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I'm the lead editor for a small independent press, but I am on maternity leave for the next several years and thus not accepting submissions. I'll tell you my professional opinion on first chapters or short pieces and whether I would have accepted it or rejected it if I was looking for work. I've dealt most with controversial speculative fiction, and I'm most interested in polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
Least Favorite Genres
stream of consciousness
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
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Review of The Lost Souls.  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! Keep up the good work, and I am sure you will weave a magnificent tale.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This story has a lot of fun stuff in it.

Formatting tip: please start a new paragraph every time the speaker changes in dialogue. This is standard practice in fiction and helps make the piece easier to read.

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Review of The Pedestal  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. Thanks for giving my mind something to chew on.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I've never heard of this show, but it sounds like fun. Thanks for telling me about it.

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Review of redo  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This paints a vivid picture in just a few short lines.

Watch out for verb tense consistency. "Passes" is in present tense, but the rest of the poem is in past tense.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

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Review of Null Of It All  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This reminds me a lot of my teen years. Just reading this makes me remember vividly and almost return to that state.

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Review of Be grateful  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! Practicing gratitude can take effort, but it is great for mental health in the long run.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start!

The grammar could use work. If you want a more in-depth look at sentence structures, I recommend reading "The Elements of Grammar" by Margaret Shertzer.

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Review of Writing life  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these lovely sentiments. I too have difficulty sharing my writing with those closest to me, though I've shared some with my husband.

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Review of Ghost  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

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Review of Masquerade  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Unfortunately, everyone can't tell. My ex-boyfriend hid his meth habit from me for five years. He would indulge in it every time I visited my parents, and I didn't put the pieces together until after the shock of everything wore off.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of New Church  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This reminds me of my youth and how I asked several friends to come to church with me.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is very beautiful. This lovely introduction made me smile.

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Review of The Letter M  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This poem is delightful, and it makes me proud to be a mom, as that is also an M thing.

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Review of AML AML  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thanks for requesting my review.

This poem drips with pure sadness. I get the feeling that the most recent letters were never read, and that's part of why the words are reverberating. They have not reached their intended destination, so they keep bouncing back to you.
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

It is often said that we cannot appreciate beauty without death. We live in a very interesting world indeed!

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Review of Living in Me  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a beautiful poem. It makes me think a lot about my grandmother (the one I actually met) as well.

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Review of Warmth  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This reminds me of an old, ragged blanket my parents made me toss out when I was a preteen. I just couldn't do it, so I tossed it over the nearest fence instead of tossing it in the dumpster.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is handy information. It could be even more compelling if you told a story about someone who used these tips.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This paints quite a spooky image in my mind. In the last part, the old women are not counted as people, so were they zombies all along?

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Review of Having forgotten  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I'm having a difficult time imagining such a scenario. Is this what happens after a stroke or other brain damage?

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This reminds me a bit of a dream I once had, except that all groups had different types of magic and had to marry someone with the same magic type, but there was nobody for the king to marry because he was the only one of his type left.

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