Good evening writehanded-scr this is Funnyface. I just read your poem about The Three Little Pigs. It is awesome. There is a big market for children's works so I wish you well in them. I seen your name in agran portfolio in the folder of Meg's pick for the week. I really like the way you place the moral of your poem here at the end. Nice rhyming,excellent work!
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Hello Stephen Alexander This is Funnyface. I was reviewing some of Meg works and I came across your name where she was exposing your portfolio. SO here I am dropping by. I read this account of "Alone" Your beginning is nice, I wanted to know what this little girl had to do with Alone. You did a great job as you continued to tell us about this wee little one having got lost from her family. I am sure you were an angel to this young child, how afraid and bewildered she must have been.You are a very kind caring person, to held this child in spite of knowing others might take it wrong.A solid ending as you went back and made sure the girl was reunited. I see no errors.
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Good morning dragonline (dragon online). I read your poem "Birthday Sonnet". Being a Mother myself, I love to get calls, e-mails, and poems from my family on my birthday. I think if I got this poem I would be devastated by the last two lines. They were shocking. I can not think that a Mother would never want her daughter. These two lines are very powerful. If they are true, I am so sorry for you because a Mother and Daughter should be very close.
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Oh how awful we feel when we get the flu, but I haven't read a poem that describes it better than yours does. It is very tiring to run to the labs and etc for test when we feel like being in bed. I enjoyed taking a peek in your port again tonight.I am so sorry your hand is in pain. Know I am praying for you.
Oh what a wonderful picture of this beautiful white dress you fashioned and decked the bottom with various shades of ribbon, that you showed us through your words' You should have been very proud as when I was a teen not to many girls knew how to sew. Your last verse is especially nice!
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Meg this is such a community spirited idea. I am sure that each week that an author who sees their name or hears they have been selected by you for their work to be noticed will be very encouraged. Is there a certain day you add a new person to this list. I will try to drop by and take a peak tomorrow at a couple pieces of each of their works!
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Hello Meg, this poem touches my heart. Love is when two hearts bond together and that love grows. It is wonderful to care so much for the one you love that you don't hear or see anyone around you two. Your poem is filled with the love you two had throughout your time together.I am sure you have memories that are most beautiful memories etched deep in your heart.
I just read "Chance". This title is so fitting for this poem I like how you tell us about chance, I had never thought about chance not being purposeful and purpose doesn't come by chance. An excellent job here describing the differences.
Your closing verse is full of wonderful descriptive writing, very nicely done.
I see you are new on the site. Welcome, and I hope you do get to write in both languages, here is a nice place to practice! If I can help you in anyway I am but an e-mail away.
Good morningjano I found the snapshot of your life in a refugee camp interesting.I think you all must be very brave, many having no family and living in a refugee camp. SO far I am very blessed as I have never had to live in these conditions.. We in eastern Canada don't have these. I hate the thoughts of having rats and other pest being in camps you slept in.Thanks for sharing this snapshot. It has made me aware of what conditions away from my area are like. A nice write! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
Hello Uday Kanth, this is Funnyface. I read your story here and found it quite delightful. Your opening was nice, although I don't know if I like the idea of being awake at 6 AM, eeven on my birthday. Yes a surprise party for your 40th is wonderful, but when you are only 36 and everyone at the party thinking you as 40 could cause you to be embarrassed especially if your boss was there. I really eenjoyed reading this. The only point I would give is maybe a line between each one's conversation would make it easier to read.
Nothing more need be said, you have covered it all in the words of this poem. I feel there are many many great men who honor the women folk in their lives. The last seven lines made this a strong poem.It is nice to read praise for the women folks. I see no errors.
Good morning S.A. Gibbins. This poem touches my heart. I can only picture how sad you had to be celebrating Fathers day in prison.What I found ever sadder is that your children didn't visit that day. I really liked your attitude in the poem, where you said you thought of all the joy being a Dad was. Keep strong.
What an inspiring poem. I hear of this taking place way to often, and it really is a hurtful thing to do. I did get a 1 once and I was very upset after waiting a few days I wrote the person back, thanking him for reading my poem, and how sad I felt that he thought it was only worth a one. I told him I wrote from my heart and asked if he would give me advice to bring this poem up a little higher. He wrote back and said he doesn't know why he rated it so low unless he was on drugs, he change the ratings. It has never happen again, if I was new it would have shattered me.Congratulations on receiving this high awardicom.
Nicki, congratulations for writing this lovely short story, and winning first place Your opening grabbed my attention.Why was Deb showering at the motel, made me read on. I like how when hearing the song Dan's memories went to Deb.Ten years is a long time not to see someone you were married to. It is plain Lacey wanted the two to be together again. Nice ending the hotel booked up. I am sure that Dan regretted cheating for ten years at least.Your writing talent shines.
Hello NickiD89 this short story is wonderful. I know it is not easy to write a story with 50 or 55 words, I have tried it. I love the the surprise you had in the story for the Mother. To be blessed to see her grandson must be a highlight in her life.
Outstanding, I really like this poem. Love is indeed everything you mentioned in your words here and so much more. Love is so wonderful when two hearts come together in harmony, and so painful when it scatter apart true love takes commitment and caring. I really like your opening verse/
Yes, yes, yes, I have had things you describe here that causes me to have righteous anger. I think drivers should be aware and give pedestrian the same respect that thay want for themselves while driving.The one thing that really angers me is when one puts the down trodden down in life, The poor, the mentally ill, the people from life's other side and especially the old and the children. You have great topics and your writing is straight to the point. Nice job!
Ouch! Your words can touch so many of us that forget that what goes around comes around. {user:albenis] I am sure this poem is able to be sold. Words can build up if they are positive but they can completely destroy one when they go through the glass walls. Very inspiring.
Keep letting your writing talent shines through.
Once again Sherri these c-notes are great! ♥SoNNetWolF♫ is indeed very gifted. I adore the words on the one to "A priceless friend." To have a friend that sends a c-note like this is to be treasured. It shows somebody with an attitude of caring and loving other people.
Good morning Sherri! These c-notes are truly precious. I would find it hard to choose which one I like the best as each one is unique and eloquent. I always admire people that have the ability to create these items.I would have no idea where to go to get the images used. Truly beautiful.
Pandora, I am so sorry that you have experienced pain that causes you to have bloody dreams. If I can be of any help, even if it is reading your words of your hurt and pain, just send me a link to the item. A great job here with your writing, you have touched my heart. I see no errors!
Heart touching.. You have painted a picture with your words of a 'Little one", bruised by the chain of events in her life. These things tear me apart. I know what they are going through..they don't need to speak a word. I wish I could hug each one of these people and tell them them they are valued. perfect image at the bottom of this poem.
Good morning applesandbananas this is Funnyface, welcome to Writing.com. If I can be of help, please let me know.
I read your poem "My Favorite Kisses," and it was a great way to begin my day.. Your poem has a nice beginning..I can almost hear the squeals and giggles of the little one as he/she is preparing for bed. Night time kisses are sweet.
Your body of the poem continues to show the source of your favorite kisses.
I love your closing,especially "like banana kisses".
Families are everything and I really pray for all the little ones for what ever reason are that are parted from their families. It is sad when a person prays for death, life at that stage has become unbearable for them. You have captured the heart of this child. Congratulations for this poem being published
You can walk in the shoes of others. As I read this poem I thought of the boys that were taken by someone and kept in his home. Thankfully for these two the captures freed them.I am glad that it was all over the news that they were rescued as it gives other parents hope. I felt the hurt and pain in the lines of this poem.
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