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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, I saw your name on the WDC Reviewers Lightening list and I thought I would check out your port and pick out something to read.
Ha! Hilarious. I thought your poem was great. I love toilet humor, so this was so funny to me. I never expected you to speak of two types of wind. *Laugh* Your poem is easy to read and easy to follow. The rhythm, rhyme and imagery are all fantastic. You did a great job with this poem (not that my opinion means anything)*Smile* There is nothing I can suggest that would make it better. Thank you so much for sharing....Happy writing!

Your fellow group member,
Taryn

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Confettib**Confettip*This is a Power Reviewer’s Anniversary Review!*Confettir**Confettiy*
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*Balloong**Balloonr*Happy Anniversary!*Balloonp**Balloony*
*Candleb*Congratulations on another year with the WDC!*Candlev*
For your anniversary I have decided to review
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 Rationalized Denial  (18+)
..bellowing stomachs, skin stretched over tender bones.....
#1224213 by kjo just groovin'

As you know, this review is meant to help and encourage; so please receive it in the spirit that it is given. This review is only my opinion, and you can choose to take my advice or not. It is your work and your work should reflect you.
My rating:*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star*
What I like about your piece: Though it is a subject that we have heard many times before, your poem also compares our life to those in Africa in a way that is personal. I thought the imagery was fantastically written. I felt like I was watching a public service announcement on paper. I could also see this poem being read in spoken word.
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What I think needs improvement: Absolutely nothing.
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My favorite part: The sixth stanza is my favorite because it brings it all home. To answer your question, for me where we went wrong was when we became complacent with the issue. We have been hearing about the crisis in Africa for at least as long as I have been alive. I think that because the "new" has worn off, and we are faced with our own problems, we have conveniently forgotten about others. A terrible shame.

Again, congratulations on another year here on the WDC
Your fellow Power Reviewer Group Member
Taryn Sloan
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Rated: E | (2.0)
Hello,
I thought that I would return the favor of your review with a review. I thought your poem was interesting and somewhat confusing. The inconsistency of punctuation was a distraction. Poetry is very subjective, but one thing that always helps with the interpretation is consistency. It also helps with the rhythm, which I found hard to follow. Whichever you choose, follow it through the entire poem. Besides that, these are just a couple of things I would suggest you change. These are just suggestions of course. In the end, I would just edit again to polish it up.
Stanza two Line two: live should be life
Stanza six; third line: the should be them I believe.
Again, thanks for your review. Thank you for sharing.
Taryn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
I saw your poem on the WDC Power Reviewers Review list.
I liked your poem. It is amazing how certain events that we witness can impact our lives. And sometimes some events; though they may seem somewhat ordinary, can change our lives. This poem is a perfect example of that for me. How many times have we seen a funeral procession, and how many times have we stopped to actually think of the person that the procession is for? In most cases, we only think of them for a short while. This was not the case for you. This moment in time will stick with you always, and it shows in your poem.
Your poem shows depth of emotion, empathy, and imagery. I like the format you chose for your poem and you rhyme scheme was written well. You've done a nice job. Thank you for sharing and please keep writing!
Taryn "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group
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Review of Connected To You  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Sadly beautiful....
I thought your poem was beautifully written and more than adequately described the pain that is felt. I thought the flow of your poem added to the feelings you depicted. It was easy and unforced, somewhat melodic. I think that your poem is easy to relate to in feeling if not in actions. Well done. Thank you for sharing. Write on! Taryn
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Review of In and Out  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi,
I found your poem through the random read. I enjoyed your poem. The premise, if not original is good. I thought the over all flow and rhyme scheme were also good. However I did see a couple of things I think will make your poem better.
In the third stanza, cuz should be cause. I feel that text language in poetry or any formal written form diminishes the work. You have put your heart into what you have written, so let your reader respect it as you do.
I think the last stanza is somewhat out of place. You have brought your reader from the negative to the positive to only take them back to the negative again. it is a little confusing. I thinking switching the last stanza with the one right before it will fix this problem.
Overall, I think your poem is good. Thank you so much for sharing it and have a happy new year.
Taryn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
HI,
I found your poem on the plug page. I like your poem. It is comical. I love how you have personified the planets. Loving the planets and studying them as I do, I can say that I have never thought to see them this way...Got me thinking how the others feel. Is Saturn egotistical because of all the rings it has? Is Jupiter a bully because he is bigger than everyone else? Interesting ...lol *Smile* Obviously I love your poem. I think it is really creative and fun to read. Thank you for sharing and have a happy new year.
Taryn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi,
I thought I would stop by your port and give it a read and I came across this essay. I say that you have hit the real issue of our society today on the head. I had a birthday on the fifth, and normally I am depressed around birthdays because I feel like I have not progressed in my life the way I think I should. But this year, I was just grateful to be alive. You turn on the t.v and everything is so depressing. I rarely watch the news anymore. Today's youth acts as if we owe them something. Working hard for what you need let alone for what you want is something foreign to them. And to be honest we have no one to blame for this except for ourselves. Instant gratification is the way of the world. We want to fight for the right to choose our religion, but how many people actually practice a religion anymore? Every year the holidays are a prime example of this. The way I was raised, and how I raise my daughter now is that the reason for the season is not Santa Clause and what gifts you get for Christmas. But when you turn on the t.v what do you see? Ads upon ads of tangible things that in a year or two will have next to no value. Rarely do you ever see anyone raising the question of the value of a good upbringing, of the golden rules. Yet the news seems to show evidence of the lack of this every day. Thanks for essay. Some things just need to be said. And if it strikes fear in people, then so be it. Sometimes fear is what you need to enforce change. Hope you have a great new year to come.
Taryn
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Review of Here's to You  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi,
I got your poem from the new static items page. I like the premise behind your poem I think it is original and relatable. I like the imagery and the feelings you show your reader in this piece. And for the most part, your rhyme scheme is good. However, there are a few things that will make your poem better.
I think that all is well in the first three stanza's (except that father should be father's). But the last two stanza's I found to be a little rough. I think this is because in these two stanza's you have five lines, whereas in the others you have four. I know such a little discrepancy, but when dealing with flow it is the little things that make the difference. I would consider skimming down the last two stanza's to fit the format of the others. I like something like this would help "I've at times wondered who
will walk with me on my wedding day.
Who will tear up for me,
as he gives me away?

