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I look for a good hook at the beginning and like stories that "hit the ground running". Good plots with a theme, strong characters with an emotional impact, moving dialogue, sensory descriptions, clear communication and words with a purpose are strong points of a good story.
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knowing a good story when I read one. I like to read as much as I like to write, maybe more. I will let you know when a sentence just does not make sense to me, and I will try to give you my opinion on how to make it better.
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biographical, family, drama, mystery, comedy, nature, young adult
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sci-fi, erotica, fantasy, mythology
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short stories, essays, fiction & non-fiction
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Review of A Woman's Place  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Olivia,

Such an appropriate story following the death of RBG, our champion for women's rights.

I love how you have set the scene without stating it in your story. Mum makes it English, the drinking age and the omnibus help to set the year. Good writing and I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.

Connie
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Review of Christmas Project  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Pumpkin,

You had a difficult assignment and went over and beyond what was necessary to complete your task. It is almost impossible for humans not to judge other humans and I share in your dilemma but in the end it sounds as if you benefited as much if not more than the family you helped.

I'm of the opinion that anything one person can do to help another is a good thing and that is all I need to know.

You told your story clearly and honestly and I commend you for your frankness. Poverty is a sad thing and like you say, the children will suffer the most...and they will never forget.

Thanks for sharing this.

Connie
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Review of Ruby  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Good Morning,

Poor Ruby is having a bad day but a few things are working in her favor. It is much nicer to go out for a picnic than stay home and clean. She is turning lemons into lemonade, finding suitable food for human and duck and a ride to the park. Unfortunately, she, or rather her late husband, has chosen the wrong team to back.

Nice story that could have been pessimistic but turned out not so bad. Thanks for sharing your writing.

Connie
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Review of Broken Crayons  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Fyn,

This is so sad although it starts off on a happier note. The key word seems to be broken, broken crayons and broken hearts. If this is a personal loss, I'm so sorry.

The poem is well-written with a definite message of loss and sadness. Thank you for sharing.

Connie
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Review of Phineas  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Good Morning,

Clever ending. Yes, I agree. Unfortunately, truth abounds in this story. So many wrong decisions left to their own demise. If only all the victims had a magic blue disc to change their future.

Your story is well-written, easy to follow, and carries an important message. Thanks for sharing.

Connie
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Good Afternoon,

I enjoy reading uplifting stories like this one. Two people reaching out to each other, one in need of material help, the other in need of spiritual help. It is usually a recipe for success as long as minds stay open. The story makes it look easy but of course it's not.

The writing is good, following a chronological order. Perhaps including some of the hardships endured to get to the happy ending would add to the interest of the story. Just a thought. Thanks for sharing your writing.

Connie
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good Morning,

What a wonderful, uplifting and encouraging story for others who may be needing a kidney. Thanks for sharing this about your mom and your uncle. I sincerely hope they are still doing well since this story is quite old.

I get through the story that you are young, but you have done an excellent job of showing the feelings and emotions of those involved. Well done. Please keep writing and sharing.

Connie
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Review of Survival  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Good Morning,

A frightening scenario, but I guess anything is possible in the world we live in today. I admit I have wondered about the size of our debt and the holders of our bonds. I would suppose that as long as we continue to pay the interest on those bonds, all will be well.

You're story is well-written and believable. With Covid-19 some of the unbelievable has already happened but nothing as bad as you suggest. As you imply, finances will most likely be the determining factor of worse to come.

Thanks for sharing your writing. I only noticed one needed correction, third paragraph from the end, second sentence, "ounce" to "once." Keep on writing. Oh, and I will check out your link.

Connie
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Review of And Then Again...  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Good Morning,

Star dust, fairy dust, the same thing? At any rate it turned the people into kind and caring beings, the way people should be. The man responsible? God? Maybe.

I enjoyed reading this uplifting story full of scenarios that made me smile and restored my faith in mankind.

Thanks for sharing your writing and your insights.

Connie
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Good Afternoon,

Well, this was an interesting story, and when I got to the bottom and saw all those "markers", I could see that you had a path laid out for you. Congrats on placing in the contest.

I realize the ending was left to the reader's imagination, but I really could not determine a plot line to this story. I like your writing style and your technicals seem perfect. Let me know what I'm missing. Maybe I'm just dense. :)

Connie
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Good Morning,

That's a horribly sad story...for everyone involved. I certainly see where you are coming from and I totally agree.

Good neighbors are a treasure and should be treated that way. The end of July I got a new neighbor to my right and very soon I will have a new one to my left. I was very saddened to see the old ones go but things are always changing so I will be a good neighbor to the new ones and hopefully they will be the same.

Thanks for sharing this tragic story and your insight. May we all be good neighbors in this trying time and after.

Connie
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Review of FRIENDS  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Good Morning,

What a beautiful way to start the day. As I read through this, I couldn't help but smile, all the words so very true. Do you have the music first or the words first? As you can see, I know nothing about songwriting, but poetry, yes, this is lovely.

I see you are new to wdc and I want to welcome you to the community. Please keep writing and sharing.

Connie
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Review of Aye, Aye, Sir  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Good Morning,

I was reminded of that saying, "Be careful what you ask for", except that David did not actually ask for a robot.

At least everything turned out well...except for Mary. Love the irony, the humor, and the dialogue. Thanks for sharing.

Connie
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Good Morning,

I found your title interesting and I enjoyed your article on a camping and hiking trip in a beautiful region of India, which I assume is near your home.

