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Review of Gentle people  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi elisabeth Nixie here. I found your work via the read and review option.

*ZodiacTaurus*
What a precious title.

Does it make sense that I wanted more from this poem? The concept was sweet and profound, but needed more development. One way to accomplish this would be to change your brief description, and use that line as the beginning of your prose. It's easily the most descriptive. Some modification would be required, but it shouldn't be too difficult, if my suggestion appeals to you.

*ZodiacTaurus*
I've never known a person like the one described here. Everyone I know is tense and quietly angry at themselves or the world. People try to show love and radiate positivity, but it's only a veneer.

You were careful to use the word (almost) before (always) because there is no such thing as (always) or (never) And that line applies to what I've written above.

If I do know anyone who radiates happiness and love, it's my sister-in-law. She hides her dark moments (we all have them) and her cheerfulness is almost obnoxious. I like being with her in small time increments because she's always 'on' and she drains my energy.

*ZodiacTaurus*
The last stanza held a sweet note of tenderness. With a little development, I can see this poem taking off. You're obviously poetically-inclined, as indicated in the brief description. Keep writing.


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Review of Lost on Route 66  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Words Whirling 'Round Nixie here. I found your prose via the 'read and review' link.


*Baretree3*
The title established the overall mood of the prose. In and of itself, it's poetic.

The mystique contained in these words required rapt attention to grasp the entire experience.

This folklore tale held me spellbound. In the first stanza, the reader sees the cohesiveness of a culture relocating. It's not only people leaving the homeland. The last line in the stanza draws the reader to the second stanza where we see how their culture traveled with them. I would almost call it romantic.

Each line flowed into the next, some rhymes were heard in one line. The total effect was lyrical and sweet with harmony, lost as the prose progressed.

*Right* Grand children > Grandchildren (one word), unless that is written correctly for the Irish language.

*Baretree3*
How true that change is the one constant in the universe. How tragic what those changes cost, particularly culture.

*Baretree3*
Even though the noun (Erin) was expressive; I double-checked to ensure that it meant Ireland.

*Baretree3*
My heart was breaking as the stanzas led me to the desolate conclusion. 'Ghosts not getting their kicks' was almost humorous in it's originality.

Fantastic write, with the allure of mystique.


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Review of Love Bread  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi fyn Nixie here. I found your work via the read and review option.

*ZodiacTaurus*
There was a fair amount of grappling on my part while trying to think of the best way to express my appreciation for your unique item.

I (loved) how this recipe was represented. In the first line ordinary flour was listed. As I read, I began to see what was happening. Bits here and there, real ingredients were included that made the recipe sound somewhat authentic. Yet, interspersed were pearls of wisdom. My fave was '1 cup of sweet nothings'.

*ZodiacTaurus*
Nothing was ambiguous, as the thought of my mom baking twenty apple pies at once came to mind. When I asked how she did it, my mom said she thought of all the happiness the pies would bring to loved ones.

*ZodiacTaurus*
As the story continued, the different ways to use the 'bread' hit home. You demonstrated deep insight into humanity and covered various aspects. I've never seen anyone write like this before, so this was a real treat for me. The loaf pan bakes for a few years, but the ring pan means a lifetime of bonding. Fantastic analogy.

Also pointed out were the differences in 'taste' as the days pass. The second sentence in that paragraph was wise and warmed my heart. We don't often feel that way on 'sour' days with another person, and it takes great skill to remember your sage words.

I'm fortunate because something as random as the 'random review' option landed me here. The irony is not lost on me. Thanks for giving me a happy start on this bleak day.

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Review by Nixie
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi JACE Nixie here, reviewing this item for "I Write in 2024" 

*Bulletb*
Well, this is a form of poetry I rarely see. I'm eager to check it out. The title and brief description are both clear and concise. Traveling on . . .

*Bulletb*
Well-executed, my friend. The red font used for the first letter of every line complimented the overall presentation. I liked the nice line spacing and enlarged font.

