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Review of Secrets  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This is a good poem. No proof needed. It has already an average rating of 4.5 by 63 persons.

What is the secret of such high rating?

It is that you have expressed your feelings in simple, natural words, like in the first three lines--

I want to hold you close
As you tell me your secrets
And I tell you mine.

--M C Gupta

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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a difficult poem to understand. I had to read it twice.

It seems you are unhappy about a relationship and keep on shedding tears, while the partner does not bother about them.

The difficulty in understanding could be lessened by attending to grammar.

*******

The description reads--A poem about trusting another person with tears usually shed over them.

>>> Shed over them? Who is this "them"?

***

The end lines are well written--

I trust you with my tears,
And you collect them in your pocket
Like so many after-dinner mints,
Being hoarded for later on.


--M C Gupta

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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
What I gather from this poem is that it is written, in light mood, about a worker, maybe a carpenter, who is not very good at his work and is told by the employer that he is not smart enough. This hurts him and, in a fit of rather subconscious feelings, he starts the work assigned to him and spoils it further.

The take home message seems to be that admonition never helps.

--M C Gupta

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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a beautiful poem, with excellent flow even without rhyme, that tells about a veteran going for a job interview. Before the interview, he sits on a bench in a nearby park, just to pray to God for success. There comes a blue bird and seats itself near him. He says to her--

“Wish me luck little guy, you're a good friend.”

Then he goes for the interview, gets the job, and as he comes out,

Walking to the elevator he noticed something
That blue bird was out on the ledge all along
The bird pecked on the glass so he reached out
He touched the little guys beak with his finger.

***

What more could one wish to find in a good poem?

--M C Gupta
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Review of Blind Date  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is an enjoyable comedy about a blind date described as--

The idea of a date from an online service
made my palms sweaty and my heart nervous.
His email said, I'll pick you up at eight.
My response was, Sure that sounds great.

When he arrived knocking at the door
My anxiousness continued to soar.
At first sight this man looked mean
and his voice stumbled, Hi, I'm Dean.

We need more of humour in poetry. Thanks for providing the same.

--M C Gupta

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Review of The Snowy Silence  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a good poem. The concept, its expression, the word choice and the rhyme / flow, all are remarkable. There are no mistakes.

What is it about?--

Against a coal black canvas,
The snow falleth white.
The curls of ebony hair
Catch the winter's bite.

The flurry of the snow
And the gust of the wind
Hide truth's evil glare
Of a mind left to mend.

NOTE--"truth's evil glare" appears wrong / surprising, but a little thought enables one to feel its apprpriateness here.

--M C Gupta

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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem is nothing short of the work of a genius!

Let me explain--

Some think that God
Shapes every human in the palm of His hand,
Making them all
Normal
Good
Right.

I do not think so.
I have my own thoughts.

Humans are mass-produced in Heaven
Flesh poured into little molds
And then roughly shoved onto conveyor belts
By little nude children with the snow-white wings of a dove.

AND, the story / poem moves on, wonderfully.

--M C Gupta
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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a sort of spiritual story built around a wonderful imaginary thought--

"I fell down yesterday. I fell through a rip in space and time. I descended into the dark unknown and landed in a meadow of wild rhyme. I watched the sun descend behind snow capped peaks. Then I curled into a fetal ball to sleep secure and warm throughout the night."

You have an impressive descriptive style.

--M C Gupta
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Review of Our Lady's Tears  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (3.5)
This is a poem written in the praise of the Lord.

Lily of the Valley is a beautiful flower
Came about in the worlds darkest hour

>>> world's

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NOTE--The lily probably refers to the following--

Picture a simple woman kneeling to pray
Her tears becoming flowers on that day

Nice thoughts!
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Review of One Poem  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This is a poem meant to convey the idea, apparently, that life is a poem and we keep on living / writing it day after day in a monotonous manner. The description reads--"I suspect I am just writing the same old poem over and over again."

Some lines from the poem--


"I will write one poem repeatedly
until I stop writing one poem repeatedly.

I am writing one poem repeatedly.
It is the only poem there is, and to write it is the only thing to do."

I feel over-repetition itself should be avoided in a poem.

--M C Gupta

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Review of My first car  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.0)
It is a good and readable story about an old car that needed repairs every now and then from the owner, a 14 years old boy (the author) who became quite adept at doing those chores himself. It is well written.

**

This particular car, my very first, would be a collectors dream today
>>>collector's

--M C Gupta

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Review of A Fable  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is described as a fable and a fable it is, told by the tribal chief to his clan. It revolves around the competition between the Good Lord and the Bad Lord (God and Satan), the scapegoats being a young man and a fairy angel.

I was not able to discern a clear message from this. I wish I could locate and ask the tribal chief.

The author has a rich style, exemplified by--

"His heart was filled with joy, contentment and kindness. He would skip through the forest and marvel at the wondrous gifts that nature offered. The smell of freshly cut grass, the song of the bird on wing, the rustle of autumn leaves beneath his feet and the warmth of the evening sun caressing his back were just a few of the treasures that filled every day of his life. The Good Lord looked down upon him and was happy, for this was how he intended things to be."

