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Review of Wheel of Torture  
Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Gaby ,

A "Game of Thrones House Martell Review!


*BulletB* First impression:

This is a brilliant addition to the Game of Thrones family, Gaby. It gives everyone a chance to do something other than the daily genre reviews.

*BulletB* General impressions:

There is a nice mix of activities that players can end up doing. There are writing tasks, reviewing tasks, and even tasks where we get to interact with the WDC community. Like many, I do little else during GoTMonth, but take part in your crazy affair. I've even put my popular Around the World in 52 weeks on hiatus for this extravaganza.

There are some easy tasks, but also a few really scary ones. I hope none of the Newbies to GoT get scared off if they roll one of the stinkers.

*BulletB* Favourite parts:

It has to be the sheer luck of the draw. Some players have been lucky to get one of the freebies (points for doing nothing at all), but even when players do get something to do, it might be over very quickly (like my friend and foe roll with Hannah).

I pity the poor players who end up with task number 22 from the Friend & Foe Torture Chamber: "The Shameless "Plug" Page" is full of review requests! Fulfill them all, separately. *Smirk* ~ 15000 points each team

It's looks OK on the surface, but it will really force some people outside of their reviewing comfort zone - especially the LGBT and 18+ items.

*BulletB* Suggestions:

Really only one. Please open Doom of Valyria and Reek torture chambers *Laugh*

*BulletB* Closing remarks:

This newest additions shows just how much effort you put into your own GoT prep - something we don't always get to appreciate. I personally think you are onto something of a winner with this item.

*Shield1* Thank you for sharing your work with us! Write On! *Shield2*


*Shield7* Lord Andy~Sunspear of Martell

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Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jeannie ,

A "Game of Thrones House Martell Review!


Thank you for your support of my contest with all of your various entries, Jeannie.

I enjoyed your China crossword, and it was a well-deserved first place win.

Your crossword has a wonderful mix of facts about China, and they are more than just the bog standard history and geography stuff - that's the main reason your item won first place. This is exactly the kind of thing I was hoping my contest would inspire. There is far more to a country than what we get fed by the media, and you have laid China out for us on plate.

I attempted your crossword and only got about of the answers. If it weren't for GoT, I'd spend the next half and hour filling in the gaps.

I like that you have made use of the "Your writing goes here" box at the head of the page - too many people just write "Quiz", "Crossword", or something like this. The extra few facts you include, as well as one of your recognisable images, gives your crossword a welcoming feel.

*Shield1* Thank you for sharing your work with us! Write On! *Shield2*


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Review of The Witch Hunt  
Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Kodan Wolf ,

A "Game of Thrones House Martell Review!


*BulletB* Title: I like stories about witches and witch hunts, and so your title caught my attention.

*BulletB* First impression: You have written an enjoyable piece of flash fiction. It's a nicely crafted clash of good versus evil.

*BulletB* General impressions: Your story moves a long at a nice pace and contains a lot of action. There is very little dialogue, but that fits with a fight scene.

I like the descriptions of the Chaos Marauder. They really help to create a visual of this demonic creature.

*BulletB* Line by line suggestions: These are included in the dropnote below. Your original work is in black, specific suggestions are in indigo, and additional notes/explanations for the change are in orange.

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*Shield1* Thank you for sharing your work with us! Write On! *Shield2*


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Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Lonewolf ,

*BulletB* First impression:

I was rummaging through your port looking for something to review, and I stumbled across this awesome-looking activity and had to have a peak.

It appears as though this is on hiatus, but I wanted to leave a review regardless.

I'm a big coffee drinker (can't start the day without a large lattee), and the title drew me in immediately.

*BulletB* General impressions:

I love the graphics and use of coffee-coloured browns and yellows. They all create the feel of a coffee shop. The forum dividers further reinforce this motif,

Your shop has an amazing array of packages from the simple short coffee (two poetry reviews), to the more complex Double Chocolaty Chip Frappuccino (which includes a mix of reviews, MB, Sig shop gift, and raffle tickets).

I took a peak at the associated sub-forums. The deluxe packages forum is visually appealing, and the banner at the head of the page is amazing. You have compiled some alluring packages. I also like that you allowed people to place anonymous orders - great for those Secret Santa, Anniversary/Birthday wishes, or just a simple "Just Because".

You offer Gift Certificates as well. This is a nice touch, as it can be difficult to know what another member might like in terms of a review package or an MB/Awardicon/reviews bundle.

All of your prices are reasonable for what was on offer. I'd probably go bankrupt very quickly if this was still active.

