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Review Style
Not sure I have a style....I learn as much from you as you from me. I will point our typos, grammatical things if I see them. I love poetry and when it comes to stories, please nothing "dark"....not my thing.
I'm good at...
I will find typos, incomplete thought (unless I believe it is conducive to the poetry structure).
Favorite Genres
Romance, personal, periodicals with history, comical, stories about true life, children, animals
Least Favorite Genres
Dark, morbid, Sci-fi
I will not review...
Dark, morbid stories
Public Reviews
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Review of The Rosebush  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Kelly Lee,

This is a great story; very different. You have kept the suspense through to the ending and gave us a unique closing! I don't think I have ever read a story with this type of twist...very special, I truly liked it! Great short story!

Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (4.0)
I agree Psalm 148 is beautiful and it shows us (if we cannot figures how to do it on our own), how and why to praise our Lord, not that we should need a reason. His glory and grace is sufficient.

I do have a question: What do you mean by your sentence

...... all creation is waking David up with
us.

Up with Us? Can you say more on this?

Seabreeze
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Review of Praising God  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
How Great Thou Art indeed!

Your Praising God has so much "meat" to it and stirs things in me. What I wanted to share is that, as a 74 year old believer, it took much way to long to really understand my part in this world. Slowly, it has come to me that this is God's creation, world and people and we (all of us no matter our lot in life) are all here for His pleasure. With that, I truly believe His plan is for us to learn on this earth what will become so clear in the everlasting life after. He, at his pleasure, uses us and wants us and will have us to interact for the good of humanity. Example:
some of us have been given a different plan, say plan A; some plan B; some plan C. I mean that plan A may have been born with a silver spoon in their mouth; plan B, average family as far as financial stability but maybe a daughter or son with challenges; plan C - totally challenged! But, we creatures have instilled in us, a God like image (our soul deep down know Him) and along comes a gift of choice and all of us have that path to take to know our creator.

Now, as we travel the path, we are to interact/help others as we go. We don't always know what that may be, however, as we come to know him (accept His gift of salvation), we now have a map of the road to travel (the Word is our guide). We will be on a journey and our real job is doing His work, taking His direction, moving in the path that He guides us toward.

Do I know how to always do this, No! I have more times then I care to think about, especially in my early years, have gotten off on the wrong path, even trying hard to stay on the right path. But as I look at life, where circumstances take people, I truly believe, as Joseph told his brothers that you meant evil against me, but God meant it for good in order to bring about this present result, to preserve many people lives (paraphrase).

God bless you and your family,

Seabreeze
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Review of The Prom  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Drifter,

I stumbled over to your site via your Blog. First let me say, welcome to your new journey and congrats for your personal self-analysis and being so open to share with our writing community.

I can only remember one dance that I went to, I believe junior high. I was one of those wallflower type when I was young and carried more weight than held me back from the crowd. That made me less of a pick for any type of popularity gig. So, reading this post took me there and I truly enjoyed hearing that all participants had a wonderful time. You experience what so many of want to experience but usually don't and don't know how. You experience the true love of God spilling out over people. What a joy. Well, you being a pastor I need not tell you that.

I believe we are a people (at least the USA) who have lost touch with are feelings; the ability to express are care, love and excitement for others. There is too much of a "me" generation now and this is so pushed in schools, advertising, social media.

So, thank you for sharing a tender moment and now I will go back to perusing more of your writings.

Seabreeze
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Review of AB-AB Positive  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Delightful indeed!

This is very unique...you don't see blood being written about much, except in journals maybe. But, it should since it is the life in all of us!

Your ending is so well put and so inviting. I believe you are right. Every time I pick up a book
of poetry, it does just that for me - lifts me up.

Thanks again for another wonderful read.

Seabreeze
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Review of Ailurophobia  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Excellent story, very grabbing! I am a dog person...cats of so self-absorbed, ha, ha! I truly like the way you have presented the plot...I love the ending!

Funny, it brought back a lot of the rumors or truths (not sure which is which), about babies and cats. In any case, you have tied it all together extremely well.

Thanks for the read,

Seabreeze
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Review of Paint  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Kelly Lee,

I came to see what goodies you have to read! Wow, this one is powerful, scary and totally pulled me in. Lots of suspense but gory! I am not normally into the real "dark" side, but I must admit, I liked this one.

Because of the small print and a lot of it, I thought I would point out one typo I came across:


......a death grimace upon it decayed face. (as you can see, it should be its not it)

In any case, I hope you will come back and write more!

Best to you,

Seabreeze
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Review of Fate  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, quite the story! You do well with fiction....me, not so much. I love poetry and that is my thing. You do need to keep writing because you have a talent!

That last line...? Is it because he now knows the truth....her time is near? In any case, keep up your writing...


Best to you,

Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Brian, I came over to thank you for this beautiful poem,which by the way I saw a tribute to you at Gabriella's site to your Flowers Planted In His Mother's Memory.

So, I had to come over to tell you I nicely written this is and it touched me.

Thank you,

Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Agnus - I am with you all the way! Taking another person's life because of your stupidity, is as serious as it gets! So, I would take away license, and I might take away the car (sell - monies to the victim's family). Some prison time is in order; you can not bring back the person you killed, but community service comes to mind -- picking up trash or maybe helping the victim's family because you took away a loved one and a bread winner (I am harsh).

The offense is equal to driving under the influence and the influence in this case is stupidity!

Thanks for writing this piece...best to you!

