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Review of "Once Upon A Time" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A sad tale that happens to be the experience of many women who believe in fairy tale love and prince charming in his shining armor. Your poem talks about the sad tale that happens when a woman full of dreams and hopes that love is the answer. She has full belief in her love for that one man, assuring herself this is her true love, the only one, but when reality strikes as written in your poem, she is broken. Her dreams are shattered, she comes to realize that everything she ever knew and hoped for was a complete lie. In the end, she take courage to move ahead though her scars won't fade and the memories has changed her.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is rhyming pattern in some lines while the other lines do not rhyme. There is no particular form hence I consider this a free verse poem. I like your word choice, chosen words that bring out the exact meaning and feeling you are looking for. There is very good flow, the poem reads as a story and I found no places of break in the flow.

Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting. Every title that begins with "Once upon a time" leaves the readers hoping for a "Happily ever after", but I see how through this poem you bring out the reality in it.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines

"But the heartbreak from a death of a dream
could last forever."

Painfully sad and true. Truly, we can bear and recover from any kind of heartbreak and situation, but once a dream or hope is crushed, there is no way we can go back to the way it was before.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda

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Hello Sum1

Review of "Emoticon Love Poem" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A fun and creative poem written about love. A bold and captivating first line, 'You're the of my life', beautiful! This kind of love is fairy tale like and every once in a while we do dream of a fairy tale love for us. The poems talks about being together forever and having the time of their lives as they together and promising a love that will last forever only to be separated by death, 'Til death do us part'. Splendid ending too.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is rhyming pattern in the poem of the form a,a,b,b and it works well with the emoticons too,I like the way you have used them to bring in the rhymes too. They don't look forced into place but I'm pretty sure writing this was hard work.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines

"’s can’t fly where our love makes me soar,"

I love this line, surely love can make us soar to places where no else has been and I guess I just like to fly so this comparison seemed good.

Overall

I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

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Hello MommaK2012

Review of "Hands of a Savior" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A beautiful poem about the Hands of our Savior. This is truly a meaningful poem. I love the way you start with the hands of Him as a baby and then move on to explain all the hands of Him as a carpenter and then as a savior. To have that kind of love is impossible by man, to die for someone is the highest form of love that was only shown by our Lord Jesus. Well written.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is rhyming pattern in some lines while the other lines do not rhyme.

Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting and that is what drew me to read this and I'm glad that I did.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines

"My intercessor, my friend, my mentor"

Love this line, because it has to be from the heart due to a close relationship with Him.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda

Hello Sean M. H. Delaplace

Review of "Angel of my Dreams" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

This is really beautiful poem about meet someone and feeling so much at the same time. You bring in vivid images of the girl approaching you and add in those little details that bring in the right effects to the readers mind. The poem flows well with the rhythm and the rhyme scheme of the form a,a,b,b. There are no mistakes in punctuation, grammar and spelling. Well written.

My Favourite Lines

"A touch, a smile, my angel in disguise,
Leads my soul away from certain demise."

An apt ending to a fun and picturesque poem.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda

Hello Dan Sturn

Review of "Twins of a Gazelle" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

This a really lovely poem saying your wife what you actually feel about the twins. It is really nice how you've given so much thought to mask the fact but yet say it. The words you use bring out emotions and images very vividly. Your word choice and flow is very good too. I specially like how you used the Song of Solomon as your reference.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda

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Hello aralls

Review of "Walking on Eggshells" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A beautiful poem expressing the love of a child for his mother. It is true that wisdom can come from anywhere and in this case it comes from a child who is not even old enough. The poem invokes emotions of sadness and yet brings out the sense of awe at the child.
The flow is very good, the characters of the mother,father and the child are brought in with an ease. The word choice is perfect for the imagination of a child. Well written.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is no rhyming pattern in the poem, this is a free verse poem.

Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines

"He grasps her cheeks with both hands,
meeting lost eyes, speaking to her heart."

Visually emotional and picturesque. No words to express the scene and feeling expressed here. Great job!