*Bulletb*
This works well for a pep talk, as well as a reminder. Every line makes sense, although I don't agree with all of them. I do jot a thought or two here and there, but mostly I focus on writing down bothersome thoughts before I meditate. (Tidbit Journal)?

'You can do it' reminds me of the old jingle for Nike sneakers. "Just do it." Those words hinder more than motivate me, but they're good to keep in my back pocket. What holds me back? Performance fears? I'm not good enough?

For those flashes of insights, they won't come again. They're in and out of my mind so fast, I'm lucky to catch a paper and pen in time.

'Notice the opportunities' caught me off guard. Good thinking, that I will remember. However, goals are not necessary for me. I either do or do not.

'Resistance has meaning' is a brilliant philosophy, so I'll steal that one from you as well. Addressing fears takes practice and recognition.

'Focus on the outcome' translates for me to 'if you do this now, you can stop thinking about it. And stop feeling guilty for not doing it.' Guilty thoughts are like demons preying on negativity. It's uncomfortable. So? Just go do it.

I've never read the book you mentioned. The title makes me nervous. Our thoughts create reality, right? It's terrifying, and self-actualizing to understand this concept and then successfully internalize it. I'll let you know when it works.

I'm so happy 'I write' landed me on your poem. It was my pleasure to read and comment on it. *Smile*

So many images!

~Nixie
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for entry "~ Two Hugs ~" 
Review by Nixie
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Nixie here. I found your item on the newsfeed.


*BoothB* Initial reaction
Because my family is completely non-affectionate, other than those awkward half-hugs, I wanted to know more about your experience.

*Boothb*Personal connection
I was appalled by the cold-shoulder, atrocious behavior of your siblings. The only consolation was that you were half-prepared to be rejected. The heartbreaker was the moment of reunification that wasn't there. At your mom's funeral of all places.

People who carry negative emotions are only hurting themselves. I managed to more or less forgive, but I can't forget. I even told my mom a white lie when she said 'we did have a good relationship, didn't we?' Absolutely not true, but, hey, she's in her late 90's so what was the harm in lying? It also gave me hope that she finally recognized the emotional damage she wrought on all five of her kids.

*Boothb*
My sister passed away when she was only thirty. I have three brothers. One is my baby-brother, my mom's favorite. The second is five years older than me, and mistreated me in awful ways. We don't really keep in touch, but he calls every year to wish me H-bday. Last of all, there is a ten-year span with my oldest brother. He's my fave, and understands me more than most.

Still, due to our upbringing, unless I basically threw myself into his arms, he wouldn't hug me at all. I cast no shade on anyone. We're a product of our upbringing. I'm all for hugs, however.

*Boothb*And in the end?
I wouldn't wish your experience on anyone, especially when you told your siblings you knew you weren't welcome! How devastating. Regardless, you had a rewarding hug in the end, and that is the memory you chose to honor. Good for you. *Heart*



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Review of The Tawny Tabby  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Dave!

*Turtle1* *Cat* *Dog1* *Giraffe* *Fox* *Owl2* *Starfishy*
Welcome to "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" Pet Raid
*Turtle1* *Cat* *Dog1* *Giraffe* *Fox* *Owl2* *StarfishV*


The precious cover art prepared the reader for what was to come.

I rarely involve myself in specific poetry forms, due to the fact that I feel as if the poet will feel undervalued. Especially after crafting their prose with such care.

Today I made an exception, and wow! I finally understood this particular form. Even without researching it. Enough of the technique, although that was the cherry on the cake.

Alliteration is one of my favorite writing devices, so I was right at home with the first stanza. That stanza gave me the impression of a fierce predator, not a cuddly and fuzzy pet. Cats are curious and focused when something befuddles them. Their antics are laughable.

This prose is intense and a great characterization for the tabby. Even with the restrictions (which are not restrictions for poets like you) the prose had an emotional pull. Maybe not the one people associate with most cats. You've presented another side of a cat's personality that not many write about. I feel as if I have to stand up and say, 'hey, cats are okay.'

