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I'm the lead editor for a small independent press, but I am on maternity leave for the next several years and thus not accepting submissions. I'll tell you my professional opinion on first chapters or short pieces and whether I would have accepted it or rejected it if I was looking for work. I've dealt most with controversial speculative fiction, and I'm most interested in polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
Least Favorite Genres
stream of consciousness
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I used my internet browser to translate this to English, so I will not comment on the grammar.

I like the powerful compassion displayed here. It's good to remember that humans are capable of incredible kindness even though they are also capable of the opposite.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture in just a few words. Thanks for taking me on this journey with you.

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Review of Found Again  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a very beautiful sentiment. I hope everyone can find such a person.

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Review of Bioluminescence  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

As a polyamorous person, this saddens me. I would pray to a different god, personally.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This has a classic Dystopian feel and makes me nostalgic for the stories I read while I was growing up.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I like the mysterious energy in this piece. While it feels like it should be part of a larger story, it says a lot in just a few words.

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Review of A New Start  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Thanks for requesting my review!

My press doesn't work with poetry, but if it did, this piece would go well in a collection of life events, progressing from the author's earliest memories at the start to old age at the end. It has a very personal feel to it, as though it would be best appreciated by friends and family of the author and not so much the general public. However, I like the theme of searching to find a lost love. I recommend focusing more on the feelings and less on the specifics, such as the person's name and the method of communication (email, mailing a card). Instead, omit the actual name but talk about how the name makes you feel. Talk about how waiting for a response made you feel.
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is handy information. It could be even more compelling if you told a story about someone who used these tips.

The Forest app sounds like it would have been a lot of fun before I got married and had a kid. Now, it sounds like it would cause a lot more stress. My family comes first now.

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Review of The Chair  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. Thanks for giving my mind something to chew on.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You have a very colorful writing style. I like your abundant use of metaphors.

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Review of Life Hotel  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. Thanks for giving my mind something to chew on.

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Review of Blue jay  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thank you for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! While there are only a few lines here, it clearly establishes a conflict in the story. Keep writing, and I am sure you will weave a magnificent tale.

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Review of The Lost Souls.  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! Keep up the good work, and I am sure you will weave a magnificent tale.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This story has a lot of fun stuff in it.

Formatting tip: please start a new paragraph every time the speaker changes in dialogue. This is standard practice in fiction and helps make the piece easier to read.

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Review of The Pedestal  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. Thanks for giving my mind something to chew on.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I've never heard of this show, but it sounds like fun. Thanks for telling me about it.

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Review of redo  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This paints a vivid picture in just a few short lines.

Watch out for verb tense consistency. "Passes" is in present tense, but the rest of the poem is in past tense.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Null Of It All  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This reminds me a lot of my teen years. Just reading this makes me remember vividly and almost return to that state.

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Review of Be grateful  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! Practicing gratitude can take effort, but it is great for mental health in the long run.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start!

The grammar could use work. If you want a more in-depth look at sentence structures, I recommend reading "The Elements of Grammar" by Margaret Shertzer.

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Review of Writing life  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these lovely sentiments. I too have difficulty sharing my writing with those closest to me, though I've shared some with my husband.

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Review of Ghost  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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