*BulletB* Favourite parts:

I love how your shoppers can customise their drinks order with coffee shop classics such extra shots (worth a Merit Badge or Awardicon), extra syrups (worth a Sig shop gift cert), and cakes and muffins (worth cNotes or extra reviews).

*BulletB* Closing remarks:

With both Power Reviewers and SAJ review shops on an indefinite hiatus since at least January last year, I'm surprised members have not returned to your coffee shop asking if you were still taking orders.

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!


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Review of Early Summer  
Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Mouser ,

I chose to review your item today for the Power Reviewers Summer Review Raid.

Your Haiku captures a quintessential summer's day.

It's easy to see the whole scene your poem creates - the children playing in a dew-soaked field or meadow with the sun beaming down on them. Many of the haiku I've read seem to focus on one tiny aspect of a much larger picture, but I like how you have managed to include the entire scene without your Haiku feeling cluttered or confused.

Although not required in Haiku, I like the melodic reading quality created by your use of consonance with the letter "s" (especially the unexpected "dual consonance" z-sound created by "seems" and "pause"), and the assonance between "green" and "seems".

I like the use of the phrase "seems to pause", as it really does feel like the sun never goes away during those long hot summer days. This also helps to personify the sun, as though it has physical control over its actions.

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!


Andy~GoT Prepping


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#1300305 by Maryann
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Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi ,

Thank you for your entry in "Around the World in Fifty-Two Weeks. I'm here with a brief review.

Thank you for sharing for so much of America in your essay.

I have to agree about the Pilgrims. They fled England and Europe to escape the religious persecution and just took all of their own intolerances with them to the New World.

You have included a number of interesting tidbits of information - I for one did not know that only one horse survived Custer's Last Stand.

I like that you ended your essay with some personal details about where you have lived.

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!

Andy~NaNo'ing


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Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Prosperous Snowwoman ,

Thank you for your entry in "Around the World in Fifty-Two Weeks. I'm here with a brief review.

I really liked your essay. You have taken an important event in your faith and shared it with the WDC community. I'll be honest, yours is not a faith I am familiar with, beyond the name, so thank you for introducing me to it.

I like that you have included footnotes in your essay, as this not only shows that you have researched your essay but also gives your essay a formal look. You have also correctly centered the media extract, further lending to a formal feel and read.

I only noticed one minor error: "A tugboat, carrying several reports" should be "A tugboat, carrying several reporters".

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!

Andy~NaNo'ing


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Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Azrael Tseng ,

*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon! *BalloonR*


Thank you for your entry in my "Around the World in Fifty-Two Weeks contest.

I like how you have written something detailed in the header box of your crossword. There are so many members, even ones who have been here for years, who would just put something like "America Crossword" or even only "Crossword" in that box. You have provided some really interesting facts that help to explain the direction you have taken with your crossword.

Your crossword shares some cool tidbits of knowledge, and was a nice take on the prompt. I had no clue as to most of the answers, and relied on working out the answers from the three clues I knew. But what do you expect from a Brit *Laugh*

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!

Andy~NaNo'ing


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Review of haiku #20170328  
Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi SOOKDEO ,

*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon! *BalloonR*


Your haiku is very vivid. I can easily see the change of the season from winter to spring.

I like your use of the word "muffled". It captures the idea that winter doesn't kill off nature, just that nature is subdued and unheard. This ties in really well with the "mute butterflies".

I love the thunderstorms we get here in the UK during spring. They have just right amount of terror in them to give spring a good wake up call, without doing too much damage - unlike the crazy storms I've seen they get in America.

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!

Andy~NaNo'ing


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Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi BlueMoon ,

I'm here with a review for "a very Wodehouse challenge.

Your letter speaks a lot about the bonds of family. At a time when someone is diagnosed with cancer, they rely on their family more than ever. It's one of the ties that bind, even if you are not especially close.

Being diagnosed with cancer doesn't just impact on the person, it also impacts on those around them. Everything becomes about the cancer, but as your letter shows, it is important to keep in mind that life goes on. Breast cancer is not the be all and end all of lives anymore.

It's natural to question what will come, what the future holds, and it also typically causes us to question our own mortality. I do like how you have kept your letter about your cousin, and that you generally keep the tone of your letter positive.

You provide a positive picture of your cousin, and I'm sure if she ever read this letter, it would give her the courage to fight.

I hope she is now well.

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!


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#1300305 by Maryann
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Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Chris Breva ,

I'm here with "a very Wodehouse challenge review.