Sandy (Seabreeze)
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Review of Breakage  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow, I read this in two sessions because of the intensity. I must say that you have truly put the detail into this story. I would be curious on how you came to write such a story. At many points, I stopped to ponder and thought, some of this still applies today and if it did we would not have the rapid outbreak of disrespect, destroying of property, theft, and on and on!

I thought the story, at points, may have been too repetitious but, may be needed to make individual points that occurred in the story. I found the story well punctuated and very clear in meaning. Overall kept me well intrigued!

Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
I saw your poem over on the Poetry Newsletter and loved it. I brought back memories as to when I lived in Ventura, California and would go to the harbor. Loved to walk and view the boats, watch the waters move and all of sea life. Your last verse which tells: In the waters which surround every moment, feelings of freedom consumes the observer....this is how I would feel many times watching the waters move, being pulled in and mesmerized.

Thanks for the pleasant reading and memories.

Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow Bubblegum Jones, that is quite the tribute for those who do go the extra mile to give a better review. I found it fascinating that you went through and compiled a catalog of reviews. That is special and I have not come across that here before.

I like that you game name credits to those folks and well deserved recognition.

Also, on poetry, I learned a new format or type of poetry as I was not familiar with ghazal nor Dr M C Gupta. Always something new to learn here at Writing.com.

This was interesting read - thanks for writing it!

Seabreeze
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Review of My Sin  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Fascinating poem! And, I learned a new word...schadenfreude and very interesting the etymology of the word.

First, I would like to say...thank you for your service to our beloved country, USA. And, your poem, My Sin....very interesting in how you described it. It gives me food for thought, especially of my own sin. I would have to guess that your military career would have a tremendous impact on your writing, especially your creativity?

I must admit...not sure all of this poem is clear to me. But, then again, it does not need to be. I love that it provokes me to think.

Thanks so much,

Seabreeze

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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love your Sense of Belonging! It is coming again...winter..I live where the snow known no pity! But, even at that...the seasons are so reassuring....I know who is in control! The Lord brings them back again and again. I love to hear the leaves rustling....as you say, a song!

Beautifully written, thanks for the journey...to home.

Seabreeze
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Review of Amnesia?  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Beautiful and sad all rolled into one! It is what so many fear as time keeps approaching. You have written it well -- maybe because of some experience - self or family? I faced cancer with my husband, and to be truthful - if one has to pick, I still would go that route as opposed to losing ones memory.

Thank you for a well written poem,

Seabreeze
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Review of Waiting for Love  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh my, very beautiful and I wanted to cry. It is hard when we want our feelings appreciated (I know). I love the words and how they pull me in to read more. This is a very pretty story of one waiting and I hope the love is returned soon.

Seabreeze
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Review of The Cemetery  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I like this piece even though it is sad. What hits me is taking flowers to a cemetery, as if the dead will see them. Traditions are very interesting...we, as a society, kind of cling to them.
However, reading some of the older stones can be fascinating.

You have done well in bringing out the feelings I think many have when going to a cemetery...

Thanks,
Best wishes

Seabreeze

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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (4.0)
Interesting piece. I do believe the lower animals have feelings and show emotions though they may not be as we show ours. Look at dogs, elephants, primates. Your analysis has pointed out the relationships of such emotions. There is one question: Your last sentence - not real clear to me.

(People are running after materialistic things and their aims have also been changed to get worldly things)

What would be an example of worldly things verses materialistic things? Power? Maybe this is it.

Good writing,
Seabreeze

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Review of Tears For Two  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
OMG this is so cute and so complete in your description of the story. I love it!!

In fact, if I didn't know it was about shoes, it would have been even more fun. But, I am the one you sent over because you did a review on my poem That Is What I Am (about a shoe).

Enter this in a contest.......I am sure it will win.

Best wishes,

Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh, this is wonderful and you have told it well. Care free were those days. Your have done an excellent job in selecting the right words and I especially like

There was paper airplanes
and frisking in the rains

Paper boats too were made
and hide'n'seek was played

I love poetry, like yourself. I can sit and read and reminisce and take myself there, especially when times are tough and stressful. We need that release and poetry gives it to me.

And, your "Life was all play and games" - I feel the child of today don't really know what that means. Even yourself, born in the '80s - still not like myself, born in 1945. Even just remembering sleeping outside in the summer, the sky (no pollution, no bright lights (lived in the country as a kid), we were lucky to see an airplane...but sure enjoyed shooting stars!

Thanks for a wonderful time down memory lane!

Seabreeze




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Review of Mama Knows  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Ha, ha that got me. Every kids dream who has ever been bullied! Nice touch, cite story.

Seabreeze
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Review of The Cabin  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Interesting...and a nightmare rolled into one. I like the mystery of it but wanted moreseabreeze
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Review of Love is...  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (4.5)
First, let me welcome you, newbie. I hope you enjoy your stay here.

Your story of love is, is very touching as it does describe what we all want in true love. I would like some dialogue in there, but that is just me. Reading your story, it was almost to "rant". Maybe a little break in the tone, more of what your new love is and then go back to true love.
Contrast is the word I am looking for.

You have great ability is selecting words to identify your thoughts, so continue on with your writing.

Seabreeze



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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like your story because it grabed me and kept my interest (which is saying a lot as iam not that much of a fan of fiction). Your opening was super and pulled me along.

What it did, the story, was have me reflect on things. I thought of the old TV show Twilight Zone and the pig people. Not knowing your age, if you are not sure of it, you can find a clip in You Tube.

Your story is unique..do we elop it into chapters...

Thanks for the fun,
Seabreeze
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