You did teach me to find a man unlike you,
One that stays no matter how bad.
But now I must hold my glass into the air,
And say, here's to you dad.
These are just my opinions. I do hope I was able to help. Thanks for sharing and happy new year! *Smile*
Taryn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi,
I found your poem on the new static items page. I love this poem. The nice easy flow of it made it a joy to read. The imagery and the feelings you invoke make it an experience to read. I really enjoyed it. For some reason while reading this, I got a picture of a pair of lovers separated by war and distance...A story told many times over, just usually not as beautifully as this. Nice job. There is nothing that I would suggest you change. Thanks for sharing and happy new year.
Taryn
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Review of Super Nova  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
I got your poem from the new static items page. I liked your poem. I think the premise behind your poem is original and I think the imagery of your piece is great. However, I do think putting your lines together will help with the flow of your piece. But other than that, I think your poem is great. There is nothing else that I can suggest you change to make it better. Thanks for sharing and happy new year. *Smile*
Taryn
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Review of Release  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
I found your poem on the Request page and I thought I would give it a read. I liked your poem. The sadness is evident. Though short, your poem is packed with emotion and imagery. I thought your poem was written well. There is nothing that I can suggest to make it better.Thank you for sharing and Happy New Year!
Taryn
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Review of Road Rage  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi,
I got your poem from the new static items page. Lol...I loved your poem... It sounds like me to a T! I have horrible road rage...and I think it is getting worse with each passing day that I have to get on the freeway...I really hate the drivers who decide to turn on their turn signal while they are turning...by then I could give a rats ass if your turning...I already know your turning at this point! *Laugh* I thought your poem was great. The rhythm, rhyme and imagery were great. The only thing I didn't like was the comment about Oklahoman's..and that is only because I was born and raised there..even though I am an honorary Texan now....but to each his own. Nice job...there is nothing that I can suggest that would make your poem better.Thank you for sharing. Write on!
Taryn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Candycaner*Hi,
I found your poem on the request review page, so I thought I would give a read. I like your poem. It is very descriptive and the rhyme scheme is good. It flows nicely and is easy to read. I have no suggestions as to what you could do to enhance your poem. I think it is great as it is. Thank you for sharing it and happy holidays. Write on!
Taryn