Overall, I'd say this poem is technique more than something a person like me can relate to. And now I'm tip-toeing away from your poetic expertise and 'hypnotic glare'.


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~NIxie


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Review by Nixie
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Maryann

image for pet Day raid


This was the first poem you ever wrote? How old were you? In answer to your question, yes, I liked it very much.

The interweaving rhyming scheme and word choices held my attention. Mind you, I'm avoiding any 'pet death' references since I lost my baby in December of 2023. I surprised myself when I continued reading, although I had to keep that one door to my memories in my mind shut.

Fave lines
*Heart* 'Enchant my psyche'
...'your soothing purr hypnotizing me.'

The repetition of the last line was particularly difficult to deal with. Again, what else was holding me here, my heart tripping in fear? I wanted to know about your specific experience.

Poor little Penelope was well-characterized. The second and third stanza showed me how special she was. I had a shoulder-rider Tonkinese years ago, and that cat drove me insane, constantly needing affection and attention.

I'm trying to unsee the last paragraph. Death is traumatic, no matter when or how it comes about. Still, I'd prefer a natural death like Penelope's for my cats.

My only other thought is the inclusion of the large image at the end. That's what initially caught my eye. Since the image is nearly eclipsing the poem, maybe it could be reduced?

On a personal note: I thought you only loved dogs? *Laugh*

~Nixie
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Review of No Word of a Lie  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Adherennium Dr of Phoolishness Nixie here. I found your item via 'read and review'.

*ZodiacTaurus*
Although your presence on the Newsfeed is chatty, I don't believe I've ever been to your portfolio. I liked the title and the brief description. Between the two, I had a rough idea of what was to come.

*ZodiacTaurus*
The first stanza reminds of a guy's 'same old song'. How many times does a spouse take it seriously before it's too late? Hi protestations are ridiculous, text book, really.

How interesting to divide this into two parts. First the husband 'speaking,' and then the wife. The reader hears both versions of what's happening, which reminded me of an article in my magazine my mom faithfully read, It was titled 'Cam this marriage be saved?'.

The poem finds solid ground in the second stanza, and that's where the magic happens.

My fave line? Your promises are pie crust.

It caught me off guard, due to its originality and uniqueness.

Consider not capitalizing the beginning letter of each line, especially if it's an ongoing sentence. It's a common practice, but also one that bothers me.

*ZodiacTaurus*
I hope the wife learns from her experience, and maybe someday finds a man worthy of her. So many, like myself, become trapped in this type of partnership. And the guys never want to leave me, making the breakup nearly impossible. What does that mean? Low self-respect, and a desire for experiencing true love. I no longer trust myself, so I remain single.

Even if the first stanza isn't unique, your individual way of showing the problem was. Keep writing!


Who said a Taurus is stubborn

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Review of Bread  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi Genipher Nixie here, reviewing this item for "I Write in 2024" 

*Bulletb*
Fantastic set-up in the first paragraph. Right away, the reader knows this is some sort of fantasy, merely by your choice of your character's name. (Even if I can't pronounce it.) In a few short words, we 'see' what he looks like, and what he does during the day. The meal at the end of the paragraph further established the scene.

Unexpected word choices and sentence structure variation enhanced the plot. (smooshed)? *Laugh*

You nailed the giant's pronunciation of words consistently and in tune with the theme.

In this sentence, you're demonstrating the emotion and the punctuation is ruining the perfection.
How dare you steal me golden goose?!" Tadhg howled and stomped a foot

*Bulletb*
Beware of gerunds. He can't simultaneously kick mud from his boots and tromp.
Kicking mud from his boots, he tromped...

The distance between the actions of the giant stomping his foot and the human stumbling somehow seemed too far apart. I asked myself, 'why is the human stumbling?'

Did you mean to write (Sassenach) not (Sasanach)?

*Bulletb*
Thinking of the beginning: This rollicking story deserves a better title and brief description. I understand the need for what you've written, but there should be room for a few more words to showcase the essence of the story.

