This was a most fascinating read. I totally get the part of getting pregnant in nursing school! I wanted to read more, it so interesting. As a piece of fiction, this was well-written and played out. The characters were well-rounded and the plot was not predictable, which is good. Thanks so much for sharing!
Ahhh... pictures are worth a thousand words, but here we attempt to paint a picture with our words. Well written, movement from the material to the immaterial of memory. I like how you rhymed without making the work seem forced. thanks so much for sharing!
This poem was quite rich in texture and meaning. I enjoyed how the words 'rippled' in a sort of holding pattern awaiting results. It was dramatic, but not pushy, totally in the moment. I've had those moments myself and they are not what I would care to repeat. Thanks so much for sharing.
This was a lovely poem. I enjoyed how you didn't force the rhymes to 'match' but they fit in with the overall picture. I felt as though I was there observing the wild things living their lives uninterrupted by man and His works. It's rather ironic really, how habitat can exist and few people really know about it. Thanks for sharing!
This was fun and playful. Riding an old horse (who isn't in much of a hurry) right into a bed of sprinklers is funny. An unexpected twist that I enjoyed. I can just see a golden green meadow with the heat of summer making everyone want to have a siesta with this horse slowly picking his way.
It was interesting how the character identified that she should not have told a lie, but then goes and tells an even bigger whopper yet. I like the concept of time passing by while the unseemly fact of LIFE continues to plague her. I liked the flow of concepts, but, to me, the writing was a bit stilted and it didn't read well. Thanks for sharing!
Yes, the major reason for global warming IS the burning of fossil fuels, but a second lesser-known reason is, well... cow farts. Not kidding, totally true. Seriously.
Back to the poem...I like the word choices you made. I also liked the way you chose to place those words into a declining format.
it was a simple straight-forway expression of why global warming is happening. Thanks for sharing.
This was a sad story that is all too common. I feel for the loss of the characters, and I understand how grief can poison recovery from the loss of a loved one. This was well-written and the conversation was easily read not stilted or wooden. I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing.
I really felt the deep emotion from this work, the fear, the anxiety was plain to see. Those scars are a badge of honor, not everyone wins that particular fight. I never heard the description quite so specifically about getting off a ventilator and returning to consciousness. Powerful read.
This was a very powerful piece of literature, that struck a deep note within me. I worked as an RN and have seen death, loss, and pain. Red was one of many thousands of young men and women who have died protecting the rights of our citizens with the pain of death. Our job is to remember those young people and to make sure they didn't die in vain.
This was an engrossing read, makes me want to read more. Thanks for sharing.
This was quite descriptive, yet not overburdened with words. Night storms are the most interesting, and the most exciting in my humble opinion. Good word selections, too.
thanks for sharing
This touched me in an unexpected way. I could see the sorrow but I felt the deeper joy that her mother finally is with her father. I hope that my passing will be as mourned. Thanks for posting this, it was poignant.
Ooooff... that is one (rightly so) vicious cut-down the lover delivered to the -Ex. I remember those times, too, as a child. Very eloquent, thanks for sharing!
This was a very good evaluation of the fact choices you make are the foundation of all your future choices. The easy path is only the one that allows you to give up and stagnate. I haven't trod this hard path on purpose, it has come to me and I rejoice in where I am going.
You wrote concisely and accurately about how dependent we are on the insects and bees of the world. It is a rather sad thing if we die off because of our own short-sightedness.
This is a rough, dark piece displaying great emotion.
"burgeoning bleakness" is a straightforward emotion-filled line that describes continuing loss and pain.
"Catapults consistent calm" --catapults as in "throws forward" or the actual device? The reason this doesn't make sense is in the first stanza you discuss pain, but then you discuss calmness in the second stanza. "leaving lost laments"... as in 'creating' a wailing cry? Actually, the first and third stanza work but the second one, makes the whole thing fall apart.
But all of this is my own opinion, but I could feel the despair and emotional upset in your stanzas.
I think that this was a well-written piece and a good exploration of how a new disability can really affect your world. I like how Mike and Susan were able to learn new skills and do them in new ways.
I can understand how overweening pride and lies can make one into someone you don't want to admit being. Humility is the much better path, even so far as to allow someone else to take credit for the good you did. You don't need anyone else to validate you... you are enough!
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