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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
First thoughts: wow, this was different than any other poem i've read. You should turn this into a story!

What I liked: how unexpected this was. I was really expecting the guy to be dead when the demon first popped out! I found it funny that he somehow convinsed the demon to change into a human!

Favorite line: ""And honest Your Honor, that’s exactly how I met and married, my wife."

Good job with this poem!
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Review of Time to Go Away  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
wow, was that ever an interesting poem! I really liked it.

I liked how emotional it was. I could feel your emotions coming through the poem. Was this poem based on something that happened to you in real life?

the only thing I'm confused about is why your location of the peom is under America/Historic? I didn't really see anthing in there about either of them.

Keep writing, you're good for it!
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
1) I loved your title! it was very different and connected to the poem very well!
2) your poem was short, but sweet. Just the way I like them! :D
3) I think your poem (well, more importantly, your title) was speaking to me. somehow I thought it was saying don't let life go by too fast. again, if that wasn't your intention, I apologize but that was how I felt!

have a good day! *Heart*
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Review of Nick's Accident  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
wow this was a little sad! :( I normally don't read sad poems but, eh, what did I know? :D I just saw the title and thought it was a story, not a poem. but, I digress.

it was only three paragraphs, but it was more a story than anything. the story of a young boy who gets in a car accident and is changed for life. *sighs* how often life changes for us humans, doesn't it?
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
when I saw the word "May" I KNEW I had to review this poem! May is also my birthday month!

1) I loved the title of this poem. not only does it rhymthe but it's an appoperate title cause I always feel that May is a Merry month!

2) Starting each sentence with the word May was I thought very cleaver, a way to draw us back in- in case we lose focus on what this poem is really all about.
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Review of Flirting with Me  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
oh wow, this was interesting!

1) I really liked how you put it in the style of a poem! that was clever on your part!
2) they didn't make a lot of sense, but I like reading things that don't make sense because then I can make up my own meanings!
3) it sounds like you are talking about yourself here, correct?

" And there she stands now facing me
Without me, she knows, she' s all but free
Still she' ll go on with this fiddle-dee-dee
Coz the woman in the mirror mirrors me. "

I laughed out loud at these lines!

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Review of A Helping Hand  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
awww this was so beautiful! I actually cried a little reading it, not going to lie. and I never cry when I read stories/poems, so may I be the first to say, congrats! :)

We all need a helping hand at one time or another and this poem tells us that. I'm always so scared to ask for help because I'm afraid of looking stupid or dumb. Guess I shouldn't feel that way, huh?

"Replace the hurt with hopes of the future
Dare to explore, experience, venture!
Create a fresh new start for yourself
The road may be long, but you'll get there"
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Review of Pantomime  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
oh my goodness, this is long! I must be the first to say, congrats on being able to hold my attention with a poem this long. That means you're a really good writer!

I think is was a great poem about learning from your mistakes and moving on from the past. I struggle to move on from my past, but I am getting better.

I think the short little sentences like that worked really well with this poem. not only does it make it flow better, but it's not as confusing to the reader. When I read poems with long sentences, I always think of me reading a book.

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Review of THE BASHFUL LOVER  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
awww this was so beautiful! it was so cute and beautiful. Can i ask if this poem is based off yourself? Were you a bashful lover once? I feel like this is what love is like the first time you fall in love. You feel all shy at first. I would be like the boy in that poem.

"Moments passed, she was gone; I banged my head
I stamped my feet and bit my finger
I reproached myself for the words unsaid
And wished for yet another chance with her"
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
awwwwwwwww this was cute and funny! I too have a dog and I love him to death! Dogs are a man's best friend. You know what a women's best friend is? A diamond! yes, a diamond is a women's best friend! Does that surprise you at all?

I loved the idea of using a list! That's not one I have thought of before. That was a very smart move to use the list!

Good Job with this! you got anymore lists I could read? :)
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Review of Cuba Calling  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
ah is this an essay about the city you live in? very clever indeed. I should write an essay about my own city sometime. This is a great idea. :) you sure know a lot about it. if you grew up there it is amazing how you can remember all that!

"The band, made up of a group of young budding artists, takes you to another time and place through hypnotic latin rhythms. Although the beat may seem somewhat repetitive, there is no danger of monotony because the instruments played are unusual for a band in London and the stage area is entertaining, packed to the rim with a number of young and old couples dancing the night away to the hot Cuban rhythms on offer at Floridita.
All in all a pleasant and entertaining club, safe and enjoyable if you hanker for a taste of Latin wonder."

FAVORITE LINES IN THE STORY *Heart*
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
oh my goodness I am crying and ughhhhhhh excuse me. *goes away to wipe the tears*

this was such a powerful story and so sad yet good. I loved how it was different from the others I read! Now I must talk about the characters!

1) Louis- a old man who is Savannah's grandfather. Is very helpful to Jean and Lena and opposes the government
2) Jean- a young father who is worried about his wife and daughter. Hates being locked up and does it for his family's sake. Gets shot and killed
3) Lena- a young mother who is hungry and tired and yet gives all the food to her baby. Loves Savannah and Jean very much. She is a hopeful mother. Dies????
4) Savannah- a two eyar old girl who is precious to Jean and Lena. Makes a mistake and pays for it.

GREAT JOB! :)
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Review of Word Warning  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
if only thios was something all people could learn. *sighs* this is a good poem, good length too. my daddy taught me about hateful words all the time now I leanred not to use them.

