Hi lady_goth, this is Funnyface. I am reviewing an item of yours to welcome you to Writing.com. If there is anything I can do to help you please e-mail me. We are so pleased you have joined the community.
Title:"Break Up"
Beginning:Breaking up an relationship is hard, and as you entered the door and faced things I am sure you realized this.
Plot: Your plot of the poem shows your pain. It is so wonderful when a relations is going good, but so painful when it turns sour. I am so sorry you had to experience it.
Closing: I know your pain of broken promises, broken dreams. Hugs as you move ahead in your life.
Comment: I am looking forward to reading more of your work in the coming year. Have a great and blessed year in 2007.
Hi there velvetfire, this is Funnyface. I am reviewing an item of yours to welcome you to Writing.com. If there is anything I can do to help you please e-mail me. We are so pleased you have joined the community.
Title: "My Mistake, Your Sorrow."
Beginning:Straight to the point of your changed ways and how you regret your errors.
Plot: I guess when one makes a mistake in a relationship it does destroy the faith, belief, confidence toward the person that made the error. I hope whom ever this poem is written for can realize how sorry you truly are and accept you for who you are and who you will always be for him/her.
Closing: Your ending as words that are so true. A heart felt poem. Hugs and the best wishes that it will all go well.
Comment: I am looking forward to reading more of your work in the coming year. Have a great and blessed year in 2007
Hi Bond, this is Funnyface. I am reviewing an item of yours to welcome you to Writing.com. If there is anything I can do to help you please e-mail me. We are so pleased you have joined the community.
Title: "Death"
Beginning:Your opening begins strongly as you tell us that you are lonely since you were left without your friend.
Plot:This poem is so very sad, it brings tears to my eyes. I will see you one time only..these really are powerful words. I am so sorry you have lost this person that means so much to you and I take it that it was unexpected.
Closing: Stay strong.. I am proud of you writing this poem about his/her death.
Comment: I am looking forward to reading more of your work in the coming year. Have a great and blessed year in 2007
Hi cmboutelle, this is Funnyface. I am reviewing an item of yours to welcome you to Writing.com. If there is anything I can do to help you please e-mail me. We are so pleased you have joined the community.
Title: "Be Thankful For You" This title appeals to me as it is unique.
Beginning:Your opening of this poem is so strong. Yes there has been sorrow, troubles and pain.
Plot:I would never thought about the things that "we" as a person do for when I do my praying. Life is really about how much we do for other's and you have certainly shown it here in the words of your poem Closing: Simply awesome words/ Well done!
Comment: I am looking forward to reading more of your work in the coming year. Have a great and blessed year in 2007
Hi Spiritwriter, this is Funnyface. I am reviewing an item of yours to welcome you to Writing.com. If there is anything I can do to help you please e-mail me. We are so pleased you have joined the community.
Title: "Same Old Thang"
Beginning:The opening to your song is lovely. Plot:. The body of these lyrics are strong. I like the way you use " I woke up every morning to the ...and then having same old Thang in the dark blue color. It looks and fits in nicely with the rest of the song.
Closing: I could never write lyrics, so I am always impressed when I read them.Nice job here.
Comment: I am looking forward to reading more of your work in the coming year. Have a great and blessed year in 2007
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Hi dessert baker, this is Funnyface. I am reviewing an item of yours to welcome you to Writing.com. If there is anything I can do to help you please e-mail me. We are so pleased you have joined the community.
Title:"Elephant Whoes"
Beginning:A nice beginning as you let people know that you don't want an elephant in the house.
Plot:I like the body of this poem . I found it well written, rhymes nicely and explains why the elephant should remain outside.
Closing: I smiled when I read this poem. I am sure kids will adore it. It is simply lovely.I hope it will be published.
Comment: I am looking forward to reading more of your work in the coming year. Have a great and blessed year in 2007
Hi Lyric, this is Funnyface. I am reviewing an item of yours to welcome you to Writing.com. If there is anything I can do to help you please e-mail me. We are happy to have you join us here on WDC.
Title: "This Is My Mother, Father and Sister."
Beginning:I like the way you take us straight into your beginning by telling us about the saying your Mother told you.
Plot:I also had heard that one never knew a person until you live with them. I heard that a man will betray themselves to be what they are not, but I never heard the saying your sister said.I am sorry your sister had it wrong.
Closing: Way to many women are so lonely and feel unloved in their marriage. This should never be. My daughter feels this way, so I know the loneliness you are going through.
