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866 Public Reviews Given
Review Style
Not sure I have a style....I learn as much from you as you from me. I will point our typos, grammatical things if I see them. I love poetry and when it comes to stories, please nothing "dark"....not my thing.
I'm good at...
I will find typos, incomplete thought (unless I believe it is conducive to the poetry structure).
Favorite Genres
Romance, personal, periodicals with history, comical, stories about true life, children, animals
Least Favorite Genres
Dark, morbid, Sci-fi
I will not review...
Dark, morbid stories
Public Reviews
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like your story because it grabed me and kept my interest (which is saying a lot as iam not that much of a fan of fiction). Your opening was super and pulled me along.

What it did, the story, was have me reflect on things. I thought of the old TV show Twilight Zone and the pig people. Not knowing your age, if you are not sure of it, you can find a clip in You Tube.

Your story is unique..do we elop it into chapters...

Thanks for the fun,
Seabreeze
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Review of Brushstrokes  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Beautiful poem. Your selection of words are "right on". Your 1st attempt, please attempt more. Seabreeze
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Review of Stalk Home  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Abaru,

Bubblegum Jones asked me if I would give Stalk Home a review and I decided I would. Let me say up front, I am not a big fiction fan, I write poetry and love stories about real people, so I will do my best. Here we go.

I feel you have a good story but my interest would not normally attract me to this type of story. There is a lot of narrative of "much to do about nothing", just not interesting to me. You describe the area well and set the stage. Your punctuation is good and grammatically, I could not find any faults.

Toward the end of the story, it got a little confusion to me...but maybe cause I lost interest. You may want to check the last paragraph for clarity.

Please take my review with a grain of salt as I mentioned, this story is not my cup of tea.

I wish you the best in your writings,

Seabreeze
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Review of Phantoms  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Dave,

Very nice this post. I especially like what has been done with the photo and you have tied it all together well. Excellent format, phantoms - excellent title for this poem. I believe most of us can relate to hazy recollection, reflection of times past!

I enjoyed the read,

Seabreeze

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Review of Journey  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
So enjoyed your poem, Journey. Saw it posted via editor's pic. Love walks, especially if the scenery is such that you feel you are having a conversation with God.

Great poem,

Seabreeze
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Review of Dismal Creek  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Well, I took this one a little easier! Was this really a town myth? Good story but the ending...sad.

But the question is interesting....syphilis from a spirit? Naw....well, maybe.

You have a talent for writing....

Do you plan to write about your travels?

Best to you in your writings,

Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Eek! I wasn't prepared for that. I like a twist, and I felt it was going to get ruff, but....

I admit, it had an interesting turn...but..a little too much for me. I will check out your other writings,


Best wishes,

Seabreeze
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Review of Last Pictures  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
My first thoughts were...of course...she needs to get moving. After reading the whole story, I am, as many taken back! A great moral that says, "...spend more time with those you love and less complaining"!

It well written piece....

Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Once upon a time there was a snake called Charley. Everyday, it seemed without a doubt, Charley would wonder about his pad, which was on the East side of Brookdale, in the upper side of Snake Valley. One day, many moons ago, Charley could not find his pet Cricket. Because of this, Charley put an ad in the paper "Lost, my friend Cricket" Please see Charley at Charley's pad in upper side of Snake Valley. Charley got lots of contacts and was about to go pickup Cricket, when Cricket showed up on his own. What a relief, now Charley would not have to pay anyone a reward. Not nice of Charley. Until finally, Cricket asked for the reward because he turned himself in.


Seabreeze
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Review of Just $29.95  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
OMG, what a story!!! Now, Iam not much for gore, but, this takes the cake! Great story. But, for some reason It brought back TV memories of:

https://youtu.be/Auvf7DDw5z0

More expensive, but I could not resist!

Thanks for the entertainment,

Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thanks, excellent share!

I tried and arranged my in order.

Thanks,

Seabreeze
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Review of Chapter 15  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Fred

I some how feel Sarah could take care of herself...however, Michael should have had
Rebecca stay with Sarah, both protecting each other (better in numbers).

