Raynie, I must say this poem is powerful..so many times when one is in a relationship filled with lies, they do become twisted and become one. It is so sad when someone or something kills their spirit and are no longer who they once were. Love is not suppose to be like that.I am so sorry to whomever is going through this as it destroys the spirit. It is a forum of abuse. Great emotions expressed here.
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Mam maw Broken Childhood is so very sad. I relived my life as I read your words. I lived in many foster homes..and still I was never prepared for the loneliness missing my siblings. I think to know we were in foster homes and they only have us because of the money is heart breaking to the foster children. I could never figure out what I did wrong that they could never love me. I know sweetie, how hard it had to be on you. Were you able to stay in contact with your parents and siblings?
Pensive, how encouraging, both to you for being able to make the call to the mental health center, and to spoken to Norma. She was an inspiration to you, by encouraging you. I love how she told you that God understood your anger and frustration. How comforting this must have been. Do I believe Norma was an angel. I believe we have angels administering to us many times, times we might not take notice of. Indeed Norma was your angel.
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Wow, what a touching story. You captured me with your your descriptive writing. and I felt as I was in the dark prison. I can feel fear, fear of never departing, fear of the guard and of the rats. I feel loneliness, when the birds never come to your window, I sense despair as you wonder if you will ever escape. Your ending is the most powerful part of this story.. as you are about to escape you are drawn back in, and as you tear the mask off the guard, you see yourself staring back at you.. How clever.
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Simply a delightful poem. You have captured the essences of friendship in the words of your poem. Yes it is always a sign of true friendship when a person thinks of another instead of them selves. I never thought about a friend loving us even if it is not returned,and so many do understand what we are trying to say even if we can't put it in words. My favorite is the third two lines. A great job here, and I would like to be a friend to you like that.
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Heart wrenching! If anyone can understand your fears, concerns and worry about a missing son I do. Never give up hope. We went twenty years without any word, so I know the sleepless nights. I prayed so many prayers as did our family. If I can help you in any way please don't hesitate to e-mail me. I will pray for George. I know how afraid, lonely and hurt you are, and how it can make you ill. Hugs of comfort. Funnyface
Hello Dianne dropping by to say hello. I like this poem "Time On My Hands". I think sometimes it is nice to have some time on our hands to do the things we enjoy. I know how lonely we would be if we had to much time on our hands. I got a kick as you describe what your hands looks like. Take comfort we all that are getting older has the same type of hands. A nice subject we can relate to and nicely written.
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John I do believe that some people will put their life on the line to save another. I only hope I would have the courage to do so if I was in that position. I guess I couldn't do it by myself but by He who strengthens me. . This is really what I needed to read tonight. You are in my Hubby's and my prayers. Always know you are thought of and loved by all of us, your friends on writing.com
Oh John what a compassionate person you are. It is because you have served your country that you know how these people are feeling, what they see and that no amount of yelling will let them hear you. How kind to write this to let us know we should also pray for the families left back home.
Hello my dear friend John. I hope you are doing well, you are missed on this site. I am starting to feel better. I hope to get active again here. Do you miss the site? We miss you. It is hard to believe all the people that were killed or died because of wars and 9/11. Thank you for reminding us of this, especially at this time of the memorial weekend.
Good morning 1stephzen this is Funnyface. Welcome to writing.com if I can help you in any way I am an e-mail away.
I read your poem here about seeing with your heart and must say I like your title. I also see people as I preceive them not as they really are, I guess it is because we see good in people. It is true when we find people are not as we thought we do get disappointed. You have done a lovely job here on this poem, and congratulations for being highlighted in the newbie newsletter.
Good morning Raynie this is Funnyface. I am reviewing this poem to show my appreciations for you sharing the story of your pen name.
I found this poem to be sad in a way, to think you feel like you hide your face and that your identity is hidden. Your last verse is encouraging, and the last line gives HOPE. Yes you will be free, everyone deserves to be free. A lovely write and I see no errors.
Hello Kaileymarie this is Funnyface. I dropped by your port to read an item to show my appreciations for the gps you sent me today. This short story is really quite nice. I like your opening as you show us how you were settling in for the weekend. You have made great use using dialogs, and in a way that is so believable. I know this is how young adults do talk. Your plot continues to be strong. what a lovely ending as she {Meg) gets to go for pizza with Jack. Well written and I see no errors.
Good morning Teihzbael, this is Funnyface. Thank you for dropping by my portfolio. I see you are fairly new, and I would like to say Welcome. If I can be of any help I am a e-mail away. I read the delightful story about the toilet. What a great way to begin my morning. I would never have thought of using a toilet as a means of writing. How creative. I can feel each mood the poor flush would go through. I smiled through out the whole story and later on today I am going to share this with my hubby. I see no errors. Great work.