Well, that was a fun read. *Thumbsup*


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Review by Nixie
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi Troyizen Nixie here. I clicked on 'read and review' and up came your first chapter.



*Baretree3*
Okay, I can more or less see where this story is going, and it has tons of potential. I was distracted by too many small errors to truly immerse myself in the experience. I couldn't get a grasp on the order of events.

The futuristic setting sounds fantastical, with a few bumps here and there.

From the start, I asked myself, who is sitting in the chair? Agent Kyle or the receptionist? Either way, that action line belongs in the same line as the character.

Next paragraph, we're into backstory(?), and Agent Kyle's saga begins?

*Baretree3*
I liked the vivid description of the island. The word (small) is used twice in that paragraph. Consider changing one or the other.
Consider spelling out WSA when it is first mentioned.

Watch verb tenses. I tend to forget when I write reviews. *Headbang*

knew she never mixes (mixed) work with pleasure.

Who is saying this?
Yes, that's his name, but everyone calls him Hue.

Another oops
"They are only asking because we(we'd) like to sign up," said Sarah Kemp (Sara Kemp said, who was from the ESA.
From the ESA? What is the ESA?
Throughout, I've noted (said someone). all of these need to be corrected to the modern (someone said).

Who is doing this?
She walked up to the screen and looked it over.
Suggest > replace (she) with the character's name.

*Baretree3*
I will stop the review here, so I don't overwhelm you. Keep working on this. A few tweaks here and there will straighten out your setting. I'd like to work there. Agent Kyle is a cool character. I'd enjoy learning more about her. Keep working on this!





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Review by Nixie
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Kåre Enga in Montana Nixie here. I found your work via the read and review option.

*BookStack*
You penned such a lonely poem. I had to look up 'cantucci' and discovered it was what I call biscotti. And it does indeed soften. I dunk mine in coffee.

*Bookstack*
In the first verse, uncertainty lurks. Why is the child waiting? It sounds ominous. In the second verse, I guessed it was the father who was in a car wreck, as I'm sure you intended.

What a visual when her dad enters. My favorite part was the detail of rain dripping from his coat. Now I have a different fear. I know what can happen when driving on a rainy night. My daughter almost died because her boyfriend was reckless.

*Bookstack*
And then, wham. Realization smacked me in the face, despite the subtlety played out in merely a few verses. The turn-around was expertly woven into the story's fabric.

I especaily like the way you employed punctuation to suit you. The oddness of the spacing and ellipses wasn't odd at all. The formatting was essential to the flow of the prose. I admire writers who capture so much with so few words. Amazing work.

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Review of Oh My My  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Amethyst Angel🌸📝🪽 Nixie here. I'm responding with a review as per your request on the Newsfeed. It seems everywhere I turn, there you are.


*BoothB* Initial reaction
The presentation was atheistically pleasing. The enlarged font and generous whitespace encouraged me to read. It was obvious some extra love went into composing this.

*Boothb*Overall Impression
I've never even heard of IR, and I enjoyed learning a bit about the group. My musical preferences come for a different decade (not saying which).

So many successful musical artists flame and then burn out. What a tragedy. I haven't heard the phrase 'nervous breakdown' in a long time. He only needed one year to recover, which is remarkable. Some never return at all.

Most interesting was your speculation regarding hearing their music in public places. I agree with your summation, but I never would have considered that.

*Right* There was no need to write (totally unique) because (unique) stands on its own. However, as this piece was conversationally written, my observation wasn't a huge hiccup.

*Boothb*That's a wrap
I understand this is an intro to a project, and you're off to a fabulous start. Your writing voice is pleasant and the flow of words was almost rhymitic. Keep writing. *Wink*



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Review of She'll Be Back  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi intuey Nixie here. Congrats on the well-deserved win. I so happy you posted this poem on the Newsfeed.



*Baretree3*
I don't even know where to begin this review. Initially, the title and brief description, not to mention the cover art . . . that was the draw.

