Your piece has perfect rhythm and flow making this an easy piece to follow.

I can see a bully towering over a helpless ole man on the transportation bus. Then the ole man says something to him and he regrets what he just done. Great job, well written. A great example of today's society.

Always an amazing storyline when you have a few true facts. Your charcater is strong and has the ability to keep your reader's interested in more of the story.

Your details make me imagine I'm in flight with him. You have the landmarks spot on. I have been to China Lake, Red Rock Canyon almost all of California. I love the area you are talking about. Yes, the pilots do fly lower then they're supposed to. I have had them zoom past me hundreds of times. It never seizes to amaze me about flying.

I have actually had the Space Shuttle fly directly over my house and knocked me off my feet. I was caught off guard and had no words, eyes popped out and mouth wide up. An experience I'll never forget. As always you have astonished me with your writing. I wished we would have had more time. I would, could and will learn from you. Your writings are here for us to enjoy. I'm so glad of that.


As always I thank you for sharing your wonderful work. I enjoyed reading it and will return to read the other chapters. I have to find out what happens. I know you are laughing at me right now. 🤔😀😂🤗 It would be nice if your son would join us here.

Keep Writing on!



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Eric, I wanted you to know that each piece you have here is unquiely put together with an easy rhythm and flow to bring to light the passages about God. So others can better understand the Bible.



As a Christian, I found your words to be enlightening and encouraging. I just can't get enough about God, I thirst for more. I will be back to read more. I saw a few pieces that we just study on a few months ago. I want to see what you have to say about them also. Awesome reads 🌟



My favorite line is:

All of them...

The details that you give makes your piece flow with ease making this a delight to read.

The great details that you gave me the picture of the court, squeaky tennis shoes, ball bouncing against the glass wall and the old man out of breath trying to match hit for hit step for step of the young man starring him down on the other side. Fantastic job 🌟

We are always competing with ourselves to make us better than we know we can be. A very delightful read. Powerful words if imagery that made this piece come alive.

I want to thank you for sharing this with us. I enjoyed reading it tonight.

Keep Writing on!



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I love how this piece flows with ease making this an awesome story.

I see a poor little pumpkin waiting to make a good name for himself. Then an awful look on his face when he realizes that he's scarry and not exactly what he wanted to be.

I fell that there is a moral to the story. I find this to be a cute Halloween story. For others to delight in how Jack-O-Lantern could have come about. Awesome job🌟


I want to thank you for sharing this with us. I enjoyed reading it tonight.

Keep Writing on!



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Keep Writing on!



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Your piece has a great flow with each word moving in perfect rhythm to tell your story.

You have a great start to your piece, telling of the heartlessness of the people. People, whom God loves so much. And to think that we killed His only son. Why shouldn't He drives us sinners into the darkness. That is where we belong, the light is a luxury for us. I believe that you have a very strong verse. I feel that a little more explaining about the evil twins would make this an even stronger piece. For other readers that are just learning about the Bible or have never read about it. They wouldn't have any idea whom the twins are. I feel that this piece speaks volumes.

The rhythm and flow of this piece is excuted perfectly.

I enjoyed the staggering of your lines. I'm not sure if others see this outlook on this Chapter, but it is very true to today. I feel that you captured into a volume packed verse. Comparing the strength between God and Satan was a perfect ending.

Your title "From Light to Dark and Back, Again " an excellent title for your piece. You described it in seven words.

Your rhythm and flow blended in with your words making this an interesting read.

I felt as if I was in church. There was a play on the stage and they were giving Job a once over. Trying to bring light to the congregation on ways of sins and what things were to be if they kept going down that dark path they were on.

Your title "Happy Nights Inn" really caught my attention when I saw your request and wanted to see just what was behind your title.

I found that you have strong charcaters, the old desk clerk, the girl in the mirror, the police officers and your main charcator. Your plot is strong, a man deserted in the middle of no where and ends up at a motel. Feels like he might just be in the Twlight Zone.

I enjoyed your storyline very much, I suggest a few tweaks here and there to make it even stronger. It was tense when she was coming after him, which was very strong and the emotion's that he had to get out of the bathroom. But, the mirror is in the other room. Does she appear in the bathroom or was it her footsteps that became his demize? Here is your sentence I'm referring to. Bill does not dare look at the mirror to find out the answer. He can't if he's in the bathroom with the door closed and the only mirror is in the other room. See, what I mean?

Give Bill a little more emotion's like heart racing, sweaty palms, eye's enlarging or squeezed shut. I hope these help you, I'm always here to help, but it is your story and these are just my opinions. You do have a great storyline and the bride had me scared. Keep up the great work and grow to spread your wings. WdC is a great community to do that in. With others to help and support you. You will become your dream.

I'm not one for the use of profanity, just being honest here. But, sometimes people slip when saying it, so, in real life it does happen. This statement tells me that Bill was in the Twlight Zone.

I'm not sure how you feel about the changes. I hope this helps you and if you need anything more please drop in.

I want to thank you for sharing it with me and asking me to review it. It was an honor to read it. Catch ya next time.