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda


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Hello spidey

Review of "Abandoned" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A poem about the abandoned city and how one particular tower reminds you of things of the past. This poem can be taken literally or can be taken as a person's life and someone abandoning them and leaving them to ruins.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is no rhyming pattern in the poem. This is a free form poem.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found. These are just my friendly suggestions.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda


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Hello blue jellybaby

Review of "Poetry" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A beautiful collection of emotional poems from the heart. You should write poetry more often. I have one tiny suggestion to make, you could add covers to the poems to make them immediately attractive visually. Here's to many more poems to come from you, Happy WDC Anniversary.

Overall

I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda


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Hello Caeli Jordan

Review of "Letter" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

This a nice letter to your long distance love. A beautiful poem in remember of him and all that he means to you even though you are separated by long distance. Well written.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is no rhyming pattern in the poem, there is no specific rhythm but it is alright for a free verse.

Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting. You could change the title to something more unique and creative, just to get more readers on it.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found. These are just my friendly suggestions.

My Favourite Lines

"You are my enchanting prince and
I’m your devoted princess."

Everyone wants a fairy tale love story.

Overall

A good poem so I am giving it 4 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda

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Hello Emma

Review of "Don't Do It" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

An inspirational and yet truthful fate about our conscious. It is true that many youngsters are considering suicide the best option but they don't realize that they are only getting into something far, far worse. As you have suggested it is not easy to stop thinking of death when there is no one to listen or care for you and when we are depressed too much even to think straight. I have been in such depression but even though I did consider the option of dying, I knew that was just weak and now I'm glad that I never did anything stupid. If only there was someone to talk to at that time, I would have come back to normal sooner. This is a good article that one should trust their conscious when in deep darkness. Well written.

Overall

I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda

Hello Dennis Walker



Review of "The power of light" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A passage about the light in all of us and about the power of light to overcome darkness no matter now deep and dark it might be. It takes effort and realization to find out all the light we have and what can be done if put into action, there is so much good in us but we most often lie there in the darkness filled with guilt or anger.
I have just one friendly suggestion to make, I see that the type is chosen as POETRY, but this is written as a passage or article, so I would suggest you to change that to something more specific.

Overall

I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda


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Hello Amay

Review of "Fireworks" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A beautiful poem about fireworks and the effect they have on us. In each stanza you bring the effects or sights and feelings brought out by the firework, an anticipation and then the wonder, the goosebumps and, yes, finally there can fireworks due to seeing a loved one as well. Simple words and perfect punctuation brought out this lovely poem. There are no mistakes I can find and there are no suggestions I can make. Emotional and full of colour, well written.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda


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Hello Kåre Enga in Montana

Review of "Grey silhouettes" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A poem about abandoning the animals or pet. May be once the animal was dead due to some mistake they were left there to stink up instead of doing some good and burying them. I have tried to understand why this would happen. The imagery is good and brings out the scenes very well. I'm left with questions and a sad feeling as I read this poem. Well written.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is no rhyming pattern in the poem and this is a free verse poem..

Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting, you have written a few lines from your poem here, so I would suggest to change the description to actually describe something about the poem.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found. These are no suggestions I can make.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 4 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda


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Hello Sum1

Review of "Emergency Surgery" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A beautiful poem about life's uncertainty and also the miracles that make life worth living it. I like how you bring in the details of the story into a lovely rhyming story that has little surprises on the way. It is truly a miracle that doctors can see how the child yet unborn and only in the few months of conception be a living soul. I liked the ending especially because many a time we lose the fact that the doctor is also a human and he also has a life and family. Great writing.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is rhyming pattern in the poem of a,a,b,b and this fits well with the form and flow of the poem.

Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting and that is what made me open up this and read it.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found. However, there are lines without punctuation and this may be the style you chose to write in but I struggled a bit. These are just my friendly suggestions.

My Favourite Lines

"She curled herself next to him, safe in his arms again
He held her close, caressed her belly; their child safe within"

Beautiful lines and imagery, love, care, comfort and protection can be viewed in these lines.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda


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Hello Sum1

Review of "Where In The World Is Sum1?" 

General Comments

Happy WDC Anniversary to an amazing person who makes sure everyone else's WDC anniversary is special. Although I can't make it special, I give my wishes on this day.

You do travel a lot and you have made this special journal to record your experiences. Every entry you made is true from the heart and reading it makes me also to want to visit amazing places of the world. Well, I wish I had more time and the resources to go around the world. Thank you for sharing this with us.