*Baretree3*
How did you make all those prompt words work so brilliantly?
I hated this guy from the very beginning, as you intended. The verses just kept coming, each more intensely than the last.

I knew from the beginning what happened to Angie, based solely on Ben's 'dialogue' presented by the narrator. I can see an enraged mom aware of all that's happening and what's to come.


*Baretree3*
This poem deserved a second, no, a fourth reading. It reminded me of a cop mystery, where the mom is dismissed. I've been upset all morning, and I just wanted to reach out and punch this guy in the face.

*Baretree3*
No particular verse struck me as a favorite. As soon as I chose one, I'd read another and reconsider. At this moment, I'm going with the discovery of the body, Angie's fist clutching Ben's necklace and the clarifying line that followed.

Let Ben stew in his pathetic life, hopefully in jail. Oh no, another favorite line. Angie's released into the light.

Your words, really a short story, overwhelmed my emotions. Congratulations on achieving a goal that I think most writers strive for. A connection between words written and the reader's connection. I won't forget this poem for a while. Fantastic write.



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Review of They Don't Bite  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Randy Ames Nixie here. I found your story in the Comedy Newsletter. I chose your story because I liked the title, and I wondered what the brief description meant. *Checkg*


*Baretree3*
It's tricky to begin a story with dialogue. I rarely rewrite an author's words, but I haven't added any of my own. I reordered a few sentences. Try this on for size.

Begin with setting the scene.

A fire crackled in a ring of stones. Maybe add where this was happening. A forest that could be described?

Now keep Tamalia's actions with her dialogue. Like this:

"They don't bite," Tamalia said, smoothing out her long skirt and laying down on her back. She stuffed long socks into worn dark leather boots, and then pulled up the blanket of her multicolored bedroll.

The blanket is separate from the bedroll? It would be an easier sentence without mentioning the blanket. Is the blanket necessary for plot advancement?

*Right* Start a new paragraph.

*Baretree3*
I'm not a comma expert, but I don't think you need one separating this. I can't remember the reason why. I probably should not be giving comma advice.

Human Witchy Woman(,) with some gray streaks,

*Baretree3*
The concluding paragraph was visual, both in the description of the witchy woman and the placement of the frog. Hilarious. Nice write. Keep on writing. *Smile*


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for entry "What's Her Story #47" 
Review by Nixie
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Amethyst Angel🌸📝🪽 Nixie here. I found your work posted on the Newsfeed.

*ZodiacTaurus*
The internal dialogue drew me right into the story. Somewhere I read that using weather to establish the character's mood is considered cheating. Isn't that crazy? I think weather is a precise way of setting the scene and/or mood. I'm sorry to say that poor advice is stuck in my head, and I never use the weather in my stories. Yet, it's so powerful, as demonstrated in your story.

*ZodiacTaurus*
I was worried when Kenzie left her car to enter the store. I needed one statement to establish her leaving the vehicle somewhere out of the way.

The places this story took me was shocking. Dolls scare me like demons, although they were a big part of my childhood. I've never listened to Imagine Dragon, and like Kensie, I thought they were mostly loud and too much for me.

My favorite theme is how one thing leads to another. First the doll, then the song, then the reunification of Kenzie and her mom. But you didn't stop there. The story arc was completed by one last and amazing detail. It all fit together in a tight little story.

The challenges of "Game of Thrones"  are well known. I wonder if this story came easily for you? The reader is immersed in the story with the many senses you drew on, most specifically on the smell. Thrift shops can be dangerous places to buy from. I've bought a few pieces with such incredible negative energy, I had to give them away.

*ZodiacTaurus*
Since this is titled "What's her story #47" I pulled up the blog to see if she was an ongoing character. Imagine my surprise when I discovered the '47' related to posting "Game of Thrones"  stories. Today has been especially emotional for me. My mom is not one to communicate, and although I've asked several times if I can visit, the answer is always no. There's always a credible-sounding reason, but I'm still puzzled and hurt.

