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I look for a good hook at the beginning and like stories that "hit the ground running". Good plots with a theme, strong characters with an emotional impact, moving dialogue, sensory descriptions, clear communication and words with a purpose are strong points of a good story.
I'm good at...
knowing a good story when I read one. I like to read as much as I like to write, maybe more. I will let you know when a sentence just does not make sense to me, and I will try to give you my opinion on how to make it better.
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biographical, family, drama, mystery, comedy, nature, young adult
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sci-fi, erotica, fantasy, mythology
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short stories, essays, fiction & non-fiction
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novels
I will not review...
novels...sorry, no time
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Review of The Last Blaze  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Spidey,

What a cute story and I hope you won something with it. Once a firefighter, always a firefighter. It reminds me of my grandson-in-law, who is one. And his Dad was, too. He probably felt just like this at his retirement...but, hopefully, did not have the same mishap.

You tell the story well, revealing the camaraderie of the group and the loss of a loved structure in one's life. Thanks for sharing.

Connie



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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello,

This all sounds so familiar. I guess I'm at that same age where long ago memories and the deaths of schoolmates is uppermost in my thoughts these days. If the goal of this short story is to communicate to people like me, then, the job is well done.

Your writing is easy to read, well punctuated and gets right to the point without a lot of frills.

Thanks for sharing and keep writing.

Connie
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Review of PHOTOGRAPH  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello,

This poem reminded me of a trunk I inherited from my Uncle Johnny. It was filled with old photo albums, pictures of people unknown to me with no inscriptions on the backs or dates or marks of any kind. So...I just had to make up my own scenarios.

Your poem is melancholy, somber but not sad, pensive and thoughtful. It has good rhyme and rhythm, good flow. I liked the last stanza the best because it seems to me to be so very true.

Thank you for sharing...and keep writing poetry.

Connie
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Review of The Avalanche  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Sumojo,

You have written a good recreation of what it much be like to be trapped underneath an avalanche. It might be the basis for a much longer and very interesting story/book. You have done a good job of putting a great deal of information into a low word count.

I am not a snow person. That is, I'm not crazy about it, but I have been in it, and your short story inhibited its favor even more.

I would switch this sentence around just a bit: Fifteen minutes later by some miracle Steve located the back of her leg as he thrust his hands into the deep snow frantically searching for her. I would write it as: Fifteen minutes later as he frantically thrust his hands into the deep snow, Steve miraculously located the back of her leg. Just a bit better flow of the event in my opinion, but my opinion only.

Thanks so much for sharing your writing, and I hope you did well in the contest.

Connie
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello,

I choose life as well. I've been a church-goer, not so much anymore. Now, I just try to follow the golden rule and thank the Almighty that I am allowed to live another day. That is so easy to do while looking out my porch door each morning in awe of the beautiful sky above, thankful for all my senses in tact, for my motion and my place in space.

Thanks for sharing your wise words and bringing my attention to my thankfulness again today.

Connie
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Review of Heading Home  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello HuntersMoon,

I thought how appropriate that this poem (lyric) came up as we mourn the death of Queen Elizabeth, so many poignant lines to thoughts in our minds today relating to how she must feel and be thinking if that were possible.

These lines have a tune of their own and I found myself actually singing (not out loud, thankfully) as I read. Beautiful. Thanks for sharing!

Connie
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Review of DISCRETION  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello,

I enjoyed reading this poem and agree with everything it says. The only problem is getting my mouth to follow suit...but I think I am improving. I find the trick to improvement is to count to 3 or 4 or 5 or more before operating my tongue.

You have great rhythm and rhyme. The only place I stumbled a teensy bit was in the last verse although the message was loud and clear. Sorry, but I wouldn't presume to offer any improvement. It is great as is. Thanks for sharing.

Connie
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jacky,

I can so empathize with all this! It is amazing how our thought process works when something is not as we think it should be. Maybe it is the writer in us. I can make up all kinds of stories just as you did. And the problem does not necessarily need to be a computer problem. It can be anything that does not jive with my expectation.

Thanks for sharing your very relevant and relatable thought process. Hope you did well in the contest.

Connie
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Review of I Live There  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Paul,

I enjoyed reading this snippet of life above a live theater, a totally unknown experience for me. I can imagine it though, through your words so you have accomplished your writing goal.

Contact with those who have passed through is also interesting to me, and I'm open to that idea. People live in our hearts, and who is to say that is not real?

Thanks for sharing your writing, and please keep on with all your talents.

Connie
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Review of in the aftermath  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Rhyssa,

You have captured the emotions of the aftermath of argument with someone you really love. The hurt and fear of your weakness being known if you "give in" first is shouted through your stanza.

Although many have felt this way, you do a great job of putting it into words that everyone can understand in their heart.

Thanks for sharing and keep writing.

Connie
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Review of My Hero  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sonali,

This is just beautiful. I hope you show it to your dad, he will be so proud and happy. And, just curious...did he really date Marilyn Monroe?

I love the way you first refer to him as "my mother's husband", an original way to begin a father's day poem.

Thanks for sharing this...and "happy father's day" to your dad!

