Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - began to wrap the item together - I think you want an "s" on the end of "item".
2. In this section - she dare not think of such thing - I am not sure if you wanted an "s" on "thing" or "a" prior to "thing".
3. In this section - He has stolen her voice her voice - you may want to delete the duplicate words.
4. In this section - stuffed animals on top falls on her - you may want to delete the "s" on "falls".
5. In this section - like an sawed oak tree - "an" should be "a".
6. In this section - from what happen last night - you may want to add an "ed" on the end of "happen".
7. In this section - upon hi face hangs - I think you wanted "his" instead of "hi".
8. In this section - believed that Ms. Patch told her - I think you meant "what" instead of "that".
9. In this section - the hooded head makes arrives - not sure what you were going for here, maybe, "makes its arrival"?
Overall Impression: Very interesting ultra short story! Well done!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only one spelling/grammar error for you to consider:
1. In this section - from the black shuffle emerged - I think you meant "duffle" instead of "shuffle".
Overall Impression: A very interesting poetic style and fun "disclaimer"!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only one spelling/grammar error for you to consider:
1. In this section - it's staright to the deep - I think you meant "straight".
Readability: A very vivid and delightful read! Nice flow and great imagery! Well done!
Write on!
Thanks much,
Lovina
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Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome!
Readability: A fun and entertaining read! There is only one item that I would like to point out: Whose Rani? The name just appears out of nowhere without an explanation as to who she is. I little information in this area would be helpful.
Write on!
Thanks much,
Lovina
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Overall Impression: A very scary and creepy little tale!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - he’d probably spent years of his life - I think you meant to put a number prior to "years".
2. In this section - broached no opinion the subject - you may want to put "on" after "opinion".
3. In this section - revealing a series of gaping wound - there should be an "s" on the end of "wound".
Spelling/Grammar: I found only one spelling/grammar error for you to consider:
1. In this section - sleep in peace and wonder why this little angel - "wonder" should probably be "wondered".
Overall Impression: A wonderfully told "great escape"!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - but it twist every time I shift - you may want to put an "s" on the end of "twist".
2. In this section - no one to can see my display - I don't think you wanted the "to" in there.
3. In this section - sound great - you may want to put an "s" on the end of "sound".
4. In this section - side on the house - I think you meant "of" instead of "on".
Overall Impression: A very strange nightmare/daydream!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only one spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - instinct saw my legs grab - you may want to replace "saw" with "caused".
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - could only turn away his eyes to his - you may want to try "turn his eyes away".
2. In this section - sweep her bangs away, taking a step closer, and pressed her warm lips - confused tenses, try: sweeping, taking, pressing or sweep, take, press or swept, took, pressed.
3. In this section - front porch's light rid of life - maybe insert "itself" after "rid".
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - joyful experiences of your life - you may want to eliminate the "s" on the end of "experience".
2. In this section - try to write there memoirs - "there" should probably be "their".
3. In this section - it is actually a parot that you needed - "parrot" actually has two r's.
4. In this section - so the only way to go into space - "so" should be capitalized and you may want to insert "is" after "go".
Readability: A wonderfully written and entertaining read!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - the "perfect" place. By barking orders - you may want a comma instead of a period.
2. This section - bitter air that had happened when he became immune the crunch of his footsteps. - is so very confusing!
Readability: A well-done and eery read!
Write on!
Thanks much,
Lovina
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