Thanks for stirring up the commotion in my mind I avoid. That seems like a contradictory statement, but sometimes it's good to cry. Keep writing, as I know you will.

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Review of Late Night  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Weirdone-Back in the games Nixie here, reviewing this item for "I Write in 2024" 

*Bulletb*
This poem painted a picture of a sweet child rebelling, just a little bit. I had to look up the definition of a Cinquain because I like to learn new things, and without looking it up, the prose didn't make much sense as far as appearances go. I wondered why everything was unevenly spaced. I learned something today.

It must be difficult to choose this form. I write mainly free form, but nothing that has rules.

*Bulletb*
I was too afraid during my childhood to do anything other than go to sleep as ordered. I adored this poignant moment, imagining what it would have been like to 'break a few rules'.

*Bulletb*
My only suggestion would be--don't capitalize the first letter of every line if it's a continuation of a sentence. While I researched, I didn't find any indication that this was a requirement. However, poetic license and author's discretion apply.

Even though I sometimes punctuate a poem, I like it best the way you've written it. No punctuation until the last sentence.

Thanks for the journey to Teddy Bear Land. No one will know, other than the ones who read this. I'm not a fan of this word, but the word (cute) definitely applies here.

~Nixie

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Review by Nixie
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Jeff Nixie here. I found your work via the read and review option.

*BookStack*
I am on my way over to the Shop of Wonders. I hope it's still open to ordinary people like me. I'm hoping to win the cloak of invisibility to use for all the times I wished for a hole to open and swallow me. (I'm not that great with people.)

*Bookstack*
Your story sounded totally accurate, and was extremely well-written. It reads exactly as it it were an advertisement for the village, maybe a scroll to be posted on a tree, provided the tree doesn't object, of course.


*Bookstack*
I enjoyed reading this so much, I was sad when the story concluded. It's wonderful to imagine a place such as The Shop of Wonders. I'd most likely spend hours wandering around. (If I had a protection spell to ward off any negative energy.)

I see this was written as a challenge, which can be nerve-racking. If you had any trouble composing the story, it definitely does not show in the writing.

Your work caught me completely off guard. Today must be my lucky day. Now I will fly off on my magic carpet. Thanks for the trip through fantasyland.

Well done, my friend.

~Nix



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Review of Luck of the Bard  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Just Jae Nixie here. I found your story by using the 'read and review' option.

*Vignette1*
I've seen many movies and read books about traveling bards. But I never gave a thought to what their life would be like when they were in-between performances.

*Vignette2*
I found it easy to relate to the character, but I never suspected that she was a half elf. I wonder what she looks like? What her life was before she was a Bard. How was she born as a half-elf? Human and elf interactions?

The first paragraph set the scene, and I felt a little sorry for her. Her life seemed fraught with difficulties and challenges, yet maybe she takes it all in stride, as the story implied.

*Vignette3*
The prompt words flowed seamlessly with the story.

I really liked the optimistic conclusion, although I had to Google the difference between a clover and a shamrock, as I'd never heard on one flowering.

Overall, even though the story was only two paragraphs, I enjoyed the read. There's room for expansion, but since I don't know your intentions, or if this was a contest piece, I'll leave it at the writer's discretion.

In the end, I'm happy for the half-elf because such a small, simple observation changed her day. It's the little things that make a difference. I didn't understand the title choice or the brief description. Nevertheless, the point being, I didn't skip past the tiny story and entered into a world previously unknown. *Smile*

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Review by Nixie
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi Happy to write. Nixie here. I found your item via 'read and review'.

*ZodiacTaurus*
The overall theme is love conquering the debilitating effects of inner resentment and inability to reframe negativity? The woman's personality was well-defined, and made me feel alone. I can't fault her for the way she's experienced life, she's endured more than anyone should have to.

*ZodiacTaurus*
I'm asking myself as I read, what is the main purpose of this prose? The formatting is off, so my attention and appreciation was often disrupted. Maybe you wrote this somewhere else and copy/pasted it here? Some words have no spaces between them, and the commas are mostly incorrectly placed, or missing.

