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Review Style
Not sure I have a style....I learn as much from you as you from me. I will point our typos, grammatical things if I see them. I love poetry and when it comes to stories, please nothing "dark"....not my thing.
I'm good at...
I will find typos, incomplete thought (unless I believe it is conducive to the poetry structure).
Favorite Genres
Romance, personal, periodicals with history, comical, stories about true life, children, animals
Least Favorite Genres
Dark, morbid, Sci-fi
I will not review...
Dark, morbid stories
Public Reviews
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Review of Shades of Fun  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Shades of Yellow - what a delightful poem. Some of my favorite things mentioned, especially a piece of lemon meringue pie. Slicker makes me think of Paddington Bear with his yellow boots..so much fun here.

A great addition for a children's poetry book.

Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like how it reads; it flows well. Irony, yes. I like "with cracked shield and lonely eyes. Minor detail, forgeting should be spelled forgetting.

very nice,

Seabreeze
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Review of ODE TO COFFEE  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Love my coffee; love your poem!
I like the style of third and fourth line rhyme.

very nice,

Seabreeze
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Review of How can this be?  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Nicely done; tells a beautiful, but sad story. Only those who hurt can totally understand. I am not sure if I comprehend all of what you mean but I see and sense the sensitivity, love, and loss.

Thanks for sharing,

Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there, great poem but so sad. But we live in sad times. You have done well with its
rhythm and the emotions do come through strong. Nice piece of work!

Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I love your Hell to Maternity! It says a lot, especially for young ones today getting babies before getting married. The first paragraph gives the family outlook of something gone wrong. A story of real life. Last line, a tear jerker...

Well written, except for you're and they're:

"They're" is a contraction that means "they are" and "you're" is a contraction
that means you are, which will not sound right when placed in their respective
places in your poem. Your and they work well. And the last line should read "there".

Don't feel bad as this is a common mistake many make. I only learned it as I had to; my main
job throughout my work history was a secretary.



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Review of Flash of Love  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very nice...fits all requirements for a haiku. Good selection of words giving strong meaning. Have you tried the sistine format....very interesting style - you would do well, I am sure, with it. I have done one myself...thanks for sharing.

Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Just love it! I guess music and beauty have much in common, i.e. "...it is in the eye of the beholder." However, I am with you my friend, most of it today is LOUD and obnoxious.

Frank was great, Elvis entertaining. Kingston Trio; Peter, Paul and Mary; Johnny Horton, Doris Day, Frankie Lane, piano music both classical and jazz; I love to hear the sax; there is so much good I get excited thinking about and make me want to go put on a CD, ha, ha.

I recently got a thumb piano or kalimba (wanting one for a long time). I have an ear for music (no puns please) and would have loved to learn to play the piano, but never came about. I love the sound of it and have played around with one so for now, this is my substitute, the thumb piano. Lots of fun.

Anyways, I digress, love this piece you have written.

Seabreeze

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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, that is a wonderful poem on your sister's locks! It is a fun poem to read. Thanks for sharing.

Seabreeze
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Review of Nightfall.  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (4.0)
Interesting poem about nightfall. It mentions all of the night elements, the knowns and unknowns of night. I hear its mystery in your words, a delight in your description; but some of it I find hard to explain for myself.

I enjoyed reading it and like many things that others write, we don't always know where someone is coming from.

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Review of Fade  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very nice, a description of self-evaluation? It is beautiful and sad rolled into one. Your heart is broken, or was broken?

I like that you used the word fade, as it is often for many of us. "Shadow to shadow I roam" is an interesting phrase as we often want to stay in the background; would this be the case.

Thanks for sharing,

Seabreeze
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Review of Jesus Christ.  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (3.5)
Nice poem of our Lord. I like how you bring all aspects of life into the poem. It flows well and easy to read. It gives a true description of who he is. I see two (but wasn't really looking) typos:

mans genious should be, as it is used, man's genius.

Great poem,

Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Beautiful...well written your poem "We Must Never Forget!" Your style of entry is pleasant to read. You have captured all the words appointed. I like how you have used the word "...now the bridge of time". I well tells the story of war past and of the lost and hurt. Using lilies rippling...is how I see them...the movement gives a vivid description of the time. Very nice! Good luck in your contest entry.