--M C Gupta
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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (3.5)
This is a small, free form, ten line poem. The second stanza of 7 lines was difficult to understand--

silent alienated night
and cold winds cursorily
incarcerates the breath
in lungs the face
sunken like
a skull, the body still
like death itself.

***

I suggest the following:

silent alienated night
and cold winds
cursorily incarcerate
the breath in lungs
the face sunken
like a skull,
the body still
like death itself.

--M C Gupta
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Review of On Cemetery Hill  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.5)

This is a beautiful poem coming from the heart and, unusually but sincerely asks the departed souls to pray for the bereaved son. [Usually, it is the one left behind who prays for the departed souls.]

The opening is just great--


On the cemetery hill my loved ones lay.
When I go there I often kneel and pray.
I ask dad and mom to pray for their son.
I stand above them my talking is done.

***

One day I'll join them at heavens home.
>>> heaven's


--M C Gupta

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Review of My Lady  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is a nice little poem for the lady of one's desire and dreams.

what has brought her to me
I cant even hope to know

>>> can't

**

and soon we will be together
once we met in sunshine
joined will we be forever

>>> I think you mean-- once we meet in sunshine.


--M C Gupta

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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
It was a demanding task to write a love letter to self. For me, even attempting so would be an ordeal. You have faced the challenge well. Even the opening lines leave a clear impression--




I'm sorry for starving you
And introducing you to weed
I'm sorry for making you drink
And lowering your chances to succeed.

Write on.

M C Gupta

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Review of Beauty  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (3.5)
The description reads--My friend, my horse- a Sonnet.

Its rhyme scheme is like a Shakespearean sonnet. The syllable counts are not. One line has 4 syllables. Another has 11. A Shakespearean sonnet should have 10 syllables in each line.

Your topic and style are good. You need to work upon it.

--M C Gupta

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Review of The Sun Also Sets  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
This is a sort of fantasy tale where a bull, along with its owner, enters the time machine and travels back in time to have a few words with Ernest Hemingway in Paris. He had written a few bull stories.

All in all, the story is not as engaging as some others written by you.

--M C Gupta

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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is an unusual poem--very unusual. Let us have a look at the opening lines:


Did she ever love me?
How can I even prove it?
She continues to ignore me,
Like she’s done for years and years.

Anyone reading the above would think this is about a woman one loves.

BUT, just hold on. Read the next four lines--

Yet, still I wonder,
And still I crave
Those moments that I’ve never had,
With my mother.

****

This poem hints at the mental tragedy of someone who has, due to whatever circumstances, been deprived of mother's love.

The poem is well written.

--M C Gupta

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Review of Taj Mahal  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Dr. Taher,

You have written a good poem regarding the word famous monument of love, the Taj Mahal, built by the emperor Shah Jahan for his beloved wife Mumtaj.

The crux of this event is in the following--

And then I died and you,
Mourned for me and cried,
You wept and sobbed and grieved,
And in lonely nights, sighed

Remembering your vows to me,
You then swept the tears aside,
Calling world's best craftsmen,
You planned an edifice for me.

--M C Gupta

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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is an interesting small article about bees and wasps and about how to invite the former to one's garden. The answer is simple--plant flowers which attract bees. However, small and simple things often do not come to mind instantly but have to be learned through experience, as is the case here.

It is well written.

--M C Gupta

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Review of RAINBOWS ARE FREE  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a poem describing a rainbow, as perceived by the author, up side down, described as follows:

My conceptual rainbow is a kaleidoscope of color too!
But opposite from the pattern of the one seen here on Earth
In my mind my rainbow is turned up-side-down
Just like my world-view changed since my born-again Christian birth

The author has tried to relate this view to his Christian faith in rather unusual words--


I'm His Masterpiece...and like the 'bow' in the sky...
Both of us belong to THE ALMIGHTY TRINITY!!!

The poem has a reasonable degree of flow and is written in abcb rhyme.

--M C Gupta

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Review of Pitch  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is an item with no ratings. The last but one line of this poem reads--

"I pitch these words for any astute enough to catch."

I think I have caught it:)

You have done a nice work by playing upon the word pitch / pitcher in its various meanings / connotations.

***

In the course of thristing for a drink
>>> thirsting


--M C Gupta

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Review of The Date  
Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
This poem is a saga of man meeting woman, she feeling that her life has become enriched, then the dates start being missed, with the ultimate stoppage.

In itself, the above is nothing remarkable. It is the author's style that makes the writing different from the routine.

I particularly liked the following--




Then you came. Showing yourself to me as a flame to a moth.
Your pride only enhance my excitement of you.
You made me stand tall. You gave me meaning. I felt alive.

*****

You need to be careful about grammar etc.:


--I could of never done it without you.
>>> I could have never done it without you.


--M C Gupta

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Review by Dr M C Gupta
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a nice poem on a topic not usually chosen to write poetry--A "fatherless" girl meets a stranger who happens to be her father.

You have chosen a good opening. The first three couplets are--

A stranger lurks, stalking my steps.
Into my life, carrying regrets.

Knocks at the door, greeted with a smile.
Said he has traveled many a mile.

You know my name and resemble my brother.
You say you used to date my Mother.

Write on.

--M C Gupta

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