Another curiosity was the title. It's not really a title at all, more of a paraphrasing of the prose. I can see this truncated version in my mind.

"She Never Wore Green"

Another suggestion. The first line isn't needed and added to the word count. And, consider breaking up that last stanza since it's off balance with the rest of the verses, and presents as a block of text.

What was the woman's connection to the color?

*ZodiacTaurus*
I liked the surprising conclusion. So many may have turned the stranger aside, judging him only by appearance. My conclusion is that since the woman had lived a life of non-stop bitterness and hatred, she saw her inside-self portrayed in the grimy man who knocked on her door. Together, they found a reason to be happy.

I read that this is your second attempt to pull the prose together. A writer's journey is a lonely path. We all need at least one more pair of eyes to help us along. I'm encouraging you to continue the quest. Keep writing!


Who said a Taurus is stubborn
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Review of Honeymoon  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Ned Nixie here. I found your work via the read and review option.

*BookStack*
My attention was first drawn to the prompt word because, per contest rules, that's a requirement. (I'm guessing it was for a contest.) It would be great if the poem included a link to the contest in case others might be interested.

*Bookstack*
The phrase 'so good looking' sounded so bland, it was almost meaningless. That is, until I read the entire poem. As an off-side comment, I liked the overall symmetry. And I do like poems with no punctuation until the period at the end.

*Bookstack*
With the title, the poem is ironic. There's no way the honeymoon will last between these two. You chose an excellent word to rhyme with gastric. And even the brief description rhymed. Putting this all into the theme you were establishing was quite clever.

The rhythm was sing-song and fun to read.

The cover art (for me) was off-putting. I thought it was a picture of an octopus. *Laugh* On my third try, I finally saw the spaghetti.


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Review of What Did He Say?  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi SandraLynn Team Florent! Nixie here. I found your entry here "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  to see what writers did with the weird prompts.



*Baretree3*
The story kicked off with a compelling title. The scene was established in the second paragraph. Nicely done.

Kids can be impossible to understand at Aiden's age, probably only his parents would be able to interpret the words. lol.

From the first paragraph, I wondered if Aiden had any sort of mental disability, mainly attention deficit disorder.

His repetitious behaviour gave me that impression. I decided to go with that hunch, even though it didn't play out.

*Baretree3*
I liked his character because his actions led to the patience of the grandmother. I thought, 'oh, good job grandma, distracting him.' Although the gift of the egg wasn't so very wise. The image of him wiping the goo on his shirt made me cringe.

Once again, this action set off the next one. When Aiden began to cry, I could also easily envision him with those 'big fat tears'.

*Baretree3*
Why I almost skipped over this. Readers like to see a larger font and more white space. It's much easier to read. The words are not in a tight snarl, and no squinting is required.

I liked your story enough to read, despite that personal drawback of mine.

*Baretree3*
I never, ever would have guessed what Aiden meant by 'bottle chicken'. But the grandfather had enough experience to fathom the meaning.

A cute story all around. Simple and light. You made me smile. *Smile*




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Review by Nixie
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Jeff Nixie here. I found your work posted on the Newsfeed this morning.

*ZodiacTaurus*
The catchy title that could mean anything drew me in. *Checkg* Yay for the larger font and generous white space.

I resisted my usual approach to reading stories and started at the beginning, rather than the end. I'm so proud of myself, and so grateful because I was awarded with the twist at the end.

I enjoyed the back and forth dialogue, all the while trying to figure out what was going on. Nothing sounded sinister, but they were there after hours.

...intermittent aerosol hissing...gave me an ah-ha moment, but I was still hesitant to draw a conclusion.

*ZodiacTaurus*
I had to laugh after reading paragraph three and how newbies were needed for special missions. The second sentence is the longest run-on that I've ever read, yet it didn't feel awkward in the least. In fact, I had to go back and read it again to ascertain it was a run-on. Great job making all those words flow smoothly.

