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Review Style
I like to read novels and biographies, so if I can review them at the same time, why not. My ratings are usually at the high end because I think if someone has taken the time and effort to write a large piece, it is an achievement. The review will give the opportunity to flag up typographic errors. I do not mark down ratings for these errors because they are easily fixed.
Favorite Item Types
Rhyming Verse. Novels and short stories.
Least Favorite Item Types
Non-rhyming poetry.
I will not review...
Erotica, Vampire and Wolf stories. Their stories are all very samey to me.
Public Reviews
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Review of They Live!!  
Review by Bruce.
In affiliation with Reviewing News and Views  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a really good read and an original theme. I like the way we were brought through from the attic to the burn out. I was kept wondering for a while what the inaminate object was, which added to the enjoyment of the piece. It ends with a people point of view and the item joining its predessor on a journey to the dump. I noticed a couple of typing errors, but they are easily fixed.
Well done and welcome to WDC.
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Review by Bruce.
In affiliation with Reviewing News and Views  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Title: City of Sin.

Chapter: Chapter 6.

Author: Saved by Grace.

Setting : The market square was a great experience for the reader, very visual. Followed by the calm of Rosedean.

Characters:. Very spooky voodoo lady.

Grammar: Okay for me, just a few typo’s.

General: Another good chapter pushing the story onward. The girls’ interaction in the coach, at the square and at Rosedean was all handled very well.

Line edits: In the workshop.
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Review by Bruce.
In affiliation with Reviewing News and Views  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Title: City of Sin.

Chapter: Chapter 5.

Author: Saved by Grace.

Setting : The ball, and leaving the ball. Plenty of atmosphere.

Characters: All the characters interact well together. Crystal shines again, and Charles becomes more unlikable.

Grammar: A high standard.

General: What a cracking read. I like how you continued to guide us through the ball, while keeping within the period. I loved the suspense you created at the end. A great hook to keep us reading.

Line edits: In workshop.
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Review by Bruce.
In affiliation with Reviewing News and Views  
Rated: E | (5.0)
As I see it: A wealth of lovely words and rhyme, reflect times gone by: a time of joy and plenty for some, frustration and pain for others. The flow of the poem is well-crafted and makes for an easy read. All in all, a work to be proud of, and I look forward to more. It's top marks from me.
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Review by Bruce.
In affiliation with Reviewing News and Views  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Title: City of Sin.

Chapter: Chapter 4.

Author: Saved by Grace.

Setting : The family house shown in a bit of a panic. The ball was nicely depicted and the dress and atmosphere of the period came over well.

Characters: I like Crystal very much, and feel a bit sorry for her going down a road that does not appeal to her very much. We, of course, wonder just what Charles is up to.

Grammar: Very well done.

General: The storyline is proceeding nicely and all the different threads are keeping the reader interested. I look forward to reading more.
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Review of The Martian Girl  
Review by Bruce.
In affiliation with Reviewing News and Views  
Rated: E | (5.0)
My type of poem. Light-hearted, humourous and well written with the added bonus of un-forced rhyme. Even more delightful when read a second time and you await the arrival of the little green man from Ireland. I can picture them dancing and the image brings a smile. Very well done, it's top marks from me.
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Review of Santa Claus  
Review by Bruce.
In affiliation with Reviewing News and Views  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This came up on the random read dice earlier.
What a nice surprise it was too. Not quite in season yet, but still an entertaining piece. I like the way you have given us two Santa's: Santa and Mr Claus. I always new there were two of them. One would never get around the world in time.
So, we have a delightful piece that would sit well in any child's Christmas book. I could even see this story as a seasonal short cartoon.
I can find no fault in it, so it's top marks from me.
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Review by Bruce.
In affiliation with Reviewing News and Views  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Title : City of Sin.

Chapter: Chapter 3.

Author: Saved by Grace.

Setting : Didn’t visualise the room much when the girls were together, but I don’t think that matters much because the scene was more about the girl’s interacting together, which was well handled.
The part in Crystal’s room was very visual to me, and I could imagine it quite well, as if I were there.

Characters: I did find it a bit confusing sometimes when all the girls were interacting, but that may just have been me. (I don't know a lot about dresses. lol.)
The relationship between Crystal and Liza comes over very well as being of genuine fondness, despite them both knowing their place.

Grammar: A high standard.