I am excited to read more...This has to involve, I would think, espionage...with the vase, FBI and some dude claiming to be upper Government. Or, maybe that part is a cover for corrupt FBI and a spy. Oh how my mind can wonder...

Later Fred,

Hope to see more soon,
Sandy
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Review of Chapter 14  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Fred,

I have been away from writing and READING. Not sure if I commented on this Chapter. I like where the story is going, I am on the edge of my seat reading it. Lots of suspense with the Feds, the previous stalker and Sarah contacting Rebecca to track down the vase. This is a great story with more to come. I am not remember that old coot in the hospital....

Okay, I must move to the next chapter,

Hope all is going better for you. My busy life lately is 2 granddaughters with my son for the summer. Keeps me on my toes, ha, ha.

Sandy
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Review of Love is complex  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Love is Complex, indeed! I love the rhythm you have created with the first stanza of your poem. It bounces for me and I like that! Using words like emotion and commotion...that rings of heartache and the troubles of love.

Love truly is a passionate duet! Great writing,

Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow, what a story! I was hanging on most of the way when my mind was trying to figure out what happen to the people who watch the TV program. I am thinking they were hypnotized kind of like subliminal, but obviously those who watched do not realize what happened to them. I think you have a winner!
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Review of My Psalm  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Beautiful and welcomed this rainy, over casted day.
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for entry "Dawn Symphony
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi,

Just stopped by to say congrats on winning the 24 Syllables contest. Great entry!

Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Star Cross Lovers is a poem of romance that pulls you in; you want to know what happens to this woman. The story is beautifully set again a star lite night; with lovely rhymes well placed. One reads this poem, gets all the beauty of poetic rhyme and a story of complete enticement. Maybe, also one can "live in the moment" of the romance and excitement!

I love it and no more can be said!

Seabreeze
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Review of Chapter 13  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Fred, sorry I have been away...trying to catch up on things. Small error in Chapter 13.


"The claim the incident investigation isn't complete. needs to be They at the start.

Other than that, no problems.

I am thinking as this chapter ended that the FEDS are creeping in? This story is really juicy. It is a great story and I will not want to see it end.

I liked the touch of the old coot in the woods...

Looking forward to more,

Sandy
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Leger!

Such a cute story with a lot of mystery going on. When I was trying to visualize the little guy coming in to the bar, a saw him doing a little jig in my mind. I am Irish and well that is where my mind went.

Not sure about all of the language ( I assume made up?)....but sure is cute for the story.

I thank you could have a sequel, maybe with a bit more magic!

Best to you,

Seabreeze
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Review of Chapter 12  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Fred,

Oh my spiders and snakes....that would me trying to get the car of the road and ditch the snake. My son and I were out on the highway and all of a sudden a lizard came out of something inside the car, ran across my legs (I was driving) and I started screaming and my son is laughing his ass off. I had to get off the road and get out. I don't do any of those things coming at me, especially while I am driving!

Still loving the story. I found a couple of small details: Check the two sentences:

She had not been so frightened been since her father (extra word been)

One thing that makes you such a good cop is you good (typo - should be is your good)

Hope all is well; especially for Bess

Until next time,

Sandy
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Review of Chapter 11  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 18+ | (2.5)
Hi Fred, I believe this is Chapter 12.

Or maybe Chapter 11 was twelve, because in 11 at the end, a snake appears so I am thinking there should be a continuation to the snake here? I am not going to read further because I may become more confused. I will wait tell you check.

Sandy
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Review of Continuity Girl  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is excellent! If there were a first prize, you should receive it!

Thanks,
Seabreeze
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for entry "Gibberish
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Ha, ha ... very cute, clever!

And, yes, it is all in our heads!

Thanks,

Seabreeze
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Review of Chapter 10  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Interesting twist on the marble figurine. Now I am thinking that is it possible that the old man in the hospital is Michael's long lost dad? Anything is possible.

These is a lot going on in this story...I like that Rebecca has a case or maybe two...and Michael's having to "fight her" to keep his sanity.

It is a good story Fred...

Thanks,
Sandy
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