Good evening writehanded-scr this is Funnyface. I just read your poem about The Three Little Pigs. It is awesome. There is a big market for children's works so I wish you well in them. I seen your name in agran portfolio in the folder of Meg's pick for the week. I really like the way you place the moral of your poem here at the end. Nice rhyming,excellent work!
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Hello Stephen Alexander This is Funnyface. I was reviewing some of Meg works and I came across your name where she was exposing your portfolio. SO here I am dropping by. I read this account of "Alone" Your beginning is nice, I wanted to know what this little girl had to do with Alone. You did a great job as you continued to tell us about this wee little one having got lost from her family. I am sure you were an angel to this young child, how afraid and bewildered she must have been.You are a very kind caring person, to held this child in spite of knowing others might take it wrong.A solid ending as you went back and made sure the girl was reunited. I see no errors.
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Good morning dragonline (dragon online). I read your poem "Birthday Sonnet". Being a Mother myself, I love to get calls, e-mails, and poems from my family on my birthday. I think if I got this poem I would be devastated by the last two lines. They were shocking. I can not think that a Mother would never want her daughter. These two lines are very powerful. If they are true, I am so sorry for you because a Mother and Daughter should be very close.
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I just read "Chance". This title is so fitting for this poem I like how you tell us about chance, I had never thought about chance not being purposeful and purpose doesn't come by chance. An excellent job here describing the differences.
Your closing verse is full of wonderful descriptive writing, very nicely done.
I see you are new on the site. Welcome, and I hope you do get to write in both languages, here is a nice place to practice! If I can help you in anyway I am but an e-mail away.
Good morningjano I found the snapshot of your life in a refugee camp interesting.I think you all must be very brave, many having no family and living in a refugee camp. SO far I am very blessed as I have never had to live in these conditions.. We in eastern Canada don't have these. I hate the thoughts of having rats and other pest being in camps you slept in.Thanks for sharing this snapshot. It has made me aware of what conditions away from my area are like. A nice write! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
Hello Uday Kanth, this is Funnyface. I read your story here and found it quite delightful. Your opening was nice, although I don't know if I like the idea of being awake at 6 AM, eeven on my birthday. Yes a surprise party for your 40th is wonderful, but when you are only 36 and everyone at the party thinking you as 40 could cause you to be embarrassed especially if your boss was there. I really eenjoyed reading this. The only point I would give is maybe a line between each one's conversation would make it easier to read.
Nothing more need be said, you have covered it all in the words of this poem. I feel there are many many great men who honor the women folk in their lives. The last seven lines made this a strong poem.It is nice to read praise for the women folks. I see no errors.
Good morning S.A. Gibbins. This poem touches my heart. I can only picture how sad you had to be celebrating Fathers day in prison.What I found ever sadder is that your children didn't visit that day. I really liked your attitude in the poem, where you said you thought of all the joy being a Dad was. Keep strong.
Nicki, congratulations for writing this lovely short story, and winning first place Your opening grabbed my attention.Why was Deb showering at the motel, made me read on. I like how when hearing the song Dan's memories went to Deb.Ten years is a long time not to see someone you were married to. It is plain Lacey wanted the two to be together again. Nice ending the hotel booked up. I am sure that Dan regretted cheating for ten years at least.Your writing talent shines.
Hello NickiD89 this short story is wonderful. I know it is not easy to write a story with 50 or 55 words, I have tried it. I love the the surprise you had in the story for the Mother. To be blessed to see her grandson must be a highlight in her life.
Outstanding, I really like this poem. Love is indeed everything you mentioned in your words here and so much more. Love is so wonderful when two hearts come together in harmony, and so painful when it scatter apart true love takes commitment and caring. I really like your opening verse/
Yes, yes, yes, I have had things you describe here that causes me to have righteous anger. I think drivers should be aware and give pedestrian the same respect that thay want for themselves while driving.The one thing that really angers me is when one puts the down trodden down in life, The poor, the mentally ill, the people from life's other side and especially the old and the children. You have great topics and your writing is straight to the point. Nice job!
Ouch! Your words can touch so many of us that forget that what goes around comes around. {user:albenis] I am sure this poem is able to be sold. Words can build up if they are positive but they can completely destroy one when they go through the glass walls. Very inspiring.
Keep letting your writing talent shines through.
Once again Sherri these c-notes are great! ♥SoNNetWolF♫ is indeed very gifted. I adore the words on the one to "A priceless friend." To have a friend that sends a c-note like this is to be treasured. It shows somebody with an attitude of caring and loving other people.
Good morning Sherri! These c-notes are truly precious. I would find it hard to choose which one I like the best as each one is unique and eloquent. I always admire people that have the ability to create these items.I would have no idea where to go to get the images used. Truly beautiful.
Pandora, I am so sorry that you have experienced pain that causes you to have bloody dreams. If I can be of any help, even if it is reading your words of your hurt and pain, just send me a link to the item. A great job here with your writing, you have touched my heart. I see no errors!
Heart touching.. You have painted a picture with your words of a 'Little one", bruised by the chain of events in her life. These things tear me apart. I know what they are going through..they don't need to speak a word. I wish I could hug each one of these people and tell them them they are valued. perfect image at the bottom of this poem.
Good morning applesandbananas this is Funnyface, welcome to Writing.com. If I can be of help, please let me know.
I read your poem "My Favorite Kisses," and it was a great way to begin my day.. Your poem has a nice beginning..I can almost hear the squeals and giggles of the little one as he/she is preparing for bed. Night time kisses are sweet.
Your body of the poem continues to show the source of your favorite kisses.
I love your closing,especially "like banana kisses".
Families are everything and I really pray for all the little ones for what ever reason are that are parted from their families. It is sad when a person prays for death, life at that stage has become unbearable for them. You have captured the heart of this child. Congratulations for this poem being published
You can walk in the shoes of others. As I read this poem I thought of the boys that were taken by someone and kept in his home. Thankfully for these two the captures freed them.I am glad that it was all over the news that they were rescued as it gives other parents hope. I felt the hurt and pain in the lines of this poem.
This poem brings memories of my time of living in a foster home while I was in The Children's Aid Society. I think the abuse of being taken from the dad and kept locked in the room is tragic. Will this poor kid be ever able to ge over the scares. Your vivid writing talent shines through in each word of this poem.
Wow! what a heart touching poem. Each line is wrenching my heart, I can only see this being written by someone that has endured such abuse. This darling little girl had to endure emotional abuse as well as carnal...to deprive her of being unable to talk to her Mommy is simply wrong, wrong.This poem has everything, a strong opening, an emotional subject, and a sad ending.It feeds my emotions. Congratulation for receiving the high awardicon. This poem deserves the honor!
Heart wrenching. I am sure the pain you are going through now is deep and will be buried in your heart always.I am so sorry you have to give your son up for adoption. I pray that he is in a loving home..one that will teach him how his Mommy loved him so much,that she gave him to a home that could not only love him but provide all his needs. Honey stay strong, I am sure someday you will see him again. Every single word of your Monologue shows your love sorrow and regrets. Hugs of comfort.
What valuable words of wisdom you offer here in this poem "Paula". It is hard on our young and often a confusing place when one feels alone. You gave here valuable advise how to survive it all. Once again you have done an excellent job rhyming, I hope you are enjoying your stay here on Writing.com.
Thank you for the reminder of the various things you need to be and do as a nurse. I think nurses deserves a lot for all the serving they do. My sister is a nurse. I know that often they become emotionally involved and see a lot of sadness. I congratulate you for 41 years of serving in this profession.
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