Good morning Teihzbael, this is Funnyface. Thank you for dropping by my portfolio. I see you are fairly new, and I would like to say Welcome. If I can be of any help I am a e-mail away. I read the delightful story about the toilet. What a great way to begin my morning. I would never have thought of using a toilet as a means of writing. How creative. I can feel each mood the poor flush would go through. I smiled through out the whole story and later on today I am going to share this with my hubby. I see no errors. Great work.
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Good morning Leah I dropped by your port to check to see if you have new works and I am pleased I did.
I enjoyed this poem yet it touches my heart. There are many place you will be liked and love, even to here on this writing site. I like the way you finally found the place you were looking for. .by simply looking into the mirror.
I believe this poem would be easier to read if you had not used all capital letters
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A great job writing this heartfelt poem.
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Hello Kyle, this is Funnyface. Welcome to Writing. Com. If I can be of any help please don't hesitate to ask. I'm just an e-mail away.
What a powerful write, I can feel the hurt and pain caused from a love gone wrong. Your opening verse is excellent, I love the second verse, especially the last line. Your third verse shows the tears and the hurt you are or went through. Your closing is strong. I really like this poem.
I am looking forward to reading more of your writings in the near future.
Hello ArtsyAaron, this is Funnyface. Welcome to Writing. Com. If I can be of any help please don't hesitate to ask. I'm just an e-mail away.
First of all I want to say how happy I am to read there is a contest for the lonely. I meet many lonely people on this site. I think you used the phrase White Fire nicely. I like your last verse, and especially the last line..it gives this poem impact. Good luck in the contest.
I am looking forward to reading more of your writings in the near future.
Hello Jolene, this is Funnyface. Welcome to Writing. Com. If I can be of any help please don't hesitate to ask. I'm just an e-mail away.
I am so sorry for the pain that you went through, especially caused by your son's father. Abuse is horrible , abuse of any type and I know it might well hurt but you as the Mother of his son deserves so much more than that. I tell everyone love should be caring for each other. You should be a treasure, one he would treat like fine porcelain. There will be someone that will come along and treat both you like that.
Heartfelt emotions in this poem. The only suggestion I could give is to add a little more punctuation.
I am looking forward to reading more of your writings in the near future.
I love this peom here, as I cansee you Dad out in the garden planting the rows of peas. Sowing seed is a tiring job, but one has a sense of accomplishment when finished. Those sweet little peas are so tasty. You have vivid imagery here and your rhyming is excellent.
Leah this poem is sad and yet so very beautiful. It shows how much love you have for your Mother, and so you should.It is heartfelt. It shows what a weight you carry around and for that I am so very sorry. It is a grievous burden to carry for someone so young. Stay strong, keep writing.
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I am sorry things are going the way they are. Someone is usually hurt, but I am pleased though that you want to break it off where your feelings have completely gone...no matter what reason. I wish you well and I know you will enjoy writing.com
I am looking forward to reading more of your writings in the near future.
Hello Leah 515, this is Funnyface. Welcome to Writing. Com. If I can be of any help please don't hesitate to ask. I'm just an e-mail away.
I am so sorry for the hurt that you have or are going through. You did not do anything to be treated the way you were.You should have been treated as a rear treasure, one that is special not one that was lied to, promises not kept. I know how hard it is to hurt by someone you love and trusted, but someone will come along that will worship you. All the best and I am glad you are no longer heartbroken.
I am looking forward to reading more of your writings in the near future.
Hello Dulce 1ivette, this is Funnyface. Welcome to Writing. Com. If I can be of any help please don't hesitate to ask. I'm just an e-mail away.
I am so sorry for the hurt and pain you are going through. There is nothing any sweeter than a young love, and nothing as painful than a love that goes sour. I know how it hurts now but it will be better in the end. He should have treated you like fine china, something to treasure. I wish I could wave a wand and make the heartache the pain and the hurtful feelings you have toward your parents go away. I know this is hard to believe now you are upset, but parents always do love you. Writing.com will help you, you will meet many people that are going through or went through what you are..if I can help in any way I am just an e-mail away. A heartfelt write.
I am looking forward to reading more of your writings in the near future. Hugs and prayers.FF
Hello Donna, this is Funnyface. I just read your poem Trapped Within Prison Walls. What a awesome job you have done here painting the heartaches and pains that are etched in the hearts of all the little abused ones. I am so sorry that you had to experience abuse. You have been robbed of your innocents, left with sour memories that I am sure follows you daily.
