Hi Beck Firing back up! I am here to give you my thoughts on "The Dreaded Work Party" ,

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

I found this to be a very real-to-life type of story. We have all been to a dreaded office party and I think many people can relate. I found your characterizations to be very good. You captured your co-workers nicely.

IMAGERY:

I liked the imagery of the room, even though I would have liked a little more description. (I know you were under word count and that's why there isn't any. ).

TECHNICALITIES:

It was rumored that this was the only party he could throw that anyone actually showed up to. This sentence would read better if it ended like, ....throw in which anyone would show up.

“I’m sorry,” a tall man with deep blue eyes shot me a smile that weakened my knees. It needs a period instead of a comma after sorry.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

This is a good little story that was written well. I enjoy pieces that are taking right out of life, and this was.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

Hi eyestar~* I am here to give you my thoughts on "Souvenirs of Love" ,

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

This is a beautiful poem. I really loved the soft feel of it and found the descriptions to be wonderful. You capture a feeling that most of us know, but few really find.

IMAGERY:

The imagery was really vivid. I could easily picture every line that you wrote. It's magical when a poem can do that and yours did it well.

TECHNICALITIES:

I found no technical issues in this poem. It's flow was smooth and consistent and it had its own rhythm to it.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

A beautiful, romantic poem that can really speak to any reader. It's soft and sensual that it really sets the perfect mood. Well done.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

Hi 🌕 HuntersMoon I am here to give you my thoughts on "The Perfect Love" ,

FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

I'm so glad I found this poem. I love that it's not the typical romance poem. You speak the truth; never can a person find loyalty and love that beats a dog's. The picture at the top is priceless. Such a cute doggy.

IMAGERY:

The imagery is wonderful and the picture definitely pulls it all together. You paint a vivid and real picture for the reader.

TECHNICALITIES:

I found no technical mistakes in this poem. The flow was consistent and smooth, and the rhyme scheme was done with careful thought. Each stanza moved the story along without a glitch.

OVERALL THOUGHTS:

A well written poem that made me smile when I read it. What else could I ask for? Well done.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

OVERALL:

I really like the idea behind this essay. When we are young, we always think things will turn out perfectly, but they rarely do. It is important for young people to believe this, I think, so they will try to find their own happiness.

WHAT I LIKED:

I really liked the tone of the piece and how your learned from experience what life is really like. I also was impressed that you did actually find your 'happy ever after'.

SUGGESTIONS:

I have no suggestions for improvement.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

I noticed a few typos here and there and the tenses changed from past to present, but with a good edit, I'm sure they will be easily corrected.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

OVERALL:

I actually found this to be a very interesting analysis of human behavior. I really enjoyed this and found myself wondering what exactly would happen to that dime.

WHAT I LIKED:

Your insight into people is very keen. I like how you gave each question an answer and why or why not it was a good one.

SUGGESTIONS:

I have no suggestions for improvement.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were a few little things I noticed.

I certainly hpe hope not;

If one of the employees does do find it,

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

OVERALL:

I think this story has a great moral. Most changes in our lives are met with trepidation, and sometimes we fear the worst only to be pleasantly surprised.

WHAT I LIKED:

I enjoyed the tone of the story and the way you talk so fondly about your family.

SUGGESTIONS:

I really don't have any suggestions, though I think this maybe a tough sell as far as the prompt goes. It was a miss for me on that point, but the story is good and that's what I am rating it on, not the prompt.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

These jobs were were as much a part of our life scheme, as recreation and pursuing career of our choice.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

OVERALL:

I really enjoyed this! There is so much inspiration and light. Well done!

WHAT I LIKED:

You told an age-old story wonderfully.

SUGGESTIONS:

I have no suggestions for this poem.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were no grammar or spelling mistakes noticed. Your rhyme scheme was spot on and the flow was very smooth.

Thank you for sharing your work.

~ Vikki ~

OVERALL:

Overall, I think this can be a good basis for a story. You have your major conflicts, now you just need to flesh them out a bit.

WHAT I LIKED:

I liked the storyline and I think the characters would be interesting.

SUGGESTIONS:

I have no suggestions for this.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

Keep an eye out for capitalization. Structure is fine and easy to read.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~

OVERALL:

Overall, this is a very heartfelt piece, though it really isn't a story. I think this would work better as a letter or essay.

WHAT I LIKED:

I liked how your described your brother and that you two compliment each other.

SUGGESTIONS:

I have no suggestions for this piece.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

A few grammar things were noticed, but nothing that could be fixed with a quick edit. Structure was fine and easy to read.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~

OVERALL:

Overall, this poem is about heartbreak and emotion. You did a good job with the wording, but the emotion didn't quite come through for me.

WHAT I LIKED:

I liked your word choice and descriptions. With some work, this could be a wonderful poem.

SUGGESTIONS:

I would suggest seperating this poem into stanzas. It's more eye appealing and tells the reader when there needs to be a break in thought. Also, pay closer attention to your rhyme scheme and flow.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were no spelling or grammar mistakes noticed. Structure suggestions are mentioned above.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~

OVERALL:

I really like the idea behind this poem.

WHAT I LIKED:

The message behind the poem.

SUGGESTIONS:

I think this would be better if it was broken up into stanzas. It would give it more eye appeal and let the reader know when the breaks should be.

Also, the word gape isn't quite right. Maybe gait.

I would also pay attention to your rhymes, as some lines do and some don't and there isn't any continuity.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/STRUCTURE:

There were no spelling or grammar mistakes noticed. Structure suggestions are noted above.

Thank you for sharing your work and welcome to WDC!

~ Vikki ~