Comment:I am looking forward to reading more of your work in the year ahead. Have a great and blessed year in 2007
Hi Vincentblack, this is Funnyface. I am reviewing an item of yours to welcome you to Writing.com. If there is anything I can do to help you please e-mail me.We are pleased to have you join the site.
Title: "The Pains Of Life"
Beginning:A fitting opening. I know that when one travels through life it is often lonely and filled with strife
Plot:Well developed..Life is very precious, and we have been graced with many talents ..we should use them to lift our spirits and keep us strong. I like the rhyming in your poem.
Closing: a perfect closing. Comment:I look forward to reading more of your work in the new year. Have a great and blessed year in 2007
Hi FadingxxxSou, this is Funnyface. I am reviewing an item of yours to welcome you to Writing.com. If there is anything I can do to help you please e-mail me.
Title: "Lost Forever In A Sea Of Love"
Beginning:A solid opening as you tell us how you wish you were with the person you care for.
Plot:Your words tell a story of hurt and heartache. I am so sorry that you have had such heartache. There is nothing nicer than two people in love and nothing sadder than when it goes sour.
Closing: Don't feel guilt, I am sure it wasn't your doings. Someone will come along that will respect and treat you nicely. Thanks for sharing your emotions.
Comment: I look forward to reading more of your items in the year ahead. Have a great and blessed year in 2007
Hi JustCat, this is Funnyface. I am reviewing an item of yours to welcome you to Writing.com. If there is anything I can do to help you with please e-mail me.
Title: "For Billy"
Beginning: I like the opening of this short story as you seem to be taking us on a fairy tale trip.
Plot: This poor girl, how awful not to have anything going for her. She certainly had compassion and cared for human beings. I like how she met the guy and how the love grew.
Closing: A nice write, in this cute story. I like to read love and romance stories.
Comment:I am sure you will enjoy Writing.com. I am looking forward to reading more of your work in 2007. Have a great and blessed year in 2007!
Hi there, this is Funnyface. I am reviewing an item of yours to welcome you to Writing.com. If there is anything I can do to help you please e-mail me.
Title: "A Visit From The Grim Reaper"
Beginning: A solid beginning, as you explain the ailments that Mrs. Smith was afflicted with. I am sure she didn't get out to often.
Plot: How delighted Mrs Smith seemed to be as she welcomed the children and freely gave them candy. I have a senior neighbor, that loves to do just that.
Closing: She was brave to open the door where it was getting later in the evening. I would have been so afraid of this giant with the scythe in his hand.. I enjoyed this cute story. I am sure you will enjoy writing.com, remember I am here for you if I can help.
Good morning Vivian, this is Funnyface. I am reviewing an item of yours to thank you for signing my guest book.
Title: "Season Of Sorrow"
Opening:A nice beginning as you tell us how the holiday seasons have been so special for you.
Plot:Wow! I am so sorry you have endured such sorrow at this time of year. I am especially sorry that your daughter Regina was taken from you. I share that sorrow as I also had a new born baby die.Pamela was a twin. I never got to hold her. She weighed 3 pounds. That has been over forty five years ago. I will never for get her, nor will you ever forget Regina.
Closing:Death continued to claim your loved one at this time of year, but your attitude is one of such love that you put others happiness ahead of your sorrow.
Comments:Have a wonderful and blessed holiday season.
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Good morning Humming Bird this is Funnyface. I am reviewing an item of yours to show my thanks for you signing my Guest Book.
Title: "The Sun Of My Life"
Opening:I like your beginning as you tell us where you met and got acquainted with the sun of your life.
Plot: The words you write about the character of this new friend are outstanding. How blessed you two are to have found each other. I am sure this friendship will grow and and you will always be great friends.
Good morning Petronella60 this is Funnyface.I am reviewing an item of yours to show my appreciation for your support of my reviews on the PRPage.
Title:"Samantha's Journal"
Beginning:I have never read an item on cloning, this sounds interesting.
Body: I enjoyed reading about the first meeting with Elsie Jones with Dr.Samantha Jane Wilkins. I found your description of Elsie very detailed. I can see where one hundred thousand dollars would entice her to want to have the baby.But the danger and the living together for two years might turn me away.
Closing:A nice job here in this chapter.
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Good morning Hummingbird this is Funnyface. I am reviewing this item to thank you for reviewing a poem of mine.
Title:"Silent Witness"
Beginning:What a wonderful opening. The memories the mirror relived are wonderful.