General:. A good chapter. While not sure where this is going, it holds our interest and still manages to move forward. Very well done.
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Review of Ole Rex  
Review by Bruce.
In affiliation with Reviewing News and Views  
Rated: E | (5.0)
A down to earth people story. You kept the suspense thoughout the tale. Where was Rex? Was he dead? Was the creature under the kitchen rex, of a wild animal? I particularly liked the relationship between dog and owner. Something a lot of us have and can relate to. Girls, skinned knees, taunts at school, nothing matters but the fact that Rex will pull through.
The only thing I feel out of place is the indent at the beginning.
Of course I would have liked to see old man Staggs get a kick up the rear, but that is just an opinion.
Excellent worked. Loved the read.
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Review of I believe  
Review by Bruce.
In affiliation with Reviewing News and Views  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Quite a moving story. Our best friends are our long standing pets and it is so sad to watch them deteriorate through old age. You have captured the mix of sadness and joy, very well.
I noticed a typing error in the third sentence, which should start with a capital.
Other than that it is a superb piece, and it has been a pleasure to read about your Molly.
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Review of i am  
Review by Bruce.
In affiliation with Reviewing News and Views  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is something you should be proud of, because it is a good piece of writing. This seems to be well reflected thoughts of youth. We have all been there and can relate to at least some of the things you speak about. To the young life is fast, but time is slow. But soon life is slow and time is fast. And you'll look back to the fast times, with a smile.
A very enjoyable read. Well done and welcome to WDC.
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Review of SOLACE  
Review by Bruce.
In affiliation with Reviewing News and Views  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem came up on the random read dice, and I am so glad that it did. We often come across a piece to which we can relate, and this is one for me. Never been evil, but having been a bit wild when I was in my youth and treating people in ways which I would never dream of now that I'm older and wiser.
A wonderful poem. Very well done.
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Review of Seagulls  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Presentation helps when a reader first looks at an item. If you edit the item, go to section 6 and check the box that says 'Double Space Paragraphs'. Then the text will be easier to read and less daunting and may make the difference between the reader carrying on or looking elsewhere.
The first sentence does not need indenting, and the bold first two words are a bit distracting.
The story itself has a good content, is credible for fiction, and captures the interest well. Once started I found I wanted to read on to the conclusion. Although the conclusion is horrific and I feel pity for the eventual victim, I think a few bird lovers will cheer.
This is a good short, and well worth the read.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This story tends to ramble a little, but nevertheless it keeps the interest of the reader. It is a good effort and makes for good practice for your future writing. You have a writing talent which you can develop.


I have changed the first sentences, and I hope it helps and gives you ideas.


The girl, named Ashley loved watching Cops on TV, in her huge house that she inherited from her grandmother, located in New England. Watching Cops was a real joy for her it made her hungry and laugh a lot, but that will come later.

(This could say:) Ashley lived in a huge house in New England which she inherited from her grandmother. She loved watching cops on TV and it often made her laugh, but it also made her hungry.


I don’t understand why the last paragraph is there, and feel you should give some thought about either removing it, or adding to it so it has something in common with the rest of the story.

Well done and welcome to WDC.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Meg, nice to visit again. This one came up from the random read dice and I'm very glad that it did. It's a great and believable story poem which I really enjoyed reading. I could see it all so well and the tramp even had a dog with him. I know, you didn't mention a dog, but it is a credit to you that my imagination took over the story as I read it and added my own details. Very well done.
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Review of True to You  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Just got sent this from the new random read dice. This is a delightful song that shows a great love from someone to another who has or is tempted to stray. I wonder if you sing it, or just write. In any case, I enjoyed reading it and I'm glad to have visited your port.
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Review of My Friend  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Another enjoyable read and a lovely theme to the tale. This is a real feel-good poem and brings a smile to our faces as we feel your affection. The rhyme works and the flow as we read it is easy to follow and consistant. Well done with this, it's top marks from me.
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Review of Lover's Tryst  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.5)
A lovely poem and a joy to read amongst so much doom and gloom posted here. And I admit I am sometimes guilty too. I love the content and the images I get from your work. I, like many others, have been there. My least favourite line is: ( From across the bed he acted so gently, ). My favourite is the first verse. Very well done.
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Review of The Mountains  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello and welcome to WDC. You have great imagery here and a nice theme and feel to the piece. You can leave it as it is, or you can look for the little errors and progress from a nice first piece, to an absolute gem, because this has the potential to shine. Very well done. Regards, Bruce.
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Review of My Ashley  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Another great poem from you. I don't think that the last line flows so well, atthough the content is fine. Maybe something like:
May God bless you as you travel through life
Friend, sister, daughter, mother and wife.
It's just an opinion though. The poem still shines as it is. Regards, Bruce.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
You have talent in telling the story. It is a good read and we fear for her being alone with an older man we know nothing about. You have the ability and that is for sure, but the presentation lets you down. The item needs breaking down into paragraphs for ease of reading and to make the story pleasing from a visual point as well as content. Polish your work and watch the stars rise. You can do it, you have done the hardest part.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well-written, interesting and amusing. Welcome to WDC. I am glad I looked in on this and enjoyed the read very much. Mothers are main characters in our lives and yours sounds fun, though perhaps a bit naughty sometimes. I look forward to more from you. Regards, Bruce.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a wonderful piece of writing. The happy bit is charming and a very enjoyable read. The sad bit is, sad, but there will be a time when the narrator will be able to start collecting again. Well written and enjoyable. I'm not sure what a packrat is, but I can ignore the last sentence and still rate your work highly. Welcome to the gang. Regards, Bruce.
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Review of A true friend  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Lovely words and good thoughts. True friends are hard to come by and it is a joy to keep them if you can. There is a couple of typo's on the sixth line where the i & e are the wrong way round. A nice piece of work though, and welcome aboard. Regards, Bruce.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is okay, but the sentences seem rather long. If you break them up a bit it may read better. It also confuses the reader a little as you don't show the relationship between the narrator and the character. A good effort though, and with a bit of polishing you could have a nice little piece. Regards, Bruce.
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