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I'm the lead editor for a small press, and this is my pen name. I'll let you know whether I would have accepted your work as a submission and why or why not. If it's REALLY good, I'll let you know which press I'm with and invite you to submit your work to us. I'm particularly interested in controversial speculative fiction and polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
Least Favorite Genres
stream of consciousness
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
Public Reviews
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

I believe I would need more details to help you find the answers you are looking for. That is . . . if I have any advice to give you in the first place. Humans go through so many things, and all of our experiences are unique. The solutions to our problems are also unique, though we can learn from the experiences of others on occasion.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is rather wordy in places, but I like the underlying message.

It reminds me a bit of "Landlord" by David Rovics:
https://youtu.be/7exRxM8FKrw

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of A poem.  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

Life itself is a strange phenomenon. I like how the narrator here is working to make sense of it but still having difficulty. This is something we don't talk about much in our attempts to appear "normal" to other humans.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Asylum Blowup  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

Some parts of this are confusing, but confusion makes sense given the setting of a psych ward. I think the mention of medication helps to drive this home.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

The grammar here could use work, but the meaning sounds comes through clearly. This sounds like a very lovely addition to any wedding, though not affordable to many people.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (2.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

The grammar here makes this piece a bit difficult to understand. I can understand why someone would want to view private photos, but going to these lengths strikes me as not only illegal but also immoral.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of self esteem found  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a very fun poem. I liked all the metaphors here.

It reminds me a bit of this song from one of my favorite musicals:
https://youtu.be/RV-6qbUHVww

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

I used my internet browser to translate this to English, so I will not comment on the grammar.

I have a brother fetish, so the mere mention of brothers got my attention. I found this more funny than arousing, though.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Propose Me  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is making me feel nostalgic for my university years.

I didn't really see the ending coming, but it makes perfect sense. He fell in love with the idea of her proposal and never really knew her as well as he thought he did.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

Jealousy can be an annoying beast. The repetition here drives home how those feelings can nag at you even when you want to focus on other things.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Underneath  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is an intriguing story, though it is a little difficult to understand what is going on.

I wasn't focusing on grammar, but I didn't notice any errors.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

Great job with the script format. It was a refreshing change to have some more mature themes in a Scooby Doo story. I cringe at the parents leaving their baby with a complete stranger, though.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

This began on a realistic note but then took a turn into the metaphysical. Have you ever read "Visits to the Confabulatorium" by Soramimi Hanarejima?

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Coincidence  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

The coincidence is almost like a ghost story but a lot less spooky. Did the precious occupants use the same company? It strikes me that it could have been the company rather than the house.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Death!  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is indeed a scary scenario. However, the story ends rather abruptly.

I wasn't focusing on grammar, but I didn't notice any errors.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was a lovely short story.

Formatting tip: please start a new paragraph every time the speaker changes in dialogue. This is standard practice in fiction and helps make the piece easier to read.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Blazing Paddles  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

I love the title here.

"things I've only read about or seen in movies" . . . wait, they had movies back then?
Oh, right. This is comedy. Some things strike me as funny, but some things just feel confusing.

I wasn't focusing on grammar, but I didn't notice any errors.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Tf story  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (2.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

Is this meant to be a test piece or a placeholder? I recommend drafting your story in a separate program such as MS Word, Open Office, or Google Docs and then copying and pasting it when you are ready to share it.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Unit 7745  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is an intriguing piece. It feels emotional, even though we assume that machines don't have emotions, you've put the reader in Unit's shoes and made us feel.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of The Silent Parade  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing this amazing piece of history. When it comes to matters like this, it's important to keep trying even after failing. I believe the meaning of life is to leave this planet better than we found it.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

This reminds me a bit of the formerly homeless person from my high school that my family allowed to live in our garage because we didn't have any spare rooms. He's a fast food worker, and we're kinda regretting it now since such a high-risk occupation poses an extra risk to my parents.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

You packed a lot into so few words. I admire people who can write short fiction like this.

I wasn't focusing on grammar, but I didn't notice any errors.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of THE NEW AMERICA  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

I love the positive tone of this piece. The future will be interesting one way or another. Personally, I'm relieved that Trump is out of office, but Biden still has a lot of big campaign contributors he will have to satisfy. It's like this old song goes: https://youtu.be/7ymmkjrvl1c
We had an election, it ain't no lie. It was the best one money could buy!

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Blinded Love  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

That was a good dystopia premise. However, I was surprised they let the orange girl keep her hoop earrings.

Formatting tip: when writing on the internet, add a blank line between paragraphs. It's standard practice and easier on the eyes. Indentation is used in books for economy of paper, but since paper is not an issue on the internet, we use an extra line.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Botd  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a fun piece. The sheer number of housemates reminds me of my friends' place. My husband and I would love to live with them if it weren't for the pandemic, but since I have gestational diabetes, we can't take the risk right now.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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