Wild dahlias must be a sight to see. In the State of Delaware in the U.S.A. where I grew up they were not wild but prolifically grown by gardeners and most beautiful. Sadly, where I live now in Florida, it is too hot for them to flourish.

October is a favorite time of mine, too, just cool enough to get outside in comfort. You call them hills but here in Florida they would be mountains (which we do not have). I love your descriptions of your cabin and of the camaraderie around the campfire and of your hiking adventure. With your pals I know it was a good time.

Thanks for sharing your travelogue and please keep writing. And I notice you are a recent member so "welcome to writing dot com."

The very best to you,
Connie
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Review of TIME  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Good Morning Angus,

This is beautiful, so short but with such an impact, and so very poetic.

I'm not sure why you did not enter it in the contest. It certainly has merit, speaking to the past, the future, and the now, ending with hope.

I have nothing to offer to make it better. It is perfect as is. Thanks for sharing.

Connie
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Review of Abandoned Piano  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Good afternoon,

I see you are a relatively new member of wdc so "welcome."

Since I am a procrastinating pianist, the title of your poem drew me in. If my piano could feel, I am certain it would profess to your stated emotions, aged and neglected. The outward appearance differs, but "inside" it would be the same. I love poems that animate inanimate objects. And I especially like the rhyming of your last four lines. Of course, those lines reminded me of death. A sad poem, well-written. Thank you for sharing and please keep writing.

Connie
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Judity,

What a sad ending. Of course, I know that all endings are not happy but I'm always expecting one.

Your story is well-written and well-told, very believable, keeping me interested in what would happen next. Sad to think this may have actually happened to people. And so many people had to re-locate because of fires, sometimes losing all their possessions, even pets. My heart goes out to them.

Thanks for sharing this, for putting a tragedy into perspective. You're a joy to read.

As always,
Connie
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Review of Dream Catchers  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Megan,

I have been fascinated by dream catchers since I saw my first ones (earrings at a Rehoboth Beach, Delaware, boardwalk shop). I bought them (over 30 years ago) and still feel very special whenever I wear them. And I have a dream catcher hanging on my bedpost. I think it works because I've never had a really scary dream. I have seen some beautiful ones (dream catchers, that is).

Thanks for sharing your well-written story and for all the background information. Now I will have even more to think about when I look at my dream catchers.

As always,
Connie
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Bubblegum Jones,

Thanks for the reminder that selfies are not anything new and that they did not originate with the cell phone (actually, maybe the social media ones should be called "cellfies"). And, yes, Buzz Aldrin's is probably the most famous selfie.

You caught my attention with the Grand Duchess Anastasia of Russia. I will have to look that up to learn more about it...and her.

Thanks for sharing a well-written article on something we now think of as our very own...and, please, keep on writing.

Have a great day,
Connie
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Review of Where to Meet God  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Good Afternoon,

I stumbled upon your article while clicking the "read and review" link, and what an extraordinary find, especially for the time in which we find ourselves.

Maybe it's just the friends I have on Facebook or my exceptional neighbors or my loving family, but I find the footprint of God everywhere, more now than in "normal" times. Or maybe like you say, now we have the time to look.

What ever it is, may it continue on. Thank you for sharing your thoughts and experiences. God bless you.

Connie
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Review of Brewing Coffee  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Neva,

I love this description of your memories coming back to you of coffee-making in the morning. It was written so well, I just flew right through it and then had to go back and read it again...and again.

Such picturesque wonderful words of something most of us can relate to. I loved 'the coffee maker's melody whispers sweet nothing to my mind.' The only think wrong was that I was not holding a cup of coffee while I was reading it.

Thanks so much for sharing your beautiful thoughts and stay safe and healthy.

Connie
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Review of My Life's Musings  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jeannie🦋 ,

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this short synopsis of your life so far. Although I was sad for your family losses, I could tell that your attitude gave you strength to carry on.

I imagine with all those animals to feed and take care of that you have a very busy life, but having things depend on you, I find, helps a person get up in the morning. I live alone now having lost my kitty recently but I am just now contemplating getting another. At first I couldn't comprehend that...as you intimate with the loss of your German shepherds. Still, I am only in the thinking about it stage.

I have a brother-in-law who lives in the St. Paul area but have never visited there. It sounds beautiful, though, from all I have heard, beautiful but very cold in the winter.

Your writing is nice easy reading, which I love. I hope you continue on with stories about your life. Thanks for sharing this.

Connie
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello,

I was saddened by Maya Angelou passing, such a wonderful writer and such a wonderful person.

Your poem does her justice, a nice tribute. I like best your lines....

"ascended
into the poet's paradise
where her fiery voice became
rainbow wings"

If anyone deserves rainbow wings, Maya does. May she rest in peace and forever dwell in our hearts.

Thanks for sharing your poem.

Connie
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Review of David's Life  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello,

This looks like the beginning of a memoir. You've gotten off to a very good start, mentioning many interesting things in your life to hook a reader, especially trying to kill your little brother.

This part could serve as a prologue to your story. I suggest you begin the memoir with the topic of your last sentence, leading with dialogue in first person.

If you're writing in Word, you can do a grammar check and fix a few things, but don't change your writing style. It's authentic and in your face.

Thanks for sharing and I hope you write some more.

Connie
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Review of Mortuary Blues  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello,

This is definitely a gory story. I hope you won the contest.

You tell it well, including dialogue to move the action along. It was easy to follow and easy to read except for the horror of it all. Your descriptions were spot on and the sequence of events made perfect sense, that is, if you have an imagination. *Laugh*

And I love your title. Thanks for sharing your writing.

Connie
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