*ZodiacTaurus*
I have to toss in a personal connection. A group of coworkers and I got permission to be in the building after hours. We spent hours decorating the office for Halloween. There was one guy who never seemed to work. We put 'cobwebs' around his in-box. *Laugh*

*ZodiacTaurus*
Nice play on the turnaround. Black-ops lost its ominous overtones to the sounds of laughter. I hope the C.E.O. is an affable guy. Our cobweb co-worker was not amused.

Clever, clever story, where the prompt was easily slipped in.

Dr Who and his Tardis

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Review of A Boy and his Dog  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi StephBee Nixie here. I found your item listed on the Newsfeed. You must be one popular woman!

*ZodiacTaurus*
Oh what fun to imagine a talking dog. I bet this would be a great poem for kids to read, or be read to. The first stanza set the scene, and what followed was easily visualized. I particularly liked the third stanza due to the unique wording. (hunted down his pants) and the dog (pranced).

The rhyming scheme flowed, and the read was fast as it mirrored Andy's panic.

While the title fits the poem, it's not overly exciting or enticing. The brief description was the draw. I'm sitting here wondering if this was written for a GoT challenge. That would explain quite a bit.

*ZodiacTaurus*
Here's a few places where I got perplexed.

The last line in the third stanza 'felt off' because the word (over) was used twice. Consider using one or the other.

I don't know who Suzie is, or why she's in the narrative. The indication is that of a party the night before. I figured Andy was young, so the party theme didn't quite fit.

Note to self- "Adjust your perception, Nixie, and fill in the blanks." Yup, I got it.

*ZodiacTaurus*
I'm compelled to answer the last question. In the event that Andy is not delusional, and everyone can hear the dog, Andy would make a fortune with a video.

Cute dog in the cover art. I'm guessing it's yours? Thanks for a fun morning read.

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Review of Mr. Nits  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi SandraLynn Team Florent! Nixie here. I found your work posted here. "The Dialogue 500" 

*BookStack*
This was a fun read, sort of the opposite of what happens to me. I need to speak to at least four people to get the correct answer. Last time, it was a question about my cell phone. That took four people to answer, and four hours of my time.

I got a big kick out of this witty dialogue, and the IRS agent who couldn't understand a thing. Now, being passed off because the person working with you is a whole new ball game. The unfortunate Canadian has to run through the whole spiel again.

I've had the experience of someone simply ending my call, on purpose, with no explanation. So weird.

*Bookstack*
For some reason, I thought the contest was for no dialogue, so I was flummoxed as to why this story was all dialogue. *Headbang*

If you add some white space here, and if you're comfortable doing so, increase the font size. It's much easier to read with those two elements included.


*Bookstack*
My favorite two lines were the exchange about pledge. Hilarious.

Your story was easily relatable and kept me entertained. I liked the Canadian's dialogue, with 'gonna' and 'wanna'. I'm not sure if that matches a Canadian accent. It sounded purely southern.


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Review of Stuck  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Genipher Nixie here. I'm reviewing your story for "I Write in 2024" 


*BookStack*

Sometimes, short is best for a title, and the brief description pulls in the reader. *Checkg*

I've been mulling over this prompt since I first saw it. I had the same idea as having a slab of meat to lure the cougar away. What wasn't explained was how the character wound up in the tree, which may have been part of the prompt. Were those three prompt phrases supposed to be answered? This story covered two of them.

*Bookstack*
From the beginning, you penned a Mary Poppin-ish tone which carried throughout. I kept thinking, oh, this is Mary Poppins, and I was right.

I got a kick out of all the things she had in her backpack and her reaction to the items as she pulled them out. The inner dialogue had me laughing. Especially the chair. Or maybe the potted plant.

My favorite phrase because of the word choice.
"Another blind plunge,"

I also liked the alliteration in the first sentence, last paragraph, (practically perfect).

*Bookstack*
And to top it all off, the Mary Poppins umbrella carried her to safety. Cute take on the prompt. This is a story that brings a smile. Thanks for the read.



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