Your letter to cancer is short, but it says a lot.

Cancer is a disease that touches many people's lives. Your opening is a sentiment shared by everyone, and hopefully a cure will one day materialise.

Cancer doesn't discriminate between ordinary people, celebrities, royalty, the rich or the poor. Your letter reinforces this fact.

I'm sorry to hear about your friend who passed away. Male breast cancer is so rare that most men don't even realise they can get breast cancer. Your letter helps to highlight this important fact to a under-represented group of breast cancer sufferers.

Your closing shows your positive outlook and hope for a future cure to this deadly disease.

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!

Andy~NaNo'ing


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Review of Blog @ Work  
for entry "Letter to Cancer
Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi WakeUpAndLive~ ,

I chose to review your item today as part of my "a very Wodehouse challenge

Thank you for sharing your views and fears in your "Dear Cancer" letter.

There are a lot of women who similarly put off having their mammogram for fear of the unknown. But it's not just mammograms. It's people not doing bowel cancer screening, it's women not going for their smears, it's men not getting their prostate checked - people don't want to find out something they don't know they have.

I can certainly understand your aversion to chemotherapy, especially as you have seen its effects first hand. It's one of the most aggressive ways there is to treat cancer, but it is really only used in treating breast cancer if the cancer has spread beyond the breast. Breast cancer is easier to treat than lung or cervix cancer, and there are a lot more options to treat breast cancer. And with the combination of the newer chemotherapies and drugs to combat the side-effects, a lot of patients actually cope really well.

I appreciate the way how you have not held back from sharing something very personal. Your letter gives us an insight into you and the way you approach this disease.

I'm glad to know that you went for your mammogram and all was well.

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!


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#1300305 by Maryann
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Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi iKïyå§ama ,

*Carr* You are being reviewed in the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group Party RAID! *Carr*


I am also here with a Very Wodehouse review.

*BulletB* Title and image:

The title of your contest is a very positive one. Although people still die from breast cancer, it is no longer the death sentence it was. In fact, even metastatic breast cancer is now thought of as a chronic condition by many.

I like the use of the various shades of pink in your forum header image, since pink is the breast cancer awareness colour.

*BulletB* Forum:

I like the personal introduction, as it gives contestants an explanation as to how your contest came about. Your inclusion of facts about breast cancer helps to remind us that it is a disease that affects everyone.

Your rules are few and are clearly laid out. I especially like that you allow editing all the way up until the deadline.

Your prizes are very generous, and I like that you include an Awardicon and a Merit Badge. You have included links to previous winners and entrants, and this helps to share other members experiences.

I also like the contrasting use of purples and pinks throughout.


*BulletB* Closing remarks:

You have a popular contest here and one that can help members come to terms with either their own diagnosis or that of a friend or family member.

I hope this contest continues to run for a long time.

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!

Andy~NaNo'ing

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Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Wow! Very cool story, Elizabeth.

It kept me reading right until the end. I also liked the way how you included the Harry Potter book in your story.
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Review of The Survivalist  
Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi HuntersMoon ,

I chose to review your item today as part of my challenge at "a very Wodehouse challenge.

*BulletB* Title:

Your title is very apt for your piece, and it gives a clear idea as to where your story is going.

*BulletB* First impression:

Your story is a nice flash piece of dystopian science fiction. It fulfils the prompt requirements, without taking the reader on a 1950s sci-fi B-movie trip.

*BulletB* General impressions:

Your story moves along at a quick pace. It has a beginning, middle,and ending, which is really great to see in a 500ish word piece of flash.

I liked the inclusion of the Doomsday Clock. It's not something I've seen included in many dystopian stories for some reason, but it adds a degree of realism to your story.

Bob is an absolute survival nut who goes to extreme measures to ensure he survives whatever is about to come. I've seen people on YouTube and stuff who have fallout shelters in their back garden and are stocked to the gills with MREs and canned goods. They say that the will to survive overrides all things in humans, but I'm not sure if that applies to humans who want to become another species.

Bob is clearly intelligent, though I do have to question his sanity. Perhaps he is simply one of those people who have tunnel vision, and once he is fixated on an idea, he pursues it to the exclusion of all other things.

I'm really impressed that I have not noticed any Spelling, Punctuation, or Grammar issues - though that could be because it's 2am here, and I should have been asleep in bed three hours ago *Laugh*

*BulletB* Closing remarks:

Wishing you all the best for the Distorted Minds contest.

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!


