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Review of Lighthouse  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
I loved your poem. The rhythm and rhyme was great, but the imagery was fabulous. It almost felt like a nursery rhyme to me, but that could just be the mention of a castle and a tower. I happen to love nursery rhymes. Either way, I think you did a great job with this piece. You drew you reader in easily, and before they know it the poem is over; you leave them wishing for more. There is nothing I would suggest that you change, obviously. Thank you so much for sharing it. Write on!
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Review of Wings  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
I enjoyed your poem. It held my attention, flowed well and the rhyming was good. I thought that your thought process was clear and easy to understand.Though the idea of hopes and dreams is not original, the way you spoke about it is. There is nothing that I would suggest you change with this piece. Thank you for sharing. Happy writing!
Taryn
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Review of Love has fooled  
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Rated: E | (2.5)
Hi,
I can see where you are trying to go with this poem. But I can see some issues with it, and the best advice I can give you besides edit; is to challenge yourself more on your word choice. I felt that some words you chose, you chose because they rhyme; and not necessarily because it makes sense to your poem. With this poem, I would look at it again and try to reevaluate what I want to say exactly. And then start over.
This is just my opinion. I hope I was able to help. Thank you for sharing!
Taryn
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi,
I think your poem has good bones, but it needs to be edited. Sometimes what I have to do with my own work is to walk away from my poem for a day or two, then read it out loud and make the necessary changes.
There are several inconsistencies with your poem. Some thoughts look complete without punctuation, which is fine in poetry. But then others do not look complete, yet the next line will start with a capital letter even though the previous line ended with a comma.I also notice that the last line is the only line in the entire poem that is punctuated correctly and is complete. There are too many comma's in this poem, and I am confused by the use symbols. I would never use symbols in the place of words in poetry. It makes your work appear unfinished;as if the reader is looking at the rough draft.
As I said, I think your poem has great bones and a lot of potential. It just needs to be edited, and the form readjusted. These are just my opinions, I hope I was able to help. Thank you for sharing. Write on!
Taryn
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Review of If Ever...  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
I enjoyed your poem. To be so brief, it hits all the major points: feeling, imagery, rhythm and rhyme. I thought it was great. I like poems that are short yet thought provoking.There isn't anything that I would suggest you change. Nice job. Please continue to post and share your work.
Taryn
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Review of Abandoned  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi,
I thought your poem was good. But I think it could be better. I think that the subject matter is sad; and the way you write about this subject, I think is original.
I like the fact that you did not start each line with a capital letter. That helps with the rhythm. But the way the sentences are broken up combats that. I would definitely restructure this poem so that the flow is easier to find. This will also cut down on the length of your poem, which isn't bad. You have enough imagery and feeling in this poem that the brevity of it will not be a problem.
This is just my opinion of course. Hope I was able to help. Happy writing!
Taryn
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Review of The cat did it.  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi,
I am returning the favor of your kind review by visiting your port and doing the same.

Ha! I loved it. Especially the last line. Great imagery also. That darn cat! There is nothing that I would suggest you do to improve this poem. Very funny and entertaining. It held my attention from start to finish.Thanks again for your review.. Write on! Taryn
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi,
I think your poem has great potential. The imagery you paint is great, and the rhyming is pretty good for the most part. There are however, some things I would change to make your poem just a little more polished. *Smile*
1. I would consider using punctuation in this poem. Because of how it reads, the conversation you have put in the poem, and the fact that there are random words capitalized; implies that you are using complete sentences, but since you are not using punctuation it makes it harder to read.
2. Whenever you are using " i " or " i'm " to reference a person, you should always capitalize the " I ".
3. I think you should read your poem out loud, and get rid of any extra words that slow down the flow of your poem.
4. I would rethink the last line. Up until that point, the rhyming has been pretty consistent. But because the last line does not rhyme with anything, the poem ends awkwardly.
Here is an example of how I would implement some of these changes:
Softly does the wind blow
through my lovers hair.
He doesn't know I'm watching,
doesn't know I'm there.
With innocence in his eyes,
he gracefully glides by.
He asks how long I've been there.
I tell him only a little while.
I think that your poem has great bones. With a few finishing touches, I think your poem could be outstanding. This of course, is just my opinion. I hope I was able to help. Thanks for sharing and happy writing!
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi,
I think that your poem has great bones, but could use some small changes to make it five star. *Smile*.
1. I think you should reevaluate your use of comma's. I think that your poem would benefit more from periods in a few places than comma's.
2. For the last stanza, I think that you should stick to the format you set in the previous stanza's. I think your third line should say something else. Maybe (just an example) say something like : To no one do I have this to prove.

