description: Piqued my curiosity, had to see the relationship.

Contents: And we paint the sunshine to compensate for the dulling gray of normality....

Thumbs up: Very vivid, very visual


Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Words  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Daynasvoice,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Words'

Title: Your title brought back memories. I wrote a piece called Words when a friend's brother died from surgical complications.

Description: I'm glad you enlightened the readers that this was a specific type and form of poetry in your description.

Contents: After reading, I just want to say your poem isn't wordy at all. Very nicely constructed within the 'word' theme. Etymology is the history of words and where they come from. Such an interesting dictionary. I would do biology and zoology lessons with etymology dictionary and collegiate dictionary by my side. It was always fun to compare.

Thumbs up: You've expanded your repertory of poetry and wordlyness.

Conventions: No errors noted.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Article Query  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Loretta,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review "Article Query'

Title: Your title fits your piece, you are inquiring about a discrepancy in a local publication.

Description: Your description works well for what you've written.

Contents: In your letter you present the areas that the magazine has previously covered. You've presented important historical events and people that have made your county special and you've offered your services in providing articles or information that could be used for future articles.

Thumbs up: I think it is very important to realize the historical significance of your area. I know that even though my family has moved around all over, for some reason I've ended up back where the family started. Our forefathers fought the revolution, was a prisoner of that war and released to fight the British again after his wife nursed him back to health. I could go on down the family line but, you get the point.

Conventions: If you knew the name of the editor- I'd use it, and of course as you've probably already sent it, the appropriate business letter format. Good Luck and how about posting your submissions.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Embrace  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi LdyPhoenix,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Embrace'

Title and Description: Your title and description work well together. They give the reader a chance to pause and set up their imagination for reading your poem.

Contents: Your poem is moving. Tapping into the emotional desires and questioning of self that makes a person wonder if they're doing the right thing or not. To give into to her inner desires, to allow someone else to have control of the situation. Interesting thoughts floated through my mind as I read this and thinking about the book I'm currently reading.

Thumbs up: He watched her restlessness
Anticipating the moment
Like prey.-- This verse immediately made me think of the book I'm reading, Vanilla Dom.

Conventions: the only question I had was the last word- it can go either way, but I noticed that I first read it as the shadows. - guess I was rushing

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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