Overall

I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda


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Hello Amara

Review of "Moonsong" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A simple passage about how two wolves who are in love and are far away from each other get to communicate and show their love and care they have. I see that this is written as a passage and if you wanted to write it as a poem with line breaks and stanza breaks it would be easy to follow the rhythm and rhyme if there was any. Reading it like this seems like reading a story. Well written.

Overall

I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda


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Hello akronos

Review of "Three little kittens" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

I was expecting a cute story about three kittens playing and having fun, but wow this is really sad. I can imagine these three cute little kittens sitting in the rain. To think that someone would drown a cat, that's really really sad. The ending you gave to this is creepy and those who mistreat animals should definitely think of the consequences. Well written.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found. There are no suggestions I can make.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 4 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda


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Hello cassiejean33

Review of "Woodpecker" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

The poem is about the woodpecker who is outside the window and the thoughts that arise. It is nice to see how when we look at animals and birds and wonder if they are actually saying something to us or if they understand what we are saying. Nicely written.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda


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Hello angelgirl

Review of "The Skunk" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

This is funny poem about the Skunk's appearance in a courtroom. I like how you slowly introduce the skunk's arrival into the courtroom, the judge's dialogue and the final lines truly brought out the comedy. Well written.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is no rhyming pattern in the poem. This is a free verse poem.

Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting which is what lead me to read your work and I'm glad I did.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found. There are no suggestions can make.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda


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Hello Morgana Ravenwood

Review of "That Cat" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A fun poem about the naughty cat of yours. You definitely feel like punishing her but she is just a sweet little thing too. I like how you effortlessly start every stanza with the same line and yet manage to rhyme and flow without having the feeling that it is too repetitive. Well written.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is rhyming pattern in the poem of the form a,a,b,b. The rhythm is very well going with the flow of the poem.

Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found. There are no suggestions to make.


Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 4 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda


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Hello nightflower

Review of "Serpent's Song" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A fun and delicious poem indeed. I love the way you have written the 'ss' as pronounced by the ssssnake. Truly it feels like a steaming romance is coming through, but it ends up in a delicious rat that the snake just had. Well written.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is no rhyming pattern in the poem. This is a free form poem.

Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found. There are no suggestions I can make.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda


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Hello Rebecca

Review of "Wild Stallion" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A beautiful poem about a wild black stallion. The poem starts with a peaceful and calm place, it then gently moves to the scene where the horse appears. I like how you go on to explain what you see about this horse in detail. Good word choice and flow. Well written.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is rhyming pattern in the poem of the form a,a,b,b. The rhythm is consistent with each line as well.

Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found. These are no suggestions to make.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda


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Hello InnocentAngel is Happy

Review of "I am the Wolf" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

This poem is about the wolf and you have written it for the Native American contest. The poem talks about the place the wolf lives and what he does there. I love the slight imagery you make in each line, drawing pictures. The poem also brings a story showing that the wolf is hurt from a bullet wound and he is finally in the end of his days. The eagle is brought into the poem to show that the wolf is being guided by the eagle to the humans who then shoot him and now the wolf questions the eagle but then he realizes that his time is up. There is rhyme scheme of the form a,a,b,b and the free form has a consistent rhythm to it. Well written.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 4 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda


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Hello Person of Flipsy

Review of "Sweet Unicorn" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A sad and simple poem about losing the unicorn. Reading this made me think of the time I lost my little kitten and I too had hoped and prayed that someday the little kitten would return but no she did not. I used wait by the tree where I found her every other day after school, it makes me think now how much I loved that kitten when I was a little girl. There is no rhyme scheme and there is form so this is a free verse poetry. Well written.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found. These are no suggestions I can make.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 4 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda


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Hello Dr M C Gupta

Review of "MARY HAD A LITTLE LAMB" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A wonderful poem with a twist on the classic frog prince story. You brought out the characters form many fairy tales and put it together into a nice poem. The rhyme scheme and rhythm go well with the story of the poem. As always the fairy tale ends with a happily ever after. Well written.

My Favourite Lines

"Munching with ferocious force
A tender tiny twig."

I love the assonance and alliteration in these lines here. All over the poem none of the words seem forced into the form which is a talent indeed.

Overall

I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda


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