Overall I like your poem. I just think it needs a little more final editing. Thank you for sharing and write one!
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi,
I thought your poem was interesting but there are some things that I would work on.
1. I would challenge myself more on rhyming. I think in many ways you took the easy way out. I think you could have said some things a little differently, but a little more poetically.
2. I would edit this poem again. Words like wont and dont, should always have an apostrophe.
3. And in the future, I would forgo using text language in a poem ( cuz ). It makes your poem appear to be unfinished.
4. I was a little confused by the punctuation at the end. There is no punctuation any where else in your poem except the last line.
5. Lastly the random capitalization (stanza's 3 and 6); for me, threw the rhythm of your poem off.
From my understanding, rhythm is very important when it comes to poetry; regardless of whether you are rhyming or not. These are just my opinions. I hope I was able to help. Thank you for sharing your poem, and please keep writing *Smile*
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Review of My X-treme  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi,
I thought your poem was original, interesting, and thought provoking. However the random capitalizing of certain words in your poem are confusing. I don't understand the significance. Also, in the second to last stanza-third line; I would make quiet- quite. Other than that I thought your poem was good. Thank you for sharing it. Write on!
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Review of Secrets  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi,
Congrats on your first submission, and I am glad to be the one to give you your first review! *Smile*. I liked your poem. I thought the flow was very nice and easy. I thought the rhyme was also well done. Your poem is well written and well thought out. There is nothing that I would change with how you have written your poem. Well done! Thank you for sharing. Write on!
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Review of Writer’s Block  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi,
I liked your poem. As writers, I am sure there is not one soul who hasn't experienced writers block, along with the panic and doubt you feel. I think you expressed and described that feeling perfectly. There is nothing I would change with how you have written this poem. I think you've done a great job. Thank you for sharing it and thanks for joining our group!
Taryn
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Review of Pain Again  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi,
I thought your poem was nice and original. The rhyming is okay, but the rhythm threw me off. The stanzas are not equal in meter or rhythm. I kept trying to figure out how the flow was supposed to go. I think if the rhythm was a little more regulated, your poem would be easier to read. Other than that, I see nothing wrong with your poem. Thank you for sharing it and welcome to our group. Write on!
Taryn
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hi,
I liked your poem. I thought the imagery was great, and that the feelings you depicted were vivid and deep. There is however, one thing I would change with your poem. The punctuation and capitalization does not have a standard form in your poem. Meaning that in some instances, you did not follow the usual rules of punctuation and capitalization. The second stanza, last three lines should look like this to me: Screams filling the air;
they breathe a last breath,
then breathe no more.
Same issue in the third stanza. I just feel that if you are going to use punctuation, then you should use the rules that follow. This is just my opinion. Overall I think your poem is great.Thank you for sharing it and for joining our group. Write on!
Taryn
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Review of It is True  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi,
I liked your poem. It is melodic, and the flow is easy to follow. I think the person you wrote this poem for would know without a doubt what they mean to you. There is nothing I would change with how you have written this poem. I think you've done a good job. Thank you for sharing it and thanks for joining our group. Write on!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi,
I enjoyed your poem. It has a melodic tone or maybe rhythm to it. I thought it was well written, and I like the color you chose too *Smile*. I think you aptly described how the absence of someone in your life that you love can affect you. I think you did a great job with this poem. There is nothing I would change with how you have written this piece. Thank you for sharing it and thanks for joining our group! Write on!
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Review of Teenage Love  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi,
I enjoyed your poem. I thought it showed the fresh, new, naive, and sometimes insecure feelings we have when experiencing this type of love for the first time. I thought the imagery was very good. And I thought your rhyme scheme and rhythm were also very good. There is nothing I would change with your poem. Thank you for sharing your work and thanks for joining our group. Happy writing!
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Review of Ode to…  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
I enjoyed your poem very much. I am experiencing this same problem myself. I thought that the way you wrote about this well known subject was original and entertaining. The only problem I saw was the rhyming pattern. The first stanza does not match the other two. I would reread it, and edit it to match the others. Then I feel your poem could be five star. Thanks for sharing and for joining our group! Write on!
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi,
I thought your poem was nice, but there are some changes that I would make.
1. I would put a comma in between dreams and crystal in the first stanza. I had to read it a couple of times to understand what you were saying. It looks like a run on sentence.
2. I thought the rhythm and rhyme was great right up until the last stanza. I think you should do away with
"to all". I think it will make the flow a lot smoother. I think saying " to all" and " all things" is a little redundant.
Other than that, I thought your poem was good. It paints a nice picture and generates nice feelings. Thank you for sharing it and write on!
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Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
Hi,
I see where you are going with this poem, but I think there are some changes you should make.
1. Hatefull should be Hateful
2. Any time you reference a person or yourself with " i ", it should be " I "- always.
3. U should be you.
4. Doesnt, wont, wouldnt, ill, wasnt, should all have apostrophe's...doesn't, won't, wouldn't, I'll, wasn't .
5. Ima should really be I'm goin' or going to...when using text language in poetry, your work appears unfinished and sometimes sloppy.
6. Belife should believe.
7. There should be a space between my and side.
8. Ment should be meant.

I would edit the poem again, and make sure your poem says exactly what you want to say, the way you want to say it. I hope I was able to help. With these changes, I think your poem would read much better. Thank you for sharing it and write one!
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Review of Crazy Me  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi,
I thought your poem was interesting. However I think there are changes that you should make.
1. In your second line, I would change bothers into bother.
2. In the third line, prescence should be presence.
3. In the fourth line, i should be I. Any time you reference a person with I, you should always capitalize it; its should be it's.
I would consider editing your poem again to make sure that it says exactly what you want it to, the way you want it to. And I would consider capitalizing the first letter of your first word of your poem. The way you have your poem set up, I am not sure what is apart of your poem and what isn't. If you are Mary, as the author it is customary to sign your name to the bottom of the poem instead of the top; or single space your poem so that your name is completely separated from your poem.
These are just my opinions. I hope I was able to help. Thank you so for sharing and write on!
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi,
I liked your poem. I thought it was original and entertaining. The rhythm is a little rough and I thought your poem was a little wordy...almost "prose-like". I think you have some sentences that need comma's, Other than that, I thought your poem was a good one. Thanks for sharing it. Write on!
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Review of I Don't Love You  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi,
I liked your poem. The rhythm and rhyme of your poem is pretty good. But there are a few things I would change.
1. In the first stanza, third line- I think the comma should be a period.
2. Second stanza, first line- too should be to.
3. Second stanza,second line- I don't think you need the comma here.
Other than that, I think your poem is good. Thank you for sharing it. Write on!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi,
I liked your poem a lot. The imagery is clear and easy to follow. The rhythm is not as smooth as it could be in certain spots. I think if you read thru it again, and omit some words, you could probably fix this issue. Either way, I think its a great poem. Thanks for sharing. Write on!
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