Connie
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Review of The Final Fold  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Norman,

I enjoyed reading this funny, but oh so true, poem. It has great rhythm and is a very quick read. You did great at finding so many words to rhyme with each other and yet, keep the poem in context. It reminded me a little of Shel Silverstein (love Where the Sidewalk Ends).

Keep writing these poems and maybe a children's book will be born. Thanks so much for sharing.

Connie
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Review of Someone I Know  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Elisa,

I love this sort of whimsical poem that reminds me of several people I know. (I'm smiling here.) In fact, it could be me sometimes!

You have painted a very clear picture with your well-thought out words, and I will remember them when I am daydreaming. We all need to daydream.

Thanks for sharing your poetry, and Happy Holidays!

Connie
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Paul,

This is wonderful, a great story and tips and encouragement for a new storyteller! I'm so glad I didn't have to eat any of that gravy! I hope the kitty recovered.

Are you in Toastmasters? I considered trying them out several times but always "lose my nerve." We have a local branch here where I live. I might reconsider after reading this "enlightening" story.

Thanks so much for sharing and happy holidays!

Connie
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Review of That Simple Smile  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Jeff,

Isn't this exactly the way all parents (when teenagers) hope they will behave when confronted with a similar situation with their own children? I know I did, but of course we forget...and then, we become our parents.

Thanks for putting this into words. It seems perfect to me since the message is loud and clear. Thanks for sharing.

Connie
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Good Morning,

I am returning the kind favor of your review.

I found your story well-written and an enjoyable read. It brought back memories of a similar personality in a church I attended, and in fact, I wrote a story about one of my experiences with "Aunt Fanny". Churches without servant hearts rarely survive.

I have only one suggestion for improvement and that is a slight rearranging of a phrase in the last sentence of the first paragraph. "She lived simply and balanced her budget by shopping for her clothes in the charity shops down Market Street."

Thank you so much for sharing your writing.

Connie

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Good Morning,

That was an unexpected ending...karma. You tell the story well and I enjoyed reading it, especially the dialogue. I had to look up periwinkle and apparently they are edible, but not for me.

I saw nothing that I could improve upon, neither grammar nor content. Thanks for sharing your writing.

Connie
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Review of My Sister Gayle  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Good Morning,

This is a touching and interesting story. The background fits into the story well and sets the scene for what is to come. The flow is good with dialogue interspersed to move the action along. The theme of the whole story seemed to be saying that you should be your own person, but the last paragraph made that a little hazy. Also, I'm not sure about word limits but I would like to have seen more setting.

Thanks for sharing your writing.

Connie
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Review of Love and Hate  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Good Morning,

I love this cute little story! You have perfectly pegged the antics of the cat. I laughed at the mafia relationship. And, of course, when cats get their way, which is always, they can be agreeable as evidenced by your ending.

Thanks so much for sharing this. Hope you won something with it!

Connie
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Review of The Review Game  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello,

I often wondered how spouses handled this. You lead me step-by-step through your process, and I was happy that all ended well. Good thing "someone" has a sense of humor.

You have also set forth a good template for a review for anyone looking for one so your story has a nice take away.

Thanks for sharing.

Connie

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Review of Originally Sinful  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Good Morning,

This is an interesting free style poem with an underlying theme of disdain for present day humanity implying that we must look to the misdeeds of our past to feel better about out present. You have said it much better than I although I'm not sure I agree.

Your rhythm is good and your message is clear. I have no suggestions for improvement. Thanks for sharing your writing.

Connie
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Review of WHY I LIVE?  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Good Morning,"

This poem has a sadness to it, making me want to reach out and say everything is okay. It drew on my emotions, a goal of most poetry, but not one that is always achieved.

It has good rhyming and good rhythm. When reading aloud, which I always do with poetry, I stumbled a little with the 3rd stanza, maybe "for someone whose life has outlived his prime" for the last 2 lines.

Thanks for sharing your writing with me.

Connie
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Review of The Old Horse  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Monty,

Your poem about a racehorse who didn't stand a chance caught my eye and reminded me of one of my late husband's favorite songs, Stewball https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8n6O8m8Hbh0.

I enjoyed reading this,liked the rhyme pattern and the story behind the poetry.

It was a pleasure to read. Thanks for sharing.

Connie
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Review of FIRST MEETING  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi SandraLynn,

I commend Sherry for being able to fit into those teeny tiny school desks. And, yes, bringing a cupcake to the TOPS meeting would be a no-no.

I also commend your good grammar and punctuation. It made your story a joy to read.

From your title and "the hook" I kept trying to decide the punch line, but you made it too good for me. It was a surprise.

Thanks for sharing your writing.

Connie
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jace,

Your essay resonated with me as I, too, expect the worst and hope for the best, as the old saying goes.

And you are totally correct about the news with all "good" news tucked into the ending.

As far as the glass half empty or half full, I would have to say I'm a half full person, although that is in direct conflict with my first statement. Sorry....

I enjoyed reading your essay and I enjoy your thoughts that most people are like you. I do believe that smiling more than frowning improves one's lot. Thanks for smiling!

Connie
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