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Good morning Leah I dropped by your port to check to see if you have new works and I am pleased I did.
I enjoyed this poem yet it touches my heart. There are many place you will be liked and love, even to here on this writing site. I like the way you finally found the place you were looking for. .by simply looking into the mirror.
I believe this poem would be easier to read if you had not used all capital letters
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A great job writing this heartfelt poem.
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Hello Kyle, this is Funnyface. Welcome to Writing. Com. If I can be of any help please don't hesitate to ask. I'm just an e-mail away.
What a powerful write, I can feel the hurt and pain caused from a love gone wrong. Your opening verse is excellent, I love the second verse, especially the last line. Your third verse shows the tears and the hurt you are or went through. Your closing is strong. I really like this poem.
I am looking forward to reading more of your writings in the near future.
Hello ArtsyAaron, this is Funnyface. Welcome to Writing. Com. If I can be of any help please don't hesitate to ask. I'm just an e-mail away.
First of all I want to say how happy I am to read there is a contest for the lonely. I meet many lonely people on this site. I think you used the phrase White Fire nicely. I like your last verse, and especially the last line..it gives this poem impact. Good luck in the contest.
I am looking forward to reading more of your writings in the near future.
Hello Jolene, this is Funnyface. Welcome to Writing. Com. If I can be of any help please don't hesitate to ask. I'm just an e-mail away.
I am so sorry for the pain that you went through, especially caused by your son's father. Abuse is horrible , abuse of any type and I know it might well hurt but you as the Mother of his son deserves so much more than that. I tell everyone love should be caring for each other. You should be a treasure, one he would treat like fine porcelain. There will be someone that will come along and treat both you like that.
Heartfelt emotions in this poem. The only suggestion I could give is to add a little more punctuation.
I am looking forward to reading more of your writings in the near future.
I love this peom here, as I cansee you Dad out in the garden planting the rows of peas. Sowing seed is a tiring job, but one has a sense of accomplishment when finished. Those sweet little peas are so tasty. You have vivid imagery here and your rhyming is excellent.
Leah this poem is sad and yet so very beautiful. It shows how much love you have for your Mother, and so you should.It is heartfelt. It shows what a weight you carry around and for that I am so very sorry. It is a grievous burden to carry for someone so young. Stay strong, keep writing.
Hello, this is Funnyface. Welcome to Writing. Com. If I can be of any help please don't hesitate to ask. I'm just an e-mail away.
I am sorry things are going the way they are. Someone is usually hurt, but I am pleased though that you want to break it off where your feelings have completely gone...no matter what reason. I wish you well and I know you will enjoy writing.com
I am looking forward to reading more of your writings in the near future.
Hello Leah 515, this is Funnyface. Welcome to Writing. Com. If I can be of any help please don't hesitate to ask. I'm just an e-mail away.
I am so sorry for the hurt that you have or are going through. You did not do anything to be treated the way you were.You should have been treated as a rear treasure, one that is special not one that was lied to, promises not kept. I know how hard it is to hurt by someone you love and trusted, but someone will come along that will worship you. All the best and I am glad you are no longer heartbroken.
I am looking forward to reading more of your writings in the near future.
Hello Dulce 1ivette, this is Funnyface. Welcome to Writing. Com. If I can be of any help please don't hesitate to ask. I'm just an e-mail away.
I am so sorry for the hurt and pain you are going through. There is nothing any sweeter than a young love, and nothing as painful than a love that goes sour. I know how it hurts now but it will be better in the end. He should have treated you like fine china, something to treasure. I wish I could wave a wand and make the heartache the pain and the hurtful feelings you have toward your parents go away. I know this is hard to believe now you are upset, but parents always do love you. Writing.com will help you, you will meet many people that are going through or went through what you are..if I can help in any way I am just an e-mail away. A heartfelt write.
I am looking forward to reading more of your writings in the near future. Hugs and prayers.FF
Hello Donna, this is Funnyface. I just read your poem Trapped Within Prison Walls. What a awesome job you have done here painting the heartaches and pains that are etched in the hearts of all the little abused ones. I am so sorry that you had to experience abuse. You have been robbed of your innocents, left with sour memories that I am sure follows you daily.
I am looking forward to reading more of your writings in the near future. Prayers and Hugs of comfort.
Good morning 4provinces, this is Funnyface. I enjoyed reading the welcoming message you have here. I really appreciate your sense of accomplishment, humor and above all else your kindness.I am sure you do love and miss your parents. I am sorry you have experienced that terrible loss in life. Have a great day.
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