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Review of Your Word  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was beautifully written. Your faith is evident in this - and it shows how strong your faith is. The rhythm and flow of this works really well with the rhyme scheme. I enjoyed reading this, and was very encouraging to me. Keep up the wonderful writing!

Rhoswen
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Review of Blessed Ironies  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a great read! I love the way you continually encourage yourself in this letter from your future self to your sixteen year old self. The optimism you display in this was great. This letter really flows together well. Keep up the wonderful writing!

Rhoswen
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I think we have all felt the sting of failure. Your words are raw emotion. I can definitely feel the pain you felt when writing this. However, you are NOT a failure, no matter what the world may tell you. Believe in yourself. Keep writing - it's great therapy!

Rhoswen
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a cute poem about a dog who would rather have belly rubs than go hunting. The rhythm, flow and rhyme all worked together to make this an easy read. I love the humor you sprinkle in throughout this poem. I have two dogs myself, and to them, nothing beats a belly rub! Keep up the wonderful writing.

Rhoswen
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This was a beautiful poem of thanking our Father in heaven. The rhythm and flow of this worked very well together. The only suggestion I have is in the first line, there needs to be a space in between the words Thank and You...Other than that, you did a wonderful job. Keep up the great writing!

Rhoswen
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a beautiful poem with great descriptions of the new morning. I can see the pink and white petals, drizzled in morning dew as I smell the coffee. I actually shivered when I read the line about the chill in the breeze. Keep up the wonderful writing!

Rhoswen
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Review of Air Travel  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a cute but ever so true description of what it's like to fly in this day and age. You did a wonderful job on this. The rhythm and flow of this poem work well. The ending was a bit humorous, albeit true. Keep up the wonderful writing and thank you for sharing.

Rhoswen
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Your descriptions in this poem were great. I could feel the beginning of love, and see the burgundy gown with silk trim. The rhythm and flow of this were spot on. This was a poem that speaks volumes on new love, and makes one long for that feeling. Keep up the great writing!


Rhoswen
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Review of Haunted  
Rated: E | (4.5)
The rhythm and flow of this poem were spot on. There is a powerful message in this. I enjoyed the read. I love your descriptions - they really bring this poem to life. I can see why it won first place. I do have one suggestion, but it is only a suggestion....In the line where you say her frail body finally rejected the stress, I don't believe the comma is necessary after the word frail. It breaks up the line in a bit of an unnatural way. Other than that, this poem is perfect! Write on,

Rhoswen
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a beautiful tribute to your daughter. I'm sorry for your loss. I could feel the love and the pain as I read through this poem. The rhythm and flow were spot on, and I love how you repeated the last line of the stanza all the way up to the last stanza where you changed it up. Keep up the wonderful writing!

Rhoswen
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a cute little limerick! I love the rhyme, the rhythm and the flow. And the story line...wow...who woulda thought of something like that! Great job. I had to laugh as I read through this....it was kinda funny, but not so funny (if that makes any sense.) Keep up the wonderful writing!

Rhoswen
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Review of Free Form Poetry  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was well written and informative. As a learning poet myself, I had never thought about the ideas you presented here. However, they all make sense. The words you use are simple and easy to understand. You gave me food for thought with this. Thank you for sharing.

Rhoswen
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This was so neat to read! At first, I was thinking you were talking about a witch with her kids, then at the end, you really surprised me with the fact that it was kittens! Great job. The rhythm and flow were spot on, as well was the rhyme scheme. Keep up the wonderful writing!

Rhoswen
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a well-written story. I could feel June's frustration, her fear as the dogs go after her, and the relief when she finally made it to work. I could picture her riding her daughter's bike, trying to get to work to the meeting. You did very well on this - keep up the great writing!

Rhoswen
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This was very well written. I love the repeating of the line, "It must be summer..." I enjoy the fact that you added a bit of dry humor (when you mention you weren't staring.) I saw nothing that needed to be changed, nothing to add or subtract. Great job....Keep writing!