Andy~NaNo'ing


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#1300305 by Maryann
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Review of Santa's Surprise  
Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Chris Breva ,

I chose to review your item today as part of my challenge at "a very Wodehouse challenge.

*BulletB* First impression:

This is nice piece of flash fiction. A scene familiar to all of us, takes a very disturbing turn. The child on Santa's lap is an almost iconic Christmas image, and the ending is certainly surprising.

*BulletB* General impressions:

Your story is only about six hundred words, but it still has a beginning, middle, and ending.

Your story moves along at a brisk pace and takes us from start to finish in a straight line. The dialogue feels natural and it helps to move the story along.

I like the way how most of the story reads like an everyday scene. The horror only reveals itself in the closing moments of the story, and they do so without warning - in the best traditions of the slasher genre.

We get very little feel for who the little girl or Santa are. It doesn't detract from the story, but it does leave the reader with questions. The main one is how a child young enough to still sit on Santa's lap is capable of doing what she does.

*BulletB* Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation: For the most part you have this down pat.

When you have speech tags, you need to use either a comma, question mark, or exclamation mark at the end of the speech and before the closing speech marks - I'll show you a few examples in the next section to give you an idea of what I mean.

Terms of endearment, such as sweetie, honey, pookie, pumpkin, etc., even when used as a direct address, always start with lower case letters.

*BulletB* Line by line suggestions: These are included in the dropnote below. Your original work is in black, specific suggestions are in indigo, and additional notes/explanations for the change are in orange.

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*BulletB* Closing remarks:

Congratulations on the first place win. Your story is certainly derserving of the Awardicon that graces it.

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!


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#1300305 by Maryann
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Review of Rapunzel  
Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi RainbowFish ,

I chose to review your item today as part of my challenge at "a very Wodehouse challenge.

*BulletB* First impression:

This is a great re-telling of a traditional fairy tale. I enjoy re-imaginings of fairy tales that bring something new, yet still leave the original recognisable.

*BulletB* General impressions:

I love how you have flipped a traditionally romantic fairy tale into a comedy.

The story moves along at a smooth pace, and your dialogue feels very natural.

I love the sassy princess - her bluntness reminds of Miranda Bailey from Grey's Anatomy. It makes a really nice change from the usual fairy tale helpless princess, who is just waiting for Prince Charming to make her life complete.

The prince is almost an anti-prince. The way he keeps on changing who he is adds a nice bit of comedy to the story, and for some reason reminds me of the cartoon character King Rollo.

*BulletB* Favourite quotes:

*Starfishb*“Seriously?” she said. “You didn’t bring a ladder?”

*Laugh* My thoughts exactly. What genius originally came up with the idea of the prince climbing up Rapunzel's hair!


*Starfishp* “What do you mean, my ‘scalp’?” queried Rapunzel

This line had me thinking for the rest of the story, what was up. This is some nice foreshadowing that all is definitely not as it first seems.

*BulletB* Line by line suggestions: These are included in the dropnote below. Your original work is in black, specific suggestions are in indigo, and additional notes/explanations for the change are in orange.

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*BulletB* Closing remarks:


You have done a great job overall, and the story really deserves the ribbon that adorns it.

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!


Andy~NaNo'ing


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#1300305 by Maryann
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Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi 💙 Carly - Pumpkin Spiced ,

I am reviewing your item today for the I Write contest.

I'm not a huge fan of free verse, but I really liked this. You've made nice use of consonance and assonance throughout your poem, and that really appeals to me.

The opening of your poem captures the splendid display of a vibrant dawn. I like the way how you contrast all the promises of the new day with leaving the previous day behind.

Wishing you the very best of luck in Shadows and Light. I hope you have enjoyed this round of I Write.

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!

Andy~NaNo'ing


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Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
Hi willwilcox,

I am reviewing your item today as you are currently highlighted at "Queen of Comedy Challenge

I really enjoy Beth's SPAM poetry contests, and you have written a suitably dreadful offering.

I enjoyed the way the darkness of your poem contrasts with the utter absurdity of the SPAM worship. You've elevated the humble SPAM to the level of a dark deity, and the children's dress and chanting creates a brilliant visual.

The last line is a great close. Although the reader expects something like this is coming, it still surprises.

You have misspelled "Altar" in the main title but have spelled it correctly in the body of the item.

You receive the obligatory One Star Rating. Just a shame that SM has not created minus stars yet *Laugh*

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!

Andy~NaNo'ing


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Review of Uplifting!  
Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi HuntersMoon ,

I'm here again with a review for "Queen of Comedy Challenge.

