|Hi there, I’m reviewing this story for, ‘I write 2021’.
Thanks for sharing this tongue in cheek piece. It illustrates quite nicely what an alien race would consider about our Earth. Certainly they find it an unsuitable place to invade and make their own. We have pretty well made a bit of a mess of it, that’s for sure.
I liked the story very much. The only comment I have is the lack of punctuation.
I have made a few suggestions, as seen below.
“Have we reached?” The commander of the ship turned his gaze to the navigator, whose screen was lit with bright red dots.
“Look out of the window on your right, sir. The planet will come up shortly.”
Alute, commander of the ship which was sent out to search for a habitable planet, looked out to see a blue planet come into view.
"Let's hope we find this one habitable for our species," He commented hopefully, rising from his seat and walking up to the window.
"The initial studies were positive, sir, and it already has life on it, probably intelligent life, according to our collected data.”
"Send a probe and collect samples of air and water. Let’s see what we have here," Alute instructed, continuing to gaze out of the window.
"Sir, the results of the probe are available on your screen.”
Alute, moved to the screen and gazed at the various parameters of the analysis of water and air of the blue planet.
"I don't like this place. Every part of the planet is polluted, not one nook has been left unpolluted.” Alute's disappointment was clear from his voice.
"Maybe we can purify it, sir," one of the crew suggested, hoping that they could end their search.
"No. We don't have the time and resources to purify something that has been so badly maintained. Lets go to the option we had searched for." Alute sat back in his chair moving his gaze away from the blue planet.