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Review Style
Not sure I have a style....I learn as much from you as you from me. I will point our typos, grammatical things if I see them. I love poetry and when it comes to stories, please nothing "dark"....not my thing.
I'm good at...
I will find typos, incomplete thought (unless I believe it is conducive to the poetry structure).
Favorite Genres
Romance, personal, periodicals with history, comical, stories about true life, children, animals
Least Favorite Genres
Dark, morbid, Sci-fi
I will not review...
Dark, morbid stories
Public Reviews
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Yes, been there and may have picked up the same breeze! Vegas has so changed. I love the fancy casinos but the crowds - no more! I remember when in the 60s how much less congested and fun it was to walk the area...and though the lights were not what they are today...it was still fun.

Good description of something gone wrong.

Seabreeze
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Review of New Page  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Wow. Hope you are better now. I believe one good way to take care of hurts is writing about it. It lets us really see how it affects us as we read it back. You have done well in describe your feelings and your actions.

Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Very intriguing! I like where he ended up praying, crying out to his mother. The part about running through backyards (no sure if very practical in a day when many people own guns) - not to sure about that one.

When he is at the grave site, he is kneeling so he is near, at ground level. How can he fall...he is falling but where? I think you need more of a description as to what just happened; maybe that is just me.

The whole concept of the story I like and pulls me in.

Oh, back to running through backyards....reminds me. Did you ever see the movie The Swimmer with Burt Lancaster (1968)?? I was probably the worst movie that he ever made. If you have seen it, you know what I am talking about.

Anyways, good plot,

Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Here I am again. Love this poem given by a believer. It is beautiful and glad I came over to see your site and read this.

Seabreeze
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Review of A Frog  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
OMG, I love this frog. A song comes to mind: Al Jolson's Mammy!

I have been browsing around and having fun - thanks!

Seabreeze
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Review of My Yard, My Rules  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Very interesting; you have set the stage well. I can see the players and remember many times watching both cats and squirrels magically frolic about unaware of the entertainment they are providing.

I enjoyed my stay,

Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very interesting - to get a review into a whole book, I imagine?

With the "settings", one could also imagine their own story as they read along.

Only could I understand what was going on, when I went to review your Portfolio!

Best to you,

Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very nice story! It has a mystic about it...which kept me interested. Good descriptions along the way gave me a vivid look into the eyes of the writer.

Your first post.; congratulations!...I am glad to be here to read it!

Best wishes,

Seabreeze
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Review of Frogs and toads.  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very cute they way you told this story. It made me think; what is the different between a toad and a frog. We had a couple of toads, I believe, in an old aquarium for a while. Was kind of fun to watch them. Toads are bigger, right? Frogs, smaller?

In any case.....fun story.

Thanks,
Seabreeze
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Review of Dinner Date  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Kelly Lee,

This is a hoot! Loved it! Got me thinking, we are many times asked if we could have any visit with someone, who would it be....I would never think to go in this direction, ha, ha. This is a good twist...I hope you do something for Halloween...

Thanks for a laugh,

Seabreeze
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Review of Who am I  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
First let me say welcome newbie. Nice to have you here. I like what you have written. I have ask and still ask the question you have presented. I was married 43 years (lost husband to cancer) have one son, two granddaughters, worked outside the home while a home maker and I still seem to have that question, who am I. At 74 years young I know now that Iam a creation of the Lord, made in His image..i truly mean that because I basically what to be loved and love...He is love. I have discovered myself, my talents (art, writing) and my desire to Know my Creator more..this gives me self worth. So keep digging, testing and praying that He will show you how special you are.

Thanks for your story
Seabreeze
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Review of LONG WALK HOME  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very lovely. It is amazing how the 7-6-7-6 format is so pleasing to the ear!

Thanks,

enjoyed my visit

Seabreeze
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Review of TRES DIAMANTES  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
A fun poem to read. Easy to the eye - maybe that is way this type of format was created. The word diamantes is interesting-checking Google (if we can trust it) means diamond but in Greek...I would have guessed French. But its word origin is Italian and the poem structure is young, 1969. In any case, well done.

Thanks,
Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem is very lovely; it makes me think of summers outside enjoying the cool nights, hearing crickets and watching stars.

I love the balance of rhythm that you have used. I like the phrase "Cool kiss of air"

Nicely done,

Seabreeze
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Review of Waffling  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (4.5)
Yes, this is a great post for all of us. I believe we all do some of this now and then. Some of us are better at it then others. Sometimes when talking we are afraid to pause before moving on in our speaking. At least in writing, we can take the pause and reflect.

I don't like to pause (especially on phone), as you can get over taken by the other party and lose your train of thought. One must stay focus, keeping eye contact if speaking to a group. Maybe this is why, at least for me, when I see or listen to a good speaker, I notice they move, walk a little still speaking, maybe slower, but they stay on track.