Yet again you have managed to write a very funny poem using the much maligned limerick form.

I noticed that the two shorter lines do not have the same syllable count (five in the first and six in the second). Usually, different line lengths throw off the reading of a limerick, but for some reason it works here - maybe it's the different word stresses in the two lines that hides it??

Your old man really could only come from Niagra *Laugh* Luckily for you, there was an appropriately named place to start off your limerick, otherwise this little ditty would have, erm, flopped *Laugh*

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!

Andy~NaNo'ing


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Review of Safe Sex  
Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi HuntersMoon ,

And another review for being highlighted at "Queen of Comedy Challenge!

The limerick is definitely an underappreciated poetic form, and it is one you have a lot of talent with.

I loved your humorous look at "doing the right thing". In this day and age, it's probably even more appropriate than when you first wrote this poem.

Your narrator's partner sounds like they are very vanilla in their flavours, and they are either repressed or lacking imagination. Your closing line is a great ending to your limerick, and one that still has me chuckling.

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!

Andy~NaNo'ing


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Review of The Zombie Diner  
Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi HuntersMoon ,

'Tis another review for thee for being highlighted at "Queen of Comedy Challenge

*BulletB* First impression:

This is a brilliant poem, and I really loved the twist at the end.

*BulletB* General impressions:

Your narrator has a very unique dining experience with the living dead. You have done a nice job of going through the diner menu, and it really adds to the humour of your poem.

All the way through I thought that the zombie thing was going to turn out to be a marketing ploy of some kind, so the ending really delivered on both the dark humour and shock value.

*BulletB* Favourite quotes:

*Starfishp* She set the table, knives and forks
and a small piece of chin.

Well, it makes a nice change from a roll and some butter *Laugh*

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!

Andy~NaNo'ing


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Review of Hapenis  
Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi HuntersMoon ,

I'm reviewing your item today since you have been highlighted at "Queen of Comedy Challenge

*BulletB* First impression:

*Rolling* What more can I say? This is a really funny poem filled to the brim with metaphor and innuendo.

*BulletB* General impressions:

You have done a great job with your ode to the chode *Laugh* Of course, there are the numerous references to sex and erections and other bodily functions, but you have worked in a little bit of a story.

I do like the fact that despite your poem's theme and content, you have not made it too smutty and low-brow.

*BulletB* Favourite quotes:

*Starfishb* With yellow ink, we inscribe ancient runes until complete
and then, the mystic ritual done, I let you slip away

That all important morning ritual *Laugh* I really liked the first line here, as its a really clever way to describe the morning ablutions.

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!

Andy~NaNo'ing


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Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Prosperous Snowwoman ,

I chose to review your item today as my review requirement for I Write.

*BulletB* First impression:

This is a clever little poem extolling the virtues of choosing the right word in poetry, and showing what can go horribly wrong if the wrong word is used.

*BulletB* General impressions:

Your poem has a smooth flow to it, and your heavy use of consonance and assonance throughout gives it a very musical quality.

I like the idea of the metaphors and similes shining light on a poem. I remember my English teacher back in secondary school drumming into our heads that metaphors were the driving force behind poetry - they were usually the first thing a reader looks for.

*BulletB* Favourite parts:

I love the "k-sound" consonance in the last line of the first stanza and the "s" consonance in the first line of the second stanza. It really makes for a seamless transition between the two stanzas.

*BulletB* Closing remarks:

This is a really great poem, Neva, and I wish you the very best of luck with it in the What's Your Line contest. I hope you have enjoyed I Write so far, and that you complete the challenge.

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!

Andy~NaNo'ing


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Review of Humble Pi  
Review by Andy~NaNo'ing
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi HuntersMoon ,

I chose to review your item today as you have been highlighted at "Queen of Comedy Challenge.

I love maths-themed riddles and poems, and this is a really clever poem.

When someone describes their poem as an ode I expect it to glorify the subject, and your poem does that in leaps and bounds. Your poem is also a fitting tribute for Pi Day.

I love that you have described pi in the various ways, and not just limited yourself to the fact that it is the relationship between a circle and its diameter.

Your poem has a smooth flow to it. The transition from stanza to stanza is seamless.

There is nice use of consonance and assonance throughout your poem. There is also clever use of enjambment in the last two lines of the poem. I was a little surprised by the absence of letter P consonance since your subject lends itself so easily, but a part of me is also impressed by its absence since it is an obvious thing to include.

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!


Andy~NaNo'ing


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