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Review of You Are the One  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Star**Candycaneg*Hi,
I really enjoyed your poem. I love acrostics, and for me it always helps to have the first letter in bold as you have done. I had no issues with how how you have written this piece. The rhythm and rhyme are all natural, this poem was very easy to read. I think you did a great job with this piece. There is nothing I can suggest you change to make it better. Thank you for sharing it and have a wonderful holiday season.
Taryn

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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Star*Hi,
First let me say that I think your poem is beautifully written with a beautiful message. I think that your word choice is good, the rhythm, rhyme, and imagery are all good. However, I think that you have too many comma's in each of your stanza's. In some instances, I think that a period would serve your poem better. This is just my opinion. Either way, I think this poem is awesome. Thanks for sharing it and have a happy holiday.
Taryn

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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Star* I got to your poem through the random read.
I liked this poem a lot. I love story poems and this one even has a moral! As always, I enjoy your work. Rhythm, rhyme, and imagery are all great. It was a really easy read, and easy to follow. I also that it was funny that it was something that I could learn from right at this moment..A nice surprise. There is nothing that I can suggest to make it better. Thank you for sharing it and happy holidays!
Taryn
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Review of I miss you  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
I liked your poem. Though sad, I thought it was written well. There were no issues with rhythm or rhyme. You carried the title all the way through. The poem is definitely heartfelt. The reader sympathies, if not relates to your piece. There is nothing that I can suggest to make your poem better. Thank you for sharing it. Write on!
Taryn

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Review of A Woman's Heart  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
How true....your poem definitely rings true. I thought your poem was original. The rhythm and rhyme were great. But I did feel that the second stanza needed a little cosmetic work. Here are my suggestions:
Strongest piece that’s ever made
Endures the worst and never fades
Selfish motives and careless acts
Are the things that cause it to crack
These are just suggestions, I liked your poem over all. I thought it was a great read. Thank you for sharing it
Taryn
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Rated: E | N/A (Unratable.)
Hi,
I enjoyed this prayer....I remember parts of it, but I couldn't remember it all ..thank you for reminding me. *Smile*
Many blessings to you
Taryn
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Review of Snow Birds  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi,
I liked your poem. I thought it was cute, but I felt like it was unfinished. I wanted to add more to it. I feel like the natural flow the poem was cut off. But that of course is just my opinion. I thought the imagery was great. Thank you for sharing. Write on!
Taryn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi,
I loved your poem.I thought it was very wistful and heartfelt. To be that woman, wanting so much; but never be able to have it .....tragic. I thought the premise of this poem was original. The rhythm, rhyme, and imagery were all great. There is nothing that I can suggest to enhance your poem. I think it's fantastic. Thank you for sharing it.
Taryn
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Review of More than song  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi,
I loved your poem. I can honestly say that it is the first Christmas Story that I have heard from the view of a cricket. *Smile* None the less, I thought it was fabulous. I thought the premise to your piece was original, I thought the rhythm and rhyme were great, and the imagery: vivid. I really think you did a nice job. There is nothing that I think you should add to make it better. Thank you for sharing it.
Taryn
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Review of Perfume  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi again,
I love this poem. It has been my experience that some of the best poetry is written in the wee hours of the night.I like this poem, not only because of the imagery, rhythm and rhyme; but also because you guide your reader gently into your story...as if the poem is wafting through the senses of your reader. Nice job.This poem kind of reminds of a poem I wrote called The Threat of Fire..I can offer no advice for enhancement. I think it is great as it is.
Taryn
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Review of Intruder  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi,
I liked your poem. Very different from what I usually read. I kept thinking, run...why are you standing there....? lol I thought your rhyme scheme was good, but I did stumble with the rhythm a bit. I noticed that your stanza's are not created equal, so I assume that was my issue. But that was the only issue I had. I saw no other errors...thanks for sharing it!
Taryn
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