They say, don't look at your notes (what good are they except to review before hand). I say, know your material and stay on subject.

Your obsession of being right, that is hard. If you know your material, and the Bible if that is topic, I believe is truth, then you just need to know your material. There will always be those who will attack you and make you think you don't know or have the truth. If it is not truth, then it is matter of opinion, right?

Best to you,

Seabreeze



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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Yes, I agree, it can be a hassle! I wanted it frozen to where my summer nights are longer, ha ha!
At least our computers and phones automatically adjust...so technically, we should not be late!
Cute piece,


Seabreeze
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Review of My story  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
First let me say welcome newbie! I hope you enjoy your stay here at Writing.com.

On your story, I found three possibilities for correction:

...and met me saying word like “Got ill again?” (your word needs to be plural)

... to do it I was happy (possibility comma after it - showing a pause)

... What will she be filling? (If you meant to say feeling, then it is spelled incorrectly.

The story is okay; I hope it is not your true feelings now. Writing is always good therapy.

Best to you,

Seabreeze
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Love it. Color is wonderful and so is tour poem. I seem to change over the years. I confess. I love them all. Fin poem.
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Review of Where did she go?  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Fred,
Where did she go is a tear jurker. I can not even imagine what that must be like to not recall what you think you know or not to remember what people tell you you should know. It has got to be the worst ongoing nightmare, debilitating disease there is. Your poem gives an excellent glimpse into that confusion world.

Sandy
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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (4.5)
Wow, that is some story. First, I am not saying you have made this all up but I will say I am not sure why any one who was almost chocked to death, has a child living there also, would want to stay in that house. She puts both her life and the child's at risk.

I do believe there is a spirit world, a dark side, because the Bible speaks of demons; these wonder the earth looking to find a host to dwell in. But I know nothing of ghost, but like you say for the lack of a better word, call them that.

So, best of luck with all of this. I sure would be worried for anyone living in that place.

Seabreeze

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Review of Homeless-Why?  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dorianne, this is beautiful and yes, I ask why as well. And, for the grace of God, go I!

In a country as wealthy as ours, no one should go homeless. We have too much great minds, technology, food and raw materials for this to take place. I was born in California (now living in Utah) and it breaks my heart to see Los Angeles, San Francisco and many other cities have such homeless and the problems it is causing our cities. The officials that are running our cities, and the state governor, should all be fired. Los Angeles is now at a crisis that President Trump is threatening to go in, if officials do not get their act together. Well, the disease concerns me...it is becoming a national emergency.

Once again, this is well written,

Thank you,
Seabreeze
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Review of You  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
You hits home, especially if one has been through a love that is similar!

I like your chosen words, how you have placed them. My favorite stanza:


I am thinking what you are currently doing right now,
Someday I will see you and then I will kneel and bow.
Raise my arms and show you a ring that I bought,
I will stay at your side no matter how many times we have fought.

Because, in marriage you will fight or at least argue...

Your poem is realistic in thought - very honest.

Keep up the writing. And congrats on coming to Writing.com

Best wishes,
Seabreeze

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Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
Heavy stuff, Drifter!

The older I get the more I realize and learn from our Bible, we should never call anyone stupid. All though, I think many in Congress qualify. Seriously, God's creation should not be looked upon as stupid. After all, that is as close to fool as we can get (I would think). And, we should not be calling anyone fool, right (Matthew 5:23-23).

So, that was not good for your father to do call you that - so hurtful. Our tongue sure can be a nasty weapon! But, given your place "withness", we are all really with each other more than we know. As believers we are to be there for each other.

I am a believer and I still work on this daily. My son has gone through a nasty divorce (she got most of the deal) and it is hard for me to bite my tongue and not say bad things about her. I find myself talking to the Lord, asking for forgiveness because of the grieve he has had to go through (he did not want the divorce).

So, friend, I hope all is better since your wrote this in 2017....having faith in humanity is a daily challenge.

Seabreeze
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Review of The Last Dance  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this piece. I could easily visualize the dance, seeing those souls move to the music. However, you got me as you should as I did not suspect the Reaper. Delightful surprise and very creative in your story line. It has mystery, it pulls you in. I found no grammatical concerns, just a delightful story!

Seabreeze
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Review of You can't be me  
Review by Seabreeze
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi alhagi,

First, let me say hi newbie and welcome to Writing.com. Hope you enjoy your stay here.

I like some of your topic and you have good ideas for stories. I have a suggestion though; I believe you will have more success of people reading your thoughts if you would punctuate your sentences. Reading something that is "run-on" is not to desirable. It is hard on the eyes and confusing.

Keep on writing and go out a review others to see how their sentences flow.

Best to you,

Seabreeze

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