Body:Your story continues to be strong here in the plot. You tell us a tale that the young girl is very lonely. I like her imagination. Your writing is very descriptive.
Good evening Empress, I just read your poem Portrait" and it moved me. I might be wrong but I sense a lot of pain in these words especially as you describe the usage of " cutting". I had never heard of cutting until I came to this site. Your opening line is strong. Your body/plot touches my heart and your closing is perfect for the poem. (((Hugs)) to draw on if you need them.
Hi Humming Bird, still nosing through your port. I like this poem "Beliefs" very much. It is a way we all should strive to live our lives. I like how your first two lines are real nuggets of gold. We should love the sinner..but that can be hard, I think if we all were to help our kin this world would be a wonderful place to be, as being together with family is so important. I also like how you said to delete off the word No. Nice job!
Good evening Humming Bird, I just read with interest your item "Days Of Pain And Pleasure."
Opening: What a time to have to write your exams just when your sister-in-law was going through her last stage of pregnancy's.
Body: I want to tell you how I love reading your items, and your reviews, as some of the words you use are so lovely and unique. Writing exams is a stressful time of the year. I know how tense you must have been. I like how you like to stay in school, you have a gift for learning. I hope you get to be a student of the new teacher..I think some teachers are so gifted.
{c:blue:Closing:How delightful to have a new niece. Congratulations..was she born at home..if so brave lady. My favorite sentence is:Fool!" Just what are you doing to repay these guides who are cleaning the crooked path of your life with knowledge?” Nicely worded!
Beginning:A nice beginning as you set the stage for this story of a bond that is formed.
Body:This sounds so perfect, the greetings at school. Girls seeing guys they are attracted to and the anticipation of Fariha's party. This story made me feel good as although the people were mean knocking the blind girl down, it turned out so nicely in the end.
Closing:Perfect .."Open your eyes, you'll see me.".
Beginning:You did a nice job setting the stage for this delightful story.
Body:I like this story. I find it hard to believe that Mothers check out their future daughter in laws..but if the man doesn't mind, why not. I like how Javed told his mother he wasn't leaving.
Closing:A sweet closing. A diamond in the rough.. who creates magic with her hands.
c:red} Good Morning Empress this is Funnyface. I am reviewing this short story as it was listed in The Drama Newsletter.
Title:"Beauty and The Beast"
Beginning: A very descriptive opening. Life sometimes seems to give people everything, while others are shortchanged ..such is the case of Jordana. Having had two children born with crossed eyes and having several surgery's on them, I can feel for Jordana.
Body:A delightful read. How sad that the girls mother died in the car accident they were both in. How nice Jordana found someone that seen the beauty in her. Fine details as she cries and thinks that Ken could not love her.
Closing: I really like your closing ..especially the very last line.
Comment:Congratulations for having this Highlighted in this issue of the Drama Newsletter.
Beginning:I want to start off by congratulating you on Following Your Dreams.
Body:John you have so much to drink in that it is hard at one setting..although I did do it. I hope to go back and take one item at a time, study and ponder on it, maybe discuss some things. It will be a bit of time as I am still way behind in my e-mails. I would be so honored if you would allow me to print off The Lord Is My Shepherd, to place in my Bible. This is the very best that my husband and I have read on the subject.
Closing:I wish you all the best you have done a lot of work, but remember if only one person responds from your writing, it will be worth it all.
Good morning Humming Bird this is Funnyface.I am reviewing an item of yours to let you know I appreciate you r/r/r a poem of mine.
Title:"Coping With Kids" I was compelled to read this because of the title and brief description.
Beginning:Being the grand mother of teenagers. I read with great interest your article about teens.
Body:Your plot is well developed. I agree that it is so important to spent time chit chatting..as you build a bond of friendship that never goes away. What is nicer than a mother and daughter being close friends. The thing I like the best is how you told parents not to get angry..this is so important and something I never though about until now. I am going to tell my daughter about this article. She is a mother of a 16 and in Feb. a 13 year old.
Closing: Fitting!!Great advice, a good job here with this item..
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Beginning:The story of the slow developer is inspiring.
Body:I know the feeling of when you wake up and need to get up and put things in writing. I agree that way more often than we think it is Christ that does the inspiring. Way to often I am tired and I will say that I will remember this in the morning, yet by then it is gone.
Closing: John I sincerely think you should start to put your writings on the site here. You would have nothing to lose and maybe things to gain. If you were to inspire just one to turn to Jesus..than you have done a great deed. I for one will be reading it.
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