Seabreeze
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Review of Father's Answer  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this poem! I love the style and I appreciate the fact that you told us that it was Echo Verse, one that I am not familiar with. You used all the word with great feeling; it flows well! The subject matter or the fact that you are speaking to our beloved Father gives it that special feeling for me. Having a conversation with your heavenly Father in this poem...so special. It is a great makings for a prayer...a style of prayer...truly beautiful. Good luck with your contest entry.

Seabreeze
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Review of Escape!  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Wow, that some story! I like the suspense, your character creation and I could see more chapters if you were going to extend the story. You are very good a describing your surroundings, giving great detail as I could visualize the place well.

The fact that this particular new bride was such a lock pick was a surprise. Makings me wonder what her life was like before, ha, ha!

Organizational wise, I would have preferred breaks between paragraphs as with the small print (hard on the eyes to read), it all kind of ran together while I was reading (just me).

It was a fun read,

Thanks,
Seabreeze




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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Very lovely! I love romance; one of my favorite shows/movies to watch when I can. One of my favorite lines: Wine and cheese, secrets, and loving whispers against rosy cheeks. The word, tree, itself bring a vivid picture of summer, or fall (I love trees). It is a fun and pleasant poem to read!

Thanks,
Seabreeze

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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I placed an entry into the Short Shots contest (Walk In The Woods) and even though I did not win, I am thrilled to have had three reviews! Wow, great reviews and valuable information regarding my story.

I want to thank each of the judges for giving me detailed constructive criticism. I am excited about what I have learned from this process.

Hats off to the three of you,

Seabreeze
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Review of Dear Bully  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Interesting take on the bully! Great narration of the subject. I find myself agreeing with most of your interpretation. I do believe it is a defense mechanism - a front to fight fear! Fear of the unknown and yes, probably learn tactics from being bullied.

Great writing and welcome Newbie!

Seabreeze
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Review of Listen to My Eyes  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
One of my favorite subjects when in romance...the eyes!

I love this poem...it tells so much about the two in the story and
shows their connection or disconnection!

My favorite lines: the last two...especially "remember your choice".

Nice writing,

Seabreeze
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Review of Last Words  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Well put! I could see this poem being narrated at the beginning of a story....leading in to a person who had promise but fell the way of crime.

I like it!

Seabreeze
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Review of Happy Saturday  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I like your story and how you set it up. I have a question, and may be it is just me, but I do not understand one line:

His smiling wife, whom he had won over. I understand you are referencing a thought in the mind of your character Mason, but that sentence does not seem complete to me...maybe I am missing something?

Other than that, I like the whole story and would think it could be worked into a fiction about the corporation where by the main characters are constantly trying to do a "one-upmanship" with each other It could be written in comedy form.

Thanks for the story and allowing me to review.

Seabreeze
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Review of JOB OPENING  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
How cute, how adorable! Love it... hope more see it! Maybe I will apply; however, I lack in the witty department, ha, ha.

Seabreeze
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Review of Home  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very nice Helen! Nice choice of words, flows well and has good rhythm!

Thanks for writing it!

Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very nice Dr. Williams. Beautifully written. I love how it flows and choice of words. You appear to be a Newbie here, so welcome!

Look forward to more of your creations!

Seabreeze
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Review of Childhood  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (3.5)
Excellent topic and very current in the media. You have brought out some points that so many need to hear and writing is a great way to reach many. When giving a review, I want to point out a couple of things. These are small, but when I receive a review, I hope others well let me know what they see. I the fourth line, birds fly but not birds flies. May be a typo while you are excited to get your words down, as I do that at times. The word God should have a capital letter (line 4). In the second paragraph, question about happiness...should it be "Where has that happiness gone?"

In the third paragraph, "...turning into a hunters". It would be a hunter or turning into hunters.

I point these out to you because you have an excellent way of describing what you want to say. People will want to read and continue to read your work if it flows (grammatically) and is clear in thought.

There may be more; these are what stood out to me as I read.

Love to read more of your creations,

Keep up the good writing,

Seabreeze

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