"Chose your words with care, my friend.
for your words may destroy the very one
on whom your life depends."
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
aw im sure ever grandpa says things like that lol. this was a cute and funny peom but it had some good messages in it. I liked the style that you wrote it in. you did perfect with this peom.

"Every year older means more vultures perching in my tree –
its branches sag with their number. The worst thing in being old
is being afraid to look up because of all the vultures you’d see…”
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
awwwwwwwwwww this was sad/cute at the same time! it sounds like missing someone like a best friend. it reminds me of my situation rn cause I miss my best friend and.....yeah, anyway, moving on!

the words you used were great and I could really feel your emotions in this story. it was sad yes but it is also good writing!

"I never cared that Janna went to Temple instead of the church where my parents and I went. Janna and I were best friends. It never mattered to me that she had a Menorah instead of a tree. Why does everyone else think it makes such a big difference?"

this is my favorite line because........why does it matter if people are different? best friends forever, right?
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
lol I love this! BOYS YOU NEED TO READ THIS TO UNDERSTAND US BETTER DANGIT! thanks for writing this.

"Girls are confusing because we think more than guys do. We think too far ahead when we're with someone who's willing to give there attention to us. When boys are in a relationship they see right now and that's pretty much it. Us girls do NOT think like that. We think ahead. That's why we get so mad at our partner. We had all of these perfect plans and expectations in our minds that we just expect boys to know about when they don't. So we always get disappointed when we never even told them what we wanted to begin with. Well what happens when a girl cuts YOU off? She doesn't see a future"
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Review of Plagiarism  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this because this is an issue that goes around and around and around at schools all the time! thank you for writing this and my young people learn from it. you did your research well on this so good job!

" However, not all students commit this offence intentionally. Some students do so because they do not know the academic ethical and community standards. Still, unintentional plagiarism is considered a crime and offence, and results to face the penalties of the college or university. So every student and a research writer should understand what is plagiarism and how to avoid it.
The main way to avoid this problem is to acknowledge the source of any quotations, words, ideas, thoughts, methods and any borrowed data from others because it is their own personal property."
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
I found this to be an article of a person, is that correct? usually I don't read articles, but I found this on random reviews so I thought I'd give this a shot :)

you sound like you've done your research on this person very well. Are you from there is that why you are interested in him?

the only complaint I have is I believe you should space out your paragraphs a bit more. other thaan that, it looks good. Good Job. :)
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
"Those chains!
Those terrible chains!
Infamous are their names!"

wow wow wow wow! I really liked how you started that off! that got me drawn in. is this a historical poem? I've never read on before! this was really really really good! :)

"Four months
Baha’u’llah endured the chill of that lightless dungeon,
while day-by-day
the name of one of his companions was called;
released from shackles,
the person called would leap to his feet,
and chant God’s praise
as he danced to meet his executioners."
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
okay this was weird but good writing at the same time. first of all, can I say I liked how you used the different colors in your story? that was a good choice :)

is this like a spin off of the Wizard Of Oz series (which I love btw)? because I found this to be funny. and I like funny things believe me.

"Tin Man and the Scarabird arrived, saying that the Frightened Feline was busy elsewhere. I tried creating the inquiries amassing in my brain; but I was missing the necessary speech parts. Friendship still existed, but what happened when feelings grew deeper? Was there a Great Spirit? A Fantastic Witch? Did the Wizard in Emerald City have my answers? "

these were my favorite lines in the story. carry on :)
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Review of Heartbreak  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
OH MY GOD I'M CRYING THIS IS SO HEARTBREAKING! *sobs*

I know what loss is like, but not this type of loss. not the type of loss that you are so in love with another person that you can't live without them. this story really opened my eyes to the cruel world that is out there.

"After all, what was life without love? How am I expected to enjoy the sunrise and walks along the beach without a person to share it with? Dinner dates, making love until the sun comes up...all of it meant nothing now. Love makes life a thousand times better than without. Life is not worth the excruciating pain without love."

those were my favorite lines because they are so true and heartbreaking. good job with this story!
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Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww what a cute little poem. is this based on your boys/children? because if it is, that makes it even sweeter. I love this poem because it describes boys exactly like they are. it's so cute. :) some of my favorite lines were:

"In dirt they'd play
They'd stay out all day
And the dirtier they got the better
For that's the way they liked it.
Muddy football boots, socks and shorts.
after a tough and scrambling game
that's the way they liked it."

that is how my cousins are
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Review of There was a time  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
this is a great peom I love it. I love the title and the length is PERFECT! your story line is great. I wish I could go back n time and change things but I can't/.

"

There was a time where we were free



Where there was a place for you and me



There was a time long ago



There was a time that we don't know..."




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Review of The Four Seasons  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
ok this was a great poem. I really like it. at first I wondered why it was called the Four Seasons, but then I realized that it was actually WAS about the different seasons. (btw, have you heard of the 60s/70s band called The Four Seasons?) I love nature too so any poem about nature I love.

"

The sun so bright high above the growing cloud,



The formations twist and twirl in the sea breeze.



The mountain tops are misted over in a thing shroud,



The summer pollen eats away at my nose, I sneeze."

those were my favorite lines. :)
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Review of ANIMAL CRACKERS  
Review by Izzy's Writing
Rated: E | (5.0)
awwwwwwwww this was an adorable story. I love the innocence of children playing simple little games with their children!

1) this doesn't effect your story in anyway, but I just wanted to know how old Velma was? because when I was little like that, I called my mom "mommy".

2) where did you come up with the name Velma? is that your name?

3) keep writing, I like your little story
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