Rhoswen
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Review of Doggy Kisses  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
This was such a fun read! It reminded me of the unconditional love our pets have for us. My two fur babies are the same way...wanting to kiss me all the time, especially when I've been gone - even if it's only for 5 minutes. This was well written, and the rhythm and flow seemed spot on. Keep writing, my friend!

Rhoswen
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Review of Tomorrow ...  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a well-written poem. I love the rhythm of it. There is a deep message in this poem about taking without giving. I also love how you explain the type of poem it is at the very end below your piece. I saw nothing that needed to be changed or improved upon. Keep up the great writing!

Rhoswen
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Review of With Ink of Gold  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a beautiful tribute to a friend and mentor. I wouldn't change a thing. Keep writing, my friend!

Rhoswen
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Review of Joe's  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello J.C. Pickens !

I just read "Joe's and would like to share my thoughts with you. Use what works for you and discard the rest. But whatever you do, KEEP WRITING!!




*Flowert* Overall Opinion *Flowert*

I think this is the beginning of a very interesting story. It was interesting when the city slicker mentioned Pete's eyes being black - along with everyone else's. What surprised me even more was the fact that Joe, the bartender, didn't seem surprised at all. Maybe you could describe what the bar looks like on the inside - it might help your reader picture the scene as they read. I would love to see where this story goes from here.



*FlowerP* Characters *FlowerP*

Your characters seem reasonable and realistic. I would like to suggestion you describe the characters in a bit more detail. With no physical descriptions to go on, it leaves your readers having to try to imagine what the characters look like. So far, all we know for sure about your characters is that they all seem to have black eyes. But I am wondering, are you talking about the color of the iris' or the area surrounding the eyes, as if they'd been punched in the face? Embellish your characters, but keep it realistic so that your reader can picture them.



*Flowery* Plot *Flowery*

The plot thickened toward the middle of the story, and that is great. You left your reader hanging in the balance with no specific answers...yet. I love that in a short story because it makes me want to keep reading to see what happens. I believe that you could continue this story and make a really great chapter to an even bigger story.



*FlowerV* Closing Comments *Flowerv*

I have never really been into reading the sci-fi/fantasy genre - with exception to Harry Potter. However, your story had me interested from the start. I would love to see what happens next. What is the deal with the black eyes? Does Joe have black eyes? Is the city slicker going to end up with black eyes? The possibilities with where this story goes are endless. You have got a really great start here.



These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest.

Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.

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Review of Home  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow! There is a powerful message in this poem. I love how you talk about a lost child who becomes found when they turn and run to the Father! I love how you liken it to a journey of sorts. The rhythm and flow were spot-on, and I love the trio of Haiku's. Great job! Keep up the wonderful writing!


Rhoswen


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Review of Finish Line  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this poem about being your New Year's goal of getting stuff done and not being lazy. I think we all could learn from this.. The rhythm and flow were spot-on. I saw no issues to distract from your poem. You really did a good job of setting the mood with your poem. Keep up the great writing!

Rhoswen


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Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a wonderful poem - a collaboration between 4 authors. However, it was put together beautifully - transitioning through all four seasons. I can picture the changing seasons as I read through this poem. I was truly amazed at how well the poem flowed between the 4 authors. Keep up the wonderful writing!


Rhowswen


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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this poem! The rhythm and flow were spot-on. I love the thought of angels watching over us and helping to take care of us. You can definitely see the message within this poem. I love how you talk about angels giving us hope, being from God. Keep up the wonderful writing!


Rhoswen


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Review of Missing you  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a beautiful tribute to a lost love. I can feel the pain and sorrow as I read through this. The heartache is evident throughout the entire poem. The rhythm, flow and rhyme all worked together really well. I offer my deepest symapthies. Keep up the wonderful writing!


Rhoswen


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Review of The Honey Bucket  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a fun read. I can just smell what it was like after you fell into the pit. Ugh. The rhythm, flow and rhyme all worked very well together. I love the ending of this poem. This poem definitely gives a whole new meaning to the old saying, "Look before you leap." Keep up the wonderful writing!

Rhoswen


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