I am looking forward to reading more of your writings in the near future. Prayers and Hugs of comfort.
Good morning 4provinces, this is Funnyface. I enjoyed reading the welcoming message you have here. I really appreciate your sense of accomplishment, humor and above all else your kindness.I am sure you do love and miss your parents. I am sorry you have experienced that terrible loss in life. Have a great day.
Hello pswaterman, this is Funnyface. Welcome to writing.com, If I can be of any help please don't hesitate to ask. I'm just an e-mail away.
I had to smile as I read the notes the two girls wrote in Math class. I can remember us writing a few when I was in school..I can only picture how embarrassed the two were when the teacher started to read it out loud, and the kids started to laugh.
I am looking forward to reading more of your writings in the near future. I wonder what the teacher thinks.
Hello lady_lily what a sad picture, sad but a true picture of war. I can only imagine what it must be for these soldiers who know they face death all the time both night and day. I can not imagine the fear their parents, mates, loves, or sibling is going through. Thank you for showing what it is like for the Fallen Soldier.
Hello Lorilady, what a delightful poem about your Maple tree. I have many trees on my acre lot but I do not have majestic ones such as the maple. How lovely a picture you paint of this lifelong friend the tree with all the squirrels and bird. I can see the colorful fall leaves on the ground. Wonderful scenes you have painted with your words.
Hello RainStar this is Funnyface. Falling is an emotional poem full of very descriptive writing and deep meanings. I wonder if you are in love with the one you were thinking of as you wrote this poem. I really like how you said that you had a pain in your head and a fire of sorrow in your heart. A nice job here in this poem.
Hello Suki, I found this poem cute in a sense. I can only imagine what must have been going through his mind when he realized he had came face to face with a she devil. I really like these lines "Her apple in the cart
Of personal traits
And she can't wait
To use that on you
An nice read.
c:plum}Good morning Bill, this is Funnyface. I am reviewing a few of your items because you are this months Mod on the I Remember When Group.
I guess I a little early or a little late reviewing this item, since Christmas is in December. I was drawn to read this poem because of all the various colors you used. I have tried this and it does take attention and time, but the end results are worth it. I had to smile at the gifts that your family gave to you. Simply a delight to read
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You have painted, with your words, a picture of a home all children should be raised in. I like the instructions you gave parents in the last verse. A nice job here.
I am looking forward to reading more of your writings in the near
future.
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This poem is very nice. You have done a lovely job here telling whomever how you miss them and would love to be with him. I wish you could be together..maybe you will become his girl. A nice love poem. I see no errors.
I am looking forward to reading more of your writings in the near
future.
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Thank you for signing my guest book. I must tell you I think this poem suits whoever you are writing it about. I don't know why some people think they have it all..but if they are not careful they will lose the ones they has. Your poem made me smile. If he is out kissing others he sure wouldn't be my man. Nice work here.
I am looking forward to reading more of your writings in the near future.
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What a beautiful thing to do writing this poem for your sister that wants to be falling in love. I hope Prince charming comes along and sweep her off her feet, treating her like a piece of fine china, loving and treasuring her. I really like your first two verse . Very nice.
I am looking forward to reading more of your writings in the near future.
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How very sad. I know how hard it is to be so close to someone you love and yet so far away. I remember what it is like wanting to knock, wanting to call and doubts wondering what you should do. I am so sorry you are feeling this pain. I know it is hurting. Hugs little one.
I am looking forward to reading more of your writings in the near future.
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Heart wrenching! I am so sorry this has happened to you.I know that even though he is not there you can still dream, a poor substitute for the real person. I hope he told you why he was leaving..maybe you will meet again. Once again I am sorry, I know how sad, how lonely, depressed and alone you must feel. Great emotions in this poem.
I am looking forward to reading more of your writings in the near
future.
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please don't hesitate to ask. I'm just an e-mail away.
Your words touches my heart. I feel such hurt and pain, and anyone that has had a lost love know exactly what you are going through. I am so sorry. Your words are so well written, with deep emotions. I hope it will work out for you. I can not say which verse, or sentence I like best, the whole poem is written so well. Akll the best!
I am looking forward to reading more of your writings in the near
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