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Review of Deciphering Love  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.0)
It is a nice poem. It is about how the idea of love changes in a lifetime, from childhood onward. I liked the following particularly--

In innocence, love seemed
Quite a violent thing...
You had a crush, perhaps
You fell in love, and then he
Broke your heart.

Keep writing.

--M C Gupta
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Review of Inside India 2010  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a lengthy account of your visit to India--too lengthy for me to read (I live in India) but I am sureothers visiting India would lap every word of it.

You have an engaging style. Sample this--

"A woman had approached us once with a baby in her arms, asking not for money, but for food to keep her baby alive. Although neither looked starved, we went into the store and started selecting items we thought the woman and the baby could use. The woman turned down the products we produced, and went along the shelves, selecting things for herself. She came back to us with an armload of goods. Although puzzled, we bought them for her, only to learn the truth much later when she had tried to hit us up for goods again a few days later."

Thanks for sharing this.

--M C Gupta
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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.5)
My first impression after reading this article is that it is remarkable for a physician to write on such a historical topic. Maybe you are from that part of the world.

You have done a good job by writing a succinct article in the form of questions and answers. This is a style that is reader friendly.

There are minor mistakes of grammar which are understandable because English is not your first language.

--M C Gupta, MD
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Review of Snap  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a very good poem. It has vivid imagery and the reader almost experiences the scene that you describe as--

I love the feeling of a crisp fall day
as I walk into the bare and quiet woods
where pine needles snap under my feet
and unseen creatures scurry away.

Well done. Keep writing.

--M C Gupta
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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.5)
Thanks for giving the readers a brief over view of Japan. It is the only country in the world where civilian population was bombarded by atom bombs dropped by the world's self- styled champion of human rights.

You have done well to draw attention to excessive whaling in Japan.

I may add a piece of information about Japanese legal system. It is based on arbitration and reconciliation and mediation. There is not much litigation in the sense this term is understood in USA and UK and India.

--M C Gupta
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Review of Sea Scape  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a nice description of various moods of the sea--

Fickle, furious dervish, at times
Flailing ferocity at mankind.
Power unleashed,
Only to return to its peaceful temperament.
Undulating…..
Yet again.

Very well described.

--M C Gupta

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Review of My Hope  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (5.0)
Here is a beautiful poem.

Let the poem describe itself--

My hopes and my dreams I thought were fulfilled
‘Til I looked into your eyes
Up to that moment I never had felt
Such love—Oh, quite a surprise!

Your tiny helplessness melted my heart
As you stretched and moved about
Newborn and fragile, a small little pearl,
Precious without any doubt.

Protective instinct, primeval, I know
Filled innermost parts of me
I prayed to my Father, to give me strength
Your stalwart safeguard to be.

*****

I am reminded of--

God could not be everywhere. Hence he created mothers.

--M C Gupta
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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a description of life in this world; of death; and of life in heaven, all three combined in the description of one who has seen all the three.

Ref: A nurse knocked on the door of my room and there was no answer. They entered. They found me dead. I had a content look on my face.

>>> This reminds me about the OOB (Out of body) and near death experiences of those close to death described by Raymond Moody's "Life after life". This book had been a best seller. He was a PhD in psychology and later got his MD.

--M C Gupta
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Review of Family  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a beautiful (and realistic) poem about a family--

They scream,
They shout,
They jump about,
They push,
They fight,
They sometimes bite,

***

Oh, what a description in simple words!

AND, the above deeds are truly compensated by the end lines--

They trust,
They love,
They love hugs,
My life,
My soul,
My family.

This poems deserves full 5 stars.

--M C Gupta
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Review of Parental guidance  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (3.5)
This item is about parenting. Its description reads--"the joy of parenting from the perspective of those involved".

You need to improve your writing by paying attention to punctuation and by keeping the sentences short. The opening sentence reads--

"I find myself wondering what we learn from the adventure called parenthood whether we be a child or an adult who has suffered the joys and pains that attend surviving as a child what took place during a growing up kind of jungle."

It looks a bit clumsy.

--M C Gupta

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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a nice poem about being in love with the sea.

The last stanza is very well written--


Each time I return I am certain
One day no returning there’ll be,
At least not in body but spirit
Forever to be one with the sea.

Keep writing.

--M C Gupta
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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.5)
This poem gives a strong and clear message in no ambiguous words--

So, men, just let her have a free hand
with design of the house, for you’ll adjust
to whatever she picks, but know beforehand
unless everything pleases her she’ll just bust.

Those who forget it do so at their own peril!

--M C Gupta
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Review of Alligators  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.0)
It is a nice article, based on experience, about alligators. I share your concern for cruelty towards them. Whales often have a similar fate.

It was new for me to learn that homing instinct is less in young alligators less than six feet in length


--M C Gupta
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Review of Baby  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (5.0)
I wondered why this 11 line poem, without rhyme or rhythm, has been rated five stars by five viewers. I found the answer. It lies in the last line---"No wonder babies cry."

But these four words, "No wonder babies cry", are not dramatic in themselves. The dramatic change occurs just before these.

Quite worth a read.

Write on.

--M C Gupta

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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is quite a humorous story, definitely worth a read.As things are, humour is not common on this or other sites. The fact is--It is not easy to write humour.

Ref: since I had all ready bought myself two new movies for Christmas

>>> since I had already bought myself...........

M C Gupta

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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (3.5)
The last stanza reads

When tears find their way to my eyes, I am not distraught.
I can smile in the pain; it will only last for a moment.
The joy of your love is new and fresh every day.
I know I can turn to you. No doubt. No fear.

This is followed by one more line, referred below.

***

The reader is prone to think these lines are addressed to a human being. Such thought is strengthened by the fact that throughout the poem, 'y' in you is not capitalised.

But, then, the poem ends with--

I know I can turn to you. No doubt. No fear.
My Savior, My Lord.

******

Maybe you knowingly created the suspense.

--M C Gupta


last line reads--
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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (3.0)
The theme of this story is good but its presentation is not perfect.

1--In the beginning, you write-- Couple A believed in raising their child with strict discipline and control while Couple B believed in giving their child whatever he desired.

LATER, you write--

And as for couple B’s child their strict and disciplined way of raising him drove him insane.

So, you see, you have lost the plot yourself:)

2--There are issues of grammar and punctuation throughout.

--M C Gupta
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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (3.5)
This 31 word poem can be easily summarised in its first nine words--

There's me:
Lonely and sad.

And then there's you

****

These three lines could fit thousands of situations with the common theme--"The girl loves boy and has certain expectations which are apparently unfulfilled,leading to loneliness and sadness in the mind of the girl (and, often, a feeling of being unable to understand on the part of the boy.)

--M C Gupta
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Review of Winter Sonnet  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (5.0)
It is a nice sonnet describing the behaviour of a bear, a bird and a child in response to cold, icy winter. The rhyme and syllable scheme is perfect.

No more comments would have been needed but the last two lines read--

Now, I ask you honestly, not in jest:
Of the bear, bird, or child, which one knows best?

***

The real answer is that each of the three acts as per the learnt behaviour / reflexes. The bear hibernates to avoid freezing dead. The bird migrates to avoid freezing dead. The child plays with ice during the day because he knows that, in the night, he will be in the warm embrace of the mother.

None of them is best. All are equally good.

--M C Gupta
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Review of Hiding 55 words  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a nice 55 word story. It talks about a young child, in the care of a baby sitter, who, afraid of a monster, hides in the coat closet. The story ends with--She hated this babysitter.

The reader is left thinking that the monster and the baby sitter are one and the same. Maybe that is what the author meant.

You have a good style. Keep writing.

--M C Gupta
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Review of Lovers in fight  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This is described as--A short poem.

This description does not help the reader because, even without being told, a glance at the 28 word poem tells him that it is a short poem.

The title is--Lovers in fight.

To me, the first 5 lines show the fight between lovers. The last two lines show that, after the fight / departure, he came back to her in a mask.

If I am right, fine.

--M C Gupta
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Review of fight  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I feel intrigued and curious when I fail to understand a poem.

Ref:

I cried when he told me get out
he is too poor to see me
a rich man's son who
walk away from his hall of fame

***

It appears that the girl is saying--My friend is "a rich man's son who
walk away from his hall of fame", meaning thereby that he left his rich paternal home and chose to live a poor man's life.

Now, "he is too poor to see me".

Because of his poor fate, "he told me get out". This made the girl cry.

If the above is what you meant, it's fine. Otherwise, please explain the intended meaning / message.

--M C Gupta
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Review of Curtain Smile  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (3.5)
This is an intriguing poem for the following reasons:

i)--It is described as --A poem written for the Musical Sentiments contest. But I do not find any reference here to music or music instruments.

ii)--Even otherwise, I am not able to understand what message is sought to be conveyed to the reader or what is the main theme of the feelings being expressed by the writer.

NOTE--I understand that I am not the gold standard to judge others' poetry and that my intrigue may be because of my own difficulty in comprehension.

--M C Gupta
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Review of Unbroken Stones  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a beautiful, sad poem about the loss of a young daughter--

A young man stood upon a small hill.
A look of sadness tested his iron will.
He knelt beside a tiny mound of green grass.
There a marble marker of a very young lass.

**

And, about the mound--

He placed a loving hand upon the mound.
His goodbye to his daughter made no sound.

*****

It is written in simple words full of emotion.

--M C Gupta
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Review of Sage Advice  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This is a nice story, a repetition of the usual event-- a girl falling for the superficial affection of a boy, ignoring the warning of well wishers and, getting pregnant and forgotten by the boy.

***

Its description reads--Young woman ignores a friends warning.
>>> friend's

***

The end line--Things got of hand, I’m pregnant, and Cameron doesn’t know me